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Adventure Science Fiction Friendship

Sitting on the soft sands of the beach, I was watching the stunning sunset.

It was finally time to go to work!


Wearing my favourite swimsuit, I leaped into the vast water of the sea. I was an underwater explorer and I loved diving.


A new species of fish was expected to be found in the ocean and I wanted to see it lively. The first person to find out the species to see it live had the opportunity to name the species. Thus, I wanted to be the first one.


I put on my oxygen mask and swam deep into the ocean. The water was always murky, but I loved it that way.

Nobody had ever examined the new kind of species. Merely the size and height was known then.

That's what got me excited. I loved exploring new things.

On the spur of that moment, my oxygen started leaking. I found a knife stuck in my oxygen cylinder.Β 

I wondered how a knife could put a hole on a aluminium cylinder.

The sea hunters! They were on my tail!


Their knife could pierce into anything because they were made up of diamond. They were a group of creatures who ate anything in the ocean. They were very primitive creatures also called underwater tribes.

I had to swim fast. I couldn't hold my breath for a long time. The oxygen cylinder had an output of pressure which pushed meΒ downwards. Thanks to my trainers, I knew how to handle the situation.

Suddenly, I saw a man who had an oxygen cylinder. He was unaware that the sea hunters were coming near.

I swam straight atΒ him and took hold of his hands.


"What are you doing?" he mumbled. He showed some hand signals and I understood.


"Don't lose your breath. I am an underwater explorer. The sea hunters are approaching," I said and used hand signals. Sign language was an important thing to learn for underwater explorers.


"But, I have to encounter the new species. I am an underwater explorer too," he mumbled. This time I heard him right.

I thought I should escape, leaving him there, because he also wanted toΒ name the new species.Β But, I knew that it was not the right decision.Β 

It was almost impossible to elude the sea hunters in the water. Only, they won't come out of the water. They had a man's body and shark's tail.

I swam as fast as my legs would go. I had to save the other underwater explorer. But, my oxygen was quickly running out. I was tired and could not clearly see where the land was because of the murky water.

Then my companion took charge.

"Just climb on my shoulder," he mumbled and waved his hands at me. I had no choice. I was starting to faint as I had no supply of oxygen.


I choked out the water andΒ woke up.

He saved me! As I was lying in the soft sands, I looked on for him. I saw him in front of me, watching the blue skies.


"Thank you. Do I know you?" I said.


"You are welcome. I don't think you know me. I am Willie," he said. He was one handsome dude, very muscular!

His brown eyes looked sharp like an eagle while his hair was curly black.


"My name is William," I stated.


"Our names are almost the same. You look awesome, William," he said, laughing. I also started to laugh.

He gave me his hand and made me stand.

"How did you save me? No human can swim faster than a sea hunter, " I asked him.

He didn't answer. But, anyways he had saved me.

"Friends?" I asked him. He just nodded and smiled.

"We have to start again and find that species," he said, looking for a place to dive.


"Are you insane? You wanna die so young. We had narrowly escaped from the sea hunters," I said.

"We escaped, right?" he asked me.


He loved adventures more than me!

"Do you have another oxygen cylinder?" I inquired.


"I possess a small cylinder. It will provide oxygen for just an hour," he said, taking a small cylinder from his backpack.

"Thanks," I said.

"And keep this in your ear. It's a radio transmitter for us to communicate, " Willie said, giving a small earpiece to me.

"Would we hear our voices clearly with this?" I asked him.

He shot me a look and I understood. He slipped on his red coloured fins and I donned my blue coloured fins. Fins made it easy to swim.

We leaped into the sea again. I trusted him a lot.

The sea was beautiful as we swam deeper.

The fishes were floating smoothly in the shimmering water. Even octopuses looked cute as they filled their air sac and expelled it. They were very fast. But, we should not get fooled by appearances.

I switched on my water glass. It was an amazing device. It measured the height and size of a particular species. I had set it to the size and height of the new species.


Suddenly, a huge creature floated above us.


Β It matched the height and size of the new species!


I called Willie and pointed to that great creature.

But, he was terrified. He started swimming in the opposite direction. I accompanied him.

"That's not the new species. It's a blue whale," he said as water bubbles came out of his mouth.

"I suppose so," I said. I was charged up when I saw it had the same categories of the new species.Β 

As we proceeded in search of the species, I asked him, "What would you name the species if you'd find it first?"


"Willie whale. What would you call it if you find it?" he said.


"Nice name. I would call it as William fish," I said.


"Wonderful name," he said.

Suddenly, something took hold of me and Willie. It appeared to be a rope.

We tried to liberate ourselves from it. But, it was really strong.

Then we heard some voices, "hu ha hu ha."


The sea hunters again!

I was very scared. But, I couldn't see any fear in Willie's eyes. He just floated calmly with the rope in his waist. He didn't even try to escape.

