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Kids

“Chloe! Bedtime!” My mom said.


“Yes mom! I’ll be down there in a minute!” I yelled back at her.


I took a few more moments to look through my telescope. It was clearer tonight, though light pollution was still annoying me. I found all the normal constellations, Ursa Major, part of Orion, and Taurus (The Bull). I would have found more, if I didn’t have my stupid bedtime. My mom is strict. Nine o-clock. 


I started to get up from my spot on the fire escape. It was a perfect spot for my telescope, as it was small and easily accessible. 


I always leave my telescope on the fire escape, unless it looks like it’s going to rain. Right now, the sky is clear. I carefully step back into my house.


My older brother gets to stay up later than me. He’s 14, so his bedtime is ten o-clock. Sometimes, he pleads with my mom, asking to stay up later, and maybe gets a few more minutes. I’m a good kid. I obey.


I brushed my teeth and used the bathroom. I got into bed. 


On my ceiling, I had those glow in the dark stars. They didn’t work that well, but it was still cool looking at them. I always fall asleep while counting the glow in the dark stars.


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I woke up to my brother snoring. His room is right next to mine, and he snores loudly. I changed, and went downstairs to eat breakfast and get ready for school.


I’m in 7th grade, which means I have a lot of homework. I finished it all yesterday, but still have a big test today. I’m not what you call a “star” student, but I do get A’s and B’s. 


I bike to school with Kristen. She is my best friend. It took a lot of pleading with my parents, but eventually they decided I was old enough to make the trip if we stayed together the whole way. Her house is on the corner of our street, so I do get to ride for a couple minutes by myself.


Kristen is nice, but loud. “Good morning Chloe!” She exclaimed, already there at the corner. “How are you doing?”


“Morning to you.” I told her. “And, normal.”


“Haha!” She laughed. “Did you do all your homework?”


“Yup! You?”


“Same. Although I think I forgot to do the math homework.” She said, “Anyways, math is after lunch. I can do it during lunch.”


We got onto our bikes and went towards the school. It’s only a few blocks away. When we got there, we locked our bikes, and went into our separate classrooms. We have different homerooms, but later on share a few classes.


My homeroom teacher was named Ms. Krendel. She was nice when you turned in all your homework, but strict and mean if you were rude or disrespectful.


I love school. It might be weird, but I think school is fun. At least, middle school is way more interesting than elementary school. You get to change classes and get more homework.


I went to a few of my classes, and then it was lunchtime. I saw Kristen quickly pulling out her math homework. She always sat next to me. 


“Hey Chloe!” She said, “Ugh! I hate that Ms. Heiner! She gave me a C for my english homework, and it was my best paper! It took 2 hours!”


“Aww,” I sympathized, “I have her next period.”


“Yup! I guess I have to do my math right now.”


We ate our lunches while Kristen did her math homework. 


5 minutes before the bell rang, she finished.


“Yay!” She exclaimed. “It’s done!”


“Yes!” I agreed. “And just in time too!”


Of course, just then the bell rang. I went to my english class, while Kristen went to her social studies. My paper got an A-, which is pretty good. Our next class was math, which was the first class we actually had together. We turned in our math test, and learned a bit about geometry.


We had electives after that, and at the beginning of the year I chose astronomy and drama. I love looking at the stars, and I love theater. Kristen and I both do drama. Her other elective is soccer. She is a beast at it. She has great control of the ball, and she is really fast.


After our electives, Kristen and I biked home. Her mom made arrangements with my mom for Kristen to sleepover at my house. 


When we got home, we rushed on our homework. I know, that’s not the best thing to do. But we had a plan for tonight. 


We ate dinner. My mom made ravioli with marinara sauce and it was amazing. We had ice cream for dessert. Then, we watched Hamilton on Disney Plus. It was long, but my mom said that we could stay up late. I love Hamilton. It is the best.


Once the movie was over, it was 9:00. My mom said that we could stay up a little bit longer.


We played games. Card games, like Spoons and Kitty in the Corner. I was terrible at them, but it was really fun. We also told each other stories. Random stories. It was funny. Kristen told me about when she was going swimming and her bathing suit bottoms fell off. It was really embarrassing.


Finally, my mom said that we had to go to bed. I pleaded, and she said 10 more minutes.


I took Kristen to the fire escape. Our telescope was there, and it was dark. Kristen loved looking through the telescope. I mean, she didn’t want to take the astronomy elective, but still. She loves it.


Not as much as me.


We took turns looking and pointing out different constellations. It was hard, because like I said earlier, light pollution was really annoying. I live in the city, so all the city lights were on. 


