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Crime Sad Suspense

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As they argued back and forth whether I wasย worthyย of hearing the truth I started planning. I knew this city quite well and did know the safe combination.ย Wait.ย What was it theyโ€™d said about money?ย โ€œOthers would have left him outside after they got the money."ย What money? If I was rich all this time, why have I been treated like garbage? Ow. Something skimmed the top of my head and landed with a bang. That got them to shut up. I glanced up at their faces and realized how scared they were. โ€œHey, Cole, get in front of me,โ€ James said. I would no longer call these awful people my parents. When I didnโ€™t move, he grabbed my arm, nails digging into my skin, and threw me at the door. POUND. POUND. POUND. Someone was kicking the door down, I realized. Chaos ensued, James, yelling, Jenna trying to hide Clarice away. I just stood there. Utterly shocked, as I had millions of times before.ย 

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I watched as James, Jenna, and Clarice were detained. I saw they get shoved in the back of a police car as they sped away. I stayed still and silent as an officer strolled over to me. Keeping my eyes on the floor he started talking. โ€œHey, kid whatโ€™s your name?โ€ย 

โ€œCole,โ€ I whispered, just loud enough for him to hear.ย 

โ€œAh, the infamous Cole. Do you know what happened here today?โ€ย 

Wait what does he mean by theย infamousย Cole? โ€œUh, no sir I donโ€™t.โ€ย 

โ€œYour case is pretty famous around the station.โ€ He said. He then went on to explain how my parents were murdered and I was kidnapped as a baby. Turns out I had tons of money in my name. Which is why I was kidnapped. James and Jenna who were actually named Ryan and Kayla had adopted me under fake names and couldnโ€™t access the money until I was 5. They locked me away in the attic and tried to live their normal โ€œhappyโ€ lives, using me as their servant. God, I feel like Cinderella, but with no happy ending. As I rode in the back of the cop car to my new foster home, I couldnโ€™t stop thinking about why they didnโ€™t just leave me on the streets. Maybe, I was worth something. Probably not.ย 

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After I met my foster parents I got bored of them quickly. They were everything Ryan and Kayla tried to be. Boring house, always happy, smiling family photos. I hated them. They were perfect. I had a new sister too, she was 7 and named Jenna. How convenient. Ugh. As I wandered their 3 story mansion I couldnโ€™t help wondering how Ryan, Kayla, and Clarice were. I felt disgusted by myself. Why would I care about them? All they did was toss me aside, day after day. I tripped over something on the floor and landed with aย thump.ย โ€œUghh.โ€ I groaned. I glanced up and saw my old room? That was weird the attic was way bigger than Ryan and Kaylas but set up in the same way.ย 

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I couldnโ€™t sleep that night, I kept thinking about that cop who approached me. Theย infamousย Cole. I snuck up to the attic and fell asleep in the bed which looked way too similar to my old one. I awoke to a series of blood-curdling screams. I scrambled out the attic door letting the latter slam u behind me. When I entered the room panting and out of breath, everyone was sitting at the table having breakfast and joking around. Confused, I asked, โ€œWho screamed?โ€ They looked at me strangely. โ€œCole, honey, are you feeling okay?โ€ Laila asked. โ€œI'm fine.โ€ I stammered. Alex had dropped the newspaper he was reading and offered me his chair. โ€œCome sit down, Cole.โ€ I accepted the offer. I must have been really tired, but that didnโ€™t explain the weird behavior of my new family.ย ย 

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โ€œPenny for your thoughts?โ€ Jenna asked me. I smiled. She was pretty, with blonde hair, hazel eyes, nice skin. โ€œJust thinking about how grateful I am to have you now.โ€ I lied. She smiled sweetly and sashayed away. Laila came over to me and asked excitedly, โ€œDid you mean that? Are you happy here?โ€ I responded enthusiastically, โ€œYes! I love it here. Thank you, Laila.โ€ No, I do not love it here. I hate it here. I miss Clarice, and Ryan, and Kayla. It's awful, and I can never tell anyone how I feel. They would be disgusted by me, just like my other family.ย 

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One year later...

