My life is precious, everything about me is precious. My world, my job, my little computer. I enjoy them and I would rather nothing change. This is my time of peace, my joy, I love everything. The only problem is-
There it is? Did you hear it? Did you hear that little tick that threatens my life. I turn and there it is, I take a step forward but it is right ahead. I smile and it smiles right back, I sleep and it wakes me up. I need to get away, I need to run, I canโt let it catch me- I canโt. All my life it watches me, even on my greatest days I see it watching me like a thief. Even when I stop it moves on without me, leaving me behind.
I fasten my steps, but you're right ahead, so I turn around and your right there. What do you want from me? I havenโt done anything wrong, I just want to live my precious life, please stop chasing me! Please.
I turn down Monroe street and I bump into someone.
โAre you okay Miss? You look frightened.โ
โMiss? My name is Aurora!โ I yell, much to his surprise. โSorry, there is someone chasing me-โ
His eyes look past me into the darkness, then he meets my eyes.
โSomeone?โ
โYes yes, someone โฆsomeone- no somethingโ I respond grabbing his shoulder.
โI donโt really see anything.โ he says. Of course he doesnโt, every time I try to tell someone about this, they have this look in their eye, they think Iโm crazy.
โMaโam-โ
โAurora!โ I interrupt.
โAurora, maybe I could walk you home if that will make you feel safer.โ he says with worry in his eyes.
โNo! I have already put you in enough risk, just get out of here! Run as fast as you can, donโt let it catch you, okay?!โ I look around and rush away, I hear it, why wonโt it stop.
I was twelve when it started, it was my birthday and I remember me being all smiley. I finally was growing older, I could finally go on the rides I wanted too, I could finally be taken seriously. I was growing older. But that was when it hit me; I was growing older. I finally sat up in my princess dress that was way to small for me now, I picked up my tiara and suddenly something caught my eye. Something irritated my ears, something sour on my tongue, goosebumps rippled over my skin. I could feel it on my body, it was disgusting.
I ran to find my parents and before I knew it I was 24, and they laid on their bed, tired. It still chased me, chased me everywhere, I couldnโt even breathe because I knew that was a count down. The count down to my death. I ran looking for my parents and before I knew it I was 36 and they were dead. They werenโt fast enough.
You took them, it took them. And it was going to take me too if I didnโt run. That man better be running too if he knows whatโs best for him.
Did you know I was the fastest runner in 5th grade? I could run for miles without taking a break. At least thatโs what my mother told me. But now look at me, gasping for air, back in pain, and sweat rolling down my forehead. Its already catching me. When did it drug me? I canโt even remember anymore. All I know is that I have to run, to keep running, I will not let it catch my precious life. I canโt even live my life but once I outrun this thing, I will live without concern. Give me ti-
No! Iโm late for work! I run to the bathroom, my eyebags have become more visible. My eyes look dead and tired its a shell compared to my curious eyes in the past. Look at what Iโm becoming, donโt worry I just need to outrun it. Then I can live in peace.
My roommate is sitting in the corner eating her cereal, everyday she looks more creeped out by me. She barely comes home and claims to be working 3 shifts a day. I know she wants to get out of this apartment as soon as possible, because of me? Its not my fault, its its fault. They donโt understand, Iโm running for my life.
โUm you should probably eat, you donโt look so good.โ she says slowly putting her full bowl of cereal back on the table.
โNo, ti-ti-ti-โ I stammer.
โOkay! Okay! Just goโ she says with fear in her eyes.
โOkay.โ I forgot what the quote said but I remember the ending โ โ waits for no oneโ
I work every day, I love my job, mostly cause everyone leaves everyone alone. No one calls me weird and Iโm good at what I do. But my job is- its filled with them. They are everywhere. Every room. Every corner. I canโt take it. I canโt.
