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Submitted into Contest #156 in response to: Write a story where a character is experiencing parallel realities.... view prompt
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Wow, thank you Tommy!!! I appreciate all that you gave me to think about, perhaps not about this story in particular, but as a whole. I didn't spend much time on this story, as it was the first for me to enter into a contest after a twenty year fear-fest. You'd think it'd be the opposite. Also, though I love writing and everything that it does in-tale, I have to admit that I am quite illiterate regarding the actual procedures and guidelines of writing. I have recently taken up a course though, and am currently learning that there is much mor...
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What a lovely plot. Welcome to Reedsy. Theme: It's all an illusion / Make your own reality / Everyone needs Counseling The Characters might be intruding on the plot just a wee bit. Can you give up the 'twist' for character? Option 1. Start your story with the hypno counselor. This usually happens when a person has tried everything else... then they give up control. The 2 storylines work (because they are rather... flat. Jimmy is especially a lazy useless character written in last draft. Do you like him? I don't. Why do people read about ...
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Look, you get the long response because critique circle sent you over. You get these kind of responses 1.) it seems like you want actual responses. 2.) I click on your COMMENTS section and notice you comment on other works. As this is your first story... hopefully you appreciate someone spending more than 2 minutes on a response to your story. If so, please pay it forward. Authors need to know what works and what doesn't work. Everyone is a reader. Make an opionion valid by just showing why you beleive what you do. I really hate Jimmhy. Se...
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