Contest #288 shortlist ⭐️

The Day the Words Got Loose

Submitted into Contest #288 in response to: Set your story during — or just before — a storm.... view prompt

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Fiction Inspirational

The rain began, a relief after a long, dry August. As if signaling the end of summer’s lazy days, the sky turned gray, and the first drops fell with a soft pitter-patter, carrying the fresh scent of wet earth. At first, it was soothing. But the rain kept coming. The parched ground, hardened into baked clay, rejected the offering. As the storms raged, water pooled on lawns, sidewalks turned to rivers, and gutters gurgled, whispering secrets as they carried the flood away. The rain began to seep into every nook and cranny of the old homes. It filled the puddles, and old flower pots. 

Even the Little Free Library on the corner of Oak and Fifth wasn’t safe. The drops ran through the roof shingles, drip drip dropping onto the books. At first, only a few inky droplets ran down the spines. Then, as the rain pressed harder, the words themselves seemed to loosen. But, nobody noticed until the words started running. It began slowly. A comma dribbled down the glass. A few stray adjectives pooled at the bottom of the shelf — wistful, unruly, forlorn. Then, as the rain pressed harder, the words melted right off the pages. Sentences oozed into the streets. Whole paragraphs ran in elegant, inky streams toward the storm drains. The Great Gatsby slipped away with a whisper of “So we beat on…” before vanishing into a swirling puddle. Frankenstein  left a single ghostly utterance of  “Beware; for I am fearless, and therefore powerful”  before it was swallowed by the current. Down the drains the words went, through old pipes and rusted mains, until they found new places to settle — kitchen faucets, coffee shop spouts, restaurant taps. They even ended up in the school’s drinking fountains! 

At the coffee shop,  the locals were gathered at tables. There was talk of the rain, when it would end or what chores were being put off until later. The windows steamed over and the coffee stayed warm. Leo at the counter didn’t say much. He was good at steaming milk, bad at small talk, and mostly kept his head down. But when he handed a cappuccino to a tired-looking woman, the words just came out: “The world breaks everyone and afterward many are strong at the broken places.”  

The woman blinked at him.“…Excuse me?” 

Leo blinked back. He hadn’t meant to say that. He wasn’t even sure where he’d heard it.

"You know what? Never mind. Have a good day," he said, but his voice wavered. Somewhere, Ernest Hemmingway smiled.

That afternoon, at the high school, Mia looked dreamily out the window. The rain created patterns on the glass, which she found much more interesting than her teacher’s lecture. She took a long, slow drink from her Stanley. Then, without thinking, she sighed,"So we beat on, boats against the current, borne back ceaselessly into the past." 

Her best friend Jasmine squinted. “Mia, are you okay?”

Mia nodded, confused. The words felt familiar, like she’d borrowed them from somewhere deep in her brain. She just couldn’t remember from where. But, they fit this moment. Mia had recently reconciled with her boyfriend. Somewhere, Fitzgerald shook his head. 

That evening, Mr. Patel was doing the dishes when he took a sip from his glass and suddenly told his wife, "Time moves slowly, but passes quickly." 

She dropped a plate. “Since when do you talk like that?” 

Mr. Patel wiped his hands on a towel, staring at the water still running from the tap. Something about it seemed different. Almost alive. Mr. and Mrs. Patel shared a long look, and sat at the table, holding hands for the first time in a long time. From the depths, Walker nodded approvingly.

By nightfall, the entire town was speaking in borrowed voices. Grandmothers whispered Faulkner in their sleep. Strangers on the subway exchanged the words of Christie. A toddler repeated "It was the best of times, it was the worst of times" in perfect enunciation before shoving a cracker into his mouth. Sleepovers will filled with the most terrifying utterances of King. And then—just as quickly as it started—it stopped.

