Jenna opened her eyes to a small blurry, display blinking in front of her. Cold air swirled around her face and rays of red light jumped through licks of mist in the claustrophobic cryo-pod. The frigid air stung her nostrils and caused shudders along her body. Each twitch of a muscle added a new sensation as another synapse connected, her body slowly coming back online after 500 years of deep, dreamless, cryogenic sleep.
Memories of the last few moments flooded back. The chills as the temperature plummeted, her heart desperately trying to pump adrenaline even as its beating slowed, the sheer panic racing through her head. What in heaven or hell had she been thinking? For all that she had complained about her family’s involvement in her affairs, the prospect of being completely alone on the other side of the galaxy suddenly seemed little better.
A soft hissing sound reached her ears and the mist began to dissipate, warm air flowing into the pod as it inched open. Jenna shook off the memory and saw a figure standing over her, silhouetted against brilliant white light. The man studied her for a moment and then grinned, reaching out a hand and helping her to sit up in the brightly lit cryo-bay.
“Do you know where you are?” he said softly, watching her eyes carefully.
Jenna nodded. “I’m on the colony ship, the Neo Kosmo.” She coughed, and the man offered her a glass of water that she gratefully accepted.
“Correct. Do you remember your status?”
She rubbed her neck, feeling joints crack as her head moved about. “Passenger, 3rd division.”
The man smiled. “Good, you’re waking up fine. Take things nice and easy. Perhaps grab a coffee to help warm up. You remember the layout of the ship?” He waited for her to nod, and then helped her to climb out of the pod before continuing, “You’ll find the ship is a little quiet at the moment. Nothing to worry about, just some junior crew member mixed up the awakening sequence and you and a few others got out several days early.”
Jenna steadied herself and the man let her go, watching her as she got full control of her balance. “Did we make it?” she asked, trying to remember what the procedure on arrival was.
“Yes ma’am, we are in orbit around Lamperi Gi as we speak and yes, the planet is every bit as beautiful as the posters made it out to be.” He grinned, and she nodded, still a little unsteady.
“So what do I need to do now?”
He picked up a datapad and punched in a couple of numbers, and her pod closed and slid back on a rail before disappearing through a hatch in the wall. “Nothing particularly, you’re free to just relax. Like I said, the wake-up schedule got mixed up so we’re a little short on some minor crew members so if you fancy helping out, an officer on the Hydro Deck is coordinating volunteers. If you have a skill that we can put to use that would be really helpful.”
She thanked him and left him to his duties, gingerly heading out of the cryo-bay following a green line on the floor to the hydro deck. Coffee sounded really good right at that moment.
The officer had been right, the ship was eerily quiet. Before she had been put into cryo-sleep the Neo Kosmo had been swarming with crew and passengers alike. She crossed her arms and hugged her chest. Not passengers, colonists, she thought to herself. Passengers can go home. This ship was a one way ticket for everyone.
Hadn’t that been the point though? Get away from her family, from their constant meddling? Here, on the other side of the galaxy she could reinvent herself. Instead of the quiet girl who did as she was told, she would actually achieve something on her own. She could be the confident, strong, proactive girl she wanted to be with nothing holding her back.
Jenna smiled and straightened up. She picked up the pace through the seemingly endless corridors of the immense colony ship and finally entered the Hydro Deck, a vast expansive greenhouse that must have stretched the entire width of the ship. Transparent pipes ran across the floor and walls with plants of every variety extending into the room, their roots visibly waving in the hydroponic nutrient solution. A surprising number of flowers were in bloom, vibrant lines of colour streaking across the bright white steel of the deck.
In an open area between the mass of plants sat another officer at a makeshift desk, surrounded by holo-boards covered in lists and checkboxes. Jenna made out the word “priority,” and she took a deep breath. Do it Jenna, it’s new you time.
Tentatively she approached, the officer barely glancing up. Without looking he barked at her, “Volunteering? What’s your skill set?”
She nearly jumped in surprise. “Umm…” she mumbled.
He looked up at her and leaned back in his chair, curtly patient. “Skill set? What did you do before the journey; programmer, accountant, farmer, chef?”
