Paradise

Submitted into Contest #241 in response to: Start your story with an unexpected betrayal.... view prompt

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Fiction Drama

I'm floating naked in an infinity pool overlooking the Indian Ocean. Having just admired the sunset, I'm mesmerized by billions of stars blinking on overhead. A soft sea breeze moves the warm humid air. The wine is cold and crisp.


"What a lovely view." His voice is rich, soft and has a hint of a smile.


I'm busted!


But let me start at the beginning.


Eight months ago, Alex took me out for lunch at a coffee shop near his office. We both had to be back at work, so lunch was going to be quick. He said since it was my birthday, he didn't want to wait till the weekend. Just as the waitress put the bill on the table, Alex handed me a stack of papers. The top one had among others, the word divorce in the header.


"What's this?" I was confused. This does not look like the birthday gift I had been hoping for.


He rolled his eyes. "I'm divorcing you, That's what."


Nine years ago, I married my high school sweetheart. He wanted to go to law school, I wanted to major in English. I took a job as a hotel maid, instead. Cleaned toilets, changed sheets and left little chocolates on pillows. I often worked double shifts and picked up odd hours in room service. My wages paid the rent, utilities, food and his textbooks. His scholarship didn't cover much, so he applied for student loans. When he graduated with a bachelors, his parents took him to Jamaica for two weeks. My boss wouldn't give me the time off. Said I could quit and reapply when I came back. So, I missed that trip and many holidays.


Yes, I know now, I was naive, gullible and stupid.


I worked while Alex was in law school. We saw even less of each other; his schedule was as demanding as mine. He promised that 'my time would come'. We agreed that I would continue working for 'a little while longer', since he wanted to make a start on paying down his loans. Apparently, entry level lawyers don't make all that much.


When he looked as if he was about to leave the restaurant, I stood, rested my hands on the rickety table, accidentally splashing ice water on his crotch, and leaned toward him.


I did not use my indoor voice.


"You want a divorce? After I've worked my fingers to the bone for the past nine years, putting you through law school? You want out now? Even for a lawyer that's low!"


"Don't make a scene, Connie." He hissed.


"Not a scene! You take me out for my birthday, and give me divorce papers! I'm more than entitled to make a scene. How dare you!"


There was a smattering of applause, some boos and hisses.


"Sit down and listen. I've had the locks changed, but the landlord will let you in to pack your stuff." He then walked out, leaving me with the bill.


Still in shock, staring at the thick pack of papers, I barely noticed when someone sat down across from me.


"Who are you?"


"Give me ten dollars and I'll be your lawyer." She handed me her card. Cheryl Fabelhaft, Attorney at Law. As it turned out, when you hire a lawyer in a coffee shop, you get what you pay for. Alex and his friends at the new law firm - he hadn't told me he had switched firms - were much better at their job than Miss Cheryl Fabelhaft.


When I went to the apartment to pick up my belongings, I noticed that Alex had been very busy labeling everything there as being his, except for my clothes and toiletries. Later that week, I learned that he had all but emptied our bank account.


For months I slept on my friend Agie's couch.


Alex and his cronies scheduled meeting after meeting. I had to take time off for each of them. The fifth time I missed work, my supervisor told me not to bother coming back the next day. Each time we met, Alex blindsided me with more twisted facts. He claimed, for instance, that since I had co-signed on the loans and, at the time, had been the sole breadwinner, the loans were mine to pay.


That's when I started fantasizing about murder.


By the time the divorce was final, I had less than four hundred dollars to my name, owned my grandmother's old-but-never-antique curio cabinet and was responsible for half his student loans. More, if he defaulted. I had no doubt he would.


Not long after that I saw the ad.


Come work in Paradise, an exclusive resort.

Premium compensation, health care, great working conditions and many perks.

A variety of positions available.


When you are huddling at the back door to Hell, just to stay warm, going to Paradise sounds pretty good. And you don't read the fine print. I was hired as housekeeper for one of the private cottages.


During the flight from New York to Dubai, the four-year-old girl next to me, decided that my lap was nicer than her mother's. Mom did not seem to be offended. In Dubai, we were flown by private jet to the larger of the three islands for orientation, which was lengthy and boring with lots of paperwork.


The housekeepers were given thick dossiers on the owners of our assigned cottage. I had been assigned to cottage four, which belonged to Mr. W. The dossier listed his food and beverage preferences and any allergies. There even was a detailed outline on how to unpack his luggage, which had been send ahead. How to organize his closet and where to store his toothpaste and other such important tasks.


All in all, I was feeling pretty optimistic about the job. Apparently, Mr. W. traveled alone, all his likes and dislikes were clearly spelled out for me. I just had to put his favorite dishes on the table and clean up after him. I had done this for the past nine years. How complicated could this be?


Finally, we were ferried to our island and given a brief tour. We had a glimpse of the tennis courts, golf course and helipad. Those of us who would be live-in staff were dropped off at our "cottage", a very fancy -two or -three-bedroom villa. Each with its private beach and pier.


Cottage four had two luxurious Master suites. Mr. W.'s luggage, as promised, was waiting for me to unpack. The kitchen was a chef's dream. Unfortunately, I was not a chef. The rest of my day was spent unpacking Mr. W's luggage, stocking the fridge and pantry and finally, storing my meager belongings in the teensy housekeeper's apartment behind the kitchen.


I had been told that Mr. W. would not arrive till the weekend. So, once I was finished with my chores, I decided to open a bottle of wine and take a swim in the pool off the living room.


"What a lovely view." His voice is deep, soft and has a hint of amusement.


