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Adventure Suspense Thriller

Author's note: This story should be in the prompt: "Someone who wants to give up on their career right before their big break." I can't change it. New member mistake, sorry.



The tunnel was pitch black, save for the faint glimmer of the enforcers’ flashlights bouncing off the damp walls. My lungs burned with each breath, the cold air of the Swiss Alps slicing through my throat like a razor blade. The train was coming. I could hear it—a low, distant rumble that echoed through the darkness, growing louder with every second. There was no room to sidestep the train in this narrow tunnel, no crevice to slip into and avoid the crushing force that would soon barrel down the tracks.

“End of the line, Walker,” one of the enforcers shouted sarcastically, his voice cold, metallic, devoid of humanity, and full of cliché. I couldn’t see their faces, but I didn’t need to—they were faceless, nameless henchmen, doing Mathias’s dirty work.

I knew I was done for. But I wasn’t ready to die—not yet. Not when I was so close.

“Look behind you. Here comes the tunnel at the end of the light,” the other enforcer sneered, his voice tinged with sickening amusement.

I wanted to scream back, to tell them to go to hell, but the words caught in my throat. The train was closer now, its light just beginning to pierce the tunnel’s endless darkness. Time was running out, and I was trapped between two versions of impending doom.

It hadn’t always been like this. Once, I was Jason Walker, hotshot journalist, king of the exposé. The kind of guy who could smell a scandal from a mile away, who thrived on the thrill of chasing down the truth, no matter how deeply it was buried. I was the guy editors called when they needed someone to blow the lid off a story, someone unafraid to dig where others wouldn’t dare. Back then, I had a sharp nose for nonsense and an even sharper pen to cut through its smokescreen.

But that was a lifetime ago, before the bad decisions piled up like unpaid bills, each one chipping away at the man I used to be. Before the stories that should’ve been game-changers ended up as footnotes, if they made it to print at all. Before I started second-guessing myself, hesitating when I used to charge ahead without a second thought.

The truth is, I’d lost my edge long before I ever heard of the Clarity Organization. It started with little things—a missed lead here, a source that turned out to be less reliable than I thought there. Stories that didn’t quite hit the mark. At first, I shrugged it off. Everyone has off days, right? But the off days turned into off weeks, then months, until I was staring down the barrel of a career that had once burned so brightly but was now flickering out like a dying candle. This story was my last chance at redemption. A flimsy lead about a cult-like group of oligarchs called Clarity. It was supposed to be the key to enlightenment, according to their online sales pitch. A gateway to wealth, success, the realization of dreams. And I had bought into it—not as a believer, but as a last-ditch effort to save my career.

I’d heard whispers about Clarity for months—an underground movement, exclusive, secretive, with a following that included some of the wealthiest people on the planet. They promised their followers the ability to unlock their dreams, to read and write within those dreams, and, in doing so, materialize them into financial gain. It was a con, plain and simple, but a brilliant one. The only rule was that you had to be truthful—cheat Clarity, and you were as good as dead.

I approached the story with the same zeal I used to bring to my work. I’d infiltrate the organization, expose the fraud, and rebuild my reputation. But somewhere along the line, the boundaries between reality and illusion began to blur.

Mathias. I should have seen it in his eyes, that cold, calculating gaze that sized me up the moment I walked into his office.

“Clarity isn’t for everyone, Jason,” he had said, a thin smile playing on his lips. “But those who find it will never look back.”

I should have walked away then. I should have run. But I didn’t. I stayed, I played the game, and now I was paying the price.

The compound was a fortress, nestled deep in the Swiss Alps, far from prying eyes. It was a place of luxury—marble floors, crystal chandeliers, the kind of wealth that made you forget the world outside. But beneath the surface, it was rotten to the core.

From the moment I arrived, they had me under their spell. The first ritual was a test of will—hallucinogenic drugs, they said, to help unlock the mind’s potential. I knew it was bullshit, but I played along. I let the dreams wash over me, vivid, surreal, until I couldn’t tell what was real and what wasn’t.

