Iam In Charge
I'm in charge! Ask anyone. Everyone knows I'm in charge. Why else would all my loyal subjects answer to all my needs? They treat me as the most important being that exists. All I have to do is complain a bit and a solution is immediately provided. Heck, sometimes I only have to look like I'm about to complain and the problem is solved. They realize I'm the one running everything around here. It's a very lofty position to hold so I do try not to take advantage. I do at least try to show my appreciation.
Let me go back to my earliest recollections to explain why I believe I'm in charge. It started with only two subjects. They were always there beside me. Sometimes both of them. Sometimes only one or the other. Let's say I felt discomfort in any way. Maybe my tummy felt empty or my body felt disagreeable. I would complain as loud as I could and they would come running. They would bend over backwards figuring out why I was complaining. They would offer food or change my surroundings or sooth my mind. Anything! Until they finally made me stop complaining.
It didn't take so very long before they were well enough trained that they developed a schedule to prevent these discomforts from affecting me so negatively. We all got better sleep because they got wise to the situation. Now it is safe to claim they totally understand that I am in charge.
I thought we were perfectly happy but for some reason the two of them started introducing more subjects into the picture. How was I supposed to communicate I really didn't need anyone else coming around to complicate our arrangement? I didn't understand their antics. These other subjects made weird motions or wiggled their faces in front of me wanting me to respond in a way totally foreign to me. So I complained. A lot! I let them know exactly who was in charge. Eventually they either stopped trying so hard or I played along with whatever they were hoping for and granted a smile once in a while instead of complaining. That always kept them happier.
I even started recognizing some of these others if they came around often enough. Some times my favorite subjects took me out and about bundled in a bucket and turned me over to one or two of these others. I didn't quite understand why but it usually was never long although to me it felt like forever. Of course I complained and let them know I am in charge.
Yet, sometimes they learned to be entertaining so I tolerated them somewhat. I actually did some of the things they wanted me to do like wiggle my fingers at them or put my hand over my mouth then fling it out towards them. It meant a lot to them. Then I could leave with my faves. Seemed like we visited with some of the same ones over and over. Others were scary until I proved I am in charge.
I went from being able to do nothing much for myself except wonder at the world above me to being able to swing my arm over my head to pull myself around to see things differently, then scoot enough to reach a pretty object so I could feel it and taste it. I really liked exploring. Soon I could maneuver all over the place. Even try out uneven climbing spaces. Unfortunately that led to discovering a very unpleasant new phenomenon. These wonderful folks who knew I am in charge started saying a horrible new word I wasn't sure what the meaning was. “No, no!”
“What? Iam in charge!”
They even said those awful words when I tried to explore pretty things on tables and shelves I could reach. I complained. It didn't seem to matter to them but it did teach them to put some things where I can't reach them. But other things they still left within reach and they expected me to know the difference. A severe battle of wills ensued. This was the most difficult huddle to overcome.
Sometimes we traveled in the vroom, vroom. One of my favorite things to do but I have to get in the bucket where I would hear the click. Now I have figured out how to make it click without any help. Ama is okay with that if the vroom isn't moving. But if it is, then she says the awful words.
That vroom, vroom always transports me to different worlds. I close my eyes and when I open them I'm someplace I don't know. Once we went to a place with giant, pretty hills and other magical places. Ada put me in a bucket on his back so I was as tall as him and we would climb, climb, climb. Very exciting. My subjects call it adventure.
Gma gave me a long stick with a foot on it so I could chase a little ball around until I sank it in a hole. Fun adventure. Dia, who looks a lot like Ama but not as tall, is always with Gma. She is very funny. We laugh and laugh. Sometimes she shows me pictures of a horse or a dog. Ama won't let her call them horsey or doggy like GG does.
Dia has a silly shaped box that she rubs with a long stick to make pretty music to come out. I really want to touch and see where it comes from but she says the dreaded 'No, no'. GG got me my own box and gave me a stick but it won't work the same so I beat the box down on the floor instead.