I wrote a speech about light pollution, and shared it to the whole school, but the kids didn’t listen. It had to be the whole world.


I saw a shooting star. I wished on the shooting star.


I wished that people could be cautious about their lights, and not leave them on the whole time. 


Kristen and I went to bed happy. We watched my glow in the dark stars as we fell asleep. 


The stars are beautiful.



July 25, 2020 01:07

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Moonchild Luca
02:06 Jul 27, 2020

The title made me delve right into the story. Wonderful writing!

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Avery G.
02:07 Jul 27, 2020

Thank you! 😊

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C.J 🤍
03:35 Sep 30, 2020

I really love the stars!!! Awesome story! Good job!

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Charlotte Hunt
01:25 Sep 16, 2020

I love it! The prompt itself is beautiful, and you do it justice. Keep writing!

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The Daltons
01:22 Aug 16, 2020

I really like the comparison between her and her older brother. And I really like the responsibility and the kindness of Chloe. Also how well she obeys! I admit, I'm a rule breaker!

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Avery G.
01:45 Aug 16, 2020

Thank you so much! Haha.

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The Daltons
02:15 Aug 16, 2020

Yeah, and if you read Harry Potter, I'm basically a Hermione! I'm in gifted (I guess the "nerd" group) but I'm in Gryffindor!

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Avery G.
02:19 Aug 16, 2020

I've read Harry Potter, but I'm a Hufflepuff. I have a lot of friends lol

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The Daltons
17:28 Aug 16, 2020

I do too, and it's odd, cause I'm quite nerdy or geeky, but I'm also pretty popular

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Avery G.
17:32 Aug 16, 2020

Cool!

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03:35 Aug 13, 2020

It's a very light hearted and loving story. Loved it 🤩🤩 -S

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Avery G.
03:50 Aug 13, 2020

Thank you!

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04:02 Aug 13, 2020

:)

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Sunny 🌼 🖤
02:53 Jul 28, 2020

This is literally any rising 6th or 7th graders dream day. This story was just a charming walk through somebodies day, I liked it. (Also these Hamilton references will be the death of me)

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Avery G.
02:54 Jul 28, 2020

Thank you so much! P.S. I am a HUGE Hamilton fan. I put TONS of references in my stories. Haha

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Conan Helsley
18:32 Jul 27, 2020

Ok, so a bit of redundancy in this one, but if you revise it and look out for it, easy fix. This one instance I must point out because it's pretty bad. I bike to school. It took a lot of pleading with my mom and dad, but eventually they let me. I have a turquoise bike. I bike to school with my friend, Kristen. I meet her at the corner between my house and hers. She is nice, but very loud. First, these 2 paragraphs should be combined. Here's how I would do it... I bike to school with Kristen, she's my best friend. It took a deal of ple...

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Avery G.
19:15 Jul 27, 2020

Thank you so much, Conan! I'll work on those.

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Conan Helsley
18:15 Jul 27, 2020

Before I read further, I have always followed the rule that more dialogue attribution is less, if you get my meaning. Write it like this instead... “Chloe! Bedtime!” My mom said. “Yes mom! I’ll be down there in a minute!” I called. The exclamation points tell us they are yelling, so to put shout or yell or cry out or anything else is kind of assuming the reader can't figure out the inflection on their own. So my advice is stick to he said, she said, he asked, she asked, things like that. If you get the dialogue itself right you don't ne...

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Avery G.
18:31 Jul 27, 2020

Thank you so much for helping me with dialogue! It's not my strong point, so any help is awesome. I will try to fix those. Thank you again.

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Conan Helsley
18:38 Jul 27, 2020

I'm actually pretty good with dialogue, it's one of the things I've focused on because I believe that getting dialogue right can really help to develop a character and make them stand out from each other and in general, so if you ever have any questions feel free to ask. I'm always open to helping if I can.

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Avery G.
19:16 Jul 27, 2020

Okay thank you! If I ever need help I'll ask you!

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Nancy Drayce
22:35 Jul 26, 2020

Such a sweet story! Awesome job! 💜✨

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Avery G.
23:25 Jul 26, 2020

Thank you so much!

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Jade Young
20:52 Jul 26, 2020

"The stars are beautiful". But not as beautiful as this story :P It's very cute, lighthearted and enjoyable to read. I like how the prompt doesn't stay in the moment, but spans over two nights with their own stories to tell. Very creative and very well written, Avery🙌🏽

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Avery G.
22:06 Jul 26, 2020

Hey Jade! Thank you so much! You are so kind!

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