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LIFE WILL THROW CHALLENGES ON US BUT WE ARE LEFT WITH NO OPTION BUT TO ACCEPT THEM WILLINGLY . SITUATIONS MAY BE WORSE MAY BE FROLIC BUT THEY CANNOT BE ELIMINATED YES THEY CAN OFCOURSE BE ANTICIPATED . THIS HEAVY AND THOUGHTFUL LINES WHERE NOT SAID BY ME .IT WAS SAID BY MY FAVOURITE MASI CALLED CHANDRAKALA , SHE LOOKED SIMILAR TO HER NAME , SHE ALWAYS CONSIDERED HERSELF THE BOSSES' BOSSES' BOSS WHICH WOULD SOMETIMES IRRITATE ME BUT I WOULD RESIST THIS FEELING AS SHE WAS THE ONE WHO ALWAYS GAVE ME 500 RUPEES WHEN EVER SHE CAME CAME TO SEE US. THIS "US" CONTAINS JUST THREE PEOPLE IN THE FRAME , THEY ARE MOSA , MASI , TIKU. TIKU IS MY NICKNAME WHICH BECAME MY OFFICIAL NAME APPARENTLY. I NEVER THOUGHT I WOULD BE WRITING ON THIS TOPIC ALSO I NEVER DESERVED THIS NAME TIKU EITHER. ANYWAYS TOPIC IS ABOUT CHANDRKALA MASI . YES WE CAN SAY SHE WAS A BRAGGART . MY MASI USED TO ALWAYS TEACH HER SIMPLE ,SUPPLE LIFE VSLUES BUT SHE WAS A WHIMSICAL LADY . ADDING TO HER ABSTRACT TALENTS SHE WAS A WHOLESOME PACKET OF RUBBISH SHOP TALK. MY MOSA WAS A BIT STRINGENT AND NEVER LIKED GIRLS TALKING OF HANDLING BUSINESS DUE TO WHICH I HAD INDULGED IN TREMENDOUS FIGHTS WITH HIM AND MASI HAD TO LIVE WITH HIM SO SHE ALWAYS SILENTLY PROTESTED . BUT MY CHANDA MASI HAD ALWAYS STOOD FOR EQUALITY . SO SHE ALSO HAD COLD WAR WITH MOSA . MY MOSA WAS A BIT NARROW MINDED DUE TO WHICH WE FEMINISTS' BROAD MENTALITY ALWAYS STRIKED HARD WITH HIS CHEAP MINDSET. ONE EVENING I HAD A CRAVING OF CHEWING LOLLIPOP SO I WENT TO THE NEARBY GENERAL STORE BUT THERE THE LOLLIPOP WAS NOT AVAILABLE BUT THE SECONDARY VERSION OF IT WAS AVAILABLE ANYWAYS LETS NOT MOVE FROM THE DESIRE OF LOLLIPOP . AS SOON AS I WAS GETTING MYSELF OUT FROM THE STORE WALE BHAIYA JI ,I CAUGHT MY FRIEND HAVING LOLLIPOP WITH HER FRIENDS . I WENT TO HER AND SNATCHED HER GOODIE FROM HER MOUTH AND KEPT IT FIRM IN BETWEEN MY LIPS . WHILE I WAS ENGAGED IN DOING THIS STUFF , I SAW MYSELF BEEN EYE SHOTTED BY MOSA .HE HOLDED MY HANDS ROUGHLY AND BEFORE I COULD SWALLOW THE CANDY BALL HE THREW IT IN THE POTHOLE WHICH MADE ME CRANKY AS SOON AS HE PUSHED ME INSIDE HIS HOUSE I SHOUTED LIKE A WILD DOG WHO IS STRANGLED IN CHAINS AND THE FOOD IS KEPT JUST IN FRONT OF HIM BUT HIS TEMPTATION TO EAT THE FOOD REMAINS UNSATISFIED. HE ONCE TRIED TO MOLEST ME BUT I WAS BEEN MARKED SAFE WHEN CHANDA MAASI POPPED IN MY ROOM FOR SOME LADDU TASTING WHEN HE USED TO TEACH ME MATH ,BUT NOW I WAS IN HIGH SCHOOL SO I ENGAGED MYSELF IN TUTIONS . I JUST STAYED THERE WITH MOSI AND MOSA BEACUSE OF MY SCHOOLING . I ALWAYS CHERRISHED FOR THAT ONE DAY TO COME WHERE I COULD PUKE THE TRUTH OF HIS PERSONALITY ON HIS FACE AND BRING OUT HIS REAL SELF TO MOSI WHO ALWAYS TRIED TO VEIL HER HUSBAND'S FAULTS WHICH SOUNDED UTTERLY DISGUSTING TO ME . I SHOUTED HARD AND TOLD EVERYTHING WHICH WAS FLOATING IN MY HEART, MY BLOOD BOILED EVERY SECOND WHEN EVER I CATCH A GLIMPSE OF HIM. I FINISHED MY PART OF SHOUTING LIKE A BANSHEE AND PACKED MY SUITCASE , WENT TO MY GRANNY . ON THE WAY TO HOME I WAS RECOUNTING MY DEEDS AND MY STYLE OF GOODBYE WHICH I MADE TO THEM.I THOUGHT IT WAS RUDE BUT I COULD NOT RESIST ANY MORE MALARKEY WHICH WAS BEEN HAPPENING TO ME. MOSI WAS LIKE A FAMILY MEMBER TO ME I ALWAYS COUNTED THEM. BUT NOW I COULD NOT BEAT AROUND THE BUSH . THOUGH I LOVED HER LIKE MY VERY OWN MOTHER BUT AS PER CHANDRAKALA MASI'S