I loved his confidence.

I didn't want to become dinner for a sea hunter. I couldn't even imagine it.

They dragged us deep into the ocean and lit up the magical flame which can light up in water.

I had read in a book that sea hunters ate only in the dark. If they could understand my language I would have said that I was not tasty. But, they wouldn't understand.

We had less time to live. But, my oxygen supply would cut in a few minutes. I thanked God and all of them who had helped me. I knew this job was a pretty risky job, but still I loved it.

As the sea hunters were sleeping, I tried to escape but the rope they used was very firm.


On the spur of the moment, I saw it.

The new species! Drifting smoothly in the sea with its fins.


What a magnificent sight it was!

We were tied only in the waist. So, Willie pulled out his water camera from his backpack and clicked a photo of it.


"We will not even get out of this ocean alive, what is the purpose of taking a photo?" I asked him.


"We are getting out alive, I promise," he said confidently.

"But how?" I asked him.


"Wait and watch, William," he said and closed his eyes.


Suddenly, the new species approached us and licked Willie.

It was like a miracle!

A huge creature had licked Willie! He just patted the species and whispered something to it.


"I possess the power to talk to animals, buddy," he said, triumphantly.

"Wow! Now, I know why you took this as your job. We should escape from here as soon as possible, Willie," I said.

We climbed along the large creature. But, the sea hunters woke up. They threw their weapons at us. But, to our luck, we were far away from them. Again, no sea hunter can swim faster than a fish.

"I am gonna leave this job, Willie," I said.

It was a smooth ride and the new species dropped us close to the beach.


I saw my car parked near the beach. Journeys into the ocean have always been crazy and adventurous.

Β I was grateful for Willie. He had saved my life once again. I would never forget him and his amazing power.


"Goodbye, William," Willie said, handing over the photo of the new species to me.


"Goodbye. Wait, who found it first? Who's gonna name it?" I asked him.


"I will miss you, Will...," before he finished his sentence, he just passed out.

A red fluid was coming out of his body. That is when I realized that a knife was sticking on to his body and he was bleeding very badly.

The sea hunter's knife had struck him!

Β I checked his pulse rate, but it was barely felt. I was not ready for that shock. That is when I understood that his goodbye was completely different from mine.

Β I wanted to see his eagle eyes again. I wanted to hear his confident words. But, he wouldn't turn back. My eyes had started to water after years.

I couldn't save him that day. I had not been grateful to him.

"Willie," I cried at my top pitch. I couldn't share my grief with anyone.

I rang the ambulance and he went, taking part of myself with him.

I went to the Species Organization and showed the picture of the new species to them. They asked the name I wanted to keep.

I said, β€œWillie whale."



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Avery G.
20:18 Aug 26, 2020

Wow, this was good! Great job!

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01:28 Aug 27, 2020

Thank you for reading, Avery.

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Avery G.
01:39 Aug 27, 2020

You're welcome!

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Avery G.
21:12 Aug 28, 2020

Also, I googled the number in your bio!!! The freezers were funny!!

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00:54 Aug 29, 2020

Yes. It was a funny thing. So I posted it in Reedsy for you guys to have some funπŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚. Check out today's

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Avery G.
02:14 Aug 29, 2020

Yeah! Okay!!

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Avery G.
02:15 Aug 29, 2020

Lol I just did it

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02:21 Aug 29, 2020

Lol.πŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚πŸ˜‚

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18:03 Aug 26, 2020

Hey keerthu had a good adventure of your story. Very well written. All the best dear. Keep going..

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01:27 Aug 27, 2020

Thank you for reading.

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Kristin Neubauer
17:15 Aug 26, 2020

What a great story, Keerthan! There was a lot of action - it was fast-paced and suspenseful. And then with a twist! It was sad, but lovely to see how the narrator honored his friend. I really enjoyed reading it. Well done!

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01:27 Aug 27, 2020

I am glad you enjoyed reading my story. Thank you for reading, Kristin.

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The Cold Ice
16:51 Aug 26, 2020

It was a wonderful story.I loved the story.Great jobπŸ‘keep it up.Keerthan.

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01:26 Aug 27, 2020

Thank you.

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D J
02:50 Sep 04, 2020

This is a great story, very imaginative!

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03:17 Sep 04, 2020

Thank you for reading, D J.

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Sankara Luna
01:19 Sep 04, 2020

I love this imaginative piece of yours. What a bittersweet tone at the ending. Keep going :)

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02:21 Sep 04, 2020

I am glad you loved my imagination. Thank you for reading.

