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Mystery Crime Thriller

        "AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHHHH"

The loud scream made us all jump out of our skins in the middle of the night. Everyone looked around in panic. I and my brother ran to each other looking for our younger sister. "Where is Emma?!" I asked in a hurry. "dunno; I can't find her anywhere" answered Edris looking around anxiously.

               The screams increased in number while getting louder and scarier. "For now let's go see what happened, I'm sure we'll see her", said Edris. We held one of the children running around and asked what happened. "They found a burnt headless body outside the building!!!"

               I and Edris slowly looked at each other and ran outside towards the crowd. As we got closer our anxiety and tension rose up. Just hopelessly repeating in our heads "please let it not be Emma". Crawling through the crowd we made our way to the body. Upon seeing the body all the strength in my body suddenly left, making me fall right that instant. "h… hey… Edric… w… why… does that body… has… e… Emma's clothes…?" Edris asked with a terribly shaking body and voice.

-         "pssst. She was one of those siblings… right?"

+    "yeah. Poor brothers… now they lost their sister too…"

               I heard many whispers from behind me, but couldn't think about anything. My mind was completely blank like an empty page. "th… that's not Emma… right…? TELL ME! SOMEONE PLEASE! TELL ME THAT UNSIGHTLY BODY ISN'T EMMA!!!" screamed Edris as he pulled his hairs and stomped the ground. Everything is turning around my head getting blurry… sounds get far and farther… the last things I remember are people struggling to hold Edris down along with the sound of sirens coming from the distance.

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           Rain pouring down quietly hits the moving black umbrellas in the middle of white gravestones. The caretakers and children paid their respects one by one.

               "I'm not gonna forgive them. Those brutal psychopaths" said Edris clenching his fists tightly and narrowing his eye; I heard him trying his best to shut his sniffling.

               "Now what? If this keeps going one of us is going to be next… if not both of us…" I said with my empty bitter expression. Edris stood there thinking and quietly watching the grave being filled with dirt.

               "Edric. I'm going to find the killer." As Edris said this I jumped for a second. Quickly grabbed his arm and angrily whispered "ARE YOU AN IDIOT?! Even the police don't have the slightest clue about the killer or even his possible motivations! What do you think two kid orphans like us can do?!"

Edris grabbed my collar "BUT EDRIC! They're not us! We're the ones who best know our family! Look around you! Our whole family is lying 6 feet under the ground; all charcoaled and headless!" said Edris breathing heavily and staring right into my eyes. After a few minutes of intensely locking eyes, I gave up.

"sigh. Edris, you're gonna get us both killed." As I agreed to help him search, suddenly I noticed a really weird happy expression on his face. I just hope nothing bad happens....

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               "sigh… so? What exactly was your goal, trying to sneak into my office at 2am?!"

               I and Edris took a guilty look at each other and didn't say anything. Detective Arnold sighed again, rubbed his forehead and said "I know it's really hard losing your parents and then only 3 years later, losing your older sister too, in the Exact same way nonetheless; but believe me. We're doing all we can to find the bastard who did all these. But there isn't even a tiny bit of clue anywhere."

               "But detective Arnold! We can't just sit around doing nothing when our whole family was massacred! At least tell us the basic things you've found. We have the right to know." I said looking straight into the detective's eyes.

               The detective had a pained look on his face. He looked up and said "Never thought the day comes when two 15-year-old kid sit in front of me lecturing me about rights…. In the first place, it's not anything pleasant to hear."

               "We're okay with that!" said Edris as he jumped. "We prefer to know the painful truth rather than knowing nothing at all."

               The detective seemed to be struggling really hard with himself; whether to tell us or not. After a few minutes, he finally started talking "Ugh fine! You shitty kids." I and Edris looked at each other knowing we won. The detective started explaining:

               "As you both know, both of your parents and your sister died the same way; headless and burnt. In the case of your parents, they were home alone while you three were at your friend's house. People first realized the house is on fire. After the firefighters came and put out the fire they found your parent's corpses; headless."

               The detective stopped talking and took a look at me and Edris; checking our situation. Both of us were shaking and sweating like crazy. But I mustered up my courage and asked him to continue. The detective sighed and looked down, then started talking again:

               "After searching the house we found out the fire was intentional. But because of the lack of clues, we couldn't find anything about the victim nor his possible motives. Years passed quietly and the three of you were getting used to living in the orphanage without any actual incident. Until a few days ago when suddenly in the middle of the night someone notices a big fire beside the orphanage building and we found your sister. Headless again. All three people's heads were cut using a cleaver and none of them were found. We can only guess the killer is the same and he's a total psychopath. Also that he should have a real problem with your family."

               After he finished talking there was nothing but silence. After some time passed Edris said "So basically you guys don't know shit!" with a weird expression on his face.

               "And that's exactly what I was saying you shitty brats!" said the detective as he hit his knees standing up.

               -"so let us help you! There should be something we can do!"

               +"shut it! You two have already passed the line. You're gonna spend the night in the cells and first thing in the morning we're going to send you back to the orphanage."

               -"WHAT?! No! We don't want to!"

               +"heh! Do you really think it's up to you?! HEY AGENT STARK! take these two brats to an empty cell."

               Suddenly a huge officer came in and held each of us with one hand. No matter how much we struggled it was no use.

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               "UGH SHIT!" shouted Edris as he kicked a pillow on the floor. "Now what? We're back to square one!" he kept on biting his lips. As Edris walked around the room nervously I sat in a corner, thinking about the possible actions we could take now.