In those dreams, I saw my wife, Sarah. She was smiling, happy, like she hadn’t been in years. We were together again, and for a moment, I wanted to believe it. But then the dream would shift, and I’d see Mathias standing over me, watching, always watching.

The other members swore by it. They were rich, successful, everything I wasn’t, and they credited it all to Clarity. But I knew better. I knew a con when I saw one, and I was determined to prove it.

But the more I dug, the more dangerous it became. Mathias was onto me—I could see it in his eyes, in the way his smile never quite reached them. He was waiting, biding his time, and I was running out of both.

I had to dig deeper. The so-called Clarity sessions were nothing more than elaborate brainwashing exercises, using a cocktail of hallucinogens and psychological manipulation to get inside the heads of the wealthy and powerful. But the real question was—why? What was the endgame? And that’s when I realized: it was all about the money. It always was.

The closer I got to the truth, the more desperate I became. I started taking bigger risks. Late at night, when the compound was silent and the other members were lost in their chemically induced dreams, I’d slip out of my quarters. The security was tight, but not impenetrable. Cameras, motion sensors, guards—Mathias had covered his bases, but he hadn’t accounted for someone like me. Someone with nothing left to lose.

I began by sneaking into restricted areas—Mathias’s office, the administrative wing, the basement levels where the real work was done—where the narcotics were designed. Each foray yielded pieces of a puzzle, but it wasn’t until I hacked into their financial records database that everything came together.

It took several nights to gain access, a process fraught with danger. I had to bypass layers of security protocols, falsify credentials, and avoid detection at every turn. Every keystroke felt like it could be my last. The tension gnawed at me—one wrong move, one slip, and it would all be over. But the deeper I went, the clearer it became.

The Clarity Organization wasn’t just a cult; it was a well-oiled machine designed to siphon money from its members on a scale that was almost incomprehensible. Offshore accounts, shell corporations, fake investment portfolios—it was all there, hidden beneath layers of legalese and obfuscation.

The members were promised wealth, success, their wildest dreams realized. But in reality, their “clarity” was nothing more than a carefully constructed illusion. They’d be encouraged to make large donations, ostensibly to maintain their status in the organization, or to invest in exclusive opportunities that would supposedly yield massive returns. The money was funneled through a complex network of international banks, moving so fast and in so many directions that it would take years for any regulator to track it all down. And by then, it would be too late.

The scale of the scam was staggering, with billions of dollars disappearing into the abyss. And for those who dared to question it? They were quietly, efficiently disappeared. I found records—emails, encrypted messages, notes written in code—hinting at vanishings, deaths made to look like accidents or suicides. The Clarity Organization had its enforcers, and they didn’t hesitate to protect their golden goose.

At the top of it all was Mathias, the mastermind behind the curtain. He was good—too good. Every time I found a lead, he was there, one step ahead, ready to cut it off. It was as if he knew I was coming before I even made my move. Paranoia began to seep in. I started wondering if my every action was being watched, if the smiles from the staff were masks hiding their knowledge of my true intentions.

But then I found it—the smoking gun. A series of transactions, carelessly left unencrypted, linking Mathias directly to the offshore accounts. Transfers made in his name; funds siphoned directly to his personal assets. It was enough to blow the lid off the entire operation, to expose Clarity for the sham it was.

I sat there, staring at the screen, my heart pounding in my chest. This was it. The story that would redeem me, save my career, maybe even my life. But as I copied the files to a secure drive, the hairs on the back of my neck stood up. It was too easy. Too quiet.

The realization hit me like a freight train—I’d been set up.

The door to the office creaked open, and I barely had time to react. Two of Mathias’s enforcers stepped inside, their faces cold, impassive, as if they were just there to do a job. Which, of course, they were.

“Mr. Walker,” a voice from the shadows said, his voice as smooth as silk, “it seems you’ve been where you don’t belong.”

I didn’t answer. What was there to say? I’d been caught. They had me.

