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Coming of Age Drama Fantasy

If only I could escape from this endless portrait of monotony. I cannot stand it much longer.


But before I continue, I believe an explanation is in order.


Before I was as I am now, a me— character in this painting, I was a half-finished shape, complete only in imagination. Before that,— was a single stroke of a brush, and before even that I was only an idea, full of potential. I was most beautiful as an idea, for the human mind is not bound in images.


The chess-board in front of me seems to gloat, and for a moment I feel that its owner gloats as well, but a glance tells me he is the same lifeless figure he has always been.


No-one has told me how it worked, how I came to be chained to this game with a mere form in the picture that we share. Unmoving, unconscious, yet he plays as well as the highest grandmaster.


I, as I now know myself, am only the spirit of myself. Before I was who I am, I was a living human. Now, I am merely my own soul, trapped in this painting, unable to move on because my image still exists in this world.


My guardian angel never moves. They watch, and wait. They are always watching and waiting, and as much as I tell myself that they are there for me, to see that my partner does not cheat, I cannot help feeling they are hiding something.


Lisa smiles at me from across the gallery. When my life first became dull and colourless, Lisa kept me together. To her, there is nothing a little creativity can't fix, despite her misleading appearance. Hands clasped on her lap, she is perpetually placid. Her calmness masks a vivid imagination and cheerful disposition that only shows when she smiles; the public no longer sees that smile.


"Well?" She says expectantly, gliding over to me, leaving her painting empty behind her.


"Perhaps you know how to play chess?" I ask. I cannot understand why I have not asked her before.


She studies the chess-board closely, picking up each piece. I fidget, worried that she will place them down wrongly. Once the pieces have been moved, my turn is over.


Finally she speaks. "Not with these pieces - I cannot fathom them out. I often played chess with my mistress, but her pieces were far more... Ladylike."


I stare at her. Her mistress? I had taken her to be a lady herself.


"You look surprised. I thought I had told you." She raises an eyebrow. "My mistress was adverse to having her likeness drawn, so I was told to sit for her instead. The artist was not to know that a substitute had been made. I was tutored on how to hold myself like a lady, how to act like a lady, how to speak like one in the chance that the artist wished to speak to me. You see, my master had not known that my portrait would be of any importance to anyone but the artist himself."


"But – your mistress' name?"


"My lady's name was Lisa del Giocondo." Her eyes widen slightly. "Surely it is of no great importance to you whether I am a lady or not? I had not believed that you were influenced by class distinctions."


I gather myself. If only the world could know of this– although perhaps it is better that they do not.


"No, no. I would not give your friendship for the friendship of a queen," I say in an attempt at gallantry. She only laughs.


I return to my chess-board, hoping in the light of this new discovery to see a change in the pieces, some way to escape the war that my partner has waged. I am being pushed back, my forces rapidly depleting while his only seem to receive reinforcements. Though I have not the reason why I struggle so, my soul has long been competitive beyond reason.


"Are you happy now?" Lisa interrupts my thoughts to ask. She asks the same question every day after the gallery has closed.


"Why would this discovery change my state? But wait," I add as she turns to glide to her own painting. She spins back. "Lisa was your mistress' name. What is your own?"


"It is better that you continue to call me Lisa." She glides away, and I return to my game.


From across the gallery, I hear Charles I of England declaring his love for Aphrodite of Milo once again – Venus de Milo to the living ones, but she announces to each new picture as they come that she preferred the name Aphrodite, and none dare to disobey her. For though her role gives not the appearance of strength, there have been many ones who disobeyed, facing the same consequence as King Charles.


I catch myself as my hand reaches for a pawn. Why do I play this? What will happen if I win, or if I lose?


"You ask at last. I have been waiting." I look up, expecting to see Lisa beside me, though I know the voice that speaks is not hers. My guardian angel has awoken.


"You need only ask again. I will tell you," they say, then continue without waiting for an answer. "You wish to know. That is enough." I wait for them to continue.


"If you win the game, your soul will be released from this painting. If you lose, you will be trapped. You will be compelled to play again the same game that you lost, the same moves, until the game ends. The pieces will reset and you will start again, replaying once more. I cannot say how long you will be stuck this way," they say evenly.


