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Jean's Vow

โ€œMonsieur, the all-time pianist, Madame Agustin is inviting you to do a show with youโ€”that is if you want to." The assistant, Andre offered him.ย ย 

โ€œAndre. What have I told you about my relationship with music? I said I donโ€™t ever want to hear it again. That includes not playing it. I havenโ€™t even touched my violin for 10 years. Go away and tell her that I refuse.โ€ Jean Ander replied coldly.ย ย 

โ€œBut Monsieurโ€”โ€ Andre got interrupted by Jean.ย ย 

โ€œDo you want to have no job? Do you want to go home with no money starting from tomorrow? If not, do as I say.โ€ Jean scoffed as he put on his gold chained barrette and walked outside for his daily stroll around the park.ย ย 

Poor Andre started heading back upstairs to get Jeanโ€™s schedule all ready. He remembered, boasting all about Jeanโ€™s violin skills. How hard he had worked for her to even offer a seat for him. His raspy and cold-hearted words still circled around him, in his mind. He couldnโ€™t believe the way Jean had just easily refused. He just couldnโ€™t.ย ย 

If only Monsieur could get over the sad fact, would he ever play his violin again?ย Andre mumbled to himself, as he continued walking up the stairs.ย ย 

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10 years ago...ย ย 

It was a cold, and rainy morning. The couple was living a peaceful life. Mrs. and Mr. Ander were going about on their daily routine. They were very rich couples. Thatโ€™s because Mr. Ander was an all-time famous musician and composer. He had many famous works named after him, many concertos he has written by himself and has been performed by him. His tour de force was the 10-hour-long music he wrote. He has even performed it, without even taking a break. He devoted a lot of time to make his wife happy and playing his instrument. The Ander mansion was never quiet but always filled with music, happy cheers, and excitement.ย ย ย 

Jean Ander was a very well-named and famous musician, not only in Paris but all of France. He has slowly started going to perform in other countries such as Madagascar, Belgium, Finland, United States, Norway, and New Zealand. Many of the times, he has performed solo but has also performed with other famous musicians. His all-time dream was to perform with Franceโ€™s famous pianist, Alexandria Augustin. That was his dream forever. Starting from when he learned to talk, to now, as a grown adult. That could never change, can it?ย ย 

He was living a happy life, with him, his wife, his assistant Andre, his head butler Beau, and his chef Charles. Though he had long wished for a child to also join their family, they never had one, and never wanted to adopt one either. He kind of did feel like he was missing out on whole other life, with giggles and chuckles of children, their mischievous deeds, and watching them grow up into an adult, he soon felt that a quiet life for him was better.ย ย ย 

One day, he and his wife Jules were strolling along a park that was reserved for them.ย ย 

โ€œMa femme Jules,ย how are you doing?โ€ he asked.ย ย 

โ€œMonย mariย Jean, Iโ€™m feeling just alright. Nothing too special today. Though the park looksย excellente! Ha! So beautiful.โ€ she replied and continued to wonder and marvel at the beauty of nature.ย ย ย 

โ€œMon amour, do you think I will ever get a chance to perform with Madame Augustin?โ€ Jean asked as he started kicking the small pebbles and stones on the ground.ย ย ย 

โ€œBienย sรปr! They will me amour, they will. I have a very strong feeling that one day, you will play yourย excellenteย violon piece in front of France. You will make us proud monย mari.โ€ Jules replied.ย ย ย 

โ€œMerci, mon amour. It is because of you, why I get the urge to play violon. You have always stood next to me and supported me in how much you can. Know that I am very grateful for this Jules.โ€ he spoke softly, as they continued strolling around the park.ย ย 

โ€œOne day you will Jean, one day you will,โ€ she spoke again.ย ย 

The couple continued taking their morning walk. The park really did look so beautiful and magnificent, so inspirational that Ander felt like writing a song about it. A tune, a soft and melodious tune about the park. He decided to make his song in a minor scale, making it sound melancholy, yet still a little happy. The major key was going to be a bit too high and exciting, which was not the tone and feel he wanted to create when writing this ensemble.ย ย ย 

He wanted to write about his time with Jules as well. How happy he felt when being with his lovely wife. He honestly couldnโ€™t think of anything better than what he was experiencing right now.ย ย 

โ€œJules, after our walk, do you want to visit the Eiffel Tower? I heard there were fresh, hot, and nicely made croissants!โ€ he asked her, hoping she would agree.ย ย 

โ€œAh Jean, always so fond of croissants. I can help our butler, Beau, and the rest! No need for going there!โ€ Jules spoke, laughing softly.ย ย 

โ€œOh, but you know how much I like croissants! It has been such a long time since it was just us two, spending time together, in the Eiffel Tower mi amour! After all, Paris is all aboutย Iโ€™amour!ย Sโ€™ilย vousย plaรฎt?โ€ Jean begged his wife, and hesitating, she agreed.ย ย 

