Day 1:
โDonโt be a pest Diana, go play with your friend,โ I gestured at Lily Kennels.
Diana rolled her eyes at me, slumping back to Lily.
โDadโฆ why did we need to bring them along?โ I made sure to speak softly.
โGeez Abbyโฆ itโs only one dayโฆ canโt you adjust?โ
โNo,โ I snapped, folding my hands.
โBehave,โ He warned.
I groaned.
If only my little sister hadn't been BFFโs with the sister of an annoying jerk.
Tonyโฆ ugh, I hated him. Ever since we were little heโd tease me, steal my jacket and throw it in the boys bathroom. Iโd cry, wailโฆ complain to the grown-ups but I stopped doing that. Heโd just call me a snitcher or crybaby.
Now my parents force me to โhang outโ with that obnoxious boy.
โHey.โ
I ignored him, scrolling through my phone.
โHello?โ He called louder, my eardrum hurt.
โWHAT!โ I realized that heโd made me speak.
He chuckling under his breath.
โAbby?โ
โLeave me alone,โ I yelled, then regretting it immediately. My momโs face hung a depressed sigh.
โSorry, thought you were someone else.โ
โSweetheart, I know how you feelโฆ justโฆ play nice.โ
โI know.โ
โAlso, can you take care of the kids while Richard and I go find a good fishing spotโฆ see if the fish are biting?โ I liked that she included Tony as โkidsโ.
โGladly,โ I was grinning.
โThanks,โ She placed a small kiss on my forehead and handed me her travel bag that sheโd loaded up specially for our camping trip emergencies.
โCall me if anything goes downhill.โ
I nodded, taking the heavy sack.
โWhereโs mom?โ
โShe left, going to find some fishing spot.โ
โCan I have a marshmallow?โ Diana used her puppy eyes. I shook my head, her face fell.
โNot until dinner,โ
โGodโฆ. you sound like mom.โ She ironically added.
โWhatever, just play with Lily but donโt wander too far.โ
โIโm not a baby you know.โ
โIโฆ I know that.โ
โIโm just a year younger than you,โ She walked away before I could react. I never realized Diana felt that way. Sure I might tease her a bit but do I treat her like a baby?
My focus reverted back to my phone. I attached my earplugs on my ears, slowly mouthing the words my favorite music produced. I was in my own world nowโฆ no pesky little sisterโฆ no bossy parents and especially no rude guys.
I was so engrossed into the music I didnโt hear Tony call out my name. He tapped lightly on my shoulder, indicating our surroundings. I didnโt realize what he was saying but then I understoodโฆ the girls were missing!
โDianaโฆ Lily, where are you? Itโs been five minutes and I still haven't found them. Mom would kill me if she found out I lost them.
โWhy didnโt you stop them?โ I yelled at Tonyโs face. He kept quiet, calling out their names like a mantra yet we didnโt get a response.
โI didnโt pay attention,โ His eyes were wide, I almost thought they looked scared.
โWellโฆ now we lost them, thanks to you.โ
โHey! Itโs not all my fault, you didnโt care about your sister to keep an eye on her,โ He complained. I was taken back, tears rolling down my cheeks but I continued to search without fruitless attempts.
โIโmโฆ scared.โ
โDonโt worry, weโll find them.โ
The light around us began to dim. It was duskโฆ my parents would have probably returned to camp and freaked out to see the empty campsite.
โIโm a terrible sister, mom shouldnโt have made me in charge,โ I muttered, sitting on the nearby rock. I was exhausted, my legs gave up yet my heart couldnโt. Dianaโฆ she was my best friend, my little sister, my life. I couldnโt imagine how frightened sheโd be. I knew Tony felt the same way about Lily.
โYou're the best sister Diana could ask for,โ He placed a hand on my shoulder. Surprisingly it calmed me.
โThanks.โ
He helped me to my feet again. The vegetation was increasing the more we walked away from base camp.
I checked my phone for the time to realize I had no signalโฆ just wonderful.
โYou got a signal?โ
He checked his.
โNope, weโre too far I guess.โ
โI hope they're ok.โ
โYeahโฆ donโt take the whole burden on you.โ
I nodding shyly.
โWhatโs the sudden chance?โ I mocked, trying to lighten the mood.
