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Suspense Fiction Crime

โ€œTake it and do it. I know you can. Iโ€™m right here with you. Just do it. He has to go and you know that. Do it.โ€ She was giving me orders.

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Back. The swing sounded terrible. Like the chains could break at any moment. The chains were old and had started to rust but still, we swung. Death didnโ€™t bother us not now at least.

Forth. The eerie sound of the wretched torture device didnโ€™t stop but we didnโ€™t care. There was always a chance that we could fall out of the seat but we never cared. We felt free. Free even with the horrid sound blocking out any thoughts.ย 

There was no need for thoughts at that moment so we moved on because there was no need to waste time trying to control something that we simply couldnโ€™t. There was no room for thoughts, not now at least.

In. The air was cold and it hurt to breathe but I still did it. Sometimes I didnโ€™t want to but today I had to.

Out. Emptying out my lungs has never felt more freeing.ย 

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Done. It was done and we had done it together. He was gone now. I didnโ€™t need to worry about him anymore.ย 

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โ€œI would say that we are family now,โ€ I said breaking the silence that had gone on for too long. We had been quiet the entire way here but I wanted to talk. I spoke despite the air constricting my throat making it hard to breathe.ย 

โ€œWhy would you say that?โ€ She spoke easily like she wasnโ€™t affected by the cold. She never seemed affected by anything.ย 

โ€œAfter what we did, the title of being friends just isnโ€™t enough anymore.โ€

โ€œAfter what you did.โ€

โ€œBut we did it together.โ€

โ€œWe didnโ€™t but we have no time for that now. Why would you use the word family to describe us after what happened?โ€

I stopped before replying. We did do it together. She was there and I was there. We had done it together.

โ€œBecause you are my family.โ€

โ€œI canโ€™t be your family and you know that.โ€

โ€œBut why?โ€ She didnโ€™t respond and I didnโ€™t ask again.

She was my family and thatโ€™s what counted.

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Swings. Who wouldnโ€™t stop at a set of swings after what we did? Of course, she wanted to stop. Why did she want to stop?

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โ€œMaybe we are family.โ€ She spoke again in the harsh winter air. I called her Snow because thatโ€™s when I found her. She didnโ€™t have a name that I knew of and she didnโ€™t bother to correct me.ย 

โ€œWhy the sudden change?โ€

โ€œBecause Iโ€™m leaving now so Iโ€™ll leave with you knowing that we are family.โ€

โ€œWhy are you leaving me? After all of this.โ€

โ€œBecause I was never here. Do you remember the day we met?โ€

โ€œYes, I found you outside in the snow. You were outside of our classroom window just staring at me.โ€

โ€œWhat else happened?โ€

โ€œWhy are you asking all these questions?โ€ She had rarely talked but something was different now.

โ€œBecause I need you to know the truth before I go.โ€

โ€œBut I know the truth.โ€

โ€œYou believe you know the truth and that is where the problem lies,โ€ She turned to look towards me with her hands around the metal chains that kept her seat suspended in the air, โ€œI am not here but you are. I cannot be here, it isnโ€™t possible. I was never here and I can never be here.โ€

And with that, she was gone. Just faded away into the air. She left me there all alone. In a world that would soon come to hate me if they found out what we had done. Because we had done it together. We were family now. We had to be.

I tried to cry but was disturbed by a sudden wet feeling on my hands. I looked down hesitantly and saw red. Everything was red.

The pure white snow that lay under my feet was now a bright crimson red.

The sky. The birds. Everything became red.

Blood.

His blood.

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Why did we do that? Why did she tell me to do it? Why didnโ€™t she help?

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Then he appeared. I was only able to see small, quick flashes of him before he left. I didnโ€™t know how but he was there in the distance standing in the red snow.

I felt tons of emotions but mostly confusion and fear. Why was he here when he was supposed to be gone?

He was gone but only for a few seconds before returning but this time he seemed to be closer to me.ย 

Flashes of him appeared in front of me until he was so close I could feel his breath on my skin. He wasnโ€™t supposed to breathe not anymore at least. Not after what we had done.ย 

More flashes and he was gone.

But before he left he no longer looked like him he looked like me. He looked like Snow but he wasnโ€™t. Snow was gone and so was he. I had made sure he was gone after everything he did. Snow had always looked similar to me but I didnโ€™t realize the resemblance until then.

โ€œFather?โ€

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โ€œBella please think about what youโ€™re doing?โ€

โ€œI have thought about it father plenty of times and this is what needs to happen?โ€

โ€œWhy do you keep looking back? Is there someone there?โ€ย 

Could he not see her?

โ€œNo, but that isnโ€™t important now is it.โ€ Maybe he saw her but didnโ€™t want to be rude. Why would he care if death was the next thing to come?

โ€œBella- .โ€

That was his last word. I should have let him finish but what good would that do. This is what needed to be done. I was just doing someone elseโ€™s job for them with the help of Snow. I never understood why he didnโ€™t see her standing behind me but I never questioned it. It wasnโ€™t important enough to dwell on.

February 05, 2021 06:25

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Matt Phil
09:20 May 18, 2022

It hits me without realizing why..its a good story though i am a bit confused.......but then I'm a capricorn too...January boy and also a blue garnet.....hoping this is a coicidince cause your the first writer I've followed........

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:O sO wE'rE LeGaLLy fRiEnDs nOw hI

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Jexica Marcell
20:09 Feb 16, 2022

lol you have non existant friends??? nahh, im right here :) loved your bio... so your a capricorn??? maybe I should make a gemini-capricorn cult because my rising sign and moon sign is capricorn. peace <3

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I loved this! I couldn't stop reading! I love how you did not mention what they did but instead showed it through writing. You refrained from stating that Bella killed someone but instead showed it through snippets. Know what I mean? This was brilliant, once again a great example of showing and not telling. I also love how Bella is reflecting on what they did whilst on the swings. This was an AMAZING way to tell a story!! I can't wait for your next story!! My favorite few sentences are: "The pure white snow that lay under my feet was now...

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17:13 Apr 12, 2021

Hello? You here?

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I read your entire bio, so I guess we are friends...lol But seriously Blue, this was so good! I love your style of writing, itโ€™s captivating and unique! Now I have to go read the rest of your stories... who needs homework?

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22:46 Mar 25, 2021

Tell this to a friend: If you leave, leave up your stories. Many people think they're great. Keep the up. If you're gone, don't remove your comments. Others might hear your voice in them, and it's not like you'll get downvoted if you aren't there anymore. Keep your stories up. We need more joy and you can spread it. And this: #StopDownvotingNow #SupportFellowWriters

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Hey, I haven't heard from you in a while, I just wanted to check in on you. How you doing?

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ViCtoRy Is OuRs! Apparently its a challenge where you say it to someone and then have them pass it on. I got it from luna who got it from sapphire who got it from kate who got it from jade who got it from emerald sorry this is really random XD

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First comment hereeee :D You said "dOn'T bE sHy MaKe DaT bElL YelLoW" As being an extroverted introverted person, I shall make that bell yellow with M A G I K...WATCH... *snap* BOOM! The bell shall be yellow.

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