Deal With The Devil-By Ava Walls

Submitted into Contest #215 in response to: Write a story about someone making a deal with the devil.... view prompt

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Fiction Fantasy Thriller

Here's my story.

Three years ago, it was my sixteenth birthday.

Times were hard.

Mother was in jail, father was drowning in debt, my brother just died in a car accident, and my younger sister was getting into many physical fights in school.

I was the only non-troublemaker in my house.

My birthday was sad. No cake, no one to sing happy birthday, no presents, no mother, no brother, no friends, no family around. Just me and all my thoughts.

Sometimes I wish I had a normal life.

The only person that keeps me sane is my best friend Luca.

Luca is a great person. Wouldn’t even hurt a fly.

I went to school on my birthday. It was Tuesday. He ran right up to me and gave me a bear hug. Wished me a happy birthday then ran off to class.

I gave myself a short smile then went to class as well.

My teacher took attendance and kept staring at me. He was a little weird. He called my name I said here and he then wished me happy birthday.

I said thank you.

He started teaching yet still kept looking at me weirdly. I skipped by it.

A couple of minutes later the bell rang and my teacher watched me as I left. I tried not to notice. 

“Hey Dan! Are you good?”Luca asked me.

“Yes,”I kept looking back at my last class.

“Are you sure?”

“Are you free after school?”

“Uh yea. Why do you ask?”

“Can you stay here after school?”

“Yea. I guess I can.”

“Meet me at my locker when the day is done.”

“Okay.”

After that I walked to my next class. I was a minute late but I don’t care.

The day went by and finally it was the end of the day.

I bolted to my locker.

Luca was already there. 

“So what’s up Dan?”he asked me.

“We need to spy on Mr Morse,”I replied.

“What! Why?”

“He kept staring at me weirdly the entire class.”

“Yea, but that’s just him.”into

“I just have a weird feeling about him. Please help me out man.”

“You’re lucky it’s your birthday. What do we do first?”

“We sneak into his car.”

Luca looked at me.

“We can’t sneak into his car. It will set off an alarm.”

“Don’t worry. He keeps his car unlocked.”

“How do you know this?”

“My dad dropped me off at school early a couple of days ago. Mr Morse gets here around eight thirty. I saw him. He didn;t lock his car.”

“Maybe he forgot.”

“Well we might as well check. You know, just in case.”

Luca looked at me. He wasn’t sure what he put himself into.

Me and Luca walked outside to where the teachers park their cars. I found Mr Morse's car and led Luca to it.

I jiggled the trunk handle and it opened!

“Get in!”I harshly whispered to Luca.

“What! We’re hopping into his trunk!”Luca announced.

“Shut up man! Someone might hear you! Hop in the stupid trunk.”

“Fine!”

Luca slowly went into the trunk. So slowly I finally pushed him.

“God you’re slow.”

He rolled his eyes and I jumped into the trunk.

It was cramped inside his small car. Bareilly any room to move. Almost no room to breathe.

“When is he going to get her?”Luca complained.

“Any minute. Hush up.”I told him.

We waited for a few more minutes. Then we hear a car door open and metal keys clinking together.

“You need to stay very quiet,”I whispered to Luca.

He nodded.

The car engine started. We felt every movement in the car.

Ten minutes later the car stopped and Mr Morse got out of the car.

Me and Luca waited a few minutes to open the trunk.

When we thought it was safe we opened it wide enough we could squeeze out and hit the concrete ground.

“We’re at his house. Hide in those bushes. We’ll see what he is doing through his windows,”I said to Luca.

“Okay,”Luca said timidly.

We snuck over to the side of Mr Morse’s house and peered through the window.

We carefully watched everything Mr Morse did. Obviously when he went into the bathroom or his bedroom we didn't go. I think that would be a little ring.

Thirty minutes later Luca’s phone rang.

It was his mom. He had to answer.

“I have to go. My mom wants me home,”Luca said.

“Okay. You go. I’m going to stay here.”

“Are you sure?”

“I’m sure. Tell her I said hi.”

“I will. See you tomorrow.”

Luca ran off. I still crouched into the bushes. 

When I looked back into the window, I couldn’t see Mr Morse. The bathroom light was off and his bedroom door was still open. Some reason every time he goes into his room he closes the door.