“Photographer.” She said. The officer nodded and turned his attention back to the datapad. “Don’t think we’ve got any need for that specifically but have a look over the priority jobs. You might find something you know how to do,” he said, nodding over to a list.
Jenna smiled and stayed still. The officer looked back up at her as if expecting her to move, but said nothing and quickly turned away again. She looked at the board and frowned. This was the part where someone would pull her over and sign her up for something. But there was no tug on her wrist or nudging from behind. There was just Jenna standing awkwardly in front of the desk.
She frowned and forced her legs to move so she could read the listings. It was hardly surprising the officer wasn’t thrilled by her skill set. They didn’t need a wedding photographer at this point; they needed crew who could help the newly awakened colonists get comfortable on the ship while permanent shelters on Lamperi Gi were set up.
She breathed deep and leaned in close to the holo-board, blinking hard as her eyes struggled to focus on the words. Chef. Kitchen attendant. She couldn’t cook, but she might be able to help serve food. She shook her head. Her clumsy fingers would probably end up dropping half of the food, and wasting the limited non-perishable supplies the ship came with would hardly be a good start. There was a request for extra drone pilots to do fly-bys of the mountain ranges but as fun as it would be, she was definitely not qualified for that.
Jenna let out a yawn that was far louder than she expected and grimaced. The officer at the desk looked up at her. “Just woke right? Coffee at the end of the deck. Nice view planet side too. Don’t rush, it’ll take the rest of the week before everyone is awake and this place gets busy. Enjoy it while it lasts.”
Jenna was about to mumble a thank you but he put a finger to his ear and started grumbling to someone unseen about the moron who had messed up the wake-up order. Jenna shivered. She would not want to be that crewmember right now. There didn’t seem to be a reason not to get the coffee, so she made her way through the rows of plants, passing lines of ripe tomatoes, berries ready to burst and endless varieties of beautiful flowers.
Unlike the hastily set-up desk, the coffee station was sleek and streamlined, built into the ship to offer only the utmost of comfort to the crew and passengers during the many months it would take to set-up permanent shelters on the surface of their new home. As the officer said, the machine was next to a huge floor to ceiling viewing window that looked directly out onto the planet. Jenna got her drink and took a step toward the window, enjoying a deep breath of the smooth, dark aroma of the perfect latte.
“Ma’am, passenger!” a voice called. She nearly dropped the drink, startled in the otherwise quiet ship. The officer from the desk was jogging over. “You said photographer right?”
Jenna nodded.
“Want to be one of the first on the planet?” he asked, panting for breath.
She fumbled. “First? How?”
“There’s supposed to be a team to take pictures and document the machinery drops as the colonisation process begins but…they won’t be awake in the next hour.”
Jenna’s eyes went wide. “Document? Like a journalist?”
“Exactly! Snap some pictures of the machinery landing, the area we will build the first town in and the first steps we take towards self-sustainability. Get a few portraits of the crew and a group shot and stuff. It’s for the ship-wide news service and for future records. We want everyone to know what’s going on.”
“Oh,” she said, looking down at her cup and holding it tight.
He frowned. “You don’t want to go down to the planet?”
Jenna’s breath was short and sharp, and she held up a hand for a moment to compose herself. This is perfect, she screamed in her head, but her throat was clamped tight. Eventually she managed to stammer out, “I do. I’m just not sure I’m qualified for that kind of work.”
He smiled. “You’re a photographer and you’re awake. That’s one more qualification than anyone else has right now.”
She didn’t reply, instead she remained staring at the coffee, hyperventilating.
He opened his mouth to say something else, but cocked his head and put a finger to his earpiece. He shook his head. “Look, drop happens in 1 hour. Captain doesn’t want to delay; he wants to start on self-sustainability as scheduled. You’re the only photographer awake. If you want in, be ready in cargo bay 3 in 45 minutes. Anything you can do is better than nothing.” He smiled again and turned on his heel to walk away, mumbling something to someone.
Jenna didn’t move. She stood completely still, staring down at the perfectly formed flower motif on her latte. So that’s it? You come all this way out here for a new start, get given the perfect opportunity and you turned it down? You’re pathetic, she thought to herself. A tear formed and stung her eye. She reached forward, bracing against the enormous viewing window.
