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African American Adventure Western



Black smoke belched from the smokestack of the Chicago Alton St. Louis Rail Road engine steaming southwest. The passenger car lurched and swayed sending one gentleman trying to negotiate the aisle sprawling into the laps of Kendra and her traveling companions.

“Oh, Ladies, kindly forgive me. Did I hurt anyone? Terribly clumsy of me.” He apologized as he reclaimed his footing, bowed and tipped his hat toward them.

“No harm done and we can not put the blame on you. Who can walk with these rolling pathways.” Kendra accepted his apology.

“Say, do I know you?” They said in unison to one another.

“Wh...what? Oh, excuse me.” He started again. “Allow me to introduce myself. My name is Kyle Stanley most recently from Chicago.”

“Kyle? Kyle. You wouldn't have come from down by Savanna, Georgia at one time, would you?” Kendra responded trying to place him for certain.

“How would you have known that? Yes, I was born and lived most of my life down that way.” He looked puzzled.

“My name is Kendra Potter. My Father was Kendall Potter and my Grandfather was Randolph Potter. You remind me of my Father. I believe you may be my long lost Uncle Kyle.” Kendra said disbelievingly.

“And that must be why you look familiar. You favor your grandfather but, of course, much lovelier. Much, much lovelier. But could I have seen you on stage recently?”

“I'm sorry. Let me introduce my companions. This is Mrs. Evie Pike, stage name 'Evie Brown' of Emporia Operatic Theater. We were performing in Chicago. I sing Gospel at the intermissions. Maybe you saw us there. And this is Mrs. Twyla Potter. A dress designer in Emporia, Kansas. We have also been on a fashion expedition. Would you care to sit and join us so we can continue this discussion?”

“Nice to meet you ladies and, yes, I did see you perform. It was very inspirational. But I must get back to my companions, my wife and my sister. There is a spare seat next to us, would you mind joining us instead?” Kyle suggested.

“Would you ladies mind if I did that? I'll be back shortly. This is important.”

“Of course, take your time. We got all the way to Kansas.” Evie assured.

Kendra and Kyle tottered toward the back of the car, him close to her elbow to steady her. For what purpose he wasn't sure since he was the one that had landed in her lap.

“Meet my wife, Estella, and my sister, Katrina, Kat, for short. You gals will never believe this, but this is my long lost niece, Kendra. Well, she called me 'long lost' but I knew where I was all along so I figure she was the lost one. Actually, I don't know if she existed at all before now.” Kyle was grinning at his own joke.

“Well, imagine that!” Estella exclaimed. “How do you figure?”

“Nice to meet both of you.” Kendra responded. “Let's see if we can unravel all of this. What do you know about Randolph Potter?”

Kyle responded, “He was one of the sons of a neighboring sugar cane plantation owner down near Savannah, Georgia. He took a liking to my mother, Sugar, a slave owned by the en-slaver at the cotton plantation next to his father's. That 'liking' turned into a little more and I was the result of their young love. They were forbidden to stay together. The young Randolph was forced to fend for himself in another region when his father no longer had a portion of his land holdings to leave to him. I never knew him growing up, only knew of him.

“Years later my mother was taken advantage of by our en-slaver and had Kat here but didn't survive the birth. One of Randolph's brothers contacted him to see if he still had the wet nurse that had tended to his granddaughter when his daughter-in-law passed away. He brought her and another slave man whom he had grown up with along with her five-year-old son to Savannah to take care of Kat. They stayed three years. That wet nurse thought she was in love with me and seduced me into an act that produced a son. She named him 'Tobias' and took him with her when they left. I never saw the child again.

“I have since met Estella and fell in love with her. When slaves were set free we three headed north and worked in factories. We have most recently been in Chicago but want to go farther west. We only have enough funds to make it to St. Louis now but will work some more then go on.” Kyle finished his story.

“Oh, Kyle!” Kendra confirmed, “That fits in perfectly to all that I know. I am wearing black because I lost my Pappy, Randolph Potter, about seven months ago. He died en-route to California so we only made it to Kansas and decided that was all the farther we cared to walk. We have some nice land there. Father died in the war. I am seventeen years old. I used to hear from Theo, Rand's good friend and servant, how much Rand loved Sugar. I always thought he was talking about the sugar cane from his father's plantation. It was years later that I found out he meant a woman.

“My nanny, 'Lena, cared for me and her son, Tommy, who is the husband of the young lady, Twyla, who is traveling with me. When I was three, Theo, 'Lena and Pappy went to Savanna to take care of a baby that had no mamma. When they came back they had Toby with them. At age six I thought it was great fun to have a real live baby doll to play with. Toby is eleven now and you would be so proud of him. He is very smart and talented and the family resemblance is strong. Everyone assumes he is my little brother.

“So, I would say, yes, we are very much related, Uncle Kyle.” Kendra was teary-eyed.

“One of God's miracles to be sure! That we should quite literally stumble into one another.” Kyle remarked. “Now what?”

