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Drama Thriller

โ€˜Oh God, Oh God. Shoot! Mum and Dad that- theyโ€™re doing it again'. โ€˜Oh Lord, help'!ย 

This was the voice of Daisy McDonald. She had gray eyes. One in a million they say. She was one in a million. She could have been the next Bill gates. All she needed was a little push. But instead of pushing her her mindless parents pulled her down.Oh, poor, poor, powerless Daisy. Her parents were maniacs. Her mom a weirdly obsessed cat lady who hated her. And her dad, a druggist who kept her for money.


Daisy worked in an insurance company. She earned enough to live nicely but, life isnโ€™t fair.ย Her parents took all of her money and only gave her 3 % of it. She slept in the attic with rats surrounding her, she had bread and margarine in breakfast and lunch. Plus, if that wasnโ€™t enough, she had to walk to school which was 3 miles away from her home, and while being constantly called names like Daisy Mccrazy. She hated it. Her Dad loved the house whilst her mom hated it. Frederick liked it because it was old-fashioned.ย Virginia hated it because in her mind this was a hellhole. The house had a classic red roof with slates of bricks in a parallel pattern. It had creamy-coloured walls and a puffing chimney. Looked nice, right ? But as soon as you enter the darkened doorsteps of this house you'll feel a cold drought. A sixth sense telling you that its time to leave. Virginia had a long pointy nose and a pimple on it. People thought that she was a witch. Frederick, Daisyโ€™s dad had a shrunken face and a abnormally large forehead. With a gruff voice.


ย Daisy was powerless.ย ย โ€˜Daisy! Where are you...... Come to MOMMY!!โ€™ That was the desperate voice of Virginia McDonald, Daisyโ€™s mother whose black cat Queen Cymbeline always seemed to follow her. She was carrying a sharp knife with her. โ€˜Oh no, no, no, widdle Daisy is Papa's girl!!โ€™ This was Frederick McDonald. He was on drugs every day, every year since he was 15.ย ย 


Daisy was hiding in the closet. โ€˜Oh Jesus Christ, help, please!โ€™ โ€˜That's it!ย I need to kill someone! I am coming for you Daisy, I am coming'. Slurred Frederick in his gruff voice. โ€˜Ooh, I think we are playing Hide and Seek, are we? Well, I'm coming, ready or not'!!!! Said Virginia.ย ย โ€˜Oh lord! She-she's coming. Sh-she wonโ€™t kill me, right?โ€™ Daisy whimpered. โ€˜Oh, yes She will!' hollered Virginia. She could hear her dad beating his knuckles on the wood. The door flew open, and Daisy was killed. Blood splattered all over the room. Her barbaric parents tore out her organs. There was no need for her in the house. They had enough money to live happily and lavishly.ย ย 


ย 15 years later... on Daisyโ€™s death anniversary...ย ย 



ย ย Trring!! Trring!! Trring!! The rusted phone screams. This was very peculiar because all the McDonald relatives had either died or were in jail. Virginia picked it up, and said: โ€˜We donโ€™t need day-old magazines if that's what youโ€™re trying to sell.โ€™ Oh, no, no, no. Iโ€™m Daisy Mccrazy, Hahaha ha-haโ€™ said the voice in a creepy, high-pitched voice. And cut the phone. Virginia was petrified. โ€˜Uh-uh, F-Frederick y-you remember Daisy rightโ€™? โ€˜Who Daisy? The weirdo at the supermarket who's always so cheerfulโ€™? โ€˜No, our daughterโ€™. โ€˜Ohh her.โ€™ โ€˜Someone called on the phone an-and said that they were Daisy โ€˜. โ€˜What? That's impossible!โ€™ โ€˜We killed her.โ€™


ย ย A Few Days Later...ย ย Virginia was out for a kitty party. Frederick was at home, watching TV. Trring Trring Trring the phone rang. โ€˜Burning' hell!โ€™ He picked up the phone.ย โ€˜Ello Iโ€™m Daisy Mccrazy โ€™ I wanna tell you to rhyme, itโ€™s one of my favourites, here it goesโ€™ ...ย 


โ€˜Old McDonald had a daughter e-i-e-i-oย 


A scream, scream here a scream, scream there,ย 


here blood, their blood, everywhere blood-blood,ย ย 


Old McDonald had a daughter e-i-e-i-o'


ย ย And the phone cut.ย ย 


ย ย Frederick was horror-struck as he saw what approached him. Daisy. Daisy hovering in the air. Her hair cut into shrivelled pieces and her intestines leaning down like a rope. She sang distortedly:ย 


ย โ€˜Old McDonald had a daughter e-i-e-i-oย 


A scream, scream here a scream, scream there,


ย here blood, their blood, everywhere blood-blood,ย 


ย Old McDonald had a farm e-i-e-i-o'ย 


ย Daisy came closer and said: โ€˜Old McDonald scared?ย Old McDonald wants to Die!? Daisy Mccrazy will help youโ€™...ย A scream. And Frederickโ€™s dead.ย 


ย Virginia came home to see Frederickโ€™s dead body lying on the floor, next to the very closet Daisy was murdered in. His organs, tore out, like Daisyโ€™s. There was a note on his heart. It read: โ€˜Old McDonald is dead. And you are going to be.ย ย Virginia was panic-stricken. She had three friends, but all of them were fake, show-offs.


