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Fantasy Fiction

           I lay back in my relaxing chair as I watched the flames grow higher and higher. There have been so many occasions I have sat in the chair reading one of numerous books I owned until I grew weary. I put the book down, closed my eyes, and went off into dreamland. But today will not be the case, as I have a piece of parchment on my lap and a quill ready to write to the ones I love. How should I start my letter to the ones I regard as my children?

           So many memories of good times popped up in my mind. I closed my eyes and meditated to take control of my thoughts. Then I opened my eyes and started with my writing:

             To the Ones I Love,

            It is better to write my thoughts on paper than try to voice them aloud, especially when my emotions are in play. I write with a bleeding heart because it is not a pleasant one. Please forgive me and I know one day you shall understand. I pray many of you will understand immediately of what I must do.

           As I write I thought of directing the letter to the older children because they will understand it much better than the young, and they will know this comes from my heart. They will know I do not do such a thing out of a loveless heart or lack of caring. But I figured this letter is for all and they will come to an understanding. There are ones that will understand and others that still need some maturing. I can only hope and pray. I continued with my writing.

            I have taken care of you to the best of my ability ever since I took you away from the abuse and ignorance inflicted upon you from the ones who should have shown you love. Many of you worked like slaves and even sold to others in that dreadful town to be used for arduous work or other despicable practices. As I have mentioned before, I gave the inhabitants a fair warning, but because of their greed and perverted living, they ignored the warning, so I took you away. To a faraway land to live a much better life under my guidance.

           As I write, I remember the days I played the pipes as the children danced around. This is the way life should be for the young and innocent. Not a life where innocence is taken away. Where abuse is a daily event for these young ones. Where one day they become the ones to infect the young.

I look over at the bagpipes leaning against the wall, under the window, glad I had the musical instrument blessed to me. Since I was poor at speech, the instrument took its place.

           Back to my writing.

           Please know I want the best for all of you and hope I have succeeded. I am grateful the older children could care for their younger ones. My forte is to entertain all of you with music, not parenting.

           I remember the day I lured them away from those monsters. As we approached the mountain, I thought about what I would do with these children. Before that, my primary goal was to take them away. Bring freedom to their lives. To bring a smile back to their faces. I accomplished such a feat not long after they entered the new land. A land so much brighter and one that provides if you take care of it. How much I laughed to see them dancing around with smiles and laughter. I am endowed with doing such a thing in children’s lives.

           There was only one time I returned to the polluted town in disguise. I left in disgust to hear of the lies they told of me. To hear of their lies of me being full of greed. I had requested a steep price to rid them of my friends, the rats. They offered money, but I refused. That they missed their children whom they loved dearly. I had to chuckle in disgust as I thought their way of showing love was perverted. Lies, but no surprise from these groups of people.

           I looked down at the parchment and re-read what I had written. I figured what I wrote was good so far. Now, I needed to tell them the tough part.

           You wonder why I am writing such a thing. As I have looked at all of you, I see soon you will no longer be children. And as I observe all of you, I am no longer needed here. All of you will continue to grow and prosper. One day, you shall spread your love throughout the land. You will conquer the darkness and bring back the light in this world. I know all of you will succeed. Take care my loved ones.

           I laid the quill down and looked at the fire for a period. I knew the day would eventually come when I would leave, but it seemed to have come too quickly. It will be tough to leave those beautiful smiles. To hear the laughs. But there are others out there that need help. Innocent young ones punished by the corrupt. I must use my gift to take these children to another land full of love.

           I slowly stood up, grabbed a pitcher of water, and tossed it on the fire to extinguish it. Maybe one day I will sit by the fireplace once again.

           I put on my hat, then took my pipes. I opened the door into the pitch darkness. For me there is no need for light as I walked, eventually entering the village. I walked to the middle of the homes and the largest hut where we met to celebrate. I walked up to the door and pulled out a nail near the top. I then put the parchment up against the door, pushing the nail through the paper into the door. I then turned around and looked around at all the smaller huts. Everyone is sleeping and having pleasant dreams. There is no need to have anyone guarding the area. There is no danger in this land.

           “Goodbye,” I whispered.

           Then I walked out of the village, and up and down rolling hills until I came to a mountain.

           “Time to rescue more.”

           The mountain cracks open and I entered to go to another land to find and release the innocent.

November 17, 2024 03:14

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Tamara Lieberman
15:06 Nov 27, 2024

Clever story. I enjoyed it very much.

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Daniel Rogers
13:42 Nov 27, 2024

The Pied Piper a humanitarian 😂 Nice take on the classic.

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Rachel Fox
09:27 Nov 27, 2024

Love a retelling of a fairytale from another pov

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Donald Haddix
04:13 Nov 27, 2024

That was a cool spin for sure! I enjoyed it passionately written and very professional! Thanks for liking my story. Him putting the quill down was a fantasy equivalent to a mic drop… peace!

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Ellen Neuborne
22:34 Nov 24, 2024

I enjoyed this -- and I especially liked that in the end, I'm still not sure if the protagonist is the good guy or the villain. Could go either way.

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Corey Melin
23:00 Nov 24, 2024

Thank you for the comments. Like reality the protagonist can go either way. Many historical figures that were good but had a dark side

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Patrick Druid
15:41 Nov 24, 2024

I don't think I ever read The Pied Piper story. This is a good take. I like it. Good job!

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Corey Melin
21:20 Nov 24, 2024

Thank you for the comments

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Helen A Howard
13:56 Nov 24, 2024

I enjoyed reading your version of the Pied Piper. The fact it could be read in different ways added an edge.

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Corey Melin
14:21 Nov 24, 2024

Thank you for the comments

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Coral Jordan
02:53 Nov 24, 2024

I so would have enjoyed seeing what the Pied Piper was truly like. It would be interesting to see this developed into a longer piece like a novella or even a novel. An unreliable narrator is always a delight.

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Corey Melin
06:11 Nov 24, 2024

When it comes to short stories there are many I could expand upon. This is one I truly did not think beyond the ending. But I’m sure expansion would be possible with thought and imaginative juices

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Tom Skye
10:21 Nov 20, 2024

This was cool. The voice was quite chilling. Like a morally ambiguous psychopath. Great read.

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Suzanne Jennifer
16:11 Nov 18, 2024

Love this story. Always nice when good defeats evil. Thanks for liking 'The First Pancake Rule.'

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Corey Melin
00:30 Nov 19, 2024

Thank you and welcome

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Shirley Medhurst
18:51 Nov 17, 2024

What a lovely ode to the Pied Piper …. great thinking!

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Corey Melin
00:29 Nov 19, 2024

Thank you

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Trudy Jas
18:32 Nov 17, 2024

A lovely version of the Pied Piper. Not the Grimm version, closer to Disney. Much sweeter. :-)

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Corey Melin
00:28 Nov 19, 2024

Yes indeed. Thank you

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Mary Bendickson
18:18 Nov 17, 2024

I'm the pied piper, follow me.. Thanks for liking 'Close Encounters of the Man Kind'. 'Nothing Wicked to See Here'. And 'Fair Apologies'.

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Corey Melin
00:28 Nov 19, 2024

Thank you and you are welcome

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