Submitted to: Contest #307

The Apotheosis of Suffering

Written in response to: "Center your story around someone or something that undergoes a transformation."

Fantasy Fiction Speculative


In those twilight hours when Port Havens’ great machine of commerce and corruption ground to its nightly halt, when the last clerk had shuttered his ledger and the final merchant had counted his coin, there moved through the city's arteries a creature whose very existence was testament to the axiom that evil, like all things of true sophistication, must evolve or perish.

Nylliveth had walked these streets for nearly three centuries, witness to the rise and fall of dynasties, the birth and death of empires, yet never had she felt the peculiar electricity that now coursed through her supernatural essence. It was as though some fundamental law of her being had shifted, some cosmic tumbler had clicked into place, unlocking chambers of possibility she had never dared imagine.

The urban sprawl stretched before her like a vast manuscript written in suffering and want, each alleyway a sentence, each tenement a paragraph in humanity's endless chronicle of misery. But where once she had been content to be merely a reader of this text, tonight she felt the stirring of authorial ambition. The realisation struck her with the force of revelation: she had been thinking too small, feeding too crudely, operating at a level of artistry that would shame a common cutpurse.

Her form rippled with newfound purpose as she navigated the labyrinthine streets, her consciousness expanding to encompass not merely the immediate geography of pain that surrounded her, but the vast network of cause and effect that connected every soul in this teeming metropolis. Here was a beggar whose pride could be systematically dismantled through calculated acts of false charity. There, a merchant whose avarice could be turned against his own family through the careful application of financial pressure. Each human represented not a meal, but an instrument in an orchestra she was only beginning to learn how to conduct.

The lashers upon her back—those serpentine appendages that had once served merely as conduits for her hunger—were changing, subdividing and multiplying like the branches of some infernal tree. Where once she had possessed two crude channels for absorbing anguish, she now felt the emergence of dozens of more specialised organs, each attuned to different frequencies of human suffering. Some thrummed in response to physical pain, others to emotional torment, but the newest and most sensitive were those that resonated with a suffering so exquisite she had only begun to recognise it: the agony of hope destroyed by one's own hand.

She paused before a gin palace whose windows glowed with the sickly amber light of cheap spirits and cheaper dreams. From within came the raucous laughter of men who laughed because they had forgotten any other response to their circumstances, and the brittle gaiety of women who smiled with their mouths whilst their eyes remained as cold and distant as winter stars. Here was suffering in its most obvious form—crude, unrefined, the natural consequence of poverty and desperation. Once, she might have entered such an establishment and fed until gorged, but now the very thought filled her with something approaching revulsion.

Where was the artistry in harvesting what had already been sown by others? Where was the craft in collecting anguish that grew wild, untended, like weeds in an abandoned garden? No—what stirred within her demanded something infinitely more sophisticated: the cultivation of torment in souls that believed themselves beyond its reach, the careful architecture of despair in hearts that had known only joy.

A woman stumbled from the establishment's maw, her corpulent frame swaying with the particular rhythm of one who had long ago given up any pretence of dignity. Turkey grease stained her bodice, and liquor had painted her cheeks with the false roses of perpetual intoxication. She paused beneath a flickering gas lamp, fumbling with the strings of a reticule that contained, Nylliveth knew with certainty, precisely three coppers and a steel—enough for one more tot of blue ruin, or half a loaf of yesterday's bread.

Here was opportunity, but not of the crude variety she had once pursued. Instead of the obvious predation—a quick mental invasion, a feeding frenzy of despair—Nylliveth found herself contemplating something far more elegant. She slipped into the woman's consciousness as gently as morning mist creeping through an open window, not to devour, but to plant.

The woman's mind was a cluttered attic of faded memories and fossilised regrets. A husband dead twelve years. Children scattered to the winds of industrialisation, their letters growing shorter and less frequent with each passing season. But amongst these genuine sorrows, Nylliveth began to weave new threads of anguish, so subtle in their placement that they seemed to have grown naturally from the existing tapestry of grief.

Your eldest boy spoke of you at Year’s End dinner, she whispered to the deepest recesses of the woman's psyche, laughed about the old sot who bore him, wondered aloud why he bothers sending money to someone so far beneath redemption. The suggestion took root with the particular tenacity of fears that confirm one's worst suspicions about oneself. Tomorrow, the woman would remember this as surely as if she had overheard the conversation herself. Within a fortnight, she would stop opening her son's letters altogether, too certain of their contents to bear the confirmation of her unworthiness.