SAYING, SOMETIMES SITUTIONS CREATE AN UNDESIRABLE MOMENT WHERE WE HAVE TO GET DETACH FROM THE VERY PERSON WHOM WE ADORE A LOT. I CALLED CHANDA MASI SO THAT I FEEL BETTER AND WANTED TO SHARE ALL THAT THAT HAS HAPPENED IN RECENT TIMES BUT THE PHONE WAS RINGING AND RINGING BUT NO ONE PICKED UP. WE NEVER VISITED HER HOME AS WE THOUGHT THAT IT IS TOO BIG FOR US TO GO INSPITE OF HER REPETATIVE INVITATIONS. CHANDA MASI WAS A DIVORCEE WHICH FORCED HER TO BECOME A CONTINUOS DRUNKER . DOCTORS HAVE ALSO REPORTED THAT HER HEALTH IS DETORIATING BEACAUSE OF EXCESSIVE ALCOHOL CONSUMPTION. I WAS ALWAYS SCARED FOR HER HEALTH . I LOVED HER AS MUCH AS I LOVE MY MASI. SO I DECIDED TO PAY A VISIT TO HER HOUSE . I AND MY MASI BOTH NEVER WENT IN THAT AREA BEACUSE MOSA WAS AGAINST GATHERINGS BUT NOW I WAS INDEPENDENT FROM ANY SORT OF BONDAGE SO I WENT THERE WITHOUT INFORMING MY MASI BECAUSE I THOUGHT THAT AS SOON SHE GETS MY INFORMATION, SHE WOULD TRY TO MEET ME WHICH MAY CREATE A RIFT IN THE MARRIAGE OF MY MOSA AND MASI SO I WENT ALONE WITH A BOUQUET OF WHITE ROSES WHICH WERE CHANDA MASI'S FAVOURITE FLOWERS . I KNOCKED AT HER DOOR WITHOUT ANY HESITATION BUT NO ONE OPENED AS PER SHE SAID THAT IN HER HOME LIVED SIX SERVANTS ASIDING HER . SO TOTAL SEVEN PEOPLE . I GOT SHOCKED WHEN I HEARD ABOUT SIX SERVANTS BUT THE DEMARCATIONS MADE BY HER PROVED THAT SHE WAS AN ANTIQUE LADY TO BE REGISTERED IN ONE OF THE MOST UNIQUE PERSONALITIES.SHE TOLD THAT ONE SERVANT WAS HIRED FOR COOKING , SECOND ONE WAS FOR WASHING CLOTHES , THIRD ONE WAS PAID FOR DUSTING OF HER TWO STOREYED BUNGALOW , FOURTH WAS HER DRIVER CUM ALL TIME SERVANT AND ONE SERVANT WAS A MAID WHO WAS KEPT FOR HER BEAUTY TREATMENTS AND MASSAGE. I KNOW THE READERS WHO ARE READING THIS PIECE HAVE GONE MAD AT ME BUT YES ITS THE TRUTH . WHILE I WAS THINKING THAT MY RINGING BELLS AND CONSTANT KNOCKING ARE NOT BEEN RESPONDED , I NOTICED THAT THE DOOR WAS KEPT UNLOCK SO I OPENED AND SAW CLEAN FURSH WITH NOT A SINGLE DUST AND FURNISHED HALL WHICH WAS SCANTY AND SHABBY . I SAW SOMEONE SITTING ON THE COUCH BUT COULD NOT RECOGNISE HER TILL I APPROACHED HER AND WAS SHOCKED TO SEE THAT IT WAS NONE OTHER THAN CHANDA MASI WHO WAS LOOKING LIKE PALE ASHENED DOZED OFF IN DEEP SLEEP . I TRIED TO WAKE HER UP BUT NOTHING HAPPENED. SHE TOPPLED UP FROM THE COUCH IN THE MATTRESS . I CALLED OUT TO THE SERVANTS FOR HELP BUT NO ONE ANSWERED . I WAS LEFT WITH NOTHING BUT TO MOAN AND SAT GRIEFLY ON HER DEATH . YES THIS IS LIFE AND YOU HAVE TO ACCEPT THE WAY IT IS SHOWCASED TO YOU.

January 30, 2021 15:29

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Shelley Potts
08:47 Feb 11, 2021

I want to try and give you a little advice. I would try to develop your characters more deeply through detail and dialogue. The storyline is difficult to follow due to it being written in upper case. Try to integrate the theme into the elements of the story, such as plot and characters. The setting should be integral to the story. Try to use vocabulary to make the story unique. Try to use 'prose that sings'. Unique metaphors and similes. My main point would be that it was difficult to read due to all words being in upper case. I wish you th...

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Aditi Choudhary
17:39 Feb 12, 2021

Yes ma'am..Thank you for picking out cons for making them turn into pros.

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