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Suspense Adventure Drama

As Lucy walked down the loney road to home, she kicked a rock which reminded her of her sister, Tammy. Tammy hated her kicking rocks and would get up her everytime however the arguement that ensued past the time on their walk home from school. So Lucy always kicked rocks.

She missed Tammy and the thought of her sister made her angry. She didnt like thinking of her as she didnt want to confront the feelings her loss made her feel.

Tammy had raven black hair and striking hazel eyes. She had freckles that only enhanced her look. Although Tammy hated her freckles. With a model body Tammy was the complete package however she couldn't see it.

The image of Tammy became so vivid in Lucy's mind it dropped her, she fell to the ground. She could not hold back her tears anymore, while on all fours she started sobbing for her lost sister. Lucy was great at ignoring her problems but not so good at dealing with them.

No matter how much the pair fought she loved her sister, she missed her so much however would not allow herself to think about her as it was too painful.

Today was different as it was the anniversary of Tammy going missing.

One year ago was a day like any other. The girls normally walked home together but after an arguement on the bus, Tammy got off the bus a stop too soon. She was never seen again.

Lucys life changed from normal and happy to strange and sad. Her mum dived into her work now and was barely home, leaving the 14 year old on her own most of the time. Lucy often felt it was all her fault. Did her mum think that too?

Worry and saddness turned to anger again. Where was Tammy? What happened? Will she see her again? Why was life so cruel?

Thoughts she tried so hard to forget came flooding in and Lucy became shaky dropping in to a ball. She didnt care the rocks were digging into her, she didnt care she was curled up on the road in public. Nothing mattered but wreching pain that striked threw her heart. It was a pain she thought could kill her.

As she released all that hidden emotion she began to slowly stop shaking. Her tears ran out and she started to come out of this momentary lapse of self control.

Her mind cleared and she got up, dusting the pebbles off her olive skin. She now felt a new feeling, drive. She would find Tammy and she wouldnt stop until she had her sister back!

First step she needed to go to the stop where her sister was last seen. So instead of going home she headed back to the bus stop. She would not let herself feel that way again and she sped up to almost a run.


The bus ride felt like it was in slow motion. The stop Tammy got off at was only a five minute ride but today it felt like it went on for at least an hour. This annoyed Lucy as sitting still made the thoughts come back. Pushing them back was getting harder and harder.

Getting off Lucy froze. 'What could she do now,' she thought. 'Think like an angry 15 year old,' was her next thought, followed by, 'What would Tammy do?'

Looking around her for inspiration. She sore a playground across the road. Teens still use them but just not the same way as a child but maybe she just decided to walk home. So Lucy decided to look around the playground, then investigate the walk home.

Nothing jumped out at her as she looked around the playground however at the back of the large area she noticed an old shabby house. Kids n teens alike love exploring maybe Tammy sore this scary looking house too.

Its worth investgating. Anything is better then feeling. So she made her way towards the eerie wood building. The small struction gave her goosebumps. She was scared but she needed her sister more. So she went up to the door and opened the creaky door.

The smell of pee and something tangy hit her nose. She noticed a sleeping bag and tins of food. Someone must be squatting here, she would have to be quick.

She existed the lounge a into an old kitchen and dining room where she she looked threw the yucky carboards. Nothing, she found nothing. There were stairs heading down to what must be a basement. Thats rare in Australia.

She switched on the light on her phone and slowly Lucy decended. Each step creaked. Lucys heart pumped as fear washed over her. At the bottom there was a large empty room and it felt bigger then the small home. It smelled like sitting water.

Lucy noticed a metal door which she thought was odd since the building was wood. Lucy slowly walked towards the door. She tried to open it but it was locked. In defeat she turned to walk away but she stopped. Slowly she turned. She needed in that door. Every part of her instincts told her she had to see behind the door but how?

Mum, she needed her mum and police. They can get behind the door. At that moment she heard footsteps. She quickly ran towards the stairs and hid under them. Hoping who ever it was would not notice.

She turned off the light as she heard the unknown start decending the steps. What appeared to be a rather tall man headed towards the door. He had opened a little latched and keyed in a pin. Lucy hadnt noticed that latch before. The door opened and a bright light shone threw.

Did Lucy a 14 year old girl find her sister when no one else could. She needed to know. Needing help Lucy texted her mum.

'I went looking for Tammy. I think i found her. Bring police to the abandoned wood building at the back of playground in front of the bus stop. Im under the stairs in the BASEMENT. Hiding from men, hurry.'

She forgot to put it on silent. Instead of doing as instructed her mum frantically rang. The phone rang loud and echoed in the space. Lucy quickly tried to stop the noise but fumbled the phone.

It was too late though and the tall men came out of the metal door. Spotting her straight away. Lucy heart quickened, staring dead ahead at him, noticing he was bald. He said nothing but began walking toward her.

Lucy decided running was the best option and she took off. Her shaky body fell and as she pushed up she felt a large hand grab her. She let an high pitched squeal as he picked her up.

Dragging her towards the door as Lucy fought with all her might to get away.

"If anyone ever grabs you, scream loud and go limp". Her mums words echoed threw her head as if she was right next to her. So she went limp. Taking the bald man by surprise. He stumbled and lilly started kicking and punch whatever she could.

He held onto to her. Not saying a word he grabbed the doors edge to get a grip. Lucy fought with all her might but she was nearly the door. Screaming in terror as he finally got her threw the door.


Lucys mum was a beauty for her age, but like Tammy she could not see it. She had rung the police and was frantically heading towards where her baby girl said to go. She hadnt answered her phone. 'Why hadnt she answered,' the worried mum thought.

Her heart skipped a beat as she finally sore the playground. She could see police cars, lights blazing all around. It look chaotic. Tears fell as she worried for her last child. She couldnt deal with the loss of another.

As she pulled up, she put the handbrake on but didnt turn the car off. Instead she ran towards the commotion. When she got to them she just froze in disbelief.

"Oh my god," she whispered as she looked at Lucy and then over to Tammy, "how?"

The two girls ran over to their mum giving her a big much needed hug..

Lucy had found Tammy. Their family was whole again.



January 31, 2021 05:03

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Tim Law
01:45 Feb 12, 2021

Samara such a thrilling story. I love how the determination, instinct and love of a sister can win the day and achieve the impossible. Do you have a sister? Is this story somehow based on personal experience?

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