โOhโฆ I donโt know, maybe I realized sheโs more than I thought she was,โ He winked.
I blushed, staring into the sky that darkened with every breath I produced.
We walked side by side. Admiring the beauty that only came out in the dark.
He brushed his hand on mine, smiling softly. I wanted to keep this moment forever, keep repeating it.
โWhatโs that?โ His focus shifted back to our mission. I looked to meet his glance.
โI thinkโฆ itโs a cave?โ I could barely make out the stony structure.
We looked at each other in shock.
โOh no, no way did they go in there,โ I mumbled.
โI know my sisterโฆ sheโs definitely curious,โ He bend down and picking a small hair clip.
I gasped.
โThatโs Dianaโs.โ
We ran inside, our weak voices echoing through the walls. Water dripped from the ceiling, it was getting darker faster inside. Bats began to wake up to our footsteps.
โYou think theyโre here?โ He asked.
โPositive,โ I really hoped I was right.
โYou got a flashlight in there?โ He pointed to my backpack. I shrugged, removing the flap and digging out an old flashlight.
I handed it to him.
โShould we spread out?โ I suggested.
I covered my eyes as he shined the flashlight on my face.
โItโs not safeโฆ weโll stay together,โ He countered.
I nodded, glad that he cared about my safety.
My shoulders ached from carrying the heavy bag. Sharp jagged rocks teared our pants but we continued to walk forward not knowing the consequences. We had low oxygen levels. My breathing became less abored.
โYou good?โ
โYeahโฆ Iโm justโฆ what ifโฆโ He placed his finger on my parted mouth, shaking his head.
โItโs ok,โ He muttered each syllable slowly.
I shivered from the cold, I felt shivers through my spine. My teeth chattered from the lack of warmth.
โMaybeโฆโ He stopped, motioning for me to keep still.
I gave him a confused look then I understood. Someone was crying, it was very low but I could hear them. I heard soft murmurs being produced from behind the big rock.
I wiped my tears, walking ahead.
โDiana? Lily?โ
They turned around at the sound of my voice. Poor girls, theyโve been sitting here. Crying. I hugged them, comforting them that everythingโs good now.
โWhy did you leave?โ I demanded after they were able to speak correctly again.
โIโฆ Iโm sorry Abby, we wanted to explore and kinda stumbled here?โ They mumbled, looking at each other and hanging their heads.
โSorry,โ They finished.
โWellโฆ youโre both in trouble butโฆ we better get out of here first,โ I locked eyes with Tony. Keeping my hands secured into theirs so they donโt escape againโฆ not that they will ever dare.
โUmโฆ Abby?โ
โYeah Tony?โ
โDo you know which way to go?โ
My mouth dropped. I shook my head.
We were lostโฆ
Day 2:
โIโm hungry,โ Diana complained. Her tummy rumbled in unison.
โI think Iโve got some food in here,โ I handed her a granola bar from the bag. She made a face but took it anyway.
โTony? Any luck?โ He had been trying to get a signal but so far no luck at that.
โNoโฆ dang it,โ He whispered, I winced from his tone.
โWhat time is it?โ Lilyโs been the most quiet one, I forgot she was even here.
โLet me checkโฆ itโs 9 in the morning.โ
She yawned.
โSleep,โ I instructed. She obeyed immediately.
I rested my head against the hard surface, tears dripping down my cheeks.
โDonโt cryโฆ weโll get outโฆ somehow.โ
I looked at his eyes, they were filled with more hope than mine. Yet, I couldnโt believe him.
I closed my own eyes, letting the darkness sweep in.
Day 3:
โOwโฆ it hurts so much.โ
I took a deep breath, bandaging Lilyโs scar on her shin. She had tried to climb up the rocks but got hurt instead.
โShhโฆ itโll be fine,โ I cooed.
Tony smiled, seeing me take care of his sister.
โThanks,โ He mouthed.
โIโm not doing this for you.โ
He grinned, โWhatever.โ
Day 4:
Lifeโs not fair.
I never really experienced thatโฆ until now. Weโve been cooped up in this cave for more than three days.
We were running out of daily essentials, supplies getting low. Diana was sick from drinking water produced by the caves. Sheโs been moaning about stomach aches.
