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Fiction

Note: part 2 to “love, X” so if you want, listen to Molly by Chase Atlantic lol. Sorry about the song

The light flickers, and she walks out of the other dark room, all alone.

She watches me, walks over and sits in my arms.

What does she do next?

She cries.

Everything I hoped wasn't true comes out of her mouth. She says it all, not stopping to spare me from pain.

But she's perfect, she's magic.

She was the only one there for me, when no one even looked at me, she tried to make me better but she couldn't.

I got up, and left, than got in my car and drove, because why waste my time if there is nothing left?

Molly.

Molly.

Molly.

You should be here.

Why did you lie to me?

You need to be here.

But your the one who turned me into an addict.

Everyone leaves,

I thought she was perfect.

She was all I needed.

Wanted.

Had.

And now my trust is broken.

And it sits right next to my heart.




June 08, 2022 19:23

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Leo Luzvardi
00:52 Jun 23, 2022

Hey Jex, been a while since we talked. How’s your summer?

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Jexica Marcell
13:03 Jul 27, 2022

Good. Todays execution day.... not excited :(

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Leo Luzvardi
14:50 Jul 27, 2022

Oh calm down its not that bad.

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Nicole Of 2022
19:32 Jun 09, 2022

CONGRATS ON PASSING YOUR CLASSES!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! WHOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO

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Ace Quinnton
23:20 Jun 08, 2022

Again, this is good. But instead of just very mini short stories, could you flesh it out like it's an actual story? More backstory, more DRAMA, more intel on the characters please. It's up to you if you'd like to do this, but in my opinion, just basing the story completely off the song makes it quite bland to be perfectly honest.

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Jexica Marcell
23:41 Jun 08, 2022

omg yes i was going to fix this but i wrote these in class and I have a ton of things going on lately lol. tysm for the feedback!!!!

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Ace Quinnton
23:49 Jun 08, 2022

No problem mate. Have a nice day/afternoon/night.

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23:54 Jun 29, 2022

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Jexica Marcell
13:03 Jul 27, 2022

I DOOOOOO

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05:17 Jul 28, 2022

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Jexica Marcell
17:32 Jul 28, 2022

yesssssss

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