“Well, now, if you don't have more pressing plans I want you to come home with me and check out Kansas to see if that is appealing to you at all. Theo and 'Lena are still with me but married to other spouses. I will pay for your passage. You can always pay me back. We have been searching for you anyway because Pappy left you an inheritance. What do you say?” Kendra offered.

“This is unbelievable! How could we refuse an offer like that?” Kyle accepted.

“Oh, Kendra, I have been looking for you. You changed seats. I found the newspaper you were wanting. Who are your new friends?” Charles reached downward and pecked a kiss on her cheek.

“Hi, Charles. You won't believe this but I have discovered this gentleman is my Uncle Kyle. Maybe you have heard us talking about him occasionally. And this is his wife, Estella, and his sister, Katrina. This is my friend Charles Chase. He is with the railroad. Which reminds me. I want to pay for their passage all the way to Kansas with us. Who do I see about that?”

“Why don't you let me take care of that? It is too hard to navigate these train cars. Don't want you falling all over.” Charles offered.

“That's exactly how we met. I fell into her lap trying to get down the aisle. We thought we knew each other. Family resemblance seemed strong for both of us. Isn't that fortunate?” Kyle explained.

“Kendra, would you step up front with me for a bit?” Charles asked.

“Don't go too far, Folks, I'll get back to you.” Kendra smiled.

Charles held her elbow as he helped her back to the front where their seats were. “Are you sure about these people being related, Kendra. They are black and you are white. There are always con artists trying to work these trains.”

“Why, Charles, such a prejudice comment! Look at 'Lena and Tommy and Toby and Honey and Candy. They are all mixed race and no one knows exactly how much of what color they may be. We are all one race. The human race. What difference does the shade of skin make? My white, as far as I know, Grandfather made love to Kyle's mixed race mother. Kyle made love to mixed race 'Lena and produced Toby whom everyone mistakes for my little brother. My parents were both white, again, as far as I know.

“We compared stories and the facts line up. He would have had to do all kinds of research to know the things he knew. I believe he is Kyle and 'Lena and Theo will be able to confirm it. If not, all they got out of me is a train trip to Kansas. Okay?” Kendra huffed.

“Okay, for now. Please, be cautious. You can be so trusting and loving. I wish you would let me take care of you. You must learn to be careful with strangers.” Charles sulked.

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Tommy Goround
13:32 Sep 30, 2024

This one captured my attention by the opener. I was very engaged due to style/telling/details/accents/smooth delivery. "Finally!" I see what you first posted , 84 ? stories ago. It seems like classic 1880-1920 might by your perfect era, for me. (Remember the riverboat story? It was very good. lol. Just a serial). Here... kept the flow until nearly the last few paragraphs with the family mapping got just a wee bit too much for me. No worries. Shake that tree. Then you brought it back with the reveal (One is black and one is white). Now we...

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Tommy Goround
13:54 Sep 30, 2024

I really want to write the story "My mother, the slightly whorish actress, 1921." But I'm not feeling this is the correct venue.

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Mary Bendickson
23:54 Sep 30, 2024

Your title sounds interesting. Sorry, when I posted this I forgot I had used a longer version not long ago. Trying to work on my manuscript so not writing much new right now. This era was right after the Civil War when trains heading west were new.

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Tommy Goround
14:27 Oct 01, 2024

If it is useful: trains were 150$ to California before 1893 panic. Then 15$ one way. Then $1.. I would assume they charged the standard 150$ going east. That would add conflict (if needed).. A cool situation = your story, either way.

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Mary Bendickson
18:54 Oct 01, 2024

Thanks

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Kathleen March
04:44 Sep 06, 2024

Very smooth reading, despite all the family mentioned! Some families have those conversations. However, after the paragraph ending with con artists, I went in circles for a few moments. I wasn’t able to follow the references to race for the generations. I was also noticing how you give a sense of southern speech without changing the standard English. Nice.

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Mary Bendickson
07:39 Sep 06, 2024

Sorry about sending you out on family tree branches. These folks are mentioned in other stories I have submitted from the manuscript I am working on. I should have tried harder to identify them here.

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Kathleen March
01:24 Sep 07, 2024

That explains everything. My limited knowledge. Since I write in series as well, I should have known. Like your question one time because I had made reference to other stories.

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Renate Buchner
08:16 Sep 05, 2024

Mary, as always, a spot-on story. I love your main character's interaction and imagining the scene they were in. Every time I read your stories, I learn more about writing. You are so versatile.

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Mary Bendickson
18:15 Sep 05, 2024

What a nice compliment! Thank you.☺️

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03:26 Sep 05, 2024

A profound lesson in this one. I remember this story, well.

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Mary Bendickson
18:13 Sep 05, 2024

Thanks. Actually forgot I had used a longer version before. Looking for things can use without writing much. Didn't submit. Only want to keep my toe in.

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23:39 Sep 05, 2024

Great idea. It's good to catch up with your writing again.

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Dr. Jael Zebulun
19:10 Sep 04, 2024

I wish everyone knew "We are all one race. The human race." It would solve so many problems❣️

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Mary Bendickson
19:19 Sep 04, 2024

Thanks for comment. True.

