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Western Drama Christian

This story contains themes or mentions of physical violence, gore, or abuse.

Jarod Cochran was here to hang a man. And maybe to kill a few others who got in the way. The badge of a U.S. marshal came with responsibilities.

Amarillo, Texas was growing at the end of the nineteenth century. Almost a thousand souls now lived in the area, carving out a life and a future from the semi-arid and seemingly empty land. Cattle ranches dominated the region; barbed wire and guns determined who owned which parcel of land.

Jarod stayed on his palomino and ambled through the town’s main street. It wasn’t much: a saloon, a hotel/restaurant, the sheriff’s office, a general store, and a church that doubled as a school. It was the last building that surprised Jarod. A real church in a place like Amarillo seemed out of place.

The sheriff’s office was empty, save for a dirty, disheveled man reclining on a cot in one of the cells. Jarod glanced at him briefly before putting his hat on the desk and sitting down. He spied a coffee pot on the stove and went to get a cup. Empty.

“Where’s the coffee?” Jarod asked, looking around the spacious yet spare office. The stove was cold, reposing dully in one corner of the office. The desk was located opposite the door so that anyone coming in would be seen from the chair. Wanted posters hung on the walls, and a rifle cabinet with no rifles stood against the west wall. Jarod stripped the walls of the outdated posters. He had put away or killed many of the men listed on the posters.

“Dunno,” the prisoner said, grinning, “but I kin tell ya where the sheriff is.”

Jarod looked out the front window, not acknowledging the prisoner. With a swift movement he killed three flies that had huddled together on the desk, with the rolled up and defunct wanted posters.

“He’s dead. Got hisself shot yesterday morning while he was a drankin’ his coffee in the saloon. Rance Larkin’s the one what done it. Man’s meaner’n a poked snake and twice as deadly.”

“Interestin’. Reckon I’ll have ‘im hanged for killin’ the sheriff, too.” Jarod smiled at the prisoner.

The prisoner scoffed.

“Ain’t no lawman gonna bring that man in.”

Jarod’s ice-blue eyes and calm demeanor did a poor job of hiding the menace that the marshal exuded. Leon, the prisoner, felt a cold chill in his hot cell.

“You hungry?”

Leon shrugged.

“The holy woman’s gonna bring me some rabbit stew. I could use a drank.”

Jarod poured out some water from his canteen and handed it to the prisoner. Leon looked at it sadly, wishing it to be an altogether different kind of drink.

“Holy woman?” Jarod continued to stare out of the window. The afternoon sun cast long shadows across the saloon, on the opposite side of the street. A breeze blew through the windows but did little to cool the place down.

“A nun. She come from back east. Runs the school, preaches on Sundays. Got half the saloon girls married off. Ain’t no sportin’ women left ‘cept the fat ugly ones.” Leon laid back on his cot, reminiscing on the good old days when the whores were young and the lawmen weren’t too concerned about the law.

“What you in for?” Jarod stood by the window, peering into the gloom that ensconced the saloon. No one was going in at this early hour.

“I had three whiskeys and two beers,” Leon said.

“That don’t sound like much of a crime.”

Leon shook his head.

“I could only pay for the beers.”

Jarod looked at Leon and smiled, his face crinkling in amusement. After a little consideration, he opened the cell door and shooed Leon out. He would need the cell later. Probably.

A scorpion was sunning itself on the porch outside the sheriff’s office. Jarod ground it beneath his boot heel on his way to the saloon.

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“Primrose! We need coffee!” Sister Cecilia shouted towards the kitchen, not willing to vacate her vantage point on the porch; she had her eye on a tall, lanky lawman. He got off his horse and entered the sheriff’s office. The sister watched to see if the man would come out. She gave it up after a few minutes, going back inside to see why Primrose hadn’t responded.

Primrose, a recent convert from her saloon-girl days, shifted from foot to foot when accosted by Sister Cecilia. The sister scared her silly, but she had found refuge from the dirty cowboys that wanted to buy her body for ten minutes at a time. Sister Cecilia gave her a clean bed, food to eat, and a Bible to read. It was more than she had ever had in her life.