I felt completely crushed. My sister was in pain, Lily was injured and we were never getting out of here. Iโd promised the girls we would be safe but I needed some reassurance myself.
Tony had been awfully quiet the past hours, reading his comic book as if nothing had happened.
โHey.โ
I seated near him, peeking at what book amused him.
โOh hi,โ He closed the book, his eyes down.
We kept still, Diana and Lily were sleeping. Their soft snores echoed through the walls.
โIโmโฆ Iโm so sorry,โ He whispered, โI canโt figure out where to go from here.โ
โItโs not your fault.โ
โI should have been nicer to youโฆ Iโm deeply sorry for treating you so badly.โ
My face heated up.
โWill you ever forgive me?โ
โYes,โ I breathed. Weโd become super close to each other these past days.
โThanks,โ He went back to reading.
I settled near my sister, brushing her hair from her forehead and placing a kiss.
โIโll make this rightโฆ I promiseโ
Day 5:
โWhatโs that noise?โ
โLilyโฆ itโs just a bat,โ Tony answered her. She huddled closer to her brother, her wound was getting infected to the lack of cleanliness.
โDonโt worry Lily, weโre here.โ
I smiled at Diana. Sheโd been very supportive of her jumpy friend.
โTony,โ I pronounced his name, it felt weird to beโฆ friends.
โYeah?โ
โIโm going to walk for a few minutesโฆ see if I can spot an opening.โ
โAbby?โ
โIโll be fine.โ
He nodded but his eyes showed fear.
I stumbled to walk forward, my clothes were soiled, we hadn't had a chance to change our clothes since the first time we entered the cave. How Iโd taken all those essentials for granted, now when I needed them they arenโt available.
My Nikes were not fit for this kind of adventure.
I felt Tonyโs eyes behind my back as I took unsteady steps.
The next second I heard his name call out in alarm, I didnโt know what was going on until everything became dark.
Day 6:
โAre you hurt?โ
โNo, no Iโm goodโฆ at least I think.โ
โI canโt reach you, the rocks trapped youโฆโ His voice faded.
โTony!?โ
โIโm here,โ He shoved his hand inside the small crack. His hand was bleeding when our hands joined.
โIโm here,โ He repeated.
โYouโre hurt.โ
โComes with the job,โ I heard him cough up a laugh.
I stayed near him even if I couldnโt see him. I was disconnected from them but they were still here for me. Diana yelped when she found out.
โIโm scared,โ Diana whimpered.
โWe all are,โ Lily added.
โTonyโฆ will we ever get out?โ I heard Diana ask.
โI... โ He didnโt respond.
He wanted me to answerโฆ he wasnโt confident either.
I wasnโt sure if I was ready to admit the truth either. We all were young, we havenโt even had a chance at life. Will we die? Will our death be a mystery always? What will our parents do? Our life? Was it destroyed?
I felt nausea hit me. I closed my eyes, holding onto his hand. The only thing that kept me alive.
Day 7:
โLily are you okay?โ I woke to the sound of Dianaโs faint voice. She was sobbing.
โWhat'sโฆ wrong,โ My lack of oxygen had made my voice into a whisper.
โAbby! You're awake?โ
โYes, what'sโฆ what happened?โ
โLilyโs sickโฆ home sick, donโt fret... Dianaโs a natural.โ
โDiana? At what?โ
โA doctor, didn't know Mrs. Bossyboots had some skills,โ I wheezed a small laugh.
Laughing felt so good. I could almost taste freedom.
A dim light shimmering just above me, if I hadnโt paid attention I never would have guessed there was a light source.
Curious, I stood up. My heartbeat quickened, I felt the whiff of clean air in a while. Iโve gotten used to the mucky oxygen that just a % cleaner would feel like heaven.
It took all my might to stand straight. My toe-fingers were numb from sitting so long in a cramped area but I managed.
โI see an opening.โ
I heard Tonyโs subdued footsteps.
โWhere?โ
โUp,โ I trailed off, โIโd have to climb.โ
โNo,โ
โWhy?โ
โItโsโฆ too risky, I canโt bear to lose you,โ I felt my face blush.
โTonyโฆ itโs our only chance.โ
โTo get yourself hurt or... killed?โ He demanded.
โI donโt have to take your permission,โ I muttered.
