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American Contemporary Romance

Right Cup of Tea

Armed with pamphlets and instructions on caring for recovering stroke patient, Uncle Simon, Claire climbs into the front passenger seat of Lefty's big pick-up for the trip out to his Wimberley, Texas ranch. Try as she might want to admire her new surroundings as the gentle hills start rolling by, her head starts lolling to the side. Soon she is as sound asleep as Patches curled in the cat carrier next to her. The back-pack containing her laptop and all her worldly possessions is at her feet.

The rancher driving can't help but smile empathetically at her profile. Poor kid has been through a lot the last several hours. Night before last she was forced to flee her modest apartment in Altadena, California when Santa Ana winds blew wild fires into the working-class community. She could only save her cat and heavy back-pack. After calling her only relative, Uncle Simon, to see if he would take her in even though they hadn't seen each other since she was a young girl, she braved a day-long cross-country bus ride arriving a few hours ago to find out her uncle had suffered a stroke while she was traveling. Now she is determined to be the one to nurse him back to health. No wonder she can't keep her eyes open. But he feels relieved she is comfortable enough to trust him having only met him this morning before visiting her uncle at the hospital.

Lefty Long offered his own modest two-bedroom ranch house neighboring her uncle's larger ranch for the two of them to occupy while Simon recuperates. That way Simon's main rustic house can continue to be used as VRBO (Vacation Resort By Owner) that's become so popular in this beautiful sage strewn countryside. Lefty plans on throwing his bedroll in the tiny dice house Simon erected for himself. He already assists the old cowhand by helping entertain the guests as they try their waddie skills working an honest to goodness ranch. Lefty chuckles to himself. Sometimes they're a help; sometimes a hindrance. The group there now has been middlin' good but he decides he best stop in to see that all the morning chores can be set with. Hopefully Miss Calhoun will continue to get a little more shut eye. He knows she can't wait to get a hot shower to rinse the smoke from her pores. He'll put a wiggle on.

Assuring himself the greenhorns can't do more harm than good, Lefty pulls in front of his own house just as the sleeping beauty awakes. “Are we there already? I was going to remember the way.”

“There will be plenty of time for that. You're obviously exhausted. Would y'all like a cup of tea before you take that long awaited shower?”

“Sounds wonderful but I better let Patches stretch her legs and do her duty before I take any comfort.”

“That's thinkin' like a cowboy...er, girl. Always care for your animals first. And it's okay if y'all want to bring her inside.”

“Thanks. Uh, do you have any dogs? She's skittish around them.”

“My dog stays out in the barn most of the time. Right now he is making sure the guests at the main house are well protected. I think they may be spoiling him.”

“Ha! If he is a working dog he probably deserves to be spoiled.”

“Yep, he's a border collie. The best working dog. My right hand man.”

“Don't tell me his name is...”

“Mr. Right.”

“Sounds like someone I've been looking for.”

“Maybe you've found him.”

“You mean Uncle Simon. He may be the answer to my problems. If this doesn't work out I guess I can always go down to Mexico and serve cocktails at a beach cabana.”

“Y'all look fine in a bikini. I can see it now.”

As they talked they passed through a modernized kitchen open to a cowboy motif infused front room.

“You have a nice house here.”

“This way to the bedroom.”

“This looks like your master bedroom. Isn't there a guest room. I think Simon should use your room. It would be easier for you to take things out of should you need to later. And Simon would be more comfortable in here.”

“There is an attached bath in here.”

“Once again, easier for Simon.”

“Y'all so considerate of everyone else. How's this other room?

”It'll be perfect. Thank you. And thank you for opening your house. Once Uncle is on his own again I can find a room in town and be out of your way. Hopefully expenses won't be as bad here as in L.A. My remote job should cover them.”

“There're towels in the bathroom here in the hall. Let me know if you need anything else. I'll leave you to your shower and start some tea.”

“Are there water restrictions here? I think this may be a long one.”

“No, we're fine with water. I heard how the reservoirs were empty and the fire hoses had no pressure for the firemen to fight the blazes in your town. No wonder the place burned.”

“And the sprinklers didn't work. People were trying to save their house with the garden hoses as I was peddling out.”

“And some of them died trying I heard on news reports.”

“Oh, I hadn't heard that yet.”

“So sorry you had to go through all that.”