“Old Mr. Gregson sez you still owe him money,” Primrose said quietly, eyes cast down.

“Did he now? I suppose I’ll go pay the man a visit,” Cecilia said. She straightened her scapular, put on her wimple, and strode down the street toward the general store. She slowed down as the lawman walked across the street to the saloon.

That man is a long, tall drink of water. Hmm. I’ll probably be saying some words over his grave later. Pity.

Mr. Gregson paled slightly when Sister Cecilia entered the store. He scurried behind the counter in an effort to distance himself from the redoubtable woman. The distance wasn’t nearly enough.

“Mr. Gregson. I want you to imagine standing before God on Judgment Day. Now I want you to imagine how you’re going to explain to Him how you treated one of His poor servants,” Cecilia said, her voice gentle and steady.

Mr. Gregson felt the palms of his hands sweating. His breath was becoming labored, as if a higher power was squeezing his chest. With a sigh of resignation, he nodded at the sister, admitting his guilt without saying a word.

He measured out two pounds of coffee and handed it to Sister Cecilia.

“I believe Primrose and I could also use a pound of bacon, a big bag of flour, some butter, and maybe toss in a handful of those root beer sweets you have.”

Mr. Gregson laid all the items in front of the sister.

“Perhaps you can have your son deliver this to the church,” Cecilia said. She smiled at Mr. Gregson, but it wasn’t a smile that engendered good feelings.

He nodded. The miserable Mr. Gregson was once again bested by the small, squat woman dressed in black.

Cecilia made her way back to the church, slowly and thoughtfully. She peeked into the saloon. The tall lawman was talking to Seth, the bartender. Both men looked up when Cecilia walked in.

“You here to take in Rance Larkin?” Cecilia wasted no time in getting to the point.

The marshal gazed at her with amusement and admiration. Seth gasped slightly and busied himself with wiping down an already clean bar, getting as far away from Sister Cecilia as possible.

“I reckon so,” Jarod said, tipping his hat to the nun.

“I’ll pray for you,” Cecilia said. She turned quickly and left the saloon.

Jarod watched her leave, a smile playing at the corners of his lips. Seth returned, wiping his brow.

“You reckon she meant it? Prayin’ for me?”

Seth shook his head.

“More like she gonna bully ol’ God into helpin’ you,” he muttered.

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Rance Larkin and his crew showed up at the Red Rooster saloon three nights later. Jarod watched them go inside, but he didn’t immediately follow.

Let ‘em git all liquored up, slow their reflexes.

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Sister! Sister! Rance Larkin’s in town. I jus’ seen ‘im goin’ into th’ saloon,” Primrose said, twisting a dishcloth in her hands. Cecilia put down her Bible and gave Primrose a stern look.

“Prim, you know you’re talking like you’re still a saloon girl. Enunciate your words, girl. Like I taught you.”

Primrose ducked her head in contrition.

“Yes, sister. ‘Nunciate. I seen – “

“Saw.”

“Saw Rance Larkin and his men going into the saloon.”

Cecilia smiled.

“Excellent, Prim. You sound like a real lady.”

Primrose nodded but didn’t smile.

“Ain’t no man – “

“There isn’t any man,” Cecilia corrected.

“Isn’t any man gonna marry me.”

“Isn’t any man that’s going to marry me. And how do you know that, Prim? Did God visit you and tell you that?”

“No, ma’am.”

“God will get you a man if He deems it the right thing to do, girl. I don’t have a man and I’m quite happy about it,” Cecilia said.

“You ain’t – “

“Aren’t.”

“Aren’t allowed a man.”

Cecilia sighed and sipped some of the wine that Mr. Gregson added to the grocery order. Primrose drank lemonade, but would sneak a glass of wine later, when the sister went to bed. Cecilia knew that Primrose did this, and approved of it heartily.

“Have you seen the marshal yet?” Cecilia let Primrose do the spying.

“No, sister. I reckon he don’t – “

“Doesn’t.”