               "We could go to the place of our old house… To check its surroundings. I mean we know that place better than police officers." As I said this Edris stopped and thought for a second; then suddenly turned to me and excitedly said "THAT'S RIGHT! Pick your stuff we're going!"

               -"wait! Now?!"

               +"yeah why not?"

-"Dude are you for real? We just came back from the police station! They're watching us."

+"oh… I forgot about that… OK! We'll go tonight after midnight."

-"ugh I'm really worried about us, with a dumbass like you in lead."

+"hee hee. It'll be fine! We're not gonna do any more dangerous stuff. At least not tonight!"

-" … "

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               Walking down the empty quiet streets once we called home, had a strange lonely feel to it. As we reached the place our house once was, we took out our flashlights and started to look around for any possible clue.

               Hours passed with us finding nothing. "Aaah Aaah this isn't going anywhere." Said Edris as he sat down on the ground. "Maybe we should use our mind more?" I said as I started to think. Suddenly I felt a shadow running behind the buildings. "Edris! I think someone's there. Hurry up! We must follow him!" I told Edris as I started to run behind the buildings in a hurry. "Wait! Edric!" I could feel Edris hurrying to follow behind me. As Edris turned behind the building… BANG!

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"Ugh…" huh…? Why can't I move my hands…? Wait… why am I moving…? I struggled and looked up… "Edric…?"

"Oh, you're awake *dear* brother? It's a little soon but we're almost there!" said Edric as he dragged me from my collar on the floor. What the hell is happening? I looked around and saw a metal pipe in his other hand. Is that blood on the pipe…? "Ugh!" Suddenly I could feel a sharp sting behind my head. "What the fuck are you doing Edric?"

-"ho ho don't worry; you'll know very soon. "

+"where the heck are we even?"

-"ah isn't this place cool? It looks like a buried ancient city under our city. The cooler thing about it is that it has hidden doors and tunnels all around our city. I found this place by chance when I was small."

As I was trying to figure out what the hell he was talking about we seemed to have reached a big room. A super dusty room lighted with torches. As Edric entered the room he then turned towards a wall and tossed me in front of it. I tried hard to get up and sit. Fuck! My whole body hurts. But the moment I looked at the wall all the blood in my body froze.

Three heads all way too familiar were kept on a shelf on that wall. "e… ed… Edric…" I turned towards Edric and saw a collection of multiple cleavers along with a psychopath who was carefully deciding which one to pick. I was stunned. My mind all blank.

Seeing my face Edric laughed and said "Nice expression! I love that. Can't wait to add it to my collection!"

-"c… Collection…? What the fuck is all this…?"

+"haha. Still can't figure out what is going on? The psychopath you were searching for was all along by your side, laughing at your cute pointless struggles."

Saying that he seemed to have chosen one of the cleavers on the wall. Sharped his cleaver and started heading towards me. As he got closer he grabbed me wildly from my hairs. Taking a final look at me saying "Aaah I'm so freakin excited for this one… it looks exactly like mine." all Grinning from ear to ear.

I couldn't process anything he said. I couldn't think about anything. I just knew one thing: I must get away from him. I struggled as hard as I could. "Woah easy there! It'll be over in an instant!" I tossed the dirt from the ground on his face and into his eyes.

"Aaaagh!" with his scream I could release myself from his grip. Looked around the room frantically for the closest thing I could use. Picked one of the torches from the wall and tossed it to his face. "Aaaaaaaaaaaaah!" with his scream came the smell of burnt meat but I couldn't care less. I ran as fast as I could. I had no idea where the fuck I was nor where I was going. I just wanted to get away from that psycho as soon as possible.

After running for some time I couldn't feel my feet. What time is it? Where am I? it's too dark to see any shit. My hands are still tied. I'm too tired to care about anything anymore. As I tried to sit for a little I saw light from distance. Along with people speaking. I hid as fast as I could, trying to listen to them.

"Detective Arnold…?" by recognizing his voice I tossed everything in my head away and ran towards detective crying and screaming his name. After hearing me the detective suddenly turned around with a really worried expression shouting "EDRIS?! Are you ok? Where is your brother? What happened?"

I jumped straight into his arms and caring hug, crying my eyes out. I knew I must explain everything as soon as possible but I just couldn't stop crying.

Just when I started to calm down we felt heat and light coming from one of the tunnels. "AGENT STARK! TAKE EDRIS TO THE SURFACE."

"Wait! I'm coming with you too!" I shouted but no one was listening and Mr.Stark picked me up running towards an exit.

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               From that incident, many years have passed. Turns out detective Arnold was worried we might do something stupid that day; so he had left one of the officers to secretly watch us. And that way he was able to find the way to the underground city and help me. 

No one knows what happened to Edric after the big fire in the underground city. I was adopted by detective Arnold; studied hard and am now a hard-working young detective helping Mr.Arnold.

               Cases come and go and days passed. I still sometimes wonder what happened to Edric. My psychopath twin brother.

               -"DETECTIVE MCGREGOR! Please hurry up here! THIS IS TERRIBLE!"

               +"Yes? What is it?"

               -"IT'S ABOUT DETECTIVE ARNOLD!"

               +"What happened?!"

               -"He was found in his house this morning… "

               +"W… what…?"

               -"that's not all sir… he was found… headless… and burnt… with a message written on the wall with his blood…"

               +" ………… "

               -"Are you alright sir? Don't you need to sit a little?"

               +"n… no… I'm fine. What does the message say?"

               -"It says… 'Did you miss me? *dear* detective?' "

February 06, 2021 01:03

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Gracie Jonas
02:15 Feb 11, 2021

Great job, both creative and creepy.

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Fantasy Maniac
22:20 Feb 11, 2021

Thanks! :D

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