What had she expected? Sudden confidence? To wake up 500 years of sleep and be a changed person? Things didn’t work like that. It was Mum who suggested your friends hire you as a photographer. It was Dad who coerced you into setting up an extranet site for your services. For all Jenna had longed to be free of their influence, it was their constant pushing that had given her success in life. On her own, she would have shied away from every opportunity. Like you just did.
She leaned against the window, the planet in full view in the distance. Sapphire seas traced unmapped, unfamiliar coastlines of continents reminiscent of Earth while polar ice caps shone a brilliant white in the light of their new sun. Everything was perfect for a new start.
You didn’t even buy your own ticket out here. Your sister did it for you.
The tear escaped from her eye, slowly tracing its way down her face. She looked down at the planet, straining to remember where the landing site would be. Was it over there, where snow-capped peaks fed icy rivers? Or over there, where viridian valleys met arid amber expanses of flatland? There was an easy way to find out. She just had to go down.
Do it. Do it. Please, for the love of everything in heaven and hell, do it.
Jenna pushed herself upright and stared down at the coffee. Do it. She took a deep breath, and in one move she threw it back, gagging against the now-cold coffee before setting off towards the nearest elevator. Bay 3, 45 minutes. She glanced at the time and broke into a run, ignoring the officer grinning as she passed.
Through a door, down a flight of stairs and into the elevator. She slammed her fist into the cargo deck button, cursing the slow doors. She sprinted out, counting the docking bays as she ran. Bay 1, Bay 2, Bay 3. She burst into the room, breathless, expecting to be too late.
A group of officers stood by a landing craft clearly ready to go, the roar of the engines echoing in the cargo bay. She called out for them to wait, but there was no need. One of the crew waved her over and pointed to a table where a camera, flight suit and helmet sat waiting. She had made it.
An extremely loud and bumpy re-entry later, Jenna was lining up a shot of a drop pod blazing through the sky. Landing feet extended, the retro-thrusters firing and a field of flowers blowing in the downdraft, Jenna caught the perfect moment as her new life began.
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Very cool story. Nice to see a true sci-fi story get chosen. A well done coming of age story. I think the setting and scenario are the perfect backdrop for the theme of independence that runs through the story. I found myself instantly rooting for and relating to your main character. Love this piece, it's quite the enjoyable read. Congrats on getting shortlisted!
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Thanks Michael, I am still in somewhat of a state of disbelief that I am actually on the shortlist! I'm so glad you enjoyed it and found it relatable. I really like this setting/scenario, it's a personal favourite sci-fi setting so I'm hoping to explore it more with other stories, though not with these characters.
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Cool story! I loved the moment where the first tear slid down Jenna’s face. I can well identify with that frustration of wanting a new start but feeling incapable or like it will never happen. It made her so relatable. The pacing, flow and suspense of the story all worked so well too. You set it up in a way that had me wondering “what next????” Only one thought - I would love to see more indicators of 500 years passing. It’s such a wild idea, totally intriguing. But it didn’t sound like there was much difference on the ship between th...
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Thank you, so glad you enjoyed it, and really pleased to hear that the pacing and flow worked well. I guess the last year of writing shorts has translated into progress in my writing! That's a really good point about the 500 years of change. To be honest, I'm more or less pantsing the larger world/universe that this story is set in, so I hadn't really given thought to whether the ship should be different after 500 years. Something to think about!
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The story was good. It had me hooked in the beginning and had me anticipating something major. Something crazy, especially with the 500 year gap. You would expect major technological advances or Some crazy dictator. Especially when she was like, “Not Passengers, colonists”. I was expecting drama, confusion, and just something else. It was a super strong start but the ending disappointed me a little. Don’t get me wrong I liked your story but it disappointed me just a little bit.
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Hi Kate-lynn, thank you for the feedback. Sorry to hear you were disappointed, that is interesting feedback, something to think about.
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It is very good
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Thank you so much! Glad you enjoyed it.
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Nice job! A very human and relatable protagonist in a sci-fi story. That's hard to do. :)
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Why thank you!