“Doesn’t have the grit. Don’t blame him none – “

“Any.”

“Any. That Rance is a mean one, sister. Kill a man just for lookin’ at ‘im the wrong way.”

Cecilia declined to further correct Primrose’s grammar. It was very tiring, and besides, she had a man to pray for.

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Marshal Jarod Cochrane slipped into the Red Rooster three hours later. The saloon was smoky, loud, raucous, and slightly chaotic. As he knew it would be.

Rance Larkin was sitting at a table playing poker. Jarod spotted his three partners, two tables away, drinking and grabbing at the saloon girls.

Jarod walked behind Rance and, in one smooth motion, relieved Rance of his pistol while drawing his own from the holster. The marshal pointed Rance’s pistol at Rance’s head, levelling his own pistol at the killer’s partners. They all stood up, hands hovering near their pistols.

“Rance Larkin, you’re under arrest for the murders of – “

“You ain’t gittin’ outta here alive, lawman. My boys gonna fill you with lead,” Rance spat out. He did, however, have the good sense to raise his hands and remain still.

The patrons in the line of fire moved quietly away, bringing their whiskey and beer with them. Someone was gonna get killed. They didn’t care who, just as long as they got to see the spectacle.

Jarod then did something that no one expected. He smashed the butt end of Rance’s pistol against Rance’s head. The outlaw slumped over, unconscious. Jarod pointed both pistols at the three men wanting to kill him.

“Grab iron, boys.” Jarod’s voice was soft, but it pierced the air like an arrow. The three outlaws looked at each other, unsure of what to do. Finally, one of them spoke.

“You cain’t git us all, lawman. Why don’t you jus’ tuck tail and run?”

The saloon was so quiet, you could hear an ant burp. Smoke drifted up, twirling through the air and joining the haze that rested on the ceiling. A saloon girl started to sob.

The outlaws went for their pistols. Jarod shot all three before any of them could clear leather. He then walked up to each man and put another bullet in each one. Jarod put Rance over his shoulder and tossed him bodily into the newly-vacant cell in the sheriff's office.

He tore the wanted posters of Rance and his men from the wall and tossed them in the stove before going to bed. The paper would make good kindling when winter got here.

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That’s good coffee, Prim,” Cecilia took a sip, nodding her approval.

“You bet, sister. Strong enough to float a horseshoe on,” Primrose said.

Cecilia finished her coffee and got properly dressed for the upcoming event. Primrose begged her to go along, but she refused the girl.

“You don’t need to see a man’s neck stretched, Prim.”

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Circuit Judge Horace Minor took little time in pronouncing sentence on Rance Larkin. He had other men to hang, and he couldn’t waste any time dispensing justice. The judgeship came with responsibilities.

A crowd had gathered for the spectacle. Sister Cecilia prayed for Rance before he died, and then again after he was laid out in a cheap wood coffin. Jarod watched the proceedings from the sheriff’s office. He had no need to see something, up close, that he had seen dozens of times before.

The crowd dispersed. Most of the men headed for the saloon to discuss the happenings of the last few days. The marshal was avoided by some of the men, embraced by others, and looked at with desire by many of the women. Even some of the married ones gave a thought to a dark night together with the lawman.

Cecilia strode to the sheriff’s office in a cloud of dust and clothed in righteousness. The marshal stood quickly upon the sister’s entrance.

“Amarillo owes you a debt of gratitude, marshal.”

Jarod nodded. He didn’t know what to say to such a strange-looking creature.

“The old sheriff has a bottle of whiskey in the bottom right drawer, marshal. Why don’t you pour out a drink for us?”

Jarod eyed the nun with a mixture of curiosity and amusement. He took the bottle out and poured whiskey into two coffee cups.

“I didn’t think your kind drank, sister,” Jarod said, sipping the whiskey. He grimaced and put the cup down.

“God requires me to be chaste and poor, young man. He never told me to not drink,” Cecilia said severely. Jarod chuckled and raised his cup. He watched as the sister drained her cup and sat back, sighing.

