Authors note: This is just the first story , I'm hoping to work in a sequel with next week's prompts :) Here goes:
And so, she lay there, with the hot water bottle upon her stomach and an icepack strapped to her forehead, contemplating the meaning of life and asking herself all kinds of philosophic questions she didn’t know the answers too.
Do the teachers notice when the chalk squeaks on the blackboard, or don’t they and is that why they just keep on writing like their students aren’t being cringed to death behind them?
Why can’t any real-life guy just be like pretty much any fictional ones? Is it really that hard?
Does everyone at some point in their life just wake up in the morning and start craving something or other so bad that it felt like they were going to pass out with the extremity of ‘’want’’? Or is that just me?
That day was actually the perfect day for pondering things like these. Rays of sunlight streamed through the cracks in the wooden walls of the age-old treehouse, built by the previous owners of fourteen-year-old Trisha Walker’s new home sweet home. The treehouse was by far her favourite feature of their new address, that and the fantastically overgrown backyard, the latter of which was crowded with immense trees and unkempt flowerbeds.
She spent every free second there, pretending to be tracking down an undiscovered species, or narrating the lives of the unique insects she discovered there.
Trisha was different than other kids her age, and she knew it.
They gossiped about the teacher’s personal lives because half of their parents were educators, while she had her nose in a book.
They moaned and complained about how fat they were, while she wrote stories about confident protagonists.
They laughed about jokes shared on Whatsapp and tore celebrities apart because of their tiktoks, while she made a point of the fact that she didn’t own a cell phone.
Not that they ever listened, though, Trisha thought, adjusting her position so that her head was resting more on the crimson pillow she’d snatched from her mom’s pristine living room than on the hard wood the treehouse walls were made of, and also so the bright sun wouldn’t shine in her pale eyes anymore.
‘’Why can’t I fly?,’’ she said aloud, to no one in particular, really. She talked to herself often, which is probably something you’d expect from the average fourteen-year-old who narrates insects’ lives. And believes that she should be able to fly.
But that afternoon, someone actually heard her musing aloud, a rare occasion that’s never, ever occurred in the whole of two weeks that she’d been living there. Unless you count that unfortunate instance when the old lady next door happened to come over to borrow a cup of sugar whilst Trisha was narrating the particularly gruesome death scene of a ladybug about to be devoured by an arachnid.
They don’t discuss it in the Walker-household.
This time the visitor wasn’t the old lady (thank goodness for that) but rather one of the boys from school, Darren Barlow. He wasn’t there because he was interested in her; he didn't even know her. Yet.
He was there because he lived across the road to them, and because his parents, who were very sociable and loved to have everyone know how just exactly rich they were, wanted to meet their new neighbours .They had been away to Dubai the past month ,and only just heard about the Walkers.
Whilst his parents moved to the living room with Trisha's , he wandered out to the backyard, where he was soon lost amongst the thick overgrowth of weeds and other, possibly undiscovered, vegetation.
Suddenly Darren heard someone say ‘’Why can’t I fly?’ in a voice that sounded a lot like the sweet milky tea his grandma often drank .Sweet milky tea doesn’t really sound like anything , but nonetheless , that’s what the voice reminded him of.
‘’Why can’t you what?,’’ he loudly questioned the oak tree , which is where he assumed the sound was coming from.
Suddenly the leaves above rustled and shook, and a bushy brown something popped out from between them. The bushy brown something had a freckled face but was too high up for Darren to make out any other details.
‘’What are you doing here?,’’ Trisha exclaimed from her treehouse, baffled at this boy who had just, as if by magic, turned up in her backyard. She wondered where he came from. Had he fallen from the sky?
She was confused but wasn’t going to miss this chance; there was someone talking to her, in her backyard, someone who was, or at least seemed to be, interested in her. No one was ever really interested in her.
‘’Hello!,’’ She called to him from the treehouse, racking her brain for a way of inviting him over, without sounding completely bonkers.She decided that a direct manner would work the best. ‘’I said, what are you doing in my backyard? Do you want to come – aww shoot…watch out!’’
Her icepack had suddenly slipped from her forehead and, despite the numerous bandages she’d spent to keep it in place, was now plummeting towards the ground, and Darren, at breakneck speed.
