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Mystery Thriller

November 9, 2000

Lucky. Lucky. Lucky. I am a very lucky person. Neil Armstrong became famous as he was the first person to walk on the Moon, Bob Ross for his extraordinarily good artistic skills, The Rock (Dwayne Johnson) for his wrestling guts but I...I became famous for something I never did.


On November 9, 1999 I encountered with the Press for the very first time. It had been around noon, when they arrived. The scorching sun had them sweating as though they had just taken a bath. After asking my whereabouts and my daily routine, they came straight to the point. "North West, how do you feel, now that you are amongst top ten women to become famous overnight, all over the world?" One. Famous? Two. All over the the world? Three. Nothing made quite some sense at that time. Four. Nevertheless, I spoke up. "I'm elated. To say I'm over the moon, would be an understatement." Five. I was unable to keep the joy in me composed. Six. I wanted to appear as the mature, young adult who wasn't being extra on her recent discovery thus, I kept on talking. "I wouldn't have been able to do this without love and support from my family and I am so very thankful for that." Seven. It took me seven exact seconds to take away what was hers. It took me seven exact seconds to take away her dream. It took me seven exact seconds to shatter my sister's dream into a million pieces. My sister is also my twin. We are disbelievingly identical. From our gray eyes, to the square jaws and cheek bones, everything is exactly the same except for the fact that my sister, East West can't speak. I almost died at her hands. It was her who had discovered the new star, Maia. But being the bad girl that I am, I took all the credit on my shoulders.


She tried to hurt me: she threw Mom's favorite vase, a shoe box, her slipper, one after the other at me. All in the presence of the Press. Now that every single one of the Press members had witnessed me being a victim, it was easy to turn the tables, to put forward East as the mad girl. And that is exactly what I did. I took advantage of her disability, and put her behind the bars up until...until everyone had memorized that it was me who had discovered the new star and not her. I still feel bad for it, though.


The next day, was one of the very few happy days of my life. I was there on the front pages of newspapers, on the cover page of magazines, on television screens. I was in paparazzi's spotlights, all for an act I didn’t do. How cool was the fact that I was East’s twin? I never benefited from her but now that I did…the reward was huge. East bore all of it patiently…because she could do nothing except for that, could she?


I became famous. I earned money. I made my parents proud. All for something I never did. Mom was not happy with me. She and Dad, they both knew that it was East’s achievement and I was robbing her off the golden opportunities. She hated me all the times I existed. But back then, I didn’t care. I didn’t care for what Mom thought. I didn’t care for what East, her friends and my entire family thought. All I cared about was the money, the stupid dollars. The dollars that gained me fame overnight, that helped me reach Top 10 women all over the world. I wasn’t myself anymore.


I wasn't myself anymore. All I cared about was how I looked on TV, how I looked on newspapers, magazines and outside. I became one of the wealthiest lady in our area. People were jealous. Jealous of my achievement. Well, I know it wasn’t mine but East couldn’t do anything about it. Could she? I used to travel city to city, country to country, where everyone fought over to get my autographs. They fought with each other to click just one…just one picture with me. With North West. I lost contact: with Mom, with Dad and with East. I used to charge high amounts of money to travel just a few miles. I forgot that all of this would one day end. I used to brag about how much hard work it took for me to reach the space and discover the new star. I used to brag about how much difficult the task had been when in real I didn’t even know anything about it. Not even a bit.


Tables turned. What do they say? Ah yes, history repeated itself. I thought I would never get caught. But I was wrong. As I write this, my hands shake. It is November 9 today. The very same date on which I got famous, last year. The jailer is coming. He hands over the food to me and makes a face on how filthy my wrinkled hands look. Yes, I am in jail. I have been charged for plagiarism. Stealing my sister’s achievement and putting it forward as my own, made me end up in jail. The fame, those stupid dollars came with a price. A huge one. I have been sentenced to an years imprisonment. I will probably die before that long. I wish I do. I really wish I do.


Everyone hates the once-famous, North West now. They hate me for treating my sister unfairly. They hate me for pretending to be a person, I wasn't. They hate me. They hate me. They hate me. People who fought with others to have an autograph from me now shoot looks of disgust at me. They feel pity for me. And they love East. They love her for doing such a good deed, they love her for not standing up against me. East is probably very happy, now.


