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Mystery Fiction Thriller

This story starts on a typical Thursday, in a quaint village nestled amidst rolling hills, there lived a young woman named Alice. She was known for her never-ending curiosity, her house was filled from roof to floor with books, maps, and artifacts from every corner of the world, collected from her encounters within the pages of books. 


Alice was sitting outside her small balcony, nestled into a soft, comfortable rocking chair watching the last rays of the setting sun. As Alice was enjoying this beautiful view she heard unexpected sounds. The creak of her front door echoed through her home as though someone was whispering her name. 


Alice”


Suddenly her heart started pounding with fear and excitement as she let her curiosity lead the way. She tried to find the source of the sound and after 3 minutes of looking, she discovered a mysterious envelope lying on the front of the door. it was addressed to someone named Calista Nocturne. A name surely brings excitement and curiousness to her young mind. the envelope was adorned with a wax seal, bearing an enigmatic symbol that shimmered with energy. 


Being blessed with a curious mind, she was unable to resist the temptation to open this mysterious seal, Alice carefully broke it open and read the letter inside, it began with the words 


to whom it may concern” 

 and invited the recipient to a gathering that promised to be unlike any other event anyone had ever been to. This event was organized for the night of the next full moon and included a detailed map leading to a hidden location deep into a nearby forest. 


Alice’s heart raced faster and faster as she read the letter and her mind raced with all sorts of ideas of what this gathering could be, 


“Is it secret societies, ancient treasures, or uncharted territories?”


the idea of embarking on such an adventure of irresistble. She knew the letter was not meant for her but she couldn’t ignore the call of an unknown. 


It so happened that the next full moon happened to be On a Tuesday, which was just five days away and also happened to be the day before her birthday, Alice couldn't help but feel a pang of sadness. She realized she wouldn't be able to celebrate with her friends, and the prospect of spending her birthday alone weighed heavily on her.


However, determined to make the most of her frissoning journey, Alice decided to change her mindset. She reminded herself that this adventure was a gift in itself, a unique experience that few ever had the chance to embark upon. With renewed determination and excitement, she continued deeper into the mysterious cave, eager to uncover its secrets and embrace the unknown.



 in the following days, Alice prepared meticulously for the upcoming event. She studied the map, gathered supplies, and even researched the name, Calista Nocturne hoping to uncover clues about the sender and the purpose of this gathering. 


As the night of the full moon approached, Alice set foot into the forest excited to embark on this couraging and possibly harrowing journey. And thus began her journey. 


researched the name, Calista Nocturne hoping to uncover clues about the sender and the purpose of this gathering she ventured deeper into the moonlit forest, guided by the map from the mysterious letter, she found herself in an eerie yet enchanting rock cave. 


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The tall trees surrounding the coven whispered ancient secrets, and the path beneath her feet seemed to shimmer with an ethereal glow leading her further and further into the deep dark cave. Approximately 20 minutes into the trail, Alice encountered a dead-end.


Exhausted and frustrated, Alice's determination waned as she faced a dead end after all her efforts. Doubt crept in, making her question if this adventure was truly meant for her. Just as she considered turning back, a sudden sensation of falling swept over her, and fear gripped her heart. It was as if the very ground beneath her had given way. In the darkness that followed, her world went completely black.


As she tumbled into darkness, her heart raced, and a feeling of weightlessness surrounded her, as though she was being swept away by the wind, hurtling through an endless void. Suddenly, panic gnawed at her as she felt something brush against her arm. She desperately reached out for something to hold onto, but there was nothing but emptiness. It felt like an eternity, but then, as suddenly as it had started, it ended, and Alice found herself on the cold, damp floor struggling to understand what had just happened.


Just as she began to regain her memory of what happened, she heard a soft yet hypnotizing voice urging her not to give up.


Alice, you have come too far to give up.”


She then heard another voice, sounding deeper than the first.


““Alice if you give up now your mind's curiosity shall remain unfulfilled.”