ย She too fainted.ย ย When she woke up, she was surrounded in darkness. โ€˜Hello? Anyone here? Please, please help me. My husband was murdered.ย Pleaseโ€™? No one. โ€˜Mom? Is that youโ€™? โ€˜Daisyโ€™? โ€˜Yes, yes itโ€™s meโ€™. โ€˜Look, Iโ€™m sorry about before, but someone murdered your dad. Lied Virginia.ย You have to help meโ€™. โ€˜Of course, Momโ€™ said Daisy smiling. But then her smile turned into a grin, then a snicker, only to reveal her blood-stained teeth. Daisy took out a blade and hugged her mom. Then slit down her throat into pieces. โ€˜Gahโ€™!ย Virginia woke up.ย ย She found writing on the wall in Daisyโ€™s room. It said: You never know if your nightmares become trueโ€ฆ...ย ย 


That night when she slept, she woke up to a โ€˜Thudโ€™ โ€˜Freddy could you go check on thatโ€™? But thatโ€™s when she remembered that โ€˜Freddy' was no longer alive. She went downstairs and saw nothing.ย Halfway up the staircase, she heard it again. Thud!ย She went into the hall to see the real Daisy banging her head on the ceiling. Thud!ย Thud! Thud!ย ย Then her spirit turned around to face Virginia. โ€˜Ello Mommy! Letโ€™s play hide and seek. Eh? Virginia stood there, unable to move a muscle. โ€˜Aaarrrgghhโ€™ Daisy charged to her mom, and stabbed her, again and again. Daisy Mccraz is happy.ย Daisy Mccrazy was happy.ย ย ย 


September 12, 2020 06:36

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Hi, Sia! This story was dark, mysterious, and jaw-dropping. Daisy coming back from the dead horrified me, especially when she sang the nursery rhyme. The way that Daisy tricked her mother was terrifying. Amazing job! -Brooke D.

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00:44 Sep 16, 2020

Omg, love it! Reeeally freaky but freakyโ€™s good :D

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Hriday Saboo
09:34 Sep 14, 2020

Thirttttyyy eigghttttt whooo - hoooo youโ€™re rocking Iโ€™m sure u will reach on top 10 in the next few days

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Thanks ! I'm not quite sure about that. I have a downvoter. :(

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Hriday Saboo
10:27 Sep 14, 2020

Whaaatttttt !!!!!!! A downvoter!! People who are jealous of our points are the ones who downvote

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Hriday Saboo
10:45 Sep 14, 2020

Okay okAy OkaY oKay ๐Ÿ‘Œ

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Amogh Kasat
02:15 Sep 14, 2020

Did for this story

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Amogh Kasat
02:19 Sep 14, 2020

Doing more

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Amogh Kasat
02:12 Sep 14, 2020

It's a wonderful story, Sia! I read both of your stories, all are wonderful. I am very sad to hear that your account glitched. P.S read my stories and upvote my comments and I will do the same

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Amogh Kasat
03:21 Sep 14, 2020

OK

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Amogh Kasat
04:22 Sep 14, 2020

:)

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Sarah Freeman
17:02 Sep 13, 2020

I liked it! Very, very horrific though. A little confusing but you used that to your advantage! Nice job, anyway!

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Avery G.
19:08 Sep 12, 2020

WOW!!!!! This was amazing! And I did see the easter egg from Zilla's story. :) Great job!

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Avery G.
23:28 Sep 13, 2020

You're welcome! I'm Avery, by the way :)

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sorry I was simouantaneously chatting with her. :n

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Avery G.
04:29 Sep 14, 2020

It's fine!

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:) Why don't you post any new stories?

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Hriday Saboo
16:12 Sep 12, 2020

I dont want 107 in return but 15 would help (points)

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Hriday Saboo
16:39 Sep 12, 2020

Tysm

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14:19 Sep 12, 2020

This was really scary! You did a great job!

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Oh wow...was not expecting that๐Ÿค. That was very horror, it was written nicely. And very scarily๐Ÿ˜‚ Even though I do not like Horror I read it to the very end. It was interesting but scary... My only critique..is when your making the characters talk, don't put them in a paragraph. I suggest making a new line or saying he said, she said. Also next time..when the character is speaking use these " not these '. This (') is for when a character is repeating something another character said or like a memory..if that makes sense. For the story I l...

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Aw! Thank you!! Yes, will edit that.

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Whisty Boi
07:21 Sep 13, 2020

This reminded me of a horror game I once played... Thanks lol. Uhh no hate but there are several grammar mistakes. Before submitting a story, I leave it alone for fifteen minutes then come back to and check for mistakes. Once I'm sure, I submit. Some parts of the story seem rushed, but I enjoyed it.

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Whisty Boi
09:31 Sep 13, 2020

ok cool

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The Cold Ice
03:11 Sep 15, 2020

Good story.It was scary.It was a wonderful story.Great job keep it up. Would you mind to read my story โ€œThe dragon warrior part 2?โ€

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Thanks and sure ! Maybe in a while ? Because my school is going on.

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The Cold Ice
03:57 Sep 15, 2020

You are welcome.Ok.

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