The words were gone. The books in the little free library sat empty, their stories rinsed clean. The rain lightened, and a deep hush settled over the town. Nobody could explain what happened, but for weeks, people spoke a little more carefully. They listened a little harder. Some swore their water still carried traces of poetry. Others left their taps running at night, just in case a sentence or two might find its way back. Because words had a way of sticking around. Even in the places you’d least expect. 

Time passed further, and soon, the day the words got loose became a distant memory. People began to think they dreamt this – just like they dreamt the amount of rain that saturated the town those rainy weeks. 

Early one morning, young Verona stopped by the Little Free Library on the corner of Oak and Fifth. As she opened the squeaky door, she pulled out a book and flipped through its pages. Blank. She reached for another. And another. All empty. It was true.

She sat cross-legged on the damp grass, staring at the silent books stacked around her. The words were gone. Erased, like whispers carried off by the wind. A hollow ache settled in her chest. It wasn’t just stories that had vanished—it was voices, memories, entire worlds.

But as Verona traced her fingers over the smooth, empty pages, she had an idea. Maybe the words weren’t lost. Maybe they were waiting.

She gathered as many blank books as she could carry and took them home, stacking them carefully on her desk. That night, she listened. Not just to the rain, which had long since faded, but to the voices around her—her father humming in the kitchen, the creak of the old swing on the porch, the murmurs of neighbors in the street.

She opened a book and began to write.

At first, she tried to recall the lost words, reaching for echoes of Gatsby and Hemingway, but something felt wrong. These pages didn’t want to be filled with the past—they wanted something new. So she wrote what she heard: the laughter of a boy riding his bike too fast down Oak Street, the sigh of a woman rereading an old letter, the quiet strength in the way Mr. Patel and his wife held hands at the dinner table.

Days turned into weeks. Verona filled book after book, blending the borrowed voices of yesterday with the unspoken poetry of today. When she was done, she carried them back to the Little Free Library, tucking them carefully onto the shelves.

The next morning, an elderly man picked one up. He flipped to the first page and read a passage about a man who had once been fearless but now feared the quiet. His breath caught in his throat—he had never told anyone that.

A child found another book and ran home, clutching it tightly. Inside, she discovered a story about a girl who spoke in song lyrics and always knew when someone needed a hug.

Soon, the books were passed from hand to hand. People read and gasped, laughed, cried. The words had returned, not as they were, but as they were meant to be—new, alive, and filled with heart.

And Verona? She kept listening. Because stories had a way of finding their way home.

February 07, 2025 02:34

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Melissa Lee
00:37 Feb 20, 2025

I loved this story - it was so unique and poetic.

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Lila Evans
01:25 Feb 20, 2025

Thank you, I appreciate that!

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Story Time
18:41 Feb 18, 2025

As a former librarian, this one really hit home. Lovely job.

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Lila Evans
01:27 Feb 19, 2025

Thank you! No doubt you inspired many a Verona during your time at the library!

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Rebecca Buchanan
05:20 Feb 18, 2025

Words, and stories do have a way of changing shape and taking on a life of their own. Loved it.

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J.L. Henker
16:59 Feb 16, 2025

This was stunning. It brought tears to my eyes. It brings hope to dark times.

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Lila Evans
17:14 Feb 16, 2025

Thank you, JL -- that means a lot. I am glad you enjoyed! Without hope, we have nothing. I have to believe there are a lot of Vernona's in the world, waiting for the time to do their thing.

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Philip Ebuluofor
14:12 Feb 16, 2025

Like a homing pigeon, stories has this way of finding their way home.congrats. enticing work.

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Lila Evans
14:16 Feb 16, 2025

Thank you!

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Philip Ebuluofor
19:02 Feb 17, 2025

Welcome.

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James Plante
13:20 Feb 16, 2025

It's one of the most creative stories I've read in a long time. I loved everything about it. Congratulations on the shortlisting. You do have a way with words, Lila.

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Lila Evans
13:34 Feb 16, 2025

Well, thank you -- so much! It was a fun one to write. I pass a little library everyday taking my kids to school, and if you stare at something long enough, it might just become a story!

