Trigger: Cancer
My head rocks back, long hair sticks to sweaty shoulders and my tank barely holds my jiggling A-cups as I pound it out, dancing. I’m that “Girl on Fire,” a single mom gyrating to Ms. Keys. Flinging out one arm, hips swing and dip, fingers snap, eyes close, and my rock and roll fantasy, straight from a music video: my apartment’s clutter, with the snap of my fingers, flies to order. I burn, more than a flickering flame, heart thumps, shoulders shimmy, sweat drips into my pierced belly button. The fuchsia, sun-yellow and neon-blue strobe at fun-house speeds, accentuating the movements of my current crush. Her slim hips bounce as her rear wiggles with arms like Mother’s mix-master beaters. Her gaze swings, her eyes glitter, and my heart beats a rhythm of music and desire. Our mouths open wide to laugh as our tongues lick the hot air.
The final beats vibrate as one song slides to the next, and we stumble high on music, our hips smack the rim of the bar.
“Whatcha girls want to keep those smiles shinin’?” The bartender is not my type, blustery and rough with thick hips; I’m done with the heavy-handed, dominus sort. But this lady’s got a come-and-get-me smile whenever she sets a drink down.
“Brooklyn Lager,”— holding up two fingers, — “and a glass of ice cubes; hot girls here.” I lean, raising on tip toes to ensure she hears.
My current interest, Celia, dating steady forty-seven days, is an honest to God self-effacing surgical nurse with to-die-for toned hips. Celia, and I take turns stroking, more like melting ice cubes, drawing them ‘’around our clavicles and down to our wrist pulse points, then we chug our beers and giggle. I just turned thirty-five the other month but feel as if I’m working through my twenties again, a 180-degree turn, and my eyes see females with a fresh perspective— the life I was destined for. A gentle, generous love, no more jockeying for position with the other sex! Celia’s sensitive, with that innate female understanding; there’s room for us both on top. And her honied voice simply melts me. I’ve been twice roasted and burnt by men. Celia can sit cross-legged and always time to play; she really likes Kelse. My six-year-old daughter is asleep, I’m sure, it’s after eleven, and her babysitter is cruising her phone like a typical teenager!
Celia says, “You’re a stunning, blue-eyed mamma!” As she runs the ice cube around my neck. It feels delicious, and I am drunk on beer, music, and perhaps, love. She holds the last bit of ice, traces the humps of my breasts.
“Hey babe, the top of my tank is catching all the run-off!” I chuckle and move my shoulders forward to press into her disintegrating cube as it dips near my sweaty pit. Her fingers graze and indent the skin where the fatty part of my breast meets my underarm. She frowns and a quizzical gaze.
“What’s the look? Let’s drink these down and hit the dance floor! ‘If it doesn’t kill us, we’ll be stronger!’” I sing as I chug the last sip and waltz out into the throng of dancing bodies.
I grab Celia’s hand, the tempo drops, and the DJ announces with a raw, breaking voice, “Y’all slow it down now with Bruno Mars, “It Will Rain” and looking for some languid booty action. Here we go.”
Celia and I stand a hand distance apart with breaths, full, deep, emotional. Palms clasp shoulder level, our chests brush. The song intensifies and my brain’s cells absorb the beer and wire it to my limbs. I feel power in our closeness. We sway and whisper our interpretation of Bruno. “There’d be no sun a shining if I lost you, girl!” And Celia’s right-hand presses against my heart and I almost cry with joy, when, on a quick downbeat, she pulls me off the floor. Deaf to my queries, she drags me into the restroom and into a stall, where, with the door latched, we stand in silence.
Is this it? She’s breaking up with me. Rethinking the stress of dating a single mom? Something so good can’t be real. My brain swims with insecurities and fear, not beer, and my knees shake. I croak, “What Celia, what?”
Her lips press tight, and then a tooth sneaks and catches her lower lip. She frowns. Her left hand still holds my right. She lifts it up so gently, all slow motion and bathroom blacklights. Her thumb and palm slip to the top of my hand, and she presses my fingers flat against my own chest, high where the crease of my arm starts. I feel my heartbeat.
The bathroom door swings open, music streams, hypnotic Celia, on cue with the lyrics, moves closer and flashes a pained smile. The door thumps closed and muffles the music. A female exclaims, “Ah! Missing Jeremih, girl.” Another chants, “No, missing Usher for your lipstick redo and a pee!” Celia holds fast to my hand. My eyebrows peak, eyes beam royal confusion.
