Authors note- This is part two of โNew Traditions'
Ainslee Flora Dior was born on a lovely spring day. Immediately after she had taken her first breath her golden brown eyes slightly opened. I was in awe as I saw my little sister taking in everything around her. She locked eyes with me and it stayed that way until Kendra cuddled her gently in her arms.
โWhat a beauty,โ My father remarked looking at his youngest daughter. โWhy, she reminds me of Bella as a little baby.โ
Kendra smiled weakly at him as she stroked her baby softly.
I rolled my eyes at him as I continued to glance over at the new addition of the family.
โHer name is Ainslee.โ Kendra announced as she kissed Ainslee on her forehead. โAinslee Flora has been born.โ
I knew instantly that she was going to be the talk of the neighborhood. She would have all the attention she never asked for, Iโll just be someone in the wayโฆ
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โAww, isn't she the sweetest.โ Kendra cooed looking at her little angel. โWhoโs a good girl, you are.โ
Kendra sounded like she was talking to a dog, not a baby, I thought.
โKendra, can you make me a sandwich.โ I asked, my tummy rumbling in unison to my statement as if agreeing with me.
โIโm sorry Bells, I need to change Ainโs diaper, you're a big girl now, you should be able to fend for yourself.โ She giggled as she tickled Ainslee.
I groaned, I hated to cook anything, even if it only involves putting things together.
This wasnโt the first time I had to โfend for myselfโ as Kendra puts it. Ever since Ain was born two months ago she had taken over the house. Kendra, my dad, the neighbors and even my friends all want to see the โadorable little angel.โ What about me?
Aren't I an โadorable little angelโ too?
I knew Kendra was trying hard to make me not miss my mother. But mom, she was irreplaceable. I just wished I had mom with me still, she would have taken care of me no matter what.
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โIssi, Issi.โ My little sister called out to me while I had been studying for a test.
โWhat?โ My annoying, pesky, attention grabber little sister was three now.
โGimme.โ She demanded, her eyes were narrowed to the crayon on my desk. I sighed as I handed the crayon to her.
She scurried away, thank goodness.
โGimme.โ I heard her say from the living room. โWant cholate.โ Her english was terrible, I had to admit myself. Kendra of course would give her chocolate even if itโs before dinner. I wished I had โcholateโ too but I knew Kendra would tell me no chocolate before dinner. I decided to try anyway, maybe Iโll get lucky if I maybe try in Ainโs way.
โGimme cholate too.โ I mimicked my sister the hardest I could. Kendra had her hands on her hips as she chuckled a bit but she put the chocolate away in spite of my amazing Ainโs voiceover.
โBella, donโt act like a baby.โ Was all I got in return.
โHow come she gets it?โ I asked, still mimicking Ainโs baby gibberish voice. โItโs not fair.โ I stomped my foot down, Iโve seen Ain do this a few times and she had always won an argument. I hope I can too.
โBella, whatโs gotten into you, donโt act childish...you're almost twelve, act like a role model for your sister.โ She ordered me sternly this time. I still looked upset at Kendra for scolding me and not Ainslee.
โKids.โ Kendra said, shaking her head. โIโm disappointed in you, please be more mature.โ She pleaded.
โWhy.โ I crossed my arms.
โBecause you're older.โ
โWhy?โ
โI donโt know, ask God.โ Her voice raised a little but she quieted down as she saw Ain was watching.
โWhy.โ I knew playing the โwhyโ game drives adults nuts but if Ain did it then Kendra would think it was adorable so why canโt I?
โIsabella Grace Dior,โ Kendra commanded, using my full name. โWhat is wrong with you?โ
I looked down, unable to make eye contact with her. She still had on the โIโm disappointed in youโ look. I gulped as I tried to explain to her.
โI want to be a baby, I want attention.โ I finally spoke out what I had been keeping inside.
โWere you jealous of all the attention Ain has gotten since she had been born?โ Kendra finally asked, her eyebrows up realizing my feelings of being left out for the first time. โI thought you were happy to be an older sister?โ
โI am but...I was a bit jealousโ I admitted.
โAww Bella. I love you and I always will, but Ainโs little, I know I wasn't here when you were a baby but I am here now, you will always be my little girl even if you aren't a baby...I promise.โ She smiled at me hoping I would understand her dilemma.
โIโm sorry...for behavingโฆ โchildishโ.โ I quoted her. โI just felt like no one payed attention to me anymore.โ
โItโs ok, I get how you feel, I felt left out when I was your age too...you have it easy, I had three younger siblings and I felt alone all the time but my mother explained to me that I should be an example to my younger siblings, of course I did take care of them after my mother died but...you get my pointโ She explained her point of view as her voice cracked as she talked about her mother.
โIโll be a big girl from now on.โ I didnโt want to upset Kendra anymore.
โDonโt be too big, I donโt want to lose my little pumpkin to leave me so soon.โ She remarked as we hugged it out. โJust be yourself and everything will be fine.โ
โIโll try...but no promises.โ
โIssi?โ Ain asked for me. Kendra looked at me. I walked to my sister and picked her up.
โI promise to be a good older sister.โ I told her. โI love you Ainslee.โ
โLov yo Issi.โ She copied me.
I smiled at her bad pronunciation...but I didnโt care. Everything will be just perfect.
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This was such a sweet and nice story! Great job! =)
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Thank you!
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Aww... sweet and wonderful, loved it!
Just a quick mistake I caught: "the new edition to the family", I'm sure you meant "addition".
Keep up!
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Thanks Sophia, I will change that!
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Your story was fantastic, Varsha! I like how you write the characters and their dialogue.
Keep it up! :)
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thank you!
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Great story! I really liked the laced in jealousy from Bella and the idea of the jealousy causing her childish behaviour. Once again a few suggestions :)
- 'What a beauty.' should be a comma, not full stop bc the sentence continues after the dialogue
- once again, 'God' should be capitalised
- 'Isabella Grace Dior.' should be a comma, the sentence continues after
- also for that part as well, maybe edit word choice of 'she mentioned' to something like {"Isabella Grace Dior," Kendra commanded, using my full name.}
- "Aww, Bella, I love you and I always will" change comma after Bella to a full stop and comma after will
- in the last sentence rather than 'bad English' maybe say like 'mispronunciation' or something along those lines, bc technically her words aren't incorrect, just her pronunciation
Much less than last time, but yeah overall it was really good, well done!
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Thank you so much Zoe, really helped. I have changed it!
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Cool! Would you mind rereading 'My Universe'? (I think you read it earlier, but I changed it a lot since then bc of the whole second story not submitting thing) Any critique and feedback would be much appreciated :)
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sure Zoe!
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