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Crime Mystery Funny

After a long night of work, I like to go to my favorite coffee shop. Honestly, I donโ€™t know why they are still open. I think that Iโ€™ve done enough work today so Iโ€™m going to head over there. There is an alley beside the shop but I think nothing of it. Iโ€™m sitting in the seat closest to the alley but I always sit here. I hear something coming from there and I just think itโ€™s an animal. I look over to see two figures, one looking like itโ€™s strangling the other one.  I told the workers and ran outside but I was too late. I called the police but by the time they made it, It looked like nothing happened. There was no evidence! I was consistent but they didnโ€™t believe me. No bodies, No weapons, I didnโ€™t know what to do but then I remembered, I saw that man's face. I told them what he looked like and they figured out that his name is Josh Nicolas. He is actually a really good guy. Sometimes, People can change though. We had to go on trial. 

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 Finally, The day of the trial came. I donโ€™t know why I am excited, No one believes that I saw a murder. Okay, Iโ€™m here, My palms are sweaty and Iโ€™m so nervous. Iโ€™m going to meet the man that I saw murder someone. As I walk into the courtroom, I see everyone in the jury and Iโ€™m the most nervous that Iโ€™ve ever been. I try to be calm but itโ€™s not working, I guess I look calm because no one is looking at me weird.  They tell me to say what I saw and heard. So I said, โ€œI was in Cafe Break and I heard something in the alley, So I went to look and I saw someone strangling another person.  I ran outside but it was too late. I called the police and when they showed up they looked around for evidence but there was none. I saw the murderer's face and it looked like a real person named Josh Nicolas.โ€ The prosecutor asked โ€œHow would you have heard the scene if you were inside the cafe?โ€ I replied with the truth โ€œI was sitting in the closest seat to the alley. I go to Cafe Break every night after work and I always sit in that seat.โ€ The prosecutor said โ€œWell, Why donโ€™t we ask Josh Nicolas himself?โ€ He brought out Josh and asked him a few questions but this question really got me. The prosecutor asked โ€œWhere were you that night?โ€ โ€œI was at a bar and I got too drunk to drive myself home and called a cab and went home,โ€ He said. The defense replied with โ€œTo help with his statement, I called his cab driver to come.โ€ The cab driver came out and said โ€œYeah, I remember him, He left a giant tip. Also, I could tell he was drunk, He reeked of beer and his words were slurred so I knew right away he was drunk.โ€ But then I thought, What if he lives nearby and came to the alley and killed someone while he was drunk so he doesnโ€™t remember?โ€ I asked the judge โ€œYour Honor, May I ask a question to Josh?โ€ โ€œGo right ahead,โ€ He replied. โ€œJosh, Where do you live?โ€ I asked. He replied โ€œ1795 Sunshine Road.โ€ I said astonished โ€œThat is a block down from Cafe Break. I think that you may have stumbled out of your house and went in the alley and killed that man. You donโ€™t remember it because you were drunk.โ€  โ€œI Uh- I- Donโ€™t uh,โ€ He replied. โ€œI think that she has made a good point, We will check your house for the body,โ€ A policeman said. The judge commented โ€œI think that Itโ€™s enough for today, we will come back tomorrow.โ€ Finally, I can relax. I wake up not wanting to go to court today. I walk into the courtroom dreading doing this again. I think to myself โ€œHopefully, This is the last day that I am doing this.โ€ The policeman says that โ€œWe didnโ€™t find any evidence in his house.โ€ Just when I was about to lose hope, Josh said โ€œI may have killed that man. When I woke up the next morning, there was blood on my hands.โ€ Then, The judge yelled โ€œGuiltyโ€ and I knew I had won! No more courtroom, No more waking up at 7:00, Iโ€™m glad thatโ€™s over and Iโ€™m happy people believe me again. Now, I can just go back to my life. Coffee shop, Work, and no murders or trials. I walk home happy that I won the trial and on the way there I say to myself, โ€œHow about a celebratory trip to Cafe Break?โ€ I go over there and I sit by the seat that I always sit in, The seat beside the alley.  Jeff yells to me โ€œCongrats on the win!โ€ Jeff is a barista. โ€œHow did you find out so quickly?โ€™โ€™ I ask. He replies โ€œI watched it on T.V.โ€ โ€œIt was on T.V.!โ€ I said, astonished. Jeff responded โ€œYeah, I watched on this T.V. right here.โ€ โ€œI didnโ€™t think it was going to be on T.V.!  Lousy people, Never tell me whatโ€™s going on,โ€ I remarked.  โ€œWell, You did great in there. It was so funny when that guy was like โ€˜Uh- Huh-Whatโ€™!โ€ He chuckled. โ€œAnyways, I have a question.โ€ I said. โ€œWhat is it?โ€ Jeff asked. โ€œWhy are you guys open so late?โ€ I wondered โ€œWell, Itโ€™s for people like you, Who need some time away or just someone to talk to,โ€

 He said. โ€œOh, Well Thatโ€™s nice I never would have thought of that. I always thought it was because you guys needed the extra money,โ€ I replied. โ€œAnd That too,โ€ Jeff laughed. โ€œWell, Itโ€™s getting late, I better head home.โ€ I said. โ€œOkay, You know where to find me!โ€ Jeff exclaimed. I went home happy that I had won. I got in my bed to go to sleep. โ€œTime to go back to my lifeโ€ I thought to myself.    

(Note: Please tell me if I made any mistakes. Thank You For Reading!)

November 13, 2020 18:57

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21:37 Nov 18, 2020

HELLO!!!!! The story was a great!!! Just one suggestion, you can maybe section it up a little bit. You wrote it as a long big paragraph, but to make it easier to read, next time maybe you can section it up. And I saw you did my quiz!!!!! AHHHH TYSM!!!! You just got one question wrong, but it AMAZING!!!!!!!!!! You did really good *gives pat on the back* PEACE OUT!!!!!

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Thank you! I will take that in account and do that next time. I just started writing on here and appreciate the feedback!

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21:31 Nov 19, 2020

Any time! I also just started back in quarantine, because I was really bored, so i am still a newbie... hehehe

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Hey! If you guys find any mistakes. Please tell me. Also, Feedback helps me write better so please give me feedback. Thank you for reading!

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Bella Keller
21:20 Nov 23, 2020

WOW!!! I love it, no problems just in is a little of a run on paragraph!! Keep up the good work!! I really love it!

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That's not called a "Run on paragraph" and trying to work on that. Thank You!

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