So, the two were walking outside of the park and towards the street. The Eiffel Tower was only a couple of minutes away from where they live. The walk wasnโ€™t too hectic either. The same old laughing and happy faces they see, and everyone telling everyone Bonjour!ย ย 

โ€œJean, letโ€™s go back home.โ€ Jules pleaded.ย ย 

โ€œMi amour,ย Pourquoi?โ€ Ander asked, looking very confused. โ€œIf you do not want to eat the croissants from there, then you should have told me from the beginning!โ€ he spoke, with a little sorrow in his voice.ย ย 

โ€œNo Jean! It isnโ€™t about the food! Iโ€”I donโ€™t feel good. I cannot walk anymore! Monย mari,ย Aidez-moi!! Help! Merci! Help!โ€ she yelled, and slowly Jules passed out.ย ย 

โ€œOh no...Jules! Jules! Oh,ย hรดpital!โ€ he called out and started wandering to find a hospital for Jules.ย ย 

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Back at home, after the hospital trip...ย ย 

โ€œBeau! Andre! My wife, she...she is ill. The doctor said her last day is tomorrow. She wonโ€™t get to see the world after that! My point of living on this Earth is fading away!โ€ he yelled, sobbing continuously.ย ย 

โ€œMonsieur? How can this ever be possible? No! Monsieur? Are you telling the truth? Madame Jules, is she, is she going to die?" asked the worried assistant.ย ย 

โ€œYโ€”yes. Please, give her some water and a hearty meal. Let her last days of living be splendid. I will compose a piece of music for my Jules. She was myย seulementย Iโ€™amour! I need to do this for her. Now, Beau, Andre, please go. I need some alone time with her.โ€ he spoke, upset, and the two listened to him.ย ย 

Beau and Andre alerted everyone else in the house and told them about her devastating condition. They all decided to take care of her the best they can, and maybe, just maybe they could save Jules from dying.ย ย ย 

Everyone prepared the meals, making everything the Madame enjoyed. They made sure that Jules was comfortable, and they gave her whatever she wished.ย ย ย 

Though everyone in the house was very depressed about her condition, it impacted Jean a lot. He was quickly finding himself in depression, and he couldnโ€™t get out of his state. Andre tried to cheer him up by telling him about Madame Augustin, but now his dreams were all secondary. The only thing that mattered to Jean was his wife. Nothing else. Not even his violin, not even music.ย ย 

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The day she was about to die...ย ย 

โ€œMi amour, I want to play the piece I have worked so hard on for you, and I swear, that after you die, I will not touch my violin again,โ€ he spoke gently, as he began to play his music.ย ย 

Jules was shaking her head, urging him not to give up, but he ignored her. Jules wanted her husband to perform with Madame Augustin, but she was too weak andย tiredย to even speak to him. Her mouth couldnโ€™t move, and sadly, after he finished playing his music, she closed her eyes forever.ย ย 

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The present...ย ย 

After Jean was done with his walk, Beau met him at the front door.ย ย 

โ€œMonsieur, I want to talk to you. Andre told me about your affair with Madame Augustin, and how easily you refused. I want you to perform with her, Monsieur Jean. Please, listen to me. I know you have sworn to never pick up your music, or even not listen to music, but I think this has to change.โ€ he continued, hoping to change his mind about the chance he got.ย ย 

โ€œHow can I Beau? How?โ€ he asked.ย ย ย 

โ€œLet me explain. Remember? It was your dream, Monsieur Jean! You cannot just slide it away, especially when you are this close to achieving it! How can you even think to say no? Poor Andre had waited to talk to Madame Agustin, and it wasnโ€™t so easy. He only got a chance to meet her after waiting in queue for more than a couple of hours! I advise you Monsieur, to rethink your entire life. You have been doing nothing for the past 10 years, other than sulk. Please try to forget about your past. Pleaseโ€”do it for Madame Jules! She never wanted you to give up on your dream! She never ever did! She would like it if you would continue doing what you love Monsieur Jean. Again, I suggest you to please rethink your decision and let Andre know by tomorrow morning because the show is next week.โ€ Beau told him, and he walked to do his jobs.ย ย 

Should I start playing my violin again?ย Jean kept on thinking, as he hung his coat and barrette on the hanger.ย ย ย 

The entire time he was thinking about what Beau had just told him. How correct he was. He was the one who chose to waste his dreams, not Jules. She never wanted him to stop playing. He wondered and thought about how he has been acting like a fool this entire time. How terrible he behaved to Andre and the rest!ย ย ย 

He had to change everything somehow, and he knew a perfect way.ย ย 

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Later that same day...ย ย 

โ€œBeau, Andre! Please come. I want you all to invite everyone and ask them to come to the gathering room. I have a surprise in store for all of you.โ€ Jean exclaimed, and his words also surprised the two men.ย ย 

โ€œRight away Monsieur!โ€ Andre spoke.ย ย 

โ€œOui Monsieur!โ€ Beau said, and they both rushed around the house to invite everyone.ย ย 

