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Sad

I look up to the sky,

It’s a clear night,

Except for my rock of sins,

different shades, never to fade insight.


they say our sins washed away,

I say mine never will as my sins are plenty,

or else I wouldn’t feel this void,

A void in my stomach that makes me feel empty.


I wouldn’t feel this guilt,

This guilt that’s piled up in that void.

If sins really do wash away,

Mine would as well along with the fluid.


Every time I gaze up at the endless sky.

I realise something every time,

If the endless sky is the one where I see my rock of sins,

That means even my sins may be endless.


I don’t think I deserve to live,

With all these sins piled up.

I won’t even find a spot in heaven,

And Jesus will throw in Hell.


I think it’s time for me to leave this world,

Time to punish me for my immoralities.

After this, I’ll come clean.

And maybe even start fresh.


This world isn’t all that good.

It’s crimson in its gloomy way.

crimson as the blood in my veins,

and dark as my secrets prevail.


I stood up and walked to the edge of the cliff,

It’s time for me to say my goodbyes.

Goodbye… I yell out for the world to here

The very world I'm here leave.


As I take my step over the cliff.

I fall,

Fall to my doom.

But I feel no pain.


I open my eyes to see myself.

Not dead.

But in Jesus’s arms.

I guess it really isn’t my time to die.


I felt content from the inside,

But couldn’t help myself to feel fury.

He distracted me from my painful death,

It’s as if he gets to decide and he’s the jury.


But I couldn’t be mad at Jesus,

The Jesus who gave me redemption.

The one who gave a reason to live again,

To be good once more.


Maybe Everyone shouldn’t question him,

Ask if he really exists,

Because even if he doesn’t,

He’s still there in our hearts.


He gives everyone redemption,

And if you take it,

You might just go to heaven,

Not hell.


In heaven, we are wrapped in God's perfect love.

We are whole,

We are healthy,

And we are together with those who we love.


In heaven, we walk hand in hand with Jesus,

As he takes away all our sins.

With the gentle wave,

Which laps at our bare feet.


And that’s when I realised,

Everyone deserves a redemption round.

No matter how evil you are.

No matter how big your rock of sins is.


April 14, 2021 01:13

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yep! #StopBullying and #PlagiarismIsIllegial !!! I wish everyone knew this

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Yay!!! First again!!! Amazing poem (not story)!!! You did an great job in the wording and the description of what's going on, and you used the same theme I was going to use in my next story!!! Btw, thanks for letting me know of the word limit trick!!! Sneaky, sneaky... Happy writing!!! SS

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haha yeah. I have to give Amany the credit for that though. Thanks!! Peace out - Rachel

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Lol, that's true. Wait, would your stories be approved if you do that? ~SS

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IDK plus at this point, I don't even care if my stories are approved. I'm just writing for fun. And posting on here to get feedback and critiques.

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Yeah, true. Lol, makes sense, and yes feedback is pretty important for improvement in the future so...

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Amara Tillington
22:48 Apr 20, 2021

You are a great writer. abigail is an idiot to copy you. The bad one, not the friendly, original-work one.

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Really!? Thank you. Bridget's real name was abigail?

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Amara Tillington
10:22 Apr 22, 2021

I don't know, I think? Could be pretending to be the good Abigail, I should've called her by her real name.

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Amara Tillington
10:07 Apr 26, 2021

Could you upvote me a little? I got downvoted and I feel kinda bad about it.

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huh? no offence but that's really greedy... I also feel bad I got downvoted but I don't go around begging for upvotes

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14:07 Apr 16, 2021

This poem is beautiful. Everyone does deserve redemption if they're willing to change.

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I felt a personal connection to this poem because I have sins that I have committed that I need redemption from. Despite me knowing that they are wrong, I can't help but continue:( I can so relate to feeling that you have too many sins to be able to have them all washed away. Thank you for writing this poem. I didn't realize until after I read it that even I deserve redemption. Your poem had given me hope and inspiration to do better and to unlock myself from the shackles of confinement. Thank you from the bottom of my heart. Thank you, tha...

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Wow. you are welcome! I truly didn't know that my writing can have such a big impact on people and I'm so glad it helped you for the better

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Writing is the best way to portray emotion and feelings. You did a great job!

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John K Adams
15:07 Apr 29, 2021

The idea of being washed away completely if my sins are washed away. And the joy of discovering something remains. Beautiful!

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