He fell silent, not able to counter my response.
โPlease,โ I felt the pain in his voice, โDonโt.โ
I sighed, โIโll be careful.โ
Day 8:
Right
Left
Breath
Iโll be fine
Think of the outcome
Right
Left
I can do this
Iโm strong
Breath
Think of Diana and Lily
About Tony
I canโt let them down
My teeth clenched tighter together as I arched my way up. Iโd tried all night. I had lost my footing a couple of times, bruising myself but nothing severe. Tony hadnโt spoken to me since our little argument. Diana kept tabs on me, making sure I was ok.
โYou donโt have to do this.โ
โIโll be ok,โ I said, keeping my left foot near a sturdy rock. I hoped rock climbing lessons paid off.
โI canโt bearโฆโ She stopped.
I didnโt notice her whimper.
I kept an eye beyond.
Weโll be saved.
I steadied myself on a glassy rock, my limbs were wearing out. My hand were bleeding from placing them on sharp, jagged edges.
My breathing was shallow, my heart was racing.
But Iโd made it.
Finally.
Weโll be free.
Day 9:
The sky seemed much closer now. I didnโt realize that Iโd fallen asleep on the rock. I could feel the breeze from the nearby ocean, the smell of salt water hit me instantly, calming my nerves.
โGuys?โ
โAre you ok?โ I almost smiled at the mellow voice of Lily. She had kept a brave face during this whole mess.
โIโm better than ok.โ
โAbby? Whats the matter?โ Diana asked.
โOh Diana, weโre saved!โ
โAbby, you didnโt,โ Tony.
โYes, I did it.โ
โHow will you get off? Jump?โ
โMaybe?โ
I could feel him rolling his eyes.
โHave some sense.โ
โGee, thanks for the wise words,โ I sarcastically added.
I explained my plan to them, telling them to stay put while I bring help. Tony was stubborn but agreed anyway.
โGood luck,โ Lily and Diana chanted.
โDonโt get yourself killed,โ I rolled my eyes at Tonyโs comment.
โI wonโt.โ
It was the first time I climbed outside, the opening was narrow but my slender body managed to fit through perfectly.
Freedom.
The air outside helped me regain some strengthโฆ Iโd need it. After what was coming.
An ocean.
How would I ever cross it?
I wasnโt much of a trained swimmer, only took a few lessons that momโs friend offered to take for free. Iโm afraid she didnโt include how to jump from a cliff, straight into a roaring ocean that is ready to swallow me whole.
I trembled from the cold, just beyond I spotted the forestโฆ the campsiteโฆ mom and dad.Taking a deep breath, I lunged forward. Diving in.
Day 10:
I choked out the excess water. My body was dripping wet and I was freezing. My bagโฆ Iโd left it back with Tony. My phone. Just great. I had been cut off all kinds of communication.
I walked forward. That was all I could do. Just walk. I knew my parents were probably gone home thinking we were missing, never to be found. Maybe they thought we ran away. I didnโt know. I was clueless.
My adrenaline pumped faster, my head dizzy. My eyelids shut. My body drooped and I fell to the ground.
โHoney?โ
โIs she alive?โ
โYes, her heart is beating.โ
My eyes stirred up from the unfamiliar voices around me. I felt a secure hand pull me up.
โWhereโฆ am I?โ
โDonโt worry, youโre safe.โ
I rubbed my eyes, forcing on the voices.
โWho are you?โ
โIโm Dr. Mendoza, this man brought you here, says that he found you lying faint in the camping grounds.โ
I caressed my head, looking at my savior.
โThank you,โ I mouthed.
He nodded.
โWhere are your parents sweetie?โ
โIโฆ I donโt know.โ
โNames?โ
โSarah and Richard Maxwell.โ
โWhat a coincidence.โ I gave a puzzled look.
โTen years ago a young couple with the same names had lost their children and some friends of theirs, they were really devastated.โ
I felt a limp in my throat at the mention of themโฆ. waitโฆ 10 years?
โWhatโs todays date?โ
โWhy itโs the 12 of October.โ
โThe year?โ Dr. Mendoza looked confused.
โ2016.โ
I gasped. It had been 10 years.