I will not be able to leave? Never be able to leave? This is what my angel has implied, but I almost cannot let myself believe it. What must I do? How will I bear so long, trapped? At least I have choices now, the ability to play a free game, though the game itself stresses me in a way I know not. If I lose…


I turn back to my pieces, examining them with fresh eyes and a mind fuelled by desperation. The fire leaves me as I realise that my opponent has me in check.


In despair, I settle into my picture position before I realise that I have done so, and a shiver runs through me. I have never done it voluntarily before; the position is uncomfortable, but it is necessary for the public to see my picture the same as it was when painted.


Around the corner, Nike delivers the shout of victory - the signal that the gallery is opening


The living ones flood in, drifting around slowly, examining each painting as they pass. They cannot know that every few pictures they look at, a trapped soul stares back at them. Some would reach out their hands if they could, so desperate to feel once more the skin and clothes so reminiscent of their former selves.


Camilla weeps silently in the Oath Of The Horatii. That is one of the few things that I enjoy about public times; for when the gallery is closed, she roams free, sharing her grief with those unfortunate enough to show concern for her, and none can escape her. While the humans roam, she cannot make a noise. Ah, blessed peace.


A peculiar man stands in front of me. I stare at him, willing him to move on so I can focus on my game, but he seems to be studying me closely.


He calls a guide, and asks about my picture.


"Moritz Retzsch' Checkmate," the guide tells him. "The picture depicts the devil winning a game of chess against the second man shown."


“It is supposed to."


“Supposed?”


"It looks like the devil is winning, but he hasn't won yet. That man has a few moves left. He can still win."


I turn to my chess-board and peer at it, anxious to see what the visitor has said. And suddenly I see it, wondering why I haven't before.


絵画


Visitors to the Louvre the next day were disappointed to find the famous painting 'Checkmate' temporarily removed from public viewing.


A rumour spread that one of the cleaners had discovered the frame holding what seemed a replacement of the real painting, which was marked ‘stolen’. Most who heard this laughed at the painter of the 'replacement'. Many voices were heard that day exclaiming –


"How could anyone forget to paint a whole figure?”

March 19, 2024 18:45

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21:32 Jun 21, 2024

This is a great story. As I reached the last part I remember the news clip about the checkmate painting not really being the final play of the game. Well written and I really like it. Try it if you like but I had the music from Hans Zimmer "Leave No Man Behind" playing as I read the story. It made you feel something more for the tone of the story and the writing style. Give it a try. Great job! Robert

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06:57 Jun 22, 2024

Thanks! 😊 So glad you liked it. I'll definitely try out the music! I've never tried listening to music while I write or read... I think, when I read, I just can't figure out what kind of music to fit to a piece unless I've already finished the story. Maybe I should give it another go.

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J. I. MumfoRD
14:53 Mar 28, 2024

Fantastic writing, excellent idea. One place I had to reread--the paragraph starting "Around the corner, Nike..." I had to read a few times. It wasn't clear who was reaching out. I think one too many pronouns. Very well done. One other thing--'Adverse' is an adjective, it should have been 'averse'.

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18:22 Mar 28, 2024

Thanks for the feedback!!

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Annie Persson
17:28 Mar 24, 2024

Beautiful, like the last time I read it. :)

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09:50 Mar 25, 2024

Oh, you did read it? I thought you hadn't... Thanks!!! :))

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Annie Persson
11:28 Mar 25, 2024

I think I commented about it the last time you put it on your profile, but maybe I didn't. Sorry. It's still really good though. :)

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Mary Bendickson
23:30 Mar 19, 2024

Beautiful, once again. Not even sure I caught any difference but I am too lazy to recheck. I think this is a grand submission to this prompt. Good luck. Hope new judges will appreciate it more. Thanks for liking my 'Living on Easy Street'.

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08:34 Mar 20, 2024

Thank you :)) 🤍

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18:46 Mar 19, 2024

Resubmit with indirect approval from a judge, conveyed by Mary. 😉 A few edits made. They fixed a few problems but probably created a few more... 😅

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