โ€œAndre, what do you think Monsieur is planning? What surprise does he mean?โ€ Beau asked Andre in confusion.ย ย 

โ€œI donโ€™t know either Beau. But I think it is going to be exciting! Just hear the excitement of his voice! It must be something good, I am pretty sure about that no doubt! Well, letโ€™s just call everyone and tell them about this grand invitation.โ€ Andre said, and Beau nodded his head, and they continued calling everyone.ย ย ย 

While they were calling everyone, Jean opened his violin case and put the stand in front of him. He rosined his bow properly, and put his shoulder rest, getting all ready to play. He stood up, and as he set it, everyone came downstairs, looking pleasantly surprised.ย ย ย 

โ€œMonsieur! You areโ€”you are playing your violin! Oh my!โ€ one of the chefs yelled.ย ย 

โ€œYes, Louis! Yes! That is right! Andre, I accept your request. I will perform with Madame Augustin. But first, I want to give you all a treat! This year, I will continue to practice my violin, and there is no doubt about it!โ€ he yelled.ย ย 

โ€œYes Monsieur!โ€ everyone cheered him on.ย ย 

As he was playing, he thought about his wife.ย ย 

This is for you, Jules. I made this vow for you.ย Jean thought and continued to play.ย ย 

~The End~ย 

January 02, 2021 17:46

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Hello everyone! I hope you're having a great day! Some things to share about this story: 1. Honestly, I spent a lot of time coming up with the idea for this story and writing it, so I hope it paid off! 2. I wanted the setting to be in France, just for a change. There are some French words in there, so if you don't know them, please do ask me! 3. Jean Ander had the instrument violin because I know how to play it, so if you wanted another instrument to be the main in this story, well, sorry to disappoint you! Hopefully you enjoyed this sto...

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That Asian Creep
13:35 Jan 03, 2021

Hi Haripriya, I love your story, and your new Reedsy pen-name! What made you change your name? Where did you get the inspiration from? Sorry, too many questions ๐Ÿ˜‚

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Hello Sahana! Thanks! Actually, I like the color Lavender a lot, and the first name thought of when thinking of Lavender was Laila, so that's why. The reason I wanted to change my name is simple: for 2021. I got inspiration from other bio's and my favorite color. I hope I answered your questions! I don't mind you asking them at all! :)

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Lenox Ndeda
17:34 Jan 10, 2021

Surely the story is magnificently set, cascading from unknown to much intricacies enunciated thereof. Great job I say, but do I say, the angler said to the worm, let's go fishing.

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19:06 Jan 13, 2021

It did pay off!

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17:54 Jan 12, 2021

Oh wow! That's an amazing story!!! If you don't mind would you read mine? It's called "The Re-Building of Me". Honestly though, I love the French setting, and the way your characters talked and though made them sound real, as if they were going to come to life!

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Aww, thank you so much Ada! I am glad that you liked the French setting! Also, I would love to Ada! :)

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Claudia Morgan
10:37 Jan 03, 2021

WOOOH FRANCE IS THE BEST COUNTRY FOR CREATIVE WRITING! sorry...lol. I loved the story and the emotion. Congrats ๐Ÿ’•

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Haha, I totally understand the caps. Also, I am so glad you liked the story! :)

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19:11 Jan 13, 2021

Whoah. Haripriya, you really went above and beyond on this story! SO bittersweet, I loved it all! ๐Ÿค

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Coco Longstaff
01:40 Jan 03, 2021

I love it! France, how romantic! Wait a minute! Did you make this persons name Jean because a name included in the address of the cite de la musique is Jean?!

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Hi Coco! I am so glad you liked the story! Also, no I didn't, I guess it was completely a coincidence! :)

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Coco Longstaff
03:59 Jan 03, 2021

WOW! That is so cool and such an amazing coincidence!

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Akshaya Sutrave
06:14 Jan 09, 2021

Hi Laila! I loved the idea of setting this story in France! I don't know French, but I do understand what a few words mean, like 'Merci' and so on! :) I liked the violin concept and how you incorporated all this into your story! Great work!! :)

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Hello Akshaya! I am so glad you liked the setting I made the characters live in! If you didn't know some of the words, please do tell me and I will surely answer them! But, I am so glad that you liked the violin concept I put it the story. Since I know how to play violin, I would more things more accurately than if I were going to do some other instrument in. So, that was the whole reason for that. (I actually debated between piano or violin, but ended up choosing violin!) So glad that you liked the story Akshaya! :)

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Akshaya Sutrave
15:03 Jan 09, 2021

Of course!! :) I liked the violin concept, too, and yes, we can always write better about things we personally know/experience! Could you tell me what these words mean? Ma femme Mon mari Mi amour Aidez-moi

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Ma femme-my wife Mon mari- my husband mi amour- my love aidez-moi- help me Thank you, and I hoped this helped!

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Akshaya Sutrave
15:23 Jan 09, 2021

Thank you so much, Laila! It definitely helped! :)

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