East is probably very happy now. Very happy in her new life. But, this isn't over. When you've time, I will tell you what happened to East next. I will tell you what happens to everyone who tries to trick me, to make a fool of me. I'll tell you.

-North West.

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Miles Gatling
14:04 Aug 31, 2020

Very nice, I wanted to see how it would end. I don't know why you used that date or the NW and E names. It might be linked to the star's location or something.

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Batool Hussain
13:50 Sep 01, 2020

Thank you

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Jen Park
14:37 Sep 19, 2020

Oh no sorry for being so late! Recently I have been busy and lost track of your stories but I'll make sure I catch up. Ugh, I do hate West and she deserved the ending. Which means you did an awesome job (like you always do). I liked the ending too! I could feel her bitterness and obsession...how did you manage to convey that twisted emotions? Gave me chills! Are you making a sequel to this? I don't know if this story would be better or not with a sequel, 'cause this story makes both good standalone and sequel. In addition, I liked ...

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Batool Hussain
19:09 Sep 19, 2020

Awwn thanks. I love this comment so Much Jean. I would edit if I could:(

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Jen Park
14:44 Sep 20, 2020

I'm so sorry for interrupting Batool,but I was just concerned-have you been downvoted recently? Because the comment you posted on my story has been downvoted to zero. :(

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Batool Hussain
16:21 Sep 20, 2020

Heyo. You didn't disturb me. As a matter of fact, I get down voted every hour, every day. Is that sad? Cos I find it funny. Lol

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Zainab Shahid
11:04 Sep 06, 2020

Great story! really loved it. I liked the way you start, it was catchy. you are such a good writer, please! check my story too. Thanks!

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K V Chidambaram
19:00 Sep 07, 2020

It is ungrammatical to say same. The right word is similar. Nice story in terms of content and also the form in many ways. Best Wishes.

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Michele Duess
17:17 Sep 07, 2020

Okay so now I understand it's about plagiarism but I didn't get the Kardashian thing if that's what it is about. I ignore them. I thought it had to do with a sister taking credit for another sister's scientific discovery. I don't think you need the repetitive sentences like "They hate me, they hate me." Or "I wasn't myself anymore." Maybe instead use the word count to explain how the character was caught. Did the parents come forward? Also you said you made your parents proud but Mom wasn't happy with you because she knew you were a fraud. ...

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15:03 Sep 07, 2020

LOVE IT!!!!!

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Hamish Hudson
08:00 Sep 07, 2020

Hi Batool Easy reading story. Thanks for posting. I love the concept - you cover a relevant and current topic. Plagiarism is easy to do. Look forward to hearing what happens to East. Would love your feedback on my story if you can - The Legacy of St John. Hamish

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Batool Hussain
10:07 Sep 07, 2020

I left feedback. Loveddd your story v v much!

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Indra Hatpins
19:03 Sep 06, 2020

Hey Batool! I have to ask: are you a Kanye West fan? :P As for your piece, I found it lovely, although I do think the 'twin' situation could have been used to bring about a stronger ending e.g. maybe a twist. And I did get confused at times with contradictions e.g. your character says her parents were proud, but then goes on to say that her parents knew the truth. Hope you find this constructive. Cheers! P.S. please check out my submission (it is my first). Thanks!

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Batool Hussain
04:10 Sep 07, 2020

No I'm not a Kanye West fan. And I'll gladly check out your story. Thanks

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15:27 Nov 20, 2020

I really enjoyed your story! I like your characters and how you include her guilt. I also like how not much happens in the story but it still hooks the readers and feels like alot happens. Keep writing!

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Avani G
21:54 Nov 11, 2020

Hi, Batool! Great story! Here's some feedback for next time: -Be careful of those grammar mistakes! Maybe try proofreading or having an adult read it for you. -Show, not Tell. -Break up some paragraphs. It's all cramped together and it seems demotivating to the reader. -The ending was a little vague. North West said she wished she died (when she was going to jail) but the ending shows something different. That's all I have! Great job, Batool! ☺️

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