I close my ears and my eyes in fear. The rooms fill with โAre you okayโ. โNoโฆIโm not just get them out of here and Iโll be fine.โ
โGet what? What Aurora?โ
โThe- the things- they are everywhere please! Please get them out!โ I point to the walls.
โTim-?โ
And just like that, I pass out, and when I wake up,
Iโm 48.
Not enough-, not enough-, not enough-. Iโm running out of-
I gasp in pain as I feel my head pound. The doctors are surrounding me and I look up at them. What is that on there wrist?
โYou are sick.โ
I am not.
โStay here.โ
No. I need to run! I need to run! You need to run! We all need to run!
โWe can help you get better.โ
No you canโt, they are here tooo!!!
I scream in what seems like forever and just like thatโฆ
I am 60.
โฆThey havenโt let me leave. I always wondered how I got here all those years ago but now I realize it was my roommate. She wanted the apartment to herself and she was gonna get it sooner or later. It was only a matter of โ
I cough. And blood releases from my lips. My body aches with pain, its unbearable. As โ passes, it is catching me, tormenting me for all the times I ran away. I can no longer run with these shackles on my ankles. Or maybe I can? No. No I cannot.
The only thing left isโฆ surrender. I must end this cycle once and for all. So I call out its nameโฆ
โ Tiโโ I cough. โPleaseโฆ pleaseโฆโ
A silver shiny metal appears in the air and I watch as the three hands move. Each hand moving at their own pace, one with immense speed, another calm, and a turtle. I reach out my hand,
โTi- ti- Time. Pleaseโฆโ surrender. โStop.โ
Each hand stops with my word. They stop at the same spot- the same place where I began, where this chase began. 12.
My heart starts to beat slower, and for the first time in my life I feel free. My hand is filled with wrinkles, my body with running scars. My precious life. I never got to live, but to live means to be free. Why is it now that I understand the meaning, my whole life has gone to waste, the thing I wanted to protect is what I used as a shield. My precious life is destroyed, but at least I do not have to run anymore. At least I am free.
My hand touches the silver shiny metal which has completely stopped.
โIfโฆI had knownโฆit would be that easyโฆI would have said those words earlier. You caught meโฆit was only a matter of ti- ti- time.โ I drop my hand and my heart disappears, with the pain and suffering. I can finally stop running, if only I had gotten to live after, I could have been happy on my death bed. But I guess it is true what they say-
Time waits for no one.
T I M E ๐
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I feel the need to comment on this story because it is so good!!!! You definitely deserve an upvote spree girl, 'cause you are one amazing writer. Keep writing...and keep a lookout for some more karma points!! This story is literally one of my favorite mysteries I have read on this site!!!
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Whaaaatt! Wow this just made me so happy, thank you so muchhh! *I have a lot of thank you's to give out to you!* And I'm happy you commented, I think this is the first time you commented on my stories, so thank you for that too! And also thank you for always being the first to like my stories- means alot to me! Also! Would you like to be called Owly? Or Amber? Or Johanna? Expect some points on your page too๐๐
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Aw thank you so so much!!! And personally, I don't care what you call me lol :)
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Alrighty! Oh and I have upvoted you! I think you were on 1797 and now your 1835!!
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Wow! Thx so much! I will upvote you too in a few hours (swamped with work :(
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Of course! And its okay, take your time!
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Hi! Ugochi ๐๐ป The story is amazing. It kept me hooked till the end. The ending was tragic. You have built this one really well. The structure and the flow of the story is really good.
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Thank you so much Alina!! Can't wait to read some of your stories!
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My pleasure! Thanks! ๐
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Omg, this is REALLY good. The suspence is perfect as well as the mystery aspect. I 100% agree with Kylie, this deserves a win, it is so good and unique and unlike no other.
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Thank you Blair!!
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Of course! :)
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I'm spelled by your story, Literally, I feel like I was running all the time. Yes, I fear time too. Your story was the most unique mystery story I have ever read. I'm literally spellbound. All I can is an amazing story brilliant concept. even the title of the story is good. keep writing.