All of a sudden I felt a cold, dry, boney hand grab my shoulder.

“Hello Dan. Can I help you?”Mr Morse looked down at me.

“Mr Morse. What’s up? Yea, I wanted to ask you a question on the homework that you assigned today,”luckily he did give us homework today.

“Then where is your homework?”

“In my school bag. I didn’t want it to get ripped up by these bushes.”

“Why are you in my bushes Dan?”

“I fell.”

“Ah. How about you come inside? I can answer all your questions on your homework.”

“Thank you.”

Mr Morse had his hand still on my shoulder leading me into his house.

He let me sit in this uncomfortable chair in his living room.

“Now, what can I help you with, Dan?”

I quickly pulled out the homework he gave out.

“Question four Mr Morse. I don’t understand it. Math is hard for me.” 

Mr Morse explained the problem to me.

I stayed there till I was done with my homework.

Mr Morse kept giving these looks the entire time.

“I knew you were the one,”Mr Morse cracked a laugh.

“What? What are you talking about?”I looked at him.

“I know why you’re really here. You were spying. Made Luca come with you.”

“That’s not why you said that. Is it?”

“I knew you were clever. No, I’ve had my eye on you for a while now.”

“Who are you Mr Morse? I can tell you’ve been off. Well I only saw that you were off today but still.”

“Me. I killed Mr Morse.”

“Then who are you? Why do you look exactly like Mr Morse?”

“I. Am. The. Devil.”

“The devil?”

“Yes boy. Now listen to me.”

His eyes turned red, but with a gold speck in his eye. He grinned. The skin he disguised himself as started to peel showing his true red self. Horns grew out of his skull. 

I looked into his eyes and my mind blanked.

“Are you listening boy?”the devil asked me.

“I’m always listening to you,”I replied. I had no control on what I was saying.

“You do as I say. You kill when I tell you to. If you refuse well then you’ll be dragged down here with me. You got that?”

“Of course master.”

“Good. Now sign this.”

A black contract with red shading, blood dripping off it appeared in front of me.

A crow feather quill popped into my hand.

I had no control. I signed it.

The devil grinned then I woke up from whatever was happening.

“What just happened?”I said, looking around at my surroundings.

“You just made a deal with the devil.”

“What! What did I agree to?”

“You just agreed to kill or be dragged down here with me.”

“Well I’m not doing it.”

“You signed a contract Dan. You refuse and I have proof to drag you down.”

I looked at the devil. I scowled at him.

He was smiling. It was a huge smile. The sharp teeth he had glinted in the lights that hung above.

“Go away now Dan. I come to get you when I want you to kill.”

I grabbed my things and headed to the door.

“Also remember. You tell anyone about this. You’ll be dragged down with me too.”

“Yes sir,”I replied.

I walked out his door then to my house.

When I got to my house my father was already there. Not usual.

I opened my front door and saw my dad at the kitchen table.

“Hey father. You’re home early,”I said.

“Helle Dan. Just finished up at the office early today. Didn’t feel like sitting there for another hour so I decided to come back. Anyways, how was your day son?”

I paused for a moment. “It was good. People were being annoying and my teachers were being obnoxious.”

“This is why I am happy I’m not in middle school anymore.”

“It’s exciting sometimes.”

“Well, I’m making dinner in a few moments. Can you go check on your sister? I grounded her again. She got into another fight in school.”

“Sure.”

I walked upstairs and into my sister's room.

“Shelby?”I knocked on the door.

“Get out!”she shouted.

Loud music was playing in her room.

“I just came to talk.”

“Everyone comes to talk. Then five minutes later they’re yelling at me. Next thing I know I’m grounded. So sure. Come and talk to me.”

“I’m not father.”

“I know you're not Dan. What do you want?”

“I just came to check on you.”

“Well you have. Now leave!”

She pointed to the door.

I turned my back to her room and shut the door behind me.

I walked across the hall and into my room.

When I walked in I was spinning, I felt like falling.

“Dan,”the devil’s voice came into my ear.

“Yes?”I crossed my hands.

“Listen.”

“Of course I’m listening. You said my name.”

“There is someone at the creek. No one else is there. Kill this man.”

“As you wish.”

I grabbed my bag and went to the kitchen. Father wasn't there yet. I heard him in the bathroom.