But sky – boy, as she had taken to calling him in her mind, dodged and caught it expertly, much to Trisha’s surprise. So, he had supreme hand -eye coordination. Very much unlike herself.
‘’Sorry!,’’ she called down to him, her face crimson.’’ I meant to say, would you like to come up? The view’s awesome from here. Also,’’ she pulled out the gingerbread cookies she’d been saving for later and waved them at him,’’ I have snacks.’’
Darren couldn’t quite make out what she (at least he thought it was a girl) was waving at him, but the mere promise of snacks was enough to make his stomach growl.
Just because you're rich doesn’t mean you can’t skip lunch every now and then.
He scanned his surroundings, but his search for a ladder was in vain.
‘’Uh.. how do I get up?,’’ Darren asked. ’’Do you have a ladder or something?’’
‘’A ladder?,’ ’Trisha exclaimed indignantly.’’ Why on earth would I need a ladder? Can’t you climb?’’
Darren flushed bright vermilion, and gazed down at his shoes, suddenly extremely interested in them. Of course, he could climb, he just thought …never mind.
He started up the tree, utterly focused on not slipping and humiliating himself in front of this creature again.
‘’Wrong one,’’ Trisha called from the right tree, in which she was seated. So much for not humiliating himself.
After much struggle, he finally made it up. Trisha eyed him carefully. Definitely what you’d expect from someone who’d just fallen from the sky. Short blond hair, blue eyes, winter-kissed face.
Except now his face wasn’t very much winter-kissed, it was redder and more flushed from the effort he’d put into climbing up.
‘’Your treasure, brave sky warrior,’’ Trisha teased, presenting him with half the carton of cookies. Darren couldn’t quite tell whether she was joking or not, she had that sort of air about her. But he took his ‘’treasure’, before she changed her mind. Can’t exactly refuse a gift.
‘’Uh, Thanks, uhm… Fair maiden,’’ he praised her hesitantly. She pulled a face, clearly not impressed.
‘’ Don’t ever call me a maiden,’ she told him, dragging a notebook from beneath her crimson cushion.’ ’I am a dragon, and I shall eat whole next time you do.’’ With that she bit ferociously into the gingerbread. ’Would you really like to suffer the same fate as this unfortunate citizen?’’
He nearly choked on his own unfortunate citizen. This girl was unbelievable.
They started talking and then talked and talked some more.They just never run out of things to say.
She made him feel like he was important, like it wouldn't matter if he was a polka dotted elephant in a jumpsuit; like she’d still care about what he had to say.
When he asked why she had the icepack and water bottle, she told him that it was all about achieving perfect balance.
‘’But aren’t you already perfectly balanced, without adding anything?,’’ he asked, confused as to why she’d go the extra mile, but she just told him he didn’t understand and started up a pillow fight.
The stars were already twinkling above by the time his parents found him and Trisha in the overgrown garden, as they were narrating two butterflies who whirled around each other like a cat and a laser. You know, like when you point a laser at something, and the cat goes bezerk about it. Yeah,like that.
Darren Barlow left number 6 Cherry lane with a happy feeling in his stomach, the kind you get whenever you feel that life just…likes you. He finally met someone who actually, genuinely accepted him for who he was, someone who didn’t mind that he was.. suddenly he realised that he hadn’t even asked her name.
She hadn’t asked his name either.
But that didn’t matter. School would start the day after next, and people talk.
They talk about guys like him and girls like her.
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Wow, I really like this story! What's LGS, though? I love the character names and the pace of the story; they work so well together.
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Thanks! LGS is ( my old) and my little sister's afrikaans primary school... It translates to GSPS , which stands for George-South Primary School :)
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Hey Mila! This story was WONDERFUL. It made me miss the times I wrote something that makes one want to curl up in a ball with some hot chocolate. It's been a while:) The only errors I found were a few tense mistakes and grammatical errors. For the dialogue, you don't have to add a comma after an exclamation or a question mark. You started some speech with a double apostrophe instead of a speech mark, so you can change that. Also, when you were describing the differences between Trisha and her classmates, you should use the word 'while' inste...
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Thank you so much, especially the comma after exclamation mark thing .It kept coming up as an error in Word , and I couldn't figure out why. I just saw : '' a river of tears'' was your first submission but you've got 104 followers! Nicely done.