I get to take along some small vroom, vrooms whenever we go in the big one. I really like them and I have one I can ride on, too. One day GG gave me a little subject I could put in my stroller vroom, vroom to push. I clicked it in. Then it clicked out so I told it 'No,no!'.
I've heard some say Iam in my terrible twos. I don't know about that. I don't complain nearly as much as I used to. And as long as they understand Iam's in charge, at least secretly, we'll continue to get along fine.
Glossary terms:
Ama= Mama Ada= Dada Gma= Grandma
Dia= Aunt Lydia GG= Great-Grandma Iam= Liam
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Oh I really love this one, Mary! You have captured demanding babies perfectly!
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Thanks👶
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Loved this! Babies, like pets, rule the roost, not the other way around.
PS My husband makes and repairs those funny-shaped boxes and sticks. Send ‘em our way!
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Glad you loved it. Thanks.😅
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Mary, you have a real gift.
"Iam in Charge" is a wonderful example of that.
It's so imaginative and engaging to see the world through a toddler's eyes.
The way you used the vocabulary and the logic of a young child to build the narrative was brilliant.
It felt both authentic and incredibly funny.
The discovery of the "dreaded 'No, no'" and the battle of wills was particularly well-done.
It captured a universal experience with so much warmth and humor.
Thank you for sharing your writing. I'm going to make sure to save it so I can revisit it later.
I really do love your stories, and when I have the time, I'm excited to read through your other stories.
Your unique voice is a pleasure to read.
👍👍
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You are too kind especially having your kind of unlimited talent in so many genres.
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Thank you!
I don't know about unlimited talent, but I do try.
My Jack Macintosh cases I keep writing and just work the prompts in somewhere.
I've been lucky with them so far.
I just posted Chapters VI and VII a few minutes ago.
I've got the final installment of The Perpetual Carrot for next week's prompts if they cooperate. 😆
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I never even thought of anything for this week. Been a tramatic week. Not entering for first time in a long while. Way behind on reading.
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I've had a bad week as well, but hey... we're still in the fight!
As far as reading goes, I've been trying to read Stephen King's "IT" for months.
It is a "dry" read. Too wordy. Hard to read.
The mini-series and both movies were good though. I prefer the mini-series.
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BTW, I worked the final Chapter IX into one of this week's prompts...
“Center your story around a mysterious forest fire, disappearance, or other strange event.”
The strange event being a bogus writing contest.
So Jack's case, "The Perpetual Carrot" has finally been resolved. (cue sad music)
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(I just realised this went into the wrong place. Sorry, Mary. I put it into Rhed Flag's comment to you, but it had nowhere else to go. I am so sorry I didn't know about him until he left) I am cutting in here, sorry. I think Mary may forgive me though this isn't a comment on this thread. You followed me a while ago and I decided to check you out. Too late. You have already left. I read your epistle on the judging process. I agree that at times there could have been more short-lists. I have been asked several times why I have not won yet. I am away getting a book series published for most of the time, but sometimes the ideas that flood into my mind when I see the prompt for the week make me put a story in. Sometimes I don't enter.
You are right about the comments. They have led to sort of online friendships where we reciprocate with reading and commenting back.
The main failing with some of the judging panel, who are learner writers (we all have to start somewhere) is they may respond to a story they like and not consider the writing quality. But in Reedsy, we can all improve. I had no clue how to write short stories at the start, but somehow 99.9% of my stories have been approved. The latest ones are better. Although, I tend to incorporate stories that draw on ideas from my books. Or they lend themselves to a sequel. Sometimes they are a sequel to a prior story. It's like the character in the wings clamours for more time on stage.
