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Submitted into Contest #146 in response to: Start your story during a team building exercise.... view prompt
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Hello. Is this the full story? If not where can I buy a print copy? I'll need the anthology name to track it down. It's a joint Nebula and Hugo award winner! WD Paul Wilhite! Edit : Sorry I wanted the Sarah Pinsker novelette...are they one and the same? Edit: it's OK, I found a Kindle e-book for a couple if pounds, so I'm cool now.
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Hi Paul! Welcome to Reedsy! (Still in your first month here, so I guess a welcome is appropriate, right?) I loved your first line—grabbing from the get-go and introduces us right away to the kind of situations our main character deals with at work. One technical piece of advice is to divide up your paragraphs a little more. There’s some paragraphs that could be turned into two or three without making the story read too choppily. I think that would help organize your transition from one character to another, and make the pace smoother. I re...
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Thank you!
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This story felt so nostalgic. I spent a free years working in a call center, with very similar experiences! I laughed at the beginning when the man placed blame. Your story was a fun read!
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Thank you Beth. That was actually a pretty typical day at my old job!
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