I quickly grabbed a knife, shoved it in my bag, then left a note on the kitchen table telling my father I left again but will be back before dinner.

It took ten minutes to walk to the creek. I saw the man.

He was no younger than fifty, gray hair, pale skin. He was just sitting beside the creek.

I couldn’t believe what I was about to do.

I pulled out the knife from my bag and walked behind the man. 

He looked calm and at peace. I’m about to ruin his life. His family's life. He probably has kids who still need him and a wife that he loves.

My hand was shaking. I couldn’t keep the knife steady.

Then I did it. Straight into the man's back, where he then collapsed into the creek face first.

I quickly washed off the blood from my knife off in the creek then ran back home. 

I didn’t look back.

When I got home I put the knife back without my father noticing and ran up to my room.

“Good job Dan. I didn’t think you had it in you,”the devil said in my ear.

“You’re terrible,”I answered.

“Really! No kidding, I'm terrible. I am the devil for a reason.”

Months went by. I kept having to kill and kill. I hated it.

The entire time I always wanted to shout at the devil. “NO! I’m not doing it.” “Or stop!” If I did. I would die.

I think I deserve to die right now.

The people I killed had lives. Families. Friends. I took that all the way. I wasn’t only killing the person I was killing part of the hearts of the people who loved them.

I was a terrible person.

No one caught me. No one knew who I was. 

I remember watching the news with my father one day and it showed all the killings that happened in that past few months. 

I panicked.

I tried hiding it but my father always asked me if I was okay.

I would always shake my head yes then turn back to the tv.

The last kill stopped me.

It was a few weeks after Halloween and I was talking to one of my friends when I heard the devil's voice in my ear.

I said I needed to go to the bathroom and ran off.

I got to the bathroom. I knew I couldn't start talking randomly by myself so I went into a private bathroom.

“You really shouldn’t talk to me when I am in school or with my friend.”I said to the devil.

“Oh stop complaining. Now I need to kill someone,”the devil said.

“Really. It’s not like you ever wanted to just talk to me for fun.”

“I need you to kill…”

The name he said stuck to me. It was hard to imagine what he just told me.

He wanted me to kill..Luca!

“I can’t. I can’t kill my best friend.”

“I bet you can. Just kill him. He is an annoying one to teach. Goodness, all he does is talk to Freddy.”

“I can’t kill him. He’s my best friend!”

“Do it, and you will be free.”

His voice faded away and I was left there to think.

I could never kill Luca. How would I ever attempt on killing him?

Hours passed and I knew I needed to kill him.

I called Luca telling him to meet me at the lake. 

The lake was a little lake that no one ever went to.

Luca agreed and told me he will leave his house in a few minutes. 

I left a couple minutes before.

I was at the lake a few minutes before Luca.

When he got there he had his fishing pole.

As he was fishing I was pacing back and forth.

I finally got the courage.

I pulled out my knife from my bag and held it above Luca.

Then…. I broke down in tears.

Luca looked back at me.

“Are you okay?”he asked me.

“No,”I simply replied.

“Why? What’s wrong?”

“I was going to kill you.”

“What!”

“I was caught after you left Mr Morse house. He revealed to me that he killed Mr Morse and was the devil. He hypnotized me and made me sign a contract. If I didn’t kill then I was going to be sent down with him.”

“He told you to kill me!?”

“Yes. I just couldn’t.”

Then he showed up.

“You forgot what was the other thing I said with the contract,”the devil said behind me.

“What would that be?”I said.

“You tell anyone you will be sent down here with me.”

I turned around to him. He grabbed my ankle and opened a black hole to the underworld.

“Please don’t,”I cried.

“Say goodbye to Luca,”the devil grinned.

I was dragged down. The last thing I heard of the outside world was Luca’s cries. He pleads to let the devil let go of me.

I’ll never see my sister, my father, or my mother who soon will get out of prison again.

Goodbye world. 

September 15, 2023 00:36

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Eric Smith
00:42 Sep 21, 2023

Nice story Ava. I always knew there was something off about math teachers. I enjoyed the angsty teenage feel of the story and teenage dialogue. I would suggest keeping things simple and sticking to details that help the story along. It seemed a bit confusing at times. But overall, you gave your tale a moody feel and stuck with that the whole way. Keep writing.

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