The moments ticked by, quietly and comfortably. Dust motes danced in the morning sun, twirling lazily in the light before disappearing into the shadows. Cecilia and Jarod had another drink, each remaining silent and thinking their own thoughts.

“You – uh – you a religious man, marshal?” Cecilia broke the comfortable silence.

Jarod sipped some more whiskey before answering.

“Yes, ma’am. I wear God’s judgment on my right hip,” he said, patting his Colt. Cecilia didn’t want to smile, but she did.

“And I preach God’s word on Sundays. Mostly about love and forgiveness.”

“I reckon God speaks to us in different ways, sister,” Jarod said, putting his whiskey down and lighting a cigarette.

Sister Cecilia couldn’t argue with that logic, though she didn’t like it.

“A matter of interpretation,” she said quietly.

“Yes, ma’am.”

The sister stood, ready to depart.

“Walk me to the church, marshal. I have some nice bacon sandwiches and a strong pot of coffee for you before you leave.” She didn’t wait for an answer.

“You ever think of marrying?” Cecilia’s short legs pumped through the dust while the marshal’s long, smooth stride kept him easily beside her.

“A little. Ain’t no woman gonna want a scalawag like me, though,” Jarod said, his tone suggesting that a wife would be nice to have, but it was unlikely to happen.

“I have this housekeeper. Primrose. She’d make you a fine wife.”

Jarod eyed the nun thoughtfully, and not with a little amusement.

So, she’s a matchmaker, too. Lord!

They stepped inside the cool, dark kitchen. Jarod sat down and took the proffered coffee. He nodded in approval.

“That’s some good coffee, sister. Reckon you have to stir the sugar in with barbed wire.”

“Primrose made it. The sandwiches as well. She’d make you a fine – “

Jarod held up his hands, laughing.

“I get your point, sister. Maybe someday I’ll wander back this way. Anyway - ” Jarod said, standing, anxious to go. He had more men to catch and kill.

Cecilia watched Jarod mount his horse in one easy motion. She shook her head; it was a struggle for her to get atop a pony.

“Go on with you, then. When you’re ready to hang up that badge, come on back.”

Jarod tipped his hat and rode away. It was the first time he rode away and didn’t want to. Cecilia watched him ride away.

Primrose then came around the corner on a horse, breathless, her face red with heat and anxiousness. Cecilia eyed her with surprise, but not with shock.

“I’m gonna catch me that man, sister. Thank you kindly for ever’thing. I ain’t never gonna ferget ya’!” Primrose tore off down the street after the marshal.

“I will never forget you. Enunciate!” Cecilia yelled after the retreating housekeeper. She watched as Primrose caught up with the marshal. He shook his head. Primrose gesticulated wildly. This dance went on for the better part of ten minutes. The marshal then nodded. The couple rode side by side out of sight. Cecilia had the feeling that the marshal had finally been defeated by a force stronger than his pistol.

Cecilia sat down in a chair in the parlor and sipped a glass of wine. She raised it to the picture of Jesus, hanging over the fireplace.

“I think we did a fair few days’ worth of good, wouldn’t You say?” The portrait of Jesus didn’t answer, but Cecilia heard His response nonetheless.

She spent the rest of the afternoon contemplating which saloon girl she would save next.

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Mary Bendickson
18:09 Jun 28, 2023

Always love a good western. This one had it all. Well done my Texas friend.

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Delbert Griffith
19:44 Jun 28, 2023

Thanks so much, Mary. Gotta have a steely-eyed lawman, a detestable bad man, and a budding love interest. Oh, yeah, and some gunplay. LOL Thanks again, my friend. It's always a pleasure to get a comment from you. Cheers!

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Delbert Griffith
19:44 Jun 28, 2023

Thanks so much, Mary. Gotta have a steely-eyed lawman, a detestable bad man, and a budding love interest. Oh, yeah, and some gunplay. LOL Thanks again, my friend. It's always a pleasure to get a comment from you. Cheers!