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Dr. Jael Zebulun
02:05 Sep 07, 2024

❤️

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Rebecca Lewis
18:59 Sep 04, 2024

You’ve got the bones of a strong, character-driven story here.

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Jack Kimball
15:29 Sep 03, 2024

Hi Mary. Every time I read one of your stories, you get better and better. I love the 'we are all one race' message wrapped in a historical scene. You're way ahead of me, but I'm reading a book now that you might enjoy. Sandra Gerth's 'Show Don't Tell: How to Write Vivid Descriptions, Handle Backstory, and Describe Your Character's Emotions and I thought of this your story when l'm reading the book. We all know about 'Show Don't Tell" to the point of nausea, but for me, there were some great ideas and examples.

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Mary Bendickson
16:00 Sep 03, 2024

Thanks. Maybe time for me to check it out. I am a novice to writing and have avoided reading 'how to' books for fear I would be so focused on doing it right I wouldn't do it at all.

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03:33 Sep 05, 2024

As someone pointed out to me, dialogue has to be natural. If we adhere too much to what is correct in a narrative about a topic where colloquial sounds more natural, rectifying it via rules would be like giving a glimpse of the puppeteer holding and manipulating the character's strings. When it is supposed to sound like his spoken voice, writer-ese doesn't make sense.

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Mary Bendickson
18:14 Sep 05, 2024

Thanks for the pointers.

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Jim LaFleur
07:56 Sep 02, 2024

Mary, your characters are wonderfully crafted, and the historical context adds so much depth. Keep up the fantastic work!

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Mary Bendickson
14:28 Sep 02, 2024

Thank you.

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McKade Kerr
04:07 Sep 02, 2024

This was awesome! I loved the characters and the humor you put in throughout! I hope to see more of these characters at some point!

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Mary Bendickson
14:27 Sep 02, 2024

Thanks. They are in the book I am working on now.😁

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21:46 Sep 01, 2024

This was very sweet. I look forward to seeing how the story unfolds. ❤️

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Mary Bendickson
14:17 Sep 02, 2024

Thank you ☺️

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Helen A Smith
10:40 Sep 01, 2024

I love your descriptions of the journey. Great characters interconnecting and bringing history to life.

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Mary Bendickson
17:54 Sep 01, 2024

So glad you liked it.

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VJ Hamilton
00:34 Sep 01, 2024

I liked the dynamic scene-setting at the start. Lots of names to absorb! Kyle seems to be the "memory keeper" for one half of the family... then he meets up with Kendra, who knows the other side!

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Mary Bendickson
17:30 Sep 01, 2024

Sorry about all the names. It is part of manuscript I am editing so as I find snippets that might work for a prompt I submit. Not taking time right now to write something new for me.

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Trudy Jas
22:02 Aug 31, 2024

Kendra does collect folk, doesn't she? Lovely snippet of the tale. I'm sure we'll get more.

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Mary Bendickson
17:26 Sep 01, 2024

Thanks for reading and liking. As I am working on it I find things that may fit the prompts.

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Kristi Gott
17:15 Aug 31, 2024

I see this is part of a whole manuscript! Very interesting and skillfully written. Good luck with your manuscript!

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Mary Bendickson
17:59 Aug 31, 2024

Thank you.

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Annie Persson
16:26 Aug 31, 2024

If I recall correctly, this is a re-publishing of this one. I'm sure you submitted it before. But it is still lovely! :)

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Mary Bendickson
16:38 Aug 31, 2024

If I did, sorry. Didn't think I had used it. Thanks for liking.

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Tommy Goround
13:52 Sep 30, 2024

I just had a dream: write something Twilight Zone Surreal, tweak it every week to prompt, and see how many weeks of $5 it takes to win. :-)

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Beverly Goldberg
16:23 Aug 31, 2024

Again, Brava! Indeed, what does the color of our skin matter. It's like clothing. These are such interesting people. Kendra is fascinating. Looking forward to more pieces from this book-to-be.

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Mary Bendickson
16:36 Aug 31, 2024

Trying to focus on getting it published so not writing new stories much. Just using some of the pieces that can fit the prompts. Falling way behind on reading everyone's stories. Glad you liked this.

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Linda Kenah
13:11 Aug 31, 2024

This makes me curious to read your manuscript. Very interesting!

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Mary Bendickson
15:16 Aug 31, 2024

Thanks. I do hope to turn it into a book but I don't want to self-publish like so many are doing. But if that is the only way...

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Alexis Araneta
10:11 Aug 31, 2024

Oooh !!! What a read, Mary ! Looking forward to reading more about this reunion. Lovely stuff !

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Mary Bendickson
15:04 Aug 31, 2024

Thanks.

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Irene Duchess
20:06 Aug 30, 2024

Look forward to seeing your manuscript published!!😉

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Mary Bendickson
14:55 Aug 31, 2024

Thanks for reading and commenting. I am working on it.😁

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Mary Bendickson
19:27 Aug 30, 2024

Another tidbit from the manuscript I am busy working on.

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