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Fantasy

Snow Has Fallen



Oh!

Snow!

Outside the window

Falls

In peals and cascading white sheets,

Blanketing the world into a quiet peace. 

Oh, snow!

Meaning winter is here at last

Spring comes after, 

And fall is past. 

Jump from your bed 

Wrap the blankets round your shoulders 

Put a hat upon your head.

Now run!

Run towards the door.

Toss it open and

Run into the fresh snow

Crunching beneath your boots.

Breathe!

Breathe in the crisp winter air

Throw the wind your every care and

Go forwards, marching on and on.

Snowflakes fall!

Are you listening?

They land upon the ground like spiders made of ice,

Skittering,

Dancing,

Upon the road and ground. 

Yes, yes, it is snowing

And it has snowed! 

You are laughing and smiling

Everything is made new in the winter.

Things die and… come spring they

Are alive once more because 

They have been reborn as vibrant as the sun 

But stronger than they were. 

Still smiling

You look down at your boots.

And 

You

Stop all at once. 

You turn behind you.

Frantic heartbeats hit your ribcage. 

Smack

Thwack

Thump

Jump!

There are no footsteps behind you,

And yet you’ve been walking for a while.

Where are your impressions,

The sign that you’ve been there?

Maybe

Like the flowers in the winter

You’ve just died in the snow too. 

THE END



January 04, 2020 00:51

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Thotsuki Bakuhoe
08:07 May 26, 2020

That was a great story, I loved the surprise ending too. I lived in Iowa, so I had lots of snow, but I then moved to California. Where we don't have snow. Have a great day! : )

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L. M.
02:50 Apr 13, 2020

This is great. Someone from a warm climate who has never seen snow could get a good idea about it from this passage, not to mention...the ending!

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Jubilee Forbess
14:16 Apr 13, 2020

Yeah, I lived in South America for seven years so I know what it's like to have no snow! I'm glad you liked it and the ending was weird but it fit the prompt so... :)

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L. M.
19:44 Apr 13, 2020

You showed a combination of talent and skill here.

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13:55 Jul 19, 2020

I really liked this poem! It had a good rhythm, which I find difficult to master, especially when they have an irregular number of feet in each line. It'a a fun read and a really interesting take on the prompt! Good job!

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Jubilee Forbess
13:56 Jul 19, 2020

Thank you! I have no clue how I got to a thousand words with snow... but somehow it worked. 😁

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15:06 Jul 19, 2020

Yeah, that's one of the reason I don't think I'll be publishing any poems on reeds soon : mine are very short...

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Ranya Navarez
19:17 Jun 08, 2020

That was a fun way to tell the story.

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Jubilee Forbess
19:33 Jun 08, 2020

Thank you!

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Ranya Navarez
16:01 Jun 09, 2020

You're welcome!

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