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argh. I just reread my story (last time I did that was in July 2020!!) and I want to DIEEEE of cringe 😭🤣. The whole story isn't too bad, but whyyyyy did I put the ''Trisha was different from kids her age'' part? That's exactly the kind of thing that annoys the hellll out of me when I'm reading a book 🤣Anywho... If your seeing this, have a nice day
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Thanks :DD
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Hi Mila! Great story! lol I just wanted to say the part of your story where he calls her fair maiden, it reminds me of a story that I'm currently working on, it made me smile. Great job :DD
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Great story! I saw in your bio you said you like Harry Potter and Maze runner, so do I. I haven't read the Gone series, but my sister says they're great.
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thanks! Yeah, the Gone books are awesome! Whose your favourite Maze Runner/ Harry Potter character? I like Newt and Minho, and from HP I love Fred, George and Oliver Wood. Whose your sister's favourite Gone character? I love Dekka and Brianna.
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My favorites from maze runner are Newt and Minho too. From HP, I love the twins, Sirius, Luna and Cedric.
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Hey, hope you are doing well! I read your story but before talking about that i would like to say that your bio is just wow......I mean i enjoyed reading that😊 Ya coming back to your story then it's just amazing, really liked how you thought and finally showed into beautiful words....Great story dear 😁
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Thank you 😊
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No need dear!👍😊
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Would be kind to watch the video it's on Harry potter https://youtu.be/KxfnREWgN14. Sorry to being so harsh, I would read your story
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Nice story. A good pace and the ending was nicely done.
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Thank you! 😊
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"asking herself all kinds of philosophic questions she didn’t know the answers too." typo- to not too. Unless you have a nonstandard usage in mind, it should be philosophical questions. You have several little typos, where the spacing is before the comma instead of after or the period ending a sentence and the first word of the next sentence lack a space between them. If you run the grammar check, it will catch all those problems. Unlike issues with commas, spacing and misplaced quotation marks are easy for the computer to correct, so us...
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Thanks! 👍🏽
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Wow, this was good! I liked it! Great job!
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I love this! I liked the cute dialogue between Trisha and Darren, their characters are quite unique and I like them. You said this is a sequel? I'd love to see them encouraging and comforting each other even though other people point their fingers at them. :) Also, I saw in your bio that you write songs. I write songs too! I have written about three cheesy songs and they're not very creative but I hope I can write something better someday in the future....
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Woowww. I'm so happy I came on Reedsy. FINALLY I ''meet'' people who think like me or read the books I read or do the things I do!!! I'd love to hear one of your songs, but how??🤔WE SHALL FIND A WAY. Keep writing songs!! Don't stop!!Even if they're a bit cheesy at first! Also I need to know: can you sing? I mean like, GOOD? 'Cuz I'm rubbish. If you CAN sing, that's really awesome! I want other people to hear my songs; if you know a way pls tell me Because I also can't play an instrument....yeah... Do you play an instrument? yep.... ...
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Don't worry ;) We SHALL find the way. My songs are not yet good enough to show somebody; when I come up with something that isn't entirely garbage, I'll make sure I show you. By the way, do you know an app called 'Maestro'? It's literally amazing for songwriters! You can write songs with computer/phone instead of writing those notes out with your hand. And after you finish writing it, you can choose ANY instrument you like and hit the play button, and it will play the song you composed in the sound of the instrument you chose. And I'm pretty...
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We SHALL. No, I didn't know about Maestro, it sounds great! Will have to wait though; my phone's storage is ''full'' even though I literally have 40 photo's thats it! 0 videos, and the only ''game'' is TikTok. So I have to go get it fixed. I've never tried out for choirs, and I'm not sure if I want to. I have a lot of things on my plate at the moment, and it looks like a LOT of hard work.😅😅 My dad and my sister play guitar, but my sister attacks me if I so much as gently stroke it. Maestro could be awesome! TRUST ME, though, I am not a go...
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1. Awwwwww, this story was so nicely written. Your dialogue flowed very nicely and it felt natural. 2. TSU PROFILE PIC! It's so cute! 3. If you're a BNHA fan I think you might like my most recent story "Runaways". You can check it out if you wanna. Ok that's all bye!
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