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Amanda Lieser
05:36 Jul 21, 2023

Hi Delbert, Oh another one of your class Delbert takes. I loved the tropes you played up in this one-unexpected roles, a complicated western history, and that nothing and no one is how it seems. I also appreciated the different POVs for this one. Although, I think the mystery could have held out longer if it had been just Jarod. Nice work on this one!!

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Delbert Griffith
09:18 Jul 21, 2023

Thanks so much for the kind words, Amanda. I appreciate how you always read my little tales and leave a commentary. The title says it all, I think. A matter of interpretation when it comes to God, justice, and love. Jarod and the sister see God in different ways. The sister and Primrose see love in different ways. And so on. Primrose is the wild card. She's there to draw out the sister's personality a little, show her kindness and her sense of right and wrong. She chases after the marshal in the end to wrap up the theme. Is it love, lust...

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Gloria Dawn
04:09 Jul 06, 2023

Another fun western story, and about Amarillo, where my editor and my mentor, Jodi Thomas both live. I loved it, Well done!

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Delbert Griffith
09:41 Jul 06, 2023

Thanks so much, Gloria. I was born and raised in Amarillo, so I know the area. Amarillo is in the middle of nowhere, so it makes for great westerns, don't you think? Wow, small world. Thanks again, my friend. Cheers!

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Bruce Friedman
16:22 Jul 05, 2023

I very good yarn, Delbert. I liked the characters and was attracted by the notion of a nun playing a prominent roles in a western. A very minor point -- your use of the term "hotel/restaurant" caught me up a little short. The slash seemed to be a little out of place in the classic story.

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Delbert Griffith
20:09 Jul 05, 2023

Thanks so much, Bruce. I appreciate the kind words. Upon reflection, I see that "hotel/restaurant" is sort of an anachronism. I should have gone with some western name, and added an ampersand, yes? Ah, well, we live and learn. Thanks again for reading and commenting, my friend. Cheers!

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Bruce Friedman
11:54 Jul 06, 2023

A veery small point but you have done such a good job of taking me back in time, it did interrupt the flow of the story for me. As to the substitute, you might consider a colorful phrase like "broken-down hotel with a five-table restaurant on the first floor."

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Michelle Oliver
12:27 Jul 04, 2023

You delivered such a wonderful western, with all the key elements in play. I love Cecilia, she adds just the perfect amount of spice to this tale. Her lines are classic and I think Seth had her measure just right. “More like she gonna bully ol’ God into helpin’ you,” There is so much authenticity with your story, as if you have really lived the take you’re telling. Maybe there’s a sharp shooting lawman in your family tree.

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Delbert Griffith
12:47 Jul 04, 2023

Yes, lots and lots of lawmen in my family tree; the latest one is an uncle who was a cop in Ft. Worth. The first one that I know of was a sheriff in New Mexico, in the late 1800's. Nice call, Michelle. I agree that Cecilia is a memorable character. I "stole" her from Shirley McClain's role in "Two Mules for Sister Sarah." I was raised in the Texas Panhandle, so a lot of the scenery is from there, and the descriptions of open spaces. We had horses and guns, so that part is also authentic. Although I live in San Antonio now, I still recall ...

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Michelle Oliver
12:55 Jul 04, 2023

They do say write what you know, and I think it shows with these stories! Totally authentic and enjoyable reads.

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Michał Przywara
23:31 Jul 03, 2023

An enjoyable Western :) The town felt alive, and even minor characters like Leon seemed alive. Rance was undone by hubris and liquor (and curious then, that this is the vice the nun engages in.) Rance's apprehension did seem quick and relative pain free, but perhaps it wasn't actually the main conflict in this story. Maybe this is more about a veteran marshal coming to terms with needing more out of life, like Primrose. Thanks for sharing!

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Delbert Griffith
08:44 Jul 04, 2023

Thanks for the kind words, Michal. They're always appreciated from you. I wanted the tale to be about perception versus reality. Rance was perceived as a very dangerous man, but the real badass was the quiet and unassuming marshal. The sister was perceived as an eccentric, intimidating woman, but she was, in reality, a person who did a lot of good for the community. Primrose was seen as an uneducated woman with an inferiority complex, but she turned out to be bold enough to chase down the marshal and instigate a relationship. I was inspire...

