“You Can See Me?”

Written in response to: "Write a story that includes the line “You can see me?”"

Fantasy Suspense Thriller

This story contains themes or mentions of mental health issues.

“You can see me?” The words slipped out before I even realized I was speaking. Silence pressed in from every corner of the room, thick and suffocating, curling around my shoulders like smoke. The house groaned under its own age, floorboards creaking as if warning me. Shadows twisted and stretched along the walls, shifting in a rhythm I couldn’t follow. Each movement made my stomach tighten; each sound made my pulse skip, a constant reminder that I was not alone.

I froze at the top of the staircase. The air was colder here, carrying the faint scent of old wood, dust, and something else—something alive and waiting. My heartbeat echoed in my ears, loud enough that I was sure whoever—or whatever—was there could hear it too. A chill brushed against my neck, and I shivered, hugging myself as goosebumps rose along my arms. The faint creak of floorboards somewhere behind me made my heart hammer harder.

At the end of the hallway stood a mirror I hadn’t noticed before. Its surface shimmered slightly, not with my reflection, but with something darker, something watching. I leaned closer, and my own eyes stared back at me, wide and uncertain. But the reflection… it wasn’t exactly me. Its expression was sharper, more knowing, and when it blinked, I felt my chest tighten and a wave of unease curl through me.

“Don’t look… don’t leave,” a whisper hissed, curling around my ears. I spun, but the hallway was empty. Shadows whispered in the corners, stretching like black fingers along the walls. My own voice echoed back, fragile and distant, bouncing off the floors and ceilings.

I returned to the mirror, compelled despite my fear. The figure inside tilted its head, lips curling into a smile that wasn’t friendly. My breath caught, and I could feel a tremor of cold dread creeping up my spine.

“Who… what are you?” I whispered, my voice trembling.

“I’m what you hide,” it said, calm, deliberate, yet heavy with meaning.

I stepped back, unsure whether to run or stay. “I… I don’t understand.”

“You do,” it replied. “You’ve always known, but you were too afraid to admit it.”

My chest tightened. Shadows seemed to lean toward me, stretching from the walls, curling around the edges of my vision. My reflection moved slightly differently from me, subtle enough to make my skin crawl.

“Stop messing with me,” I said, trying to sound firmer than I felt.

“I’m not messing with you,” it said. “I’m showing you.”

A shiver ran down my spine. Every nerve, every pulse, demanded I look again. The figure in the mirror shifted closer, not moving through space but somehow invading mine. The room pulsed with a strange energy, walls bending slightly, shadows twisting and recoiling like smoke. I could hear faint whispers, unintelligible but urgent, brushing the edges of my mind.

“Why now?” I asked, voice barely audible, almost swallowed by the thick, heavy air.

“Because hiding has a cost,” it whispered. “Because you can’t escape yourself.”

I swallowed hard, chest tightening. “Then… what do I do?”

“See me. Accept me. Or stay blind forever,” it said.

The calmness of its words made the threat even more terrifying. I wanted to scream, to flee, but my legs felt rooted to the floor. Shadows whispered along the walls, heartbeat pounding in my ears, until the silence was unbearable.

I took a hesitant step forward. “I… I see you,” I breathed, every word a struggle against the tremor in my voice.

“Then I see you too,” it said softly, almost mournfully. “We were always connected. You just didn’t know it.”

A hammer struck my mind. My reflection wasn’t just an image—it was conscious, aware, and somehow waiting. I wasn’t merely seeing it; it was seeing me too.

I staggered back against the wall, chest heaving, mind racing. The mirror’s surface returned to normal—or so it seemed—but the echo of dual awareness lingered. I touched the glass. My own eyes stared back, steady now, unafraid. The hidden part of myself, the part I had buried, had revealed itself.

Time seemed suspended. Shadows pulsed gently along the walls, as if breathing in tandem with me. I realized I could never unsee it—not the reflection, not the hidden self, not the way reality had bent. Perhaps that wasn’t the point.

The point was to see. To accept. To recognize what had always been there, waiting.

I drew a deep, steadying breath. Dust and something else—something grounding—filled the air. The whisper returned, soft, almost gentle: Welcome home.

And in that moment, I understood that seeing wasn’t the end—it was only the beginning. Shadows receded into corners. Mirrors reflected truth instead of fear. Even in darkness, there was clarity. The heartbeat in my ears slowed, and for the first time, I felt… unafraid.

I took another step back, letting the room settle around me. The figure lingered in the mirror, silent now, no longer taunting, merely observing. A strange warmth spread through me, a sense of completion, even as a thread of unease remained. I knew this was only the start.

Outside, the wind whispered through the trees. A creak from the floorboards reminded me I was not alone. I glanced back at the mirror one last time. Its surface rippled faintly, like water disturbed by a breeze, and I realized the reflection might not stay hidden forever.

The night stretched on. Shadows danced, moved, and settled in patterns that seemed alive. My reflection waited. And I understood that now, seeing was not enough. I had to be ready. Ready to face what had always been there, hidden yet watching, patient and knowing.

A soft sigh escaped me, half-relief, half-dread. The house was quiet again, or as quiet as it could ever be. I touched the glass one last time. My fingers tingled from the cold. Somewhere deep inside, I felt the connection between me and the reflection solidify. A bond forged in fear, understanding, and inevitability.

And even though I didn’t know what would come next, I was ready.

Because now, I could see.

Posted Sep 19, 2025
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