“You know what your weakness is, Mr. Walker?” Mathias stepped forward from his concealment. “You believe everything you hear and all those too willing to talk to you.”

Too willing, yes. Why didn’t I see it? The Jason Walker of old would have sniffed it out right away.

Her name was Lila. She was everything you wouldn’t expect to find in a place like the Clarity compound—vivacious, with a sharp wit and a laugh that echoed through the halls like a melody. She had the kind of charm that disarmed you, made you feel like you were the only person in the room when she spoke to you. It wasn’t long before she caught my attention, and before I knew it, I was drawn into her orbit.

Lila was different from the others, or at least that’s what she wanted me to believe. While the other members floated through the compound, their minds clouded by the promises of wealth and success, Lila seemed grounded, skeptical even. She asked the kinds of questions no one else dared to ask. She whispered doubts about Mathias and the organization’s true motives, her voice low and conspiratorial, as if sharing forbidden secrets.

“I don’t know, Jason,” she had said one night as we sat on a balcony overlooking the snow-covered Alps. The moonlight cast a soft glow on her face, making her look almost ethereal. “Sometimes I wonder if any of this is real. The dreams, the clarity—it all feels so... contrived.”

I had nodded, trying to keep my excitement in check. This was exactly what I needed—an ally on the inside, someone who could help me expose the truth about Clarity. We talked for hours that night, our conversation weaving between doubts and suspicions, with Lila encouraging me to dig deeper, to find the evidence that would bring Mathias down.

She played her part perfectly. Lila would meet me in secret, always in secluded parts of the compound where we wouldn’t be seen. She fed my suspicions, dropping hints about discrepancies in the organization’s finances, strange disappearances, and how Mathias seemed to know too much about everyone’s private lives. She even claimed she was afraid—afraid that if she spoke out openly, she’d be the next one to disappear.

She was good—too good. But I was too blinded by my own desperation to see it.

As the days passed, I became more reckless, more determined. Lila’s encouragement pushed me to take risks I would have otherwise avoided. She was the one who suggested that I hack into the financial records, the one who told me about the hidden safe in Mathias’s office where the real secrets were kept. And like a fool, I listened.

It all came to a head the night I finally got into the safe. It had been easier than I expected, almost as if someone had loosened the digital screws just for me. Inside, I found the documents—proof of the Ponzi scheme, the offshore accounts, the staggering amounts of money being funneled out of the organization under Mathias’s direct orders. It was the smoking gun I’d been searching for.

I should have known it was too easy. As I stood there, staring at the damning evidence, the door behind me creaked open. I spun around, the papers still in my hands, to find Lila standing in the doorway.

“Lila, I—” I started, but the words caught in my throat when I saw the look in her eyes.

Gone was the warmth, the concern, the doubt she had shown me. In their place was a cold, calculating gaze that sent a chill down my spine. It was the look of someone who had just won a game they’d been playing all along.

“I’m sorry, Jason,” she said, her voice devoid of the affection it once held. “But this helps me pay back a debt.”

The realization hit me like a punch to the gut. She’d been playing me from the start. Every doubt she’d planted, every word of encouragement, every touch—they were all calculated moves in a game of deception. She was never questioning Clarity’s motives; she was making sure I didn’t question hers.

Before I could react, before I could even think to run, the enforcers appeared in the doorway behind her. I was trapped.

“They’ll take it from here,” Lila said, stepping aside as the enforcers moved in. There was no regret in her voice, no remorse. Just cold, hard professionalism.

They didn’t give me a chance to fight. I was grabbed, my arms pinned behind my back as they dragged me out of the office, past a grinning Mathias, the incriminating documents left scattered on the floor. My heart pounded in my chest as I realized how completely I had been outplayed.

The compound was a maze, and they knew it better than I did. But adrenaline was on my side. I broke free, shoving one of the enforcers hard enough to send him crashing into a wall, and I ran. I didn’t have a plan—there was no time for one. I just knew I had to get away.