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Hala Giles
07:26 Jul 03, 2023

Hi Delbert, New to reedsy. I love Westerns so was delighted when this prompt came up. You have delivered a masterclass. I felt I was there amongst the grit and drama. I loved sitting in your character's pockets. The story was driven by authenticity. Time stopped and i enjoyed being in your world. I'd love to read the next chapter.

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Delbert Griffith
09:20 Jul 03, 2023

Thank you so much, Hala, for the kind words. Welcome to Reedsy! Lots of great people here, and lots of quality tales. One learns a lot from reading them. Idid. Again, thank you. Good writing, my friend. Cheers!

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Sophia Gavasheli
15:57 Jul 01, 2023

Delbert, you have a real talent for writing lawman characters (and nuns too). Jarod and Cecilia were very fully formed, and I can totally see them beyond the scope of this story, catching criminals and helping girls respectively. All the little actions, like killing the flies/tearing down the posters from Jarod, and the grammar corrections/conversation with Gregson for Cecilia go a long way to develop character. This was great from the get-go. I loved this: "And maybe to kill a few others who got in the way. The badge of a U.S. marshal cam...

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Delbert Griffith
17:17 Jul 01, 2023

Thank you so much, Sophia, for the kind words and the analysis. As always, you have somethin g relevant and insightful to say. Your critique is spot on. I know, a small change, but it makes a difference. The continuity is lacking here, and you caught it. Thank you very much, my friend. I think you're the first one to catch the foreshadowing of the three flies and the scorpion, representing Rance Larkin and his three pals. And the additional foreshadowing of tearing down the posters. Nicely spotted. The religion thing. Yes. Very important ...

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Susan Catucci
00:34 Jul 01, 2023

You know, Del, I have loved this story from its first machination to how it's grown into a full-fledged tale. Primrose is someone to remember, as is Cecilia and Jarod, all diamonds in their own right. I should share, when I first saw this week's prompts and that there had already been a story submitted, one? I thought, Del. Yup, must be. You did not disappoint with this. You bring all the dust, grit, grime and glory of the west to life in a way I've only seen from you and done your way. I'm glad you are as steadfast as your stories...

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Delbert Griffith
09:56 Jul 01, 2023

Thanks you for the kind words, my friend. The story was ably helped along by you; Susan's insights always have me shooting straight. This was particularly fun to write because I could see the characters instantly. They came to me almost fully formed, which is an uber-rare event for me. I normally have to spend a lot of time and effort in crafting a personality, but I had these people with me right from the start. Thanks again, my friend. Your insights, before and after submitting, are valued by this scribbler of tales. Cheers!

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Susan Catucci
13:50 Jul 01, 2023

You hit on something significant, Del. The few times I've begun a story with characters fully formed in my heart and mind? It's the best writing experience and the outcome is almost always satisfying to anyone who reads it. You gather the goods and the tale sort of writes itself. It's plain that's at play here - a real hook, line and sinker experience. (and fun for all) :) Cheers back!

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Zack Powell
17:43 Jun 29, 2023

Confession: You were the person I was most hoping would submit a story for this week's contest, Del. After "A Dollar for God," I had high hopes that you could turn out another fun Western piece, and what do you know? I was right. Lots of depth in here, lots of things accomplished in a short amount of words and time. Outlaws and marshals, a shootout and a hanging, a burgeoning romance (featuring an ex-harlot!). But it was well-paced and it worked. Even the one-off characters like Judge Horace and Mr. Gregson add to the sense of community and...

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Delbert Griffith
18:22 Jun 29, 2023

Zack, my friend, thank you very much for the kind words and the analysis of my little tale. I appreciate that you recognized how much was in such a little story. Like most of my tales, it didn't come easy. I meant for the Christian theme to come through, hence, the title. I wanted the idea to come across that God speaks to all of us in different ways, and then I took that idea and went semi-absurdist with the marshal saying that God's voice was his pistol and Jesus' portrait "spoke" to Sister Cecilia. Just a little, fun thing to toss in, gi...