โAre you alright?โ
โYes,โ I thanked the doctor, setting off into the unknown. 10 yearsโฆ how am I the same old me? How had time ticked past so quickly that what felt like days was actually years.
The cave.
It was something supernatural.
Not ordinary.
Then it striked me.
If just spending a day there was equivalent to a yearโฆ thenโฆ how will they ever get out of that time loop. Iโd never see them.
I felt tears prick my eyes.
Diana.
Lily.
Tony.
What would happen to them.
I walked forward.
โI will, I promise to find a way.โ
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Wow Varsha! This is such a good story! It's long, descriptive, detailed, and just amazing! :)
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Thank you so much Haripriya! Stay tuned for one more!
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I will!
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:D Also I'm writing a novel and I'll need help so I'd love to hear your thoughts on it.
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Oh wow!! I would love to read it!
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Thank you! I'm barely starting so I'd love some help.
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I loved this dialogue!! Also, the Marshmallows are on your case, and we're gonna upvote you.
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Thank you Litlover!!!!
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No problem!!!
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:D
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Also is Marshmallows like a group?
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Yeah!! Me, Nainika, Celeste, Mira, Jade, Kate, Jennie.
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:O was she downvoted???
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Yeah
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:O I SHALL UPVOTE HERRRR
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YAY
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:D
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Woah this is so good! There are a very few bits where it doesnโt feel too natural like โmom shouldnโt have made me in charge...โ would work better with a โputโ instead of โmadeโ but other than that, this is SO GOOD!
Also thanks so so so so so so so much for adding me to your biooooo!!! AAAAAAA THANKSSSS ๐๐๐ช๐ฅฐ๐คฉ๐
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Hey Ana! Thank you so much:D, yeah I agree that sounds better!
NP!, ur one of my friends:)
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Thanks!
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NP!
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Thanks!
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OMG you took me on an emotional roller coaster. I love it!! I am so intrigued on what happens next (Reading Part 2 next)! Unfortunately, I don't have any constructive feedback because it was such a good story... GREAT WORK!!!๐ฅณ๐ฅณ๐๐
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Aww, thank you sooo much Cookie!!!!! Ur the best :D
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๐๐ฝ๐๐ฝโโ๏ธ๐๐ฝโโ๏ธ
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:)
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Wow! I must say the ending took an unexpected, but very interesting turn. I am just about to read the second part and can't wait to see what happens next.
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Thank you Thora!!! I'm sure you'll love the second part!
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Heyyyy Varsha!
So this is very late but I'm trying to sign up in Wattpad, but it says that I need to send my verification email, and when I check my email it's not there WAHH
Is there something I'm doing wrong lmao
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Hm, did you use your personal email? Maybe check spam mail?
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Yep I did, and I checked, but I'll check again
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Nope it's not there QwQ
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Hm... not sure then, try again?
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is it a gmail?
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new story out!
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Hey Varsha! There are some really great moments here. All of the characters are nicely developed, especially the main one, but the side characters too, which I think is something you struggle with a little. The dialogue is great, it really sounds like talking, but there's just so much of it. It really needs to be cut with more thoughts and feelings, in my opinion. Still. I loved the characters, the plot, everything. Nice work!
You actually did the only prompt that I didn't do this week, lol. Would you mind checking out my stories for this week? Take your time, of course!
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Thank you Maya! And I'd love to:)
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check out my new story!
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Wow Varsha!
I loved this story! It was so different and so gripping to read! The ending was unexpected and really really good! As usual, your dialogue and descriptions were fantastic. Can't wait to read more of your work!
Keep writing!
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Thank you Akshaya! I'll check out yours as well!
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Hello Varsha!
Wow that ending... I was not expecting that!!! But this story was SO GOOD!!! I loved how Tony and Abby became friends at the end. I was captivated from the start!!!!!!!!
Great job!! :D
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Thank you so much Kate!!! Means so much to hear from you!
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Np!! :D
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:) Also Kate I'm working on a novel so I would love to get your help on that! Your really a wonderful author!
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YES I WOULD LOVE TO!!!!!!!!!
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Thank you! Do you have wattpad?
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WAH Wattpad is still not working, maybe we could use Docs instead..?
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Oh I see, sure! We can do that!
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NEW STORY!
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I'll check it out! Also mind reading my new story;) happy new year!
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