I sprinted through the hallways, past the grand rooms and opulent decor, past the members who were too lost in their delusions to notice the chaos unfolding around them. I made it outside into the cold night air and didn’t stop. I ran through the woods, branches clawing at my face, my lungs burning from the exertion.

Up the mountainside, I kept running, my legs screaming in protest, but I didn’t dare stop. Not until I reached the tunnel.

And now, here I was, trapped, with no way out. The train was almost upon me, its light blinding, the rumble of its approach a deafening roar in my ears. The enforcers were closing in, and I was out of options. Lila’s betrayal still stung, the bitterness of it mixing with the fear coursing through my veins. She had played her part well, leading me right into Mathias’s trap.

In the end, it wasn’t fear that gripped me—it was clarity. The kind Mathias had talked about, but not the way he meant it. I saw it all in those final moments: the mistakes, the lies, the dreams that had died long before I ever set foot in that compound.

The train’s roar echoed through the tunnel, its blinding light slicing through the darkness like a knife. I had seconds, maybe less, to make a choice—but which end did I prefer?

I made my choice. If I’m going, so are they. With a final, defiant roar that was swallowed by the scream of the oncoming train, I launched myself at them, my thoughts fixed solely on taking them with me. Those idiots were too blind to see their own end hurtling toward them.

As my feet pounded the tracks, I realized that for the first time in years, I wasn’t running from anything—I was running toward something. And in that moment, as darkness and light converged, I found a freedom I never thought possible. A freedom not from the world, but from the weight of everything I had lost.

In the end, death wasn’t an end at all—it was an escape. A release. And as the roar of the train engulfed us all, I felt something I hadn’t in a long time: the quiet, liberating embrace of finally letting go of what I had carried for far too long—my fear.

 

September 02, 2024 05:45

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48 comments

Martha Kowalski
00:12 Oct 02, 2024

Hooked all the way through! A belated welcome to Reedsy and thanks for the like on my story - can't wait to read more of your works

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Arthur Ingham
05:12 Oct 02, 2024

Thank you, Martha. More on the way.

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S. Hjelmeset
12:33 Sep 16, 2024

You know, if he'd flung himself to the ground he might have survived... Depends on the type of tain and the speed though (I'm a train conductor in Norway). Great story!

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Arthur Ingham
14:42 Sep 16, 2024

Thanks, SH. I love your optimism and desire for Jason to survive. He's still alive in my follow-up story: https://blog.reedsy.com/short-story/g85sv9/ Thanks for your great comments. Would love to hear from a train conductor if his survival is believable.

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S. Hjelmeset
18:05 Sep 17, 2024

Nice! A snow plow - smart! And believable. If you're not careful now, you'll end up with a whole book! (In Norway it's a different company that does the platforms contra the tracks, so this winter, the platform-guys moved the snow onto the tracks, and then the other ones came and sent the snow back to the platform. Privatization is a bitch. But funny).

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Arthur Ingham
04:14 Sep 18, 2024

That's hilarious! Job security, I suppose. :) Yes, I might have the makings of a book in the shape of vignettes. Thanks for reading it.

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Malcolm Twigg
13:45 Sep 12, 2024

Hi Arthur. I found myself quite absorbed by the meticulous background information in this story. It seemed well plotted ... until the ending . How was a dead man still around to tell the story? The whole piece would have been better in third person. Something else that bugged me was the ease with which he - and apparently Lila - infiltrated an organisation which relied on big money for membership. It's pretty fast paced and perhaps too large in scope for the 3,000 word count. Nice job overall, however.

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Arthur Ingham
03:54 Sep 13, 2024

Thanks, Malcolm. Yes, suspending disbelief can be tricky. Plus, if Jason is narrating, then ??? We shall see if he returns.

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Malcolm Twigg
06:51 Sep 13, 2024

Ahhh! Watch this space. Thanks for the follow.

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Kristi Gott
04:19 Sep 10, 2024

Wow, wonderfully suspenseful journey for the reader! A cool, complex plot and thriller storytelling style make this a great read. I enjoyed this story!