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Je Señor
20:38 Feb 15, 2025

This is beautiful... beyond words.

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Lila Evans
20:57 Feb 15, 2025

Thank you!

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John Rutherford
15:03 Feb 15, 2025

Congratulations

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Lila Evans
19:24 Feb 15, 2025

Thank you, John!

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Kim Olson
08:07 Feb 15, 2025

Congratulations! I loved the concept of this story and the power of the written word! Coming from a librarian....

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Lila Evans
13:44 Feb 15, 2025

Thank you, Kim!

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Sandra Moody
06:19 Feb 15, 2025

Loved this one! Words are such a magical thing. The comparison of words sliding like raindrops down a windshield or glass was epic. Thankyou for a great read!

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Lila Evans
13:45 Feb 15, 2025

Thank you Sandra! Glad you enjoyed -- it was a fun one to write!

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David Sweet
15:11 Feb 14, 2025

Beautiful story, Lila. Looks as is if this is happening to you. You have been prolific with nine submissions in this new year. Kudos to you! This story seems almost lyrical and poetic. I love the imagery and intent. Congrats on your shortlisting and may you have the best of inspiration as this year continues and beyond. Keep sharing your words. All the best to you.

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Lila Evans
16:17 Feb 14, 2025

Thank you, David! I have enjoyed the prompts each week -- and, even when a story doesn't hit right away, it has been rewarding to trust the process. By keeping my eyes and ears (and mind) open, the ideas always come. This one came while sitting in a meeting watching the rain come down the windows. I appreciate your feedback, truly!

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Mary Bendickson
14:37 Feb 14, 2025

Creative use of words on this one. Congrats on the shortlist🥳

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Lila Evans
16:17 Feb 14, 2025

Thank you!

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Mary Bendickson
22:58 Feb 14, 2025

Thanks for the follow:)

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Trudy Jas
13:07 Feb 14, 2025

Congratulations!

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Lila Evans
14:10 Feb 14, 2025

Thank you!!!

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Timothy Fox
11:29 Feb 12, 2025

What an original - and awesome - story! I love it!

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Lila Evans
13:53 Feb 12, 2025

Thank you! It was a fun one to write!

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Martha Kowalski
20:22 Feb 11, 2025

Lovely story! I'm sure somewhere Hemingway and Fitzgerald and all the others are smiling too

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Lila Evans
20:36 Feb 11, 2025

Thank you! I hope so!

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Olive Silirus
02:11 Feb 10, 2025

Lovely story. I especially liked the last line.

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Lila Evans
02:36 Feb 10, 2025

Thank you for the feedback, Olive!

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Daniel Rogers
03:01 Feb 09, 2025

Great story. The old stories are valuable, but we desperately need new ones. It's important to remember that at one time the old stories were new ones. I need to add a congratulations. Well done 😀👍

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Lila Evans
12:26 Feb 09, 2025

Thank you -- and, very, very true!

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Marty B
23:24 Feb 08, 2025

A great fantastical story, and a perfect one for the readers (writers) in reedsy. All who are in love with words, and stories. Commas do get lost, regularly, I need to look at the bottom of my windows! And I loved the line about adjectives- that is just how they act- pooling up in twos and threes and just muddying everything up. 'A few stray adjectives pooled at the bottom of the shelf — wistful, unruly, forlorn.' Thanks!

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Lila Evans
00:51 Feb 09, 2025

Thank you, Marty! Our words definitely have minds of their own some days!

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Tom Skye
21:53 Feb 08, 2025

What an amazing concept! So much fun to read. Well done

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Lila Evans
00:51 Feb 09, 2025

Thank you, Tom -- appreciate that!

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Trudy Jas
04:34 Feb 08, 2025

I laughed at the comma sliding down the glass, the forlorn, lost adjectives. So clever The gentle humor and humanity. Well done!

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Lila Evans
12:51 Feb 08, 2025

Thank you, Trudy!

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