“It'll take a long time to get it out of my mind. Thank you.”

“Ah, shucks. It ain't nuthing.” He tipped is Stetson slightly. “I'll get a few things out of my room then be in the kitchen. Take your time.”

And Claire did. Even though the water was hot she was quivering and unable to tell the tears from the torrents of water pouring down washing away the soot and the charred smell that'd been following her for two nights. She slowly felt herself let go and absorb the healing waters. Praying for the people that had suffered and praying that someday she would be able to forget the horror. Silently thanking Uncle Simon for letting her escape to a safe place. A place she could pick up the pieces and start fresh.

Feeling Ace-high dressed in fresher clothes, she joined Lefty in the kitchen for a welcoming cup of steaming tea. She laughed for the first time in what seemed like plumb forever when she saw his squinny grin and thought maybe she did indeed find Mr. Right.

January 31, 2025 02:39

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Geertje H
05:19 Feb 18, 2025

You have such a lovely gentle way to bring people together. You don't happen to hire out as a matchmaker, do you/ :-)

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Mary Bendickson
06:58 Feb 18, 2025

Thanks but I probably would be horrible at matchmaking😏

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Corrie H
05:17 Feb 18, 2025

Washing off that smokey smell and smiling into Simon's eyes, would do it for me. :-)

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Marty B
05:30 Feb 12, 2025

A cuppa tea and she finally found a home!

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Mary Bendickson
05:58 Feb 12, 2025

Thanks for reading. Yes. She has found a home. Not sure if this is the last episode or not😄.

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Nada Salem
13:52 Feb 07, 2025

It flows naturally ,easy to follow ,makes you want more .nice job

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Mary Bendickson
14:13 Feb 07, 2025

Nice comment. Thanks.

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Ari Walker
16:52 Feb 06, 2025

Mary this story gets better and better. Can’t wait to see how everyone reacts to the next prompt!

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Mary Bendickson
22:16 Feb 06, 2025

Thanks.

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Kathryn Kahn
20:11 Feb 05, 2025

You've captured that feeling of being displaced so well. I'm interested that you and I both wrote about those fires this week. You wrote about Altadena and I wrote about Pacific Palisades, but of course it's all the same disaster. And I see from your comment below that you have been writing about it for a couple of weeks, so I'll go and read your earlier stories as well. You really understand the art of the short story -- taking a small slice and savoring it rather than trying to summarize a big story. (Which I struggle with.) Brava!

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Mary Bendickson
06:57 Feb 06, 2025

Thanks for liking it. And the comments. I am not sure if this is true or not because I have been using this technique a lot but one of the authors told me last week that we really aren't supposed to do series of a storyline. He was told by another writer. I thought it was ok as long as each story could stand on it's own without having to read any previous entry. Don't know where to check out the facts.

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Kathryn Kahn
19:25 Feb 06, 2025

Interesting. I haven't heard anything like that, and I can't imagine it could possibly make a difference. A story is a story is a story. Sometimes our characters appear in one story, and sometimes they appear in several stories, right? If it's a problem, I bet they would have caught it in the approval process. I wouldn't worry too much if I were you.

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Philip Ebuluofor
12:30 Feb 04, 2025

This piece is short to compare to your works and its what came from experience you put here. My guess is:80 real, 20 fiction. Find work.

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Mary Bendickson
16:20 Feb 04, 2025

This the third story in this series. I started it right after watching LA burn on the news. I added it to it following prompts. I used my granddaughter's name but she did not experience it at all. I have been to LA one time and remember it as a sprawling metropolis. I visited a cousin in Wimberly TX years ago. Thanks for liking it.

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Philip Ebuluofor
17:19 Feb 08, 2025

Welcome.

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02:41 Feb 03, 2025

Nice dialogue. Story so appropriate considering the California fires.

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Helen A Howard
09:23 Feb 02, 2025

Great story, Mary. Horrible that people will be going through such awful turmoil. Claire seems like a survivor as well as a downright nice person. With such good people, gives hope for the future.

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Mary Bendickson
14:13 Feb 02, 2025

Thanks.

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Darvico Ulmeli
08:37 Feb 02, 2025

Great story. Hooked until the end. It seems that prompts keep repeating itself. It is like they lost ideas. Nice work anyway.