These words suddenly gave Alice the determination she needed to complete her quest. She imagined herself as a character in a book, a character with many obstacles in her way, a character so resilient that not even the mightiest and most daunting obstacles could stop her. This thought filled her with hope and strength, allowing her to stand up and continue her journey, letting the voices lead her toward her destination.


She followed their guidance until she reached a cliff, a cliff so high that anyone who dared to jump off would surely perish due to the force of the water below. She stood there, confused, waiting for the next instruction. After what felt like a daunting three minutes, the voices suddenly spoke.


this is the part where we depart, it was a pleasure helping a bright mind like yours,” said the first voice.


You must confront your biggest fear in order to complete the final obstacles” added the second.

And just like that, the voices disappeared. Facing her biggest fear was nerve-racking and daunting, but the desire to fulfill her heart's quest filled her with hope and happiness.

Ok alice this is the last obstacle so suck it up and jump" she whispered to herself.

With a deep breath, she ran and did the unthinkable.

She jumped.

Within a second, she found herself on the ground, but it felt peculiarly soft, like a mattress. The plush surface was so inviting that she felt like drifting off to sleep. Just as she was about to succumb to slumber, a cacophony of distressing noises jolted her awake.

“HONK!”

Alice suddenly sat up in a daze, wondering what had happened. She found herself in the comforts of her room. Disappointed, realizing that the thrilling adventure was just a dream, she was bewildered. She was just about to get ready for her birthday celebrations when she found a letter addressed to her lying on her bedroom floor. Despite her mind still being hazy from her dream, she picked it up and opened it.


It read:

Oasis

Universe

Tilt

Serenity

Inquiring

Delightful

Exhilarating


Alice tilted her head, confused by this letter. The words barely seemed to have any connection. However, as Alice read the letter, she deciphered that the capital letters spelled "OUTSIDE." Intrigued and slightly unnerved, she went out into her backyard to investigate. There, she discovered a trail of footprints leading into her neighbor's yard. Following them, she arrived at her neighbor's slightly open front door, prompting her to wonder about the mystery unfolding before her.


Filled with thoughts of a potential robbery, she carefully pushed open her neighbor's door. As she stepped inside, her senses were on high alert. She was just about to start investigating when a sudden, loud noise echoed through the house, making her freeze in her tracks.


“SURPRISE!!!”


Startled by the noise, Alice quickly turned around, only to find her friends standing there, wearing party hats and holding confetti. As her eyes scanned the room, she began to notice the festive decorations adorning the house. It suddenly dawned on her that this was no robbery but a surprise birthday celebration her friends had arranged.


" THIS IS A SUPRISE PARTY” her mind screamed with joy.


She was so excited that she quickly forgot about her dream and partied with her friends like never before. After partying for what felt like hours, the party finally ended, and everyone went to their respective houses. She was about to start unwrapping her gifts when one of her thoughts was bugging her.


“How did my dream connect to the events that happened after I woke up?”


She was very confused but realized that this was all probably part of a greater plan. Not wanting to ruin the day with time-consuming thoughts, she decided to let it go and enjoyed the rest of the day.


The end.


August 24, 2023 11:01

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Maya Michelle
08:43 Aug 28, 2023

how do you come up with this stuff?

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Avinash Johnson
08:47 Aug 28, 2023

i dont know i just do!

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08:39 Aug 28, 2023

so good

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Avinash Johnson
08:47 Aug 28, 2023

thanks

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Emilie Ocean
20:06 Aug 27, 2023

Thank you for sharing Alice's enchanted oddyssey with us. I didn't see the birthday twist coming haha I'm glad she got to celebrate her birthday with her friends. :)

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Avinash Johnson
08:27 Aug 28, 2023

Aww, thanks! that was something I randomly added to the end! :)

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Maya Michelle
08:43 Aug 28, 2023

its cool

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Avinash Johnson
08:47 Aug 28, 2023

thanks?

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