Then my hand and fingers start the search and stumble across something hard under my skin, a spider bite, infected? My finger pads move cautious over damp skin, up, down, around, and ever more tentative, back near my sweaty pit. The first thought, Whatever, nothing! My pointer and middle finger push then retreat, then, ever tentative, push till the pebble slides away. I see my Mother’s face and think, Hell no! Not me! I whisper, but maybe I’m already hysterical, maybe I even shout. “I feel it”
Celia’s hands hold either side of head, she kisses my forehead, and she whispers, “It’s alright girl, I’m here. It’ll be alright.”
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Celia and I speed through another three months on a roller-coaster. Agonizing slow on the inclines, dizzyingly fast on the back sides, and then repeat like something torturous and never ending. Hyper-aware times, fierce group hugs with Kelse, mountains of tears, and tender caresses, between biopsies and clanging MRIs. Celia’s fingers massage slow, always curious. Her eyes ask Does this soothe? Is this alright. It’s my journey, but she’s taking it with me. I cropped my hair with the diagnosis. Why wait for it to fall out?
We play music, loud to drown out the voices in my head. Our gotta-blast-it favorite is Kelly Clarkson. Our fists are microphones, as we jump and belt, “Stronger,” and flex biceps. Then we yell, “Much taller,” and reach high on tiptoes, then wiggle, and throw our bodies around my tiny living room. We fall like ring-around-the-rosie. Kelse laughs from her belly, rubs my shorn head, and it’s all wonderful. Celia laughs and hiccups at the same time, hugging us both, however my laugh sounds like a stuck pig, pitiful. I tremble inside and hope Kelse can’t see, hope my forehead isn’t wrinkled down and my eyes aren’t creased with sadness. That’s my mother’s face; that’s her eyes.
Julie, my mother, those piercing green eyes, and her one breast. She’s far from shy, wants me strong, but the lines on her face speak of a mother’s worry. A survivor, Julie calls herself; she’s made it five years.
Celia has moved into my disorganized apartment, giving me love and doting on Kelse, on the floor with drawing projects or braiding her hair. Celia tells me daily, “You are a survivor too! We got this!” I don’t tell Celia, at least not yet, that Mother’s cancer could roar back one day. She and I got “tested.” We don’t share eye color, nor politics, but we do share a disposition for cancer, the BRCA gene.
Mother still wears a shag of silver-streaked blond. A three-way secret, Dad, Mother, and me, it’s a decent wig. My mother’s hair never recovered to full and lustrous. But a wig? I wonder if I die, who will take care of Kelse? Her dad’s a cocaine bastard and sees his sole responsibility stoking the company’s fire. He’s forgotten his child, like, ‘did I miss another birthday?’, like he’s on some other planet. In my second month of chemo, I feel like I’m another planet too, but Kelse is never, ever far from my mind, and it’s too damn hot to wear a wig.
In the morning Celia concocts and I try to drink power-shakes with ginger, and when I’m too overwhelmed, nauseous, or have doctor’s appointments, she packs Kelse’s lunch and takes her to school. That ‘perhaps’ love is surer these days, feels stronger, even that I am weaker. Doctors who know best have scheduled my double mastectomy and are blunt. We will see what else, as chemo did what it could do — for now.
**
The universal expression “bald as a bat” isn’t all correct – brown bats have furry heads, or so Celia says as she wraps and flaps around our living room in a brown towel. Kelse and I laugh, and it feels good. Her small hands rub the microscopic fuzz on my head, and she hugs me tight and says, I love you Mommie. Tomorrow is the day, a seven in the morning hospital check-in. And Celia turns up the music and sings her own words to me, “Babe if you’re feeling weak like you’re falling, I’m always here and will carry you home.” My daughter joins in with her arms waving overhead, “We’ll be so bright, Mommie! We’re gonna light the world on fire!” They keep me laughing.
I pad in sterile blue booties, and a chilly gown that front ties, into my own surgery room. The heavy door closes. Hospital staff in green scrubs and masks look me up and down; one could have been Celia. My doctors in white, nod. I shuffle towards the narrow bed, sit, lay, and feel that familiar slide of a needle, followed by the burn of drugs. A speaker suddenly crackles as the IV’s liquid flows. Seems everyone’s eyes light up. It’s my lady, Ms. Keys, an echo against the green walls. I’m that girl on fire.