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Fantastic world building! I'm impressed by good, emotionally layered sci-fi and its within word count?! - consider me super impressed. The one thing separating this story from the ones I've paid for in anthologies (besides us having the word count thing) would be more emotional punch around her family. Wish I could've heard what they did to make her run away! And, maybe because I've read to much space travel recently, her family is dead by this point, right? Lots of feelings to deal with there, too
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Wow, thank you so much. That is some really high praise, and for someone who hopes to submit to magazines eventually it is really encouraging to hear. The word count on this was 2220, just over the 2k limit that most magazines seem to go for so I would need to tighten it up a little. If you don't mind my asking, what magazine do you manage? Jenna's family would be dead, yes. I didn't have words to deal with that difficult set of emotions. In my mind I didn't actually think of them as bad people, just a little pushy. She thought they were wo...
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Oh no, I made myself sound too impressive- I just read them! But it does feel like a story that belongs in there
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Now that I read my comment... im so sorry. I meant as a consumer
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Well I'm going to take it as high praise anyway!
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Congratulations on your shortlist! Well-deserved =]
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Thank you so much! Let's see if I can get three in a row!
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I have faith in your skill =]
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Okay, I made it, let's go! I got major Passengers vibes (Passengers the 2016 movie with Chris Pratt and Jennifer Lawrence), but that being said, I liked this better. The suspense was so heavy at the beginning that I really wanted the twist/ floor to drop beneath her movement. For me, I wanted to see more, and it didn't have to be a dramatic action sequence type more; I am thinking more she sees someone unexpected (enemy/ex-friend/cousin) and then mild conflict ensues and then is resolved—just a thought. The world and the new names for thi...
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Thanks for the resd! Passengers is a fantastic movie, so any comparison is praise for me! I can see what you mean about more happening but I think that would change the overall story theme/plot, and I wanted it to be a very internal story. Something to think about though. Jenna is definitely not everyone's character, in fact the first feedback I got was that she was so annoying, but got better . But then, that was the point. Thanks for the thoughts and so glad you enjoyed it. I'll be irregular in writing for a while but will periodically ch...
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Oh, it would definitely change the overall story. My suggestion is like an alternate reality situation. I don't think it's an annoying quality; I just think she lacks the agency and wants of the main character. Like awkward is one thing, but what does she really want, what life does she want to live? I know we see that she's turning over a new leaf at the end when she's choosing the adventure on the new planet, but it might have been better if we got to see some smaller detail forms of that. Like she chooses to sit in the middle of the loung...
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Hmmm...interesting. Things to think about for next time, thanks! Feel free to drop me a message if you have stories in the meantime, I log on fairly often so will be happy to read, just won't have a lot of time to write.
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Ah, got it.
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New story out this week, it's called "An Heir of Shadow", and I think I accidentally wrote my way into a series; let me know what you think when you get around to it. Absolutely no rush on my side. I know you'll get to it when you can.
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This was fantastic. You really managed to capture the sense of isolation and emptiness very evocatively. It was almost eerie and chilling, I kept expecting something awful to happen at any moment just because the setting was so vivid and put me on edge. I also almost panicked at the thought that Jenna had made this massive decision which she could never undo--never seeing her family again--but I liked the hope it ended on. Brilliant :)
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Thank you so much, I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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I love this idea. Not your usual science fiction. No aliens. Everything is as now but different. I wanted to read more and find out about the new planet and what it would be like when everybody else woke up. I kept thinking something would go wrong and hoping it wouldn’t. Kept me reading to the end. I liked that there was a moral recognition of her families influence and she saw that their meddling had only been for her good. Maybe she could have realised the loss they would have felt at her leaving. Great writing. Look forward to more.
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Thank you! I really love the idea of those pioneering stories about colonising new planets and exploring new frontiers but wanted to explore beyond the high-level political struggles, the spaceship captains defeating the overwhelmingly powerful aliens, the pathfinders who lead humanity through struggles and instead focus on the many millions of almost 'everyday' stories of people who would be involved in these grand space opera plots. The random passenger, the salesman, the post-construction cleaner, that kind of thing.
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I like Jenna's development and how she finally pushes herself to do what she wants/ takes control of her life :) Keep up the good work and keep writing!!
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Thank you!
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