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Chris Campbell
15:18 Jun 29, 2023

Delbert, Coincidentally, we both have matchmakers in our Westerns this week. I thought the nun was going be atypical, but you surprised me. She turned out to be a bit of a Shirley MacLaine in Two mules for Sister Sara. The following passages gave me a chuckle: 1. "Man’s meaner’n a poked snake and twice as deadly.” 2. "That’s good coffee, Prim,” Cecilia took a sip, nodding her approval. “You bet, sister. Strong enough to float a horseshoe on,” Primrose said. (We also both have included strong coffee this week). 3. The marshall was avoide...

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Delbert Griffith
15:53 Jun 29, 2023

LOL Well, matchmakers and strong coffee make for a good tale, my friend. I'm now very anxious to read your tale. You can write western tales, well, Chris. Your recurring librarian is a hoot! Great call on the "Two Mules..." movie, Chris. I was definitely channeling Shirley McLain when creating Sister Cecilia. I'm quite pleased that you named five (five!) quotables in my story. If you liked them, they have to be good. Thank you, my friend. Thanks so much, my friend, for the kind words. A Chris Campbell "like" is something worthy to attain....

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Chris Campbell
00:08 Jun 30, 2023

You're too kind, mate. Much appreciated, and it is another Wynonna Belle tale!

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Wally Schmidt
05:29 Jun 29, 2023

I , for one, would make a terrible matchmaker. No way did I see Primrose and the Marshal ending up together, but there you have it, you managed to pull it off. Love all the different story lines going on. The setting is like a movie set and you can just picture that swinging saloon door. You had me at ant burping. More like this.

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Delbert Griffith
10:48 Jun 29, 2023

Thanks so much for the praise, Wally. Your insights and comments are always taken to heart and considered carefully. I was going to write "ant farting," but I felt that the tone of the tale wouldn't appreciate an ant breaking wind. LOL I was thinking of the relationship between Marshal Dillon and Miss Kitty in "Gunsmoke" when writing the final part. The marshal always resisted marriage to the available and willing Miss Kitty. He was an idiot for not marrying her. Free drinks for life. LOL Sister Cecelia is a romantic at heart. Her love af...

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Wally Schmidt
04:41 Jun 30, 2023

no no you did the right thing with the ant, i could just see the poor ant huddled over in the middle belching ' She appreciates strong coffee and whiskey, so I feel like she can be trusted.' My kind of gal.

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Lily Finch
02:40 Jun 29, 2023

Delbert, I loved these lines: "Mr. Gregson felt the palms of his hands sweating. His breath was becoming labored, as if a higher power was squeezing his chest. With a sigh of resignation, he nodded at the sister, admitting his guilt without saying a word." A true western with all the fixins. Cecilia declined to further correct Primrose’s grammar. It was very tiring, and besides, she had a man to pray for. - This was a delightful part of the story. Really brought some levity. Dust motes danced - mites? “I think we did a fair few days’...

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Delbert Griffith
10:32 Jun 29, 2023

Thank you very much for the praise, Lily. It means a lot coming from you. And, yes, correcting someone's grammar sounds like it would be tiring, yes? LOL I like the nun. No one really knows how to deal with her. She is feared, she is respected, she is a force of God and nature. I wish I had put more about Primrose in there; she sounds intriguing. Alas, I was running up against the 3k limit. Thanks again, my friend. I'm so pleased that you liked my tale. Cheers, LF6!

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Jack Kimball
19:29 Jun 28, 2023

Love the grammar lesson going on. That’s unique. Where does this stuff come from? Especially love how I could piggy back on how much fun you had writing this. Makes me want to go see ‘Unforgiven’, … again. Best. Jack

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Delbert Griffith
19:51 Jun 28, 2023

Thanks so much, Jack. I appreciate the kind words. Maybe Rance Larkin is a distant relative of Phillip Larkin? LOL Again, thanks for reading and commenting, my friend. Always appreciated from you. Cheers!

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