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Mary Bendickson
14:12 Feb 02, 2025

Thanks. Not reading or writing this week. Everyone is too good at describing miserable weather that leaves me cold. I really want to be a snowbird flying south in winter.😆

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Darvico Ulmeli
14:37 Feb 02, 2025

Good for you. Enjoy.

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Daniel Rogers
03:36 Feb 02, 2025

Your Claire stories have personalized the tragic fires for me. The news is always full of tragic and horrific stories, and I am numbed by them. Claire has woke me up to the fact that real people are suffering and having their lives turned upside down. Really good job, Mary.

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Mary Bendickson
05:30 Feb 02, 2025

Thank you.

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Laurel Hanson
19:58 Feb 01, 2025

Lovely and very timely.

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Mary Bendickson
20:58 Feb 01, 2025

Glad you liked it.

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John Rutherford
11:16 Feb 01, 2025

Lovely story.

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Mary Bendickson
16:37 Feb 01, 2025

🙏 Thanks.

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Rebecca Detti
09:30 Feb 01, 2025

The powers of a restorative cup of tea and such lovely people!

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Mary Bendickson
16:36 Feb 01, 2025

Thanks.

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Trudy Jas
01:28 Feb 01, 2025

Y'all done a mighty fine job of getting these here folk together. So, we aint gonna see no happy ever after. Tha's a shame. :-) I too am disappointed with the prompts, lately. Will keep write, but mostly for myself. If I feel very good about something, I'll. post. Keep intouch.

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Mary Bendickson
16:32 Feb 01, 2025

You are so good with such variety and creativity I'm sure you could be on a winning streak again here. I'll be around,too, once in a while.

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Rebecca Lewis
21:18 Jan 31, 2025

Solid setup. Claire’s got a real reason to be here, and the wildfire backstory adds weight to her situation. Dialogue flows well. Feels natural with Lefty’s cowboy charm. Good sense of place. The Texas ranch setting is vivid without being overdone. Claire’s emotional moment in the shower is strong. It’s the first time she lets herself feel what happened, and that hits right. You’ve got something here — characters that feel real, a setting that’s easy to visualize, and a solid emotional arc for Claire. Would I keep reading? Yeah. Hoping for m...

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Mary Bendickson
05:37 Feb 01, 2025

Thanks for the encouragement.

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Alexis Araneta
17:35 Jan 31, 2025

Another adorable story, Mary! Great warmth to the story. Great job !

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Mary Bendickson
18:49 Jan 31, 2025

Thanks😊

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Elizabeta Zargi
12:44 Jan 31, 2025

You’ve done a great job creating a warm, welcoming atmosphere with the characters, especially Claire and Lefty. The dialogue is natural and full of charm, and I loved the little jokes that added some lightness to the tough situations Claire's facing. There’s a nice balance between humour and the heavier emotions Claire is experiencing after the fire. The pacing felt great too, and the emotional payoff at the end, with Claire starting to heal, was satisfying. Overall, it is a lovely story with relatable characters and a hopeful vibe!

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Mary Bendickson
15:37 Jan 31, 2025

Thank you for your thoughtful critique.

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Jack Kimball
04:16 Jan 31, 2025

Well Mary, reading your “life’s honest imagery” (and that’s really what it is, in my view) is like comparing two paintings, one structurely correct but with no depth, the other needing a little scraping off but once you dig down there’s real emotion exposed, real every day people exposed, with honest problems and hopes. A rare thing to find. So keep at this writing thing. A few nuggets: - sage strewn countryside. - He knows she can't wait to get a hot shower to rinse the smoke from her pores. He'll put a wiggle on. - Even though the wate...

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Mary Bendickson
15:26 Jan 31, 2025

Thank you, Jack, for this honest description of my writing. I have never had the formal training so many talents have on this sight. Only what I remember from school days decades ago. I've stubbornly chosen not to get too caught up in rules for fear I'll focus too much on them, not what I want to speak. The prompts this next week leave me cold. Seems the ones last year at this time were very similar and I tired of reading them no matter how great they were at describing the chill. So I am going to sit this week out writing and reading. I am ...

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Mary Bendickson
15:32 Jan 31, 2025

Focus on. I started this venture two years ago this Feb and was going to step back anyway. Thanks for being a friend and great encourager. I'll pop in from time to time.

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