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All night I kept seeing them in my dreams. Clarice saying how disgusted she was by me, Kayla tossing me aside like garbage, and Ryan barely acknowledging me. I felt sad, sorry, and alone. When I should have been the happiest Iโ€™ve ever been. I made some arrangements and decided to go after what I truly wanted. My family. I snuck out the door, feeling no remorse at leaving Laila, Jenna, and Alex behind. Racing down the block I went to the nearest house and asked to use the phone. I called the number Iโ€™d spent most of my life memorizing. (770) 777-8843. I punched the call button and someone picked up on the third ring. โ€œHello?โ€ I knew that voice anywhere. Excitedly, I said, โ€œJenna, itโ€™s me, Cole.โ€ โ€œOh, honey. I thought youโ€™d never come to your senses. Where are you? We're on our way to pick you up.โ€ย 

โ€œIโ€™m at the crossroads between 6th and 8th street.โ€ย 

โ€œBye, honey see you soon.โ€ I hung up the line. I waited anxiously for them to arrive.ย 

They pulled up to me in one of their old cars. โ€œHop in,โ€ Clarice told me. โ€œSo, you passed the test, huh? Just in time for your 11th birthday.โ€ I nodded. โ€œI am so glad to finally be one of you guys.โ€ โ€œWe know.โ€ They all said. So yes I'm sorry. That I ran away from the nice couple who drove me crazy. But it had to be done. It was the best for the entire family.

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Hey everyone! This is part 2 of the collab I did with Laila Lavender! Go check out part 1 on her page, I had so much fun working with her! <3

February 02, 2021 20:57

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20:59 Feb 02, 2021

Hey, everyone! I hope you enjoy part 2 to the collab!! This doesn't 100% fit the prompt anymore (I'm very bad at keeping the prompt... lol...) I was not expecting to write the twists and I am quite proud of this story. :)

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18:56 Mar 16, 2021

... No way.

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Hi Eleanor! Just a bit of a follow up! You mentioned wanting to do a collab! Did you see the new prompts and have any ideas? Are you still wanting to do a collab? I'm up for whatever:D

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16:57 Feb 12, 2021

Hey, Luna! Wow, I just realized it's Friday lol. I would love to collab is there a certain prompt you want to work on together?

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lol ok! I dont have any ideas bcuz...well...lets just say I dont have many ideas for romanceXD Do you have any ideas? Or did any prompts stick out to you?

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17:28 Feb 12, 2021

Not really, I am totally with you on the romance thing... I had an idea though, I just filled out your character form and what if we write each others characters, but make their stories overlap? We can edit the characters as needed, like change the ages or whatever.

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ooh that'd be really cool!!! Do you want to talk further over email? Or in a document? Dont want to spoil anythingXD

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17:56 Feb 12, 2021

Yeah! Let's start an email and create a document. You can email me first please eleanoreclipse56@gmail.com

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14:14 Feb 03, 2021

Heres the link to part 1!! https://blog.reedsy.com/creative-writing-prompts/contests/79/submissions/52939/

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Nancy Drayce
21:19 Feb 02, 2021

Very intriguing! I love the second part as much as the first one! You and Laila did an awesome job! The twist truly surprised me! <3

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22:13 Feb 02, 2021

Thank you! :)

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21:08 Feb 02, 2021

Thank you! Can I join your group that you have in your bio?

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22:13 Feb 02, 2021

Yes! I can be in whichever.

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03:21 Feb 03, 2021

All of them or just certain people?

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Oh my...I like the way you continued this Eleanor! I agree with you! This is a great story! Lovely job! :)

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22:14 Feb 02, 2021

Thank you Laila! I really wanted to add you into the story so yay your name popped up! I will still write a different story about your character though.

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22:19 Feb 02, 2021

:). We should definitely collab again. This was very fun.

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