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Arthur Ingham
15:08 Sep 10, 2024

Thanks, Kristi. So glad you liked it.

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15:53 Sep 08, 2024

Hi Arthur. Welcome to reedsy. You really captured that old school 'noir' feel In this story I did notice, like someone else, that he is captured by Two henchmen while stealing the files, then it flashes back to meeting Lila, then after that it has him being caught again but this time by Lila. Something you can fix easily enough! (Unless I read that wrong!)

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Arthur Ingham
03:52 Sep 09, 2024

Thanks, Derrick. Yeah, reading it again, I can see how it's a little confusing. It's the same scene, just from a different angle. I should have made it clearer. Too late to change for the competition, but I will for my own record of it. Well spotted!

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Victor David
23:27 Sep 07, 2024

Nicely done, Arthur. It really flowed. I didn't read your bio or any comments first, but was getting a lovely modern noir vibe. I see that was your intention, and it worked very well. From one newbie Reedsy to another, welcome!

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Arthur Ingham
15:44 Sep 08, 2024

Thanks, Victor. So glad the genre came through.

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Philip Alexander
19:42 Sep 07, 2024

Lila, that cold hearted professional! There's always a Lila. Your writing is tick by tock adventure and fun. Good job.

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Arthur Ingham
15:42 Sep 08, 2024

Thanks Philip. Glad it resonated with you.

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KA James
15:04 Sep 07, 2024

Nice job of bringing an old time noir feel up to the modern era, and the flashback way of telling the story works well here. You've even gone outside the norm and had a 1st person narrator die at the end. I do have to ask though, and maybe its just me being dense, but it seemed like Jason gets caught twice in your story, once before he mentions Lila and once after. I got a bit confused along the way. Thanks also for liking 'The Crafting of a Prophet'

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Arthur Ingham
15:16 Sep 07, 2024

Thanks, KA James. Jason is caught only once by Mathias, but has a flashback about Lila's encounter. However, Mathias was always pulling the strings. Sorry for confusing you.

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KA James
15:23 Sep 07, 2024

Probably just me reading too many of these stories late into the night. It becomes kind of addictive. Thanks for the explanation

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Carol Stewart
13:49 Sep 06, 2024

The voice is unmistakably noir but with a modern edge. Well written and engaging. Look forward to reading more.

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Arthur Ingham
15:10 Sep 06, 2024

Thanks, Carol. That's what I was aiming for.

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09:30 Sep 04, 2024

Dark and dangerous stuff. I haven't read much noir, so it will be interesting to check you out when you have written other stories. It doesn't take a newbie to select the wrong prompt. I've done it before. I've also sometimes veered off the prompt without realizing it, resulting in a story that loosely follows the general idea of it. Oops. Once I decided not to put in a perfectly good story because I forgot about the genre aspect of the prompt. Don't worry. Your story will probably be approved regardless. Winning may be a different matter. ...

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Arthur Ingham
14:09 Sep 04, 2024

Thank you, Kaitlyn. As I'm new, I randomly picked out a few writers and read three of their(your) stories, then realised afterwards, that I'd failed to click on that little thumbs-up. I have gone back and re-read your camping story and commented on it. In future, I think I'll read one story at a time and like/comment on them as I go.

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20:44 Sep 04, 2024

I did that a lot at the start. Read and comment on stories without remembering to like them. And I thought you must have had a private speed reading secret! Damn. I'll be back though.

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James Scott
23:25 Sep 02, 2024

Gripping to the end and perfectly fitting the genre! Great work.

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Arthur Ingham
03:29 Sep 03, 2024

Thank you, James. Much appreciated.

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Suzanne Jennifer
17:27 Sep 02, 2024

I am a fan of the visual element in writing. I love to feel like I am in the scene. The imagery in this piece hit me from the beginning to the end. Like this story a lot. Never having read a lot of books (like, maybe none!) from the thriller genré, I have read a few short stories thrillers here on Reedsy and with writers like you am fast becoming a fan. Awesome.