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Aw thank youu Radhika!!! That means alot!
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And thankyou for mentioning my name in your bio.
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Of coursee!!๐
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The suspense at the beginning really pulled me along as a reader. I really appreciated how you incorporated 'time' (or even death) into your story. It's the one thing we all can understand -- it's something we all fear and regret. It also really made me think. We're in a world of constant business, that sometimes, taking a moment to realize how important family and friends are. It's not always our 'career' but who we are and what we've done. Bravo, Ugochi! I loved this. Aubrey Maria โ
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Thank youuu Aubrey!! I'm glad it made you sorta reflect on that! Thank youuu!
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Hello Ugochi, First of all, happy 20th story! Now, as for the story, it addresses a predominant theme of time: not the endless, vast lifetime people often refer to, but the inner fear, I think, most people have - running short of time. I love how the title, without giving away the main element of the story, portrays something which has a meaning of its own. (If one calculates as per clocks, 12 is the end of an hour, as well as the beginning of another hour. Perfectly symbolic of birth and death) A few, quick edits I found: "I take...
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Thank youu Neha!! And thank you for taking the time to critique. For the first critique i actually meant it like that as in "I take a step forward" not backward but I can try to rewrite if that is confusing! The second to the last critique, thank youu cause I didn't know how to reword the sentence but I knew I messed up, so thank youu! And i'll reread it for extra measure! Thank you so much for this! Honestly!
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No problem! And the edits look much better now, it solves the confusions! I'm so glad I could be of help.
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Omg- THIS WAS SO GOOD! I loved the mystery aspect of it! It was also quite sad thoughhhhhh Great job!!! :D
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Thank youuu so much Kate!!!! Yeah it was pretty sad. AhH! I wanted to read your stories first but you beat me to it!!! I'm glad you enjoyed it!
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Npppp!!!!!!!!! XDD It was wonderful! :D
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I might do a story with friends on Reedsy, and I would like to put you in it, so what would you want your character's personalty/ physical description/ special skills/ spirit animal (if I do animals) to be? :)
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Ah me? I am deeply flattered๐คง!! Well for my personality- Sarcastically funny, brutally honest (like no filter), really caring and sweet! Physical description - Um...hm...Long puffy hair! Medium height. Brown eyes, Normal normal. (tell me if you want more descriptions here!) Special traits - Um can tell a liar, Can draw and cook. And can do archery at any distance! Spirit animal - Owl! I'm sorry, but do these match up to what you had in mind for your story? If you need any more please ask! AHH Thank you for even thinking of me for this!
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Thanks so much! That's perfect! :)
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Oh okay! Can't wait to readdd if you do it!!
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I think I'll post it in a few days. :)
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Snow! How r u? :D U gotta read one day Iโll be there! XD
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Hey Celeste! I'm great! How are you? Haha I know! Alsooo thank you for always reading my bio!
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aWESOMMMME!!!!! XD :D
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Hey sis! Just upvoted you!! ughh but I couldn't get you a place up... ugh. Sup?
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Hey Sia!! Omg thank youuu! I will try to upvote you too! And its okay. Heyy! How are ya!
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No need, a Christmas gift ;). :) I'm good! You?
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Oh its nice to know your doing good! An improvement! Yeah I'm doing good too. How is Christmas going for you so far?
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Yeah :) Good! I woke up at 12pm and had noodles for breakfast lol, sup with u?
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Wow, that actually sounds goood! And on Christmas I slept at 2 in the night sooo...but Christmas in general was good! How are youu, and why does your bio say your leaving for awhile๐ฅบ
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Nickname: Mist ..... weird nickname... ooff, your in my bio now, Thanks for putting me into yours!
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Its actually a really cool nickname! I think it fits you well! Of course!! And thank you!
