The summer road trip.

Submitted into Contest #99 in response to: Write a story about characters going on a summer road trip.... view prompt

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Adventure Horror

   THE SUMMER ROAD TRIP:



It was a start of summer vacation and five friends: Erin, Naylie, Leo, Hanna and Alex, decided to go on a road trip. They didn’t know things would go entirely wrong. It started fine, acctualy fantastic. They rented a motorhome and packed their things. Also, they wanted to go camping so they found abandoned place in a forest. There are rumors that nobody came back once they went in it. They were the creeps of the school and adventerists themselves so they went for it. On a Friday night they meet up at Leo’s place. Everybody gathered their stuf, packed it and Hanna drove away. They stopped at the nerest gas station and also the most creppy one. The owner’s name is Joshua. He is a creep and a weirdo. They got some coke and chocolate bars and went forward. The path was very long so they stopped at abandoned cabin in the middle of the woods. They snuck in it and stole some food since they already ate all of the chocolate bars. Everybody went to bed. Next morning they woke up and Erin was missing. There were only two girls left: Naylie and Hanna and two boys: Leo and Alex. They went searching for him but didn’t find him. Hanna got the most terrible idea. What if he is dead! She screamed and rushed to tears. The four friends were looking for him for days and when they didn’t find him after a week they organized a search. The whole city went looking for him and then out of a sudden an old man that was on a search screamed. Everybody went to him and there was Erin’s body. It was covered in blod and it had a knife in his head and cheast. Naylie fainted. She woke up in the hospital three days later. After the death of the boy known as Erin people in the town got afraid that the same fate will happen to them. After a week or two it was time for Erin’s funreal. The whole city came. Things were pretty quiet for a week and then the police station started getting a lot of missing person reports. Almost every week there was a search and every time they founded a body. It went on for about a month and then the mayor mr. Liver spoke and said: It is offical, we have a serial killer on the loose. A week after that mr. Liver was found dead too the same way as Erin. Leo started to think. Four friends meet up at Leo’s house and made a pact that they are gonna honnor Erin and found out who killed him. Next week they had a party at Hanna’s house. They waited for Hanna’s parents to fall asleep and snuck to her fathers’ sherrif office. They stole some files of the reports and read them. Alex got the idea: Guys isn’t there something sketcy about the murders they were all oround one kilometer away of the place that we wanted to go to. Hanna said: We need to go on the road trip. The next day they went. They stole a car, bought a few snacks and drove away. They stopped at the place were they left the van the last time and went in it. It was covered in blood. They were creeped out. Next moring they continued on the road. Suprisingly no one was missing or dead. They continued and ten minutes later they heard a scream and realised that Hanna was missing. Leo drove towards the scream and saw Hanna laying next to a girl almost dead. Leo said while shaking: Did you just kill her? Hanna looked at him shockingly and said: No, how can you even think that. I saw a girl laying here with the knife and a man running. I stayed with her and tried to make her comfortable. They luckily packed up a tent and slept with the dead body. Next morning Alex was missing. Hanna said she would go looking for him and went to get some water. Naylie and Leo were there alone. Naylie said: isn’t she acting all weird? What if yesterday there was no man. I mean if the girl was already dead when she founded her, she would run after him. Leo took a breath. She is the killer! What do we do?, said Leo screaming quietly. Naylie said: For starters stop panicking and act normal she is coming. Hanna said: Stop with the act I know you know. Naylie and Leo started running and sreaming for help. They got home and there was every single citizen standing there. They got Hanna behind bars. Leo and Naylie came to visit her and she asked: How? How did you dumies found out? Leo said: You see I knew you were acting weird so me and your dad made a plan. First he put the car we could stole then he gave us these little devices so he could hear whatever you, me or Naylie said. Naylie asked: Why did you kill all thoose innocent people? Hanna replied: My best friend doesn’t know. Well if you must know I did it for attention I did it for this town. Last month this was an old and boring town and today this is a new and mystirious town all over the news. Naylie shouted: You are a psyco! In the future things changed. Naylie knew that Hanna wanted to escape and kill more people. Naylie and Leo started dating, finished high school and then decided to go on a road trip. They visited all the countries in the United States and in one of them Leo proposed. They got married and feared that another scenario like that one with Hanna never happens again. Hanna will once escape the prison and then she will kill evreybody who was standing in her way. in the meantime Leo and Naylie had two kids who grew knowing to always pick your friends carefully. Leo and Naylie are still afraid of Hanna or somebody worse coming to attack.


June 21, 2021 17:33

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Kristy Reynolds
03:18 Jul 01, 2021

Interesting story. I would be careful to proofread well. There are several typos/misspellings and run on sentences but the story idea is a good one. Keep writing :)

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Zala Dobnik
19:59 Jul 01, 2021

Thank you for your answer. I do not speak english were I am living so it is harder to write since I am still learning english

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Kristy Reynolds
14:27 Jul 02, 2021

Then you are doing very well so far! I can't imagine trying to write in a foreign language.

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