I barely stifle a scream and whirl around. Smiling, while standing in all his glory at the edge of the pool, is Mr. W.

Once you have seen the Taj Mahal, the National Monument, the Space Needle or the Eiffel Tower, you can't unsee them.


If Mr. W does not fire me this minute, I believe Paradise has just become a whole lot more complicated.


TBC?

March 15, 2024 02:56

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Crymes King
10:12 Mar 20, 2024

Dope story. #Salutes from DC

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Trudy Jas
10:17 Mar 20, 2024

Thank you, Zuri. I'm glad you liked it.

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Stevie Burges
08:24 Mar 26, 2024

Thanks Trudy. I was getting so angry with Alex - I too was thinking of murder. So I'll hold him down and you can do the deed! Well yes, TBC! How does Mr W compare to the dreadful Alex? I wait with baited breath. Excellent read.

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Trudy Jas
12:12 Mar 26, 2024

Thank you, Stevie. :-) As cathartic as it would be to do away with Alex (and thanks for the off of complicity), Mr. W will sic his (much more experienced) lawyers on him. As to how W compares to A that would like comparing Disney to Pay -for, if you get my drift. :-) Thanks for reading me.

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Gideon Bleak
01:14 Mar 22, 2024

That was fun :)

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Trudy Jas
02:02 Mar 22, 2024

Thank you, Gideon. Just wish Reedsy would let me show you how much fun they're having "off screen". :-)

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Linda Kenah
18:53 Mar 17, 2024

I loved this, Trudy. What a fun read, especially the ending. I hope, in the future, her ex gets a little of his own medicine!

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Trudy Jas
19:15 Mar 17, 2024

Thank you, Linda. Would let him get away with it? Never! :-) I'm glad you enjoyed it.

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Harry Stuart
18:47 Mar 17, 2024

TBC…is a must. Great story, Trudy! Has me thinking of some ideas for my next one.

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Trudy Jas
19:17 Mar 17, 2024

Thanks, Harry. And yes, I'm 5 chapters into it. Unfortunately, they are a bit hotter than Reedsy would allow. Glad to help out, tho. LOL

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Peyton Fleek
14:14 Mar 17, 2024

I wasn’t expecting the end haha! I hope paradise treats her well

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Trudy Jas
16:16 Mar 17, 2024

Thanks, Peyton. Rest assured, Mr. W. and Paradise will take good care of her. ;-)

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Jessie Laverton
14:37 Mar 16, 2024

That’s a very fun twist at the end, although I feel like she’s still in a very vulnerable position, I hope it works out well for her!

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Trudy Jas
15:15 Mar 16, 2024

Thank you, Jessie. Yes, but rest assured, she'll be okay. More than okay. ;-)

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Jessie Laverton
15:36 Mar 16, 2024

Oh good! Maybe she’ll see one day that the divorce was just part of the master plan :-)

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Krissa Svavars
12:23 Mar 16, 2024

Screaming at the computer screen in frustration good. How I wish she could have one-upped that ex of hers.

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Trudy Jas
13:25 Mar 16, 2024

LOL Thank you, Krissa, By the end of the tale (and it's a little too hot for Reedsy) she'll be landing on her feet, wearing Louboutin's how's that?

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Krissa Svavars
15:29 Mar 16, 2024

That is just about perfect!!!

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Rebecca Detti
11:00 Mar 16, 2024

Ooh I loved your story Trudy! Gosh I hope to read the follow up. So sad for your main character that she was completely blindsided by divorce and her loyalty to her husband! I hope Mr W turns out to be a Robert Redford lookalike and she has a wonderful relationship with him!

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Trudy Jas
13:30 Mar 16, 2024

:-) Thanks Rebecca. And yes, maybe I need to revamp chapter 2 and on, but they are (just a tad) too explicit for Reedsy. But rest assured, she'll be okay, in the end.

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Rebecca Detti
15:27 Mar 19, 2024

Well hello! Look forward to reading the next chapters Trudy! 😊

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Alexis Araneta
05:21 Mar 15, 2024

AAAAAGHHH ! Why do I have the feeling I know who Mr. A is...and that Connie is now in a bind because you can not murder your employer ? Such an intriguing story, Trudy. Once again, you made a gripping tale that I just had to keep reading. Lovely job !

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Trudy Jas
09:38 Mar 15, 2024

You're on the right track, maybe. (wink) - besides who says you can't murder your boss? Thank you, Stella, for reading my stuff.

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Alexis Araneta
05:21 Mar 15, 2024

AAAAAGHHH ! Why do I have the feeling I know who Mr. A is...and that Connie is now in a bind because you can not murder your employer ? Such an intriguing story, Trudy. Once again, you made a gripping tale that I just had to keep reading. Lovely job !

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Ty Warmbrodt
05:20 Mar 15, 2024

Divorce always a betrayal.

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Trudy Jas
09:39 Mar 15, 2024

Yes, it is! Thank you Ty.

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Mary Bendickson
05:18 Mar 15, 2024

Hope Mr A is not Alex.

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Trudy Jas
09:41 Mar 15, 2024

No, he's not. After all what young snot-nosed lawyer can afford a 2nd (or 3rd) home in the Indian ocean? But I see your point. Changed it to Mr. W. Thank you, Mary.

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Jenny McKay
04:04 Mar 15, 2024

So intriguing. Can’t wait to see what happens next and who wins in the end…

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Trudy Jas
09:43 Mar 15, 2024

Thank you, Jenny. Ha, that would be chapter two, Reedsy may not like that one. :-D

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