Submitted to: Contest #96

We Were There Once

Written in response to: "Write a story about strangers becoming friends, or friends becoming strangers."

Friendship

We were there once.


When the tide rushed in like the sweep of a broom as we watched day turn to dusk. The mix of colours radiating through the sky was so picturesque, I couldn't comprehend it. Sitting on the sandy rocks, there was not a care in the world as you slept on my warm shoulder. You didn't realise as I smiled at you with a longing that we could stay like this forever.


You were my sunshine, I was yours. Together, we were brighter than all of the stars in the sky. I was your rock in the darkest times. You didn't care what anybody thought of me. No matter what, we promised we would be there. Forever. Now, I grimace at those promises as I wonder if this was ever true.


Soon, that evening on the beach ticked by. Years passed, people changed. Freshmen became sophomores. Yet, we were still the same. Bonded by struggle, by friendship. There seemed to be nothing that could break us apart.


Then, he came. Out of nowhere, like a speck of dust that had multiplied. I told you to dust him away, that he wouldn't care for you. But you were entrapped. 'Love,' you called it. No matter how I tried, I couldn't save you.


'At least I could still be there for you,' I thought. But as time passed, you slowly drifted away to a desert island. It was my darkest time. Yet you weren't there to let me cry on your shoulder as I had done.


Whenever I saw you, I would rush past. Yet you wouldn't see me as you stared into his hungry eyes, thinking it was something it wasn't.


You thought I was the problem, that I was feeding you lies. But yet I was the one that could see the smirks on his face when he glanced at his phone. I was the one that would see him slide his phone into a safe spot as you came.


Then, I moved. "I'll keep in touch," you said, "I'll go visit you in a few weeks when you settle in." Lies. Those weeks turned into months, months turned into years. No text, phone calls or even birthday wishes came from you.


After that, I gave up. Living a new life without you, left a hole in my heart. Knowing that you would be heartbroken when you found the truth.


Yet, when I saw you alone in the cafΓ© that day, on the side of Exhibition St, I couldn't bring myself to say hello. I glanced at you, reminiscing about the day on the beach when things were different. But I brushed past you, not looking twice, nothing but a stranger in my eyes.


We were there once.


Posted Jun 05, 2021
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Hello! I just came past this through Rachel and I just wanted to say... you are a magnificent writer/author or whatever you'd call it! And what made me more intrigued by this piece is not just the beautiful words and the grace of the story, and not just the broad descriptions that were produced and passive emotions but the thing I loved the most was that it related to me... :)

I was definitely that friend who was hurt by another... well... it didn't include falling in love but she did kinda leave me for another group of friends and that taught me a lesson, good things come to an end... I've been through the exact situation as your main character, brushing past and trying my best to ignore her... and I'm trying to let go... and it really does hurt... so I know what it feels to a profound degree! But enough of that!

Man, you are amazing, gifted and super talented! I hope you do publish a book! Really cool!

And in your bio, you mentioned the word petrichor, it was on my spelling list 3 weeks ago at my tuition!

Happy Writing!
SS or whatever you wanna call me!

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𝔻okenai *
11:45 Jun 05, 2021

Hey SS (i think I'll call u this!)

I'm so sorry to hear that you were hurt in any way, shape or form...

I can guarantee you that I have hit dark times in my life. I may not have been in a situation where a friend had left me behind completely, but I had a friend that had grown distant after lockdown.

She had this group of online friends that she always used to answer instead of her irl friends.
Even though I couldn't admit it at the time, I was utterly and completely JEALOUS. When I confronted her about it, she told me they had more in common with her. It hurt me. A LOT.

Even though I managed to fix things up with that friend, I can understand what you're feeling. Hurt. Ignored. I can understand if you want to end this friendship. But if you do still want to patch it up, I can just give you this advice: Don't ignore them like the character in the story. I know that this might be VERY hard. I had ignored people before.

I can admit I'm not EXACTLY good at holding a grudge, but I know that ignoring them didn't make me feel better. This might be a TOTALLY different case with you, but this is my advice. Whether you want to take it is completely up to you.

WHEW, sorry for piling this message up. But, getting off that topic...

THANKS SO MUCH!!! I really appreciate the compliments. I also read some of your stories, and I think they were...

✨AMAZING✨

Just the descriptions, and the vocabulary, and so much more!! It's incredible - I can picture what's going on. I think you should totally write a book too! I would definitely read it.

Also, if you want to talk, feel free to ask me anything!

πŸ•ŠDoki

p.s. OMG YES, petrichor is a unique word. There's no other word to describe what the smell is after rain!

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yeah... it's just... life! Hehe!

I can't say completely behind, I see her every day at school and all and we might have small convos only when it has something to do with work like science projects... we still text and all but yeah... it's distant... And since you said you felt jealous... I feel horrible about myself but at times, there's that void inside me that shows hints of jealousy that she's just moving on ya know? No matter how much I try to get rid of it, it lurks down there and it makes me feel so bad! Hmm... I've attempted to make convos but they end up being awkward, even if in the previous years, we were best friends... I can be good at holding grudges but they usually crumble and this whole year, it was a different story... I'll take your advice :)

WELCOME!

Awww! Thank you! That would be a dream, even tho it takes patience, persistence and 0% procrastination! I'm glad you would like to read it! SO nice of you to say!

I'd LOVE TO TALK TO YOU! You're very... pleasant!

Since we had to use a couple of words from the list in our writing, I used it and it sounded celestial and professional! Ahaha! The smell of rain! You like mangos? SAME HERE!

~SS

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This was such a beautiful story! I loved the vivid descriptions, they definitely made me engrossed in it even more and the emotion you conveyed was really strong :)

Good job!

Notes:
- "You thought I was the problem, that I was feeding you lies." (you mean your not you)

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𝔻okenai *
02:10 Jun 05, 2021

thx so much Rachel!
about the note, in the third person, it is "She thought I was the problem, that I was feeding her lies", so I was talking about telling the 'friend' lies, but thanks anyway for the feedback :)!

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oh whoops. yeah.

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