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Arthur Ingham
03:28 Sep 03, 2024

Suzanne, Many thanks for your great feedback. I'm so glad you liked it.

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Mary Bendickson
15:44 Sep 02, 2024

My husband has been watching old Mission Impossible episodes so without looking this over first I started reading it out loud to him. It is even more exciting read out loud and sounds exactly like one of those missions. Very well done. Sorry you killed him off. Maybe he could have reached up and flung himself to top of train. Stranger things have happened.😜 Welcome to Reedsy and thanks for the follow.

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Arthur Ingham
03:26 Sep 03, 2024

Mary , Thanks for your great feedback. Stranger things have happened, so it is possible he made it out. If there's ever a sequel, we'll know then.

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Mary Bendickson
14:30 Sep 02, 2024

Thanks for liking 'Waiting Line'. I am marking yours to follow so I can get back to reading it later

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Arthur Ingham
15:06 Sep 02, 2024

Ok, thank you.

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Mary Bendickson
03:34 Sep 10, 2024

Thanks for liking Too-Cute Couple. It is number five in a series and I posted another one today. People here keep encouraging me to do more of them.😊

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14:27 Sep 02, 2024

Good story, loved the descriptions and suspense.

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Arthur Ingham
15:03 Sep 02, 2024

Thank you, Christine.

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Martin Ross
12:38 Sep 02, 2024

What an imaginative, suspenseful story! I’m old enough to remember the paranoid spy/political thrillers of the late ‘60s/‘70s, and this rings of that great dark mood along with a breakneck contemporary thriller vibe. Extremely well done — welcome to Reedsy! Have fun!

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Arthur Ingham
14:05 Sep 02, 2024

Thank you so much, Martin! I’m thrilled that the story resonated with you. Looking forward to being part of the Reedsy community!

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Trudy Jas
11:47 Sep 02, 2024

Hey, Arthur. Thanks for liking "Shadows". Clarity is fast paced, detailed and has that "Bond, Bourne, Mission Impossible" vibe. Too bad he had to die at the end. On the other hand, he's still talking, so maybe... :-) I do wonder, however, how the story fits the prompt. Can you explain what Walker's rituals are?

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Arthur Ingham
14:03 Sep 02, 2024

Trudy, Thank you. I placed it in the wrong prompt. It should have gone in the prompt: someone who wants to give up on their career right before their big break. I've already submitted it to the weekly prompt prize, so can't change it. Thanks for pointing it out.

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Trudy Jas
14:35 Sep 02, 2024

Put an "Author's note" at the beginning. You're not the first one to do this. :-)

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Arthur Ingham
15:04 Sep 02, 2024

Done! Thank you.

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Alexis Araneta
10:52 Sep 02, 2024

Hi, Arthur ! Firstly, huge thanks for liking some of my romance ditties This was stunning work. Your use of imagery here was so impeccable, I could clearly see the Alps, the oncoming train. You really have a way of drawing tension. Lovely job!

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Arthur Ingham
14:07 Sep 02, 2024

Thanks, Alexis. I really appreciate your feedback.

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BRUCE MARTIN
08:23 Sep 02, 2024

Great story! Very engaging, lots of beautiful imagery, exciting theme and denouement! I could imagine this story the beginning of a series, like the Jason Bourne Conspiracy. Good work! Looking forward to your future stories. I would just offer one minor piece of advice: drop the word “bullshit” from the story. You can find better words. It lessens the overall quality of the story.

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Arthur Ingham
14:10 Sep 02, 2024

Thanks, Bruce. Your feedback is much appreciated. I took on board your suggestion and agreed with it, so I've changed the line to something I think is better. Hope you do, too.

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Darvico Ulmeli
08:15 Sep 02, 2024

Somehow I hoped he will survive but not. In the end, he seams to find the peace in death.

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Arthur Ingham
14:09 Sep 02, 2024

Thanks, Darvico. I just couldn't find a way out for Jason, so took the only option.

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