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Laura Everly
19:34 Sep 03, 2020

The Adventurous Tragedy...I liked this story there are people that can become fast friends and one or the other will put give up there life for the others this part is real and was glad you decided to use fast friends to prove how good of friends that were for a brief amount of timethanks for reading my story Thanks for reading Who Ordered Pizza and leaving comments greatly appreciated

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02:19 Sep 04, 2020

I am glad you liked this story. Thank you for reading.(would you mind liking my story?) Welcome!!!!

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Terri Gower
18:25 Sep 03, 2020

Very engaging story! I enjoyed the plot a lot. Let me know if you want any further feed back. I will mention the story craft is great, but the grammar is awkward in some spots which can be distracting. Please keep writing because I want to read more of your stories!

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02:18 Sep 04, 2020

I am glad you enjoyed the plot. I surely will need your feedback for my next. I will keep writing. Thank you for reading.

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Super descriptive, and the plot had a great twist!! Very interesting, I really liked it! Great job and keep up the good work!

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16:27 Sep 03, 2020

I am glad you liked my story. I really liked yours too. Thank you for reading.(would you mind liking my story?)

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16:30 Sep 03, 2020

Thanks.

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Oh wow, that was fast.

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16:31 Sep 03, 2020

I am online at Reedsy at nights. πŸ˜…πŸ˜…πŸ˜…

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15:08 Sep 03, 2020

Great story! I really enjoyed it and how well it flowed. And it’s fantastical premise was great, too. I honestly kind of like not knowing what was going on every possible second. Nice job!

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15:20 Sep 03, 2020

I am glad you enjoyed my story. Thank you for reading.(would you mind liking my story?)

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Mrudula Mohan
07:43 Sep 03, 2020

Wow it's such a beautiful story and the suspense attached with each words πŸ‘ŒπŸ‘Œ

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07:47 Sep 03, 2020

Thank you for reading.

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Rebecca Lee
23:41 Sep 02, 2020

Hey You know I like your stories. I think they are very imaginative and creative. This one though, I had a hard time with. But please don't hang your head, because I liked it. I love when anyone puts that much effort into a story, and look at you close to the leader board! Woohoo! As Akshat Atal mentioned, there are some sentences that you might want to take a look at again, like the ones he mentioned. I am having to learn this myself about being too detailed about somethings, and using too many words, where just one or two might ...

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01:33 Sep 03, 2020

Hi I am glad you like my stories. Thank you for reading and I will limit my 25 cents words next time. Sure, I would loved to. Going there...

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Lori Colt
22:24 Sep 02, 2020

That's a really fun story Keerththan, very excited. You have a wonderful sense of adventure!

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01:30 Sep 03, 2020

Thank you for reading.

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Emma Lin
21:30 Sep 02, 2020

Hello! You asked and I came! Fun, tragic, and imaginative! My favorite part was the imagination that you had put into this story. There were some grammatical/wording but no biggie. I make grammatical mistakes in mine as well. We can't always be perfect :) Thanks for commenting and liking my story! Have a wonderful day! ~Emma

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01:30 Sep 03, 2020

Thank you for coming to read my story. Yes, I make grammar mistakes a lot. Welcome and have a wonderful day.

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Adrian Stolecki
19:14 Sep 02, 2020

Cool story! I like how the main character chose to use his friend's name for their discovery at the end. Very sweet. One bit of advise: I would try to be careful about repetitive words when writing. I noticed the phrase 'new species' repeated quite often and close together for example. Try using synonyms like 'undiscovered animal', 'mysterious creature', etc.

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01:25 Sep 03, 2020

I am glad you liked the main character choosing to use his friend's name. Thank you for your suggestions. I will use them in my next story. Thank you for reading.(would you mind liking my story?)

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Erik Meyers
08:24 Sep 02, 2020

What a wonderful story, though so upbeat then sad at the end. Very imaginative!!

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08:40 Sep 02, 2020

Thank you for reading. (would you mind liking my story?)

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Erik Meyers
13:02 Sep 02, 2020

Sure. Done :)

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13:42 Sep 02, 2020

Thank you. 😁😁😁

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Kendall Defoe
16:20 Sep 01, 2020

Some errors here, but not enough to end the movie in my head that you created. I think you have a real future as a writer...!

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16:23 Sep 01, 2020

Thank you for reading, August.

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A K Woodhouse
12:54 Sep 01, 2020

This is a fun story!

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13:15 Sep 01, 2020

Thank you for reading, Ann. (Would you mind liking my story?)

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08:29 Sep 01, 2020

A very creative story. I enjoyed reading this! Looking forward to reading more.

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08:30 Sep 01, 2020

I am glad you enjoyed reading it. Thank you for reading.

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Meena Mahalingam
12:07 Aug 28, 2020

Dear keerththan Really a very nice story Lot of improvement Did not expect the turn in the story Very imaginative Wishes to come up in flying colours always Regards Meena

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15:23 Aug 28, 2020

Thank you for reading.

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