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57 comments
What a well-crafted story. Not only was the movement prompt executed to perfection, but your techniques to make the reader create a connection with the characters are outstanding. Congratulations on your win, well-deserved!!
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Giovanna thank you for the wonderful comment!
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I'd love to be able to write like that in English. Rythm, vivid images, present tense, ... This short story is a tornado, an emotional "roller-coaster". Of course I will try to translate in French but I already know that it will not be as good. Thanks for the joy I had reading this.
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I teach English and also write in other languages... gosh we both know it is about doing it again and again in any language. If you translate it and get it published, do give me credit, and gosh, let me know. Merci
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Girl On Fire was my favorite song as a little girl, haha.
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I am glad even if you didn't like the song.....
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Wow, this is such a good story!
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I am really impressed with how you express so much--so many thoughts, emotions and information--in such a succinct yet descriptive way. You really help your readers delve into the POV of the protagonist.
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Amazing story.
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This story touched me deeply. It's so nice when you meet someone new who turns out to be such a caring, joyous person.
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thank you for your comment and I am so glad you were touched... a writer's dream
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Congrats Dena. Love your descriptions that say a lot so beautifully. Especially loved the "Agonizing slow on the inclines, dizzyingly fast on the back sides..." line. Wonderful.
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Love your comment and that you shared a line you liked! Means a lot to share with other writers!!
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Just finished reading this story, Really well written and drew me in perfectly. Randomly just as i finished 'girl on fire' started on the radio. Just seemed to tie in perfectly.
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That is super cool! I still have her song on my exercise song list and love it! Thank you for reading and commenting!
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Major congratulations on your win, Dena. I read this piece yesterday and couldn't stop thinking about it. Very touching, and I'm so happy to see this kind of representation in short fiction.
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Thanks Ev... we writers have to support each other. YOu can read more of my stuff here on Reedsy and on my website. Linnfiction.com. Thanks
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Nicley done, Dena.
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Thank you we are here to support each other.
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Great descriptive story and full of emotion. Congratulations!
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Thanks it was fun to write and I am glad you liked it
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Congrats.
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Thank you... congrats are an excellent way that we support each other
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I guess so.
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great story, spot on for the prompt and some great use of language. A well deserved win. Congratulations
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Thank you for reading my story and your comment about being on point with prompt.....it was fun.
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Congratulations on your win, Dena! I love the direction you took with this and the sharp contrast between the fun, lighthearted beginning -- full of energy, dancing like there's no tomorrow, and high on love -- and the later, somber experience and journey of such a diagnosis, while still incorporating moments of energy, dancing, and love throughout. And what descriptive language! It's also refreshing to see the story told in present-tense. As I've been getting into the habit of writing my stories the past several weeks, that was one thing ...
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Jae - fun to read your wonderful comment. I am sure I have also read some of your stories as well!? Yes present tense is fun, very very in your face, dramatic, but ya know it is fun to experiment with all different povs and styles. Yes, so many many things are recommended by other more experienced and published writers and ya know what? I have discovered that what feels natural as it flows from your brain to the paper is 100% fine, and if no one writes that way you will be the first!!! Think of classics like Clockwork Orange or 1984. ...
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Well done, Dena. So vibrant and full of energy juxtaposed to a woman's personal nightmare. Thanks for writing this!
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Cara... thank you. I am glad you enjoyed the story... is it for sure a blend of imagination and personal story and fantasy all rolled together. Thanks
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Great story. Very moving. Deserves to win.
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Thanks so much Paul. We authors must support each other. Thank you
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Congratulations
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Thanks John! Good that we share and read each others work.
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Congratulations!
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Angela thank you for your congratulations, it is nice.
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This is novelty Dena. I love it.
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Cool Pascalé, share with me what you mean by ºnoveltyº, Tell me what makes you think this? I am so curious.
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It's the way you use words to describe the power we possess when we are in sync to a song we feel one with the artist. "I’m that “Girl on Fire,” a single mom gyrating to Ms. Keys." Girl on Fire? Ms. Keys? Those resonated with me deeply. "My apartment’s clutter, with the snap of my fingers, flies to order." That's some power there Dena. 🤩 There's more! The story conveys a sense of wholeness and beauty in the family moments. I felt the joy, love, and connection that makes life worth living. Now, if that's not the power of storytelling, what ...
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