But this was merely the opening movement of a symphony that would play out over months, perhaps years. Nylliveth could see it all with crystalline clarity: the woman's increasing isolation, the way she would drive away each remaining connection through her own certainty of their inevitable abandonment. She would become a perfect example of suffering's most exquisite form—that which devours itself, needing no external force to sustain its growth.

The demon withdrew from the woman's mind with the satisfaction of an artist who has just placed the first brushstroke on a canvas that will become a masterpiece. This was what she had been evolving towards—not mere predation, but the systematic cultivation of human misery as a fine art.

She moved through the city's nocturnal ecosystem with new eyes, cataloguing not immediate opportunities for feeding, but subjects worthy of her developing craft. A young clerk hurrying home to his bride, so secure in his modest prospects that he had never considered how easily a reputation could be destroyed by the right word in the right ear. The well-fed money-changer counted his day's receipts, blissfully unaware that his business partner was already laying the groundwork for embezzlement that would be discovered just as his daughter's wedding bills came due. Each represented months, perhaps years of careful work, but the eventual harvest would be sweeter than anything her cruder methods had ever yielded.

It was as she contemplated these long-term investments that she caught sight of him—the gentleman whose very existence seemed to mock the fundamental principles upon which her nature was founded. He emerged from The Dancing Lion with the particular bearing of a man who had never known want, never felt the gnawing tooth of genuine despair. His evening clothes were understated but fine, his bearing that of one who walked through the world confident in his place within it. But it was the bouquet he carried—those carefully selected blooms that spoke of a love so routine it had achieved the status of habit—that made her lashers’ writhe with anticipation so intense it bordered on the transcendent.

Here was a canvas worthy of her emerging mastery.

She followed him through streets that grew progressively more genteel, past houses whose very architecture spoke of settled prosperity and unexamined contentment. Gas lamps cast circles of golden light that pushed back the darkness but could not illuminate the shadows gathering in their wake. When he finally turned up the flagstone path towards his manor—that monument to bourgeois respectability with its neat hedgerows and freshly painted shutters—Nylliveth positioned herself where she could observe the domestic tableau about to unfold.

Through windows that glowed with the warm amber of whale oil and domestic harmony, she watched the evening's ritual commence. His wife—a woman whose beauty lay not in any striking feature but in the accumulated grace of years spent in loving security—accepted his offering with the particular smile of one for whom such gestures had become as reliable as sunrise. The children—a boy of perhaps eight and a girl some two years younger—erupted into the room with the unselfconscious joy of souls who had never learned to doubt their welcome in the world.

Perfect. Absolutely, devastatingly perfect.

As the house settled into its evening rhythms and the parlour window framed the gentleman in his solitary communion with tobacco and flame, Nylliveth began to consider the architecture of her masterpiece. This would not be the crude seduction she had once employed, nor the simple corruption that had served her in cruder times. This required subtlety that bordered on the surgical, patience that spanned not hours but seasons, an understanding of human psychology so complete that her subjects would orchestrate their own destruction whilst believing themselves the victims of cruel circumstance.

She began to shift her form, but not into the obvious temptress that her younger self might have chosen. Instead, she crafted something far more insidious—a figure of refined melancholy, beautiful in the way that autumn is beautiful, touched with just enough sorrow to awaken the protective instincts of good men whilst harbouring depths that promised understanding of life's hidden complexities.

When she materialised at his window, it was not as predator stalking prey, but as tragedy personified, seeking succour from the only source of light in a world gone dark.

The gentleman started at the sight of her, his pipe nearly tumbling from suddenly nerveless fingers. But his reaction was not fear—it was that peculiar mixture of concern and fascination that marked the truly compassionate soul when confronted with beautiful suffering. He set aside his reading and approached the window with careful steps, sensing that his next action would alter the fundamental trajectory of his existence.

She watched through the glass as he wrestled with the competing demands of propriety and compassion, and could almost hear the internal dialogue that would lead him, inevitably, to open his door to the stranger who stood shivering in his garden. Here was the moment when her true work would begin—not with supernatural compulsion or demonic glamour, but with the far more devastating weapon of genuine human sympathy turned against itself.

He opened the door with a reluctance, performing an action his conscience demanded but his judgement questioned. In the space between his threshold and where she stood, Nylliveth prepared to begin the systematic destruction of everything he held dear, using his own goodness as the instrument of its accomplishment.

"Who are you?" he asked, the question carrying the weight of one who sensed he stood at the crossroads of fate.

"I am," she replied with the precise calibration of truth and mystery that would ensure his continued interest, "someone who has lost everything, and who fears she may cause others to lose what she no longer possesses."

It was not entirely a lie. She had indeed lost something—the crude simplicity of her former nature, the uncomplicated