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Thanksss ssosoooooo muchhhhhhhh ;D๐ฅฐ๐ฅฐ๐ฅฐ๐ฅฐ
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Also ppl in ma fam are calling me phoniex now soo...
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Ouu Fancy! Is there a reason why?
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I like mythical creatures and my hair kinda looks like a Phoenix
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Ohhh now I am actually curious to see what your hair looks like, thats cool!
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OMG Hi! I love the ending! So sad, true, and great! Havenโt talk to u, u making a bio? I loved ur first one!
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Hey!! Thank you Celeste! I haven't talked to you either, but I do remember reading one of your stories! I am making a bio, I just haven't had the energy to make one yet. I deleted the other one I had it was starting to get boring. But soooooon I will! Aw thank you!! How are you?
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New story! Include meee (XD Iโm not a really good friend) Goooood!
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I'll read it soon! Maybbeeeee And thats good that your good! Also do you mind liking the story! I really wanna see it at 50!
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I Dididdiid!!!
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Thank youuu!
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WOAH. This flowed sooo nicely. When I read it I thought FOR SURE it would win. I'm sosososososososososososos mad it didn't. it totally deserved it. This has got to be my favorite story on Reedsy so far.
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Aw thank you Abby! Yeah, I knew I wouldn't win or anything cause like you have to be 18 to win and stuff like that. Oh well, I'll take your praise instead!! Wow, I am shocked, thanks!
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Of course, again this is definitely my favorite story ever on Reedsy!
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WOAH. I am speechless. This is so Good. Possible one of the best stories Iโve read so far on Reedsy. You are truly talented. Keep Up the amazing work!!
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Ahhhhh, thank you so much Abby!!!
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Of course! P.S. Iโm just starting to readyour โindescribable like or loveโ series and omg I love already.
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Haha thank youu! I'm glad your enjoying that series, alot of people seem too.
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Hey i just submitted a new story, would love your feedback on it.
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Sure!!
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Hey Radhika!! I have a lot of exams so I am taking a break, I will be back once exams are over so I'll read your story after. Is that okay?
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Of course, there's no emergency. Best of luck with your exams, and so not take stress, eat and sleep properly. I know you are a well-talented girl and you will give your exams very nicely.
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Thank you Radhika! Thats so nice of you to say!
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This was amazing, and after just reading one of your stories from a few months ago, I can see your writing as evolved in a wonderful way. It was never worse, it just has gotten better. (If that makes ANY kind of sense!) Great job, and I think this is one of the best stories on Reedsy. I don't follow a lot of people, but I think you may be one of them. AMAZING JOB!
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Aww thank you so much Rose! Ahh thats so sweet! Its nice to be on people follow lists! Especially when they barely follow much people! Thank youuu!
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Of course! Thank You for following me!
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Excuse me as I read this over and over for a good hour and a half. Ugochiiiiiiii!!!!!! This was so gooooood!! How are you so good at writing mystery stories? I was hooked from the very start and was literally at the edge of my seat. It was amaaaaziiiing!!!!!
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Ahhh Luna! Thank you so much!!! Maybe I should write more mystery now, well thank you so much for reading!!!
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Yes yes yes, please write more mystery!!!
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New story out if you're interested! Warning-It's a bit odd.
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Yay! I'll go check it out! Interesting๐ค
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heya, i put up a link to a quiz thingy on my bio. Check it out whenever you want :D
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I checked it out, but I think I left off a few questions. SO here it is Umm you are really funny and extra nice!! I don't think you should change a thing- your outburst of cursing are hilarious to me๐ Anndddd yeah I think thats the only one I left off.
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ohhh thank youuu ๐ that's hilarious indeed.
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Hey Orenda!! I have a lot of exams so I am taking a break! So I won't be able to get to your story till like later. Is that okay?
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Of course! Your exams are more important than my story. Best of luckk! :-)
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W O N D E R F U L ! ! !
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Thank youuu Sia!!!!!
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Welcomeeeeeee
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