I know a little about the judging process from what one of the judges revealed in a comment. Advice to her (a very good writer/author) was that for every twenty stories read, only one or two can be put forward to be considered. You imagine every judge doing this. How many stories slip through the cracks? Anyway, she stated that if she really believed in too many stories she then was compelled to read another 20 and another 20. How is this possible? What if some of those are exceptional? A line has to be drawn. Yet all the judges are in the same position. Not only do stories slip through the cracks, but some may not have been read as many times. And on top of that, the judges become aware that those who win often leave after that. They do so of their own volition. I like to think of the dilemma judges have of wrangling over which brilliant story should win. It's not just the story. It has to interpret the prompt in the right way and have a reasonable standard of writing. And if only the popular writers are in the list each time (winner and short-lists) how is that fair? Some judges who love reading but need to improve their writing, balance the whole process alongside the experienced ones. I'm sorry that I didn't meet you sooner. I would have followed you back and reassured you, making quality comments. It's what I'm known for. As are you. I have no way to contact you other than this. (oops, didn't happen.)
I have more to say about a problem I have had with Reedsy on the subject of fulfilling what they want if a story written in Reedsy is to be published elsewhere. I have found them to be reasonable and helpful, despite that. But $5 per published story is only a problem if we pay and have a story rejected and therefore not submitted. That rarely happens. Even if the prompt idea hasn't been used well. A good story is still a good story, even if a judge can easily see that it cannot be included on the list of stories put forward. Though novelty. character development, sensory detail, and atmosphere come into the selection process too, I'd make a terrible judge. I'm way too picky.
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I must go back and read Iam in Charge!
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Very enjoyable story, fun to read. Having lived through three toddler daughters who are now grown women. The oldest is now 57, the middle one is 55 and the youngest is 52. It doesn't seem that long ago they were toddlers. I enjoy reading your stories.
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Thank you.😆
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This was super fun to read — it feels like a toddler telling the story of running the world. The “I’m in charge” bit is gold, and repeating it through the story makes it even funnier. The way you use toddler language, like calling the car seat a “bucket” and the car a “vroom vroom,” makes it feel real and playful. I also like how the family characters show up (Ama, Ada, Gma, Dia, GG) — it gives the story a lot of heart.
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Thanks. Adorable watching him grow.
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Such a perfect slice of life from a child's point of view, and the "vroom vrooms" is perfect kid language.
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Great fun from start to finish, Mary. Of course, a baby is in charge. The adults are mere putty here. Love the vroom vrooms.
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I don't think a little boy needs to be taught what a car, truck or tractor does. They pick one up and immediately vroom, vroom. I have a cake pan shaped like a train he tries to make roll but is very disappointed the wheels won't turn.
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Like you say, it’s natural.
You had me laughing out loud on my train journey with this one. 🤣
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Can't believe I was ever that needy. Surely not! Another good one, Mary.
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Glad you liked it.
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Cute story, perfect for the prompt. Thank you for the translations. :)
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Thanks for liking and you are welcome.😄
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Thanks for liking and you are welcome.😄
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In charge verses no, no. Who will win?
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He's two. You do you think?
Thanks for liking.
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🤣
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A baby is always in charge!
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Can bet on it😄. Thanks for liking.
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Other clarifications in case you don't speak two-year-old language. Vroom, vrooms are cars. Buckets are child seats.
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A wonderful story. Having a new grandson at the nearly crawling stage, I really identify with this. Although I have also brought up my own children. I'm glad I saw someone comment on this story in the comments for another story (LOL), so it prompted me to read it.
A wee tip. The glossary is great, as the names were a bit difficult to work out. Put an asterisk after every first mention of the baby's renditions, and it will keep readers on track. I would have checked below earlier and wouldn't have been scratching my head for as long. I loved this story!
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Thanks for all the tips. We played cards the other night and he immediately became the dealer. Had it down pat in no time.😄
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Yes. A male child. (grown up now, no doubt) Still taking on the boss role.
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Nah, this was still my two-year old great-grandson.
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He's clever. And still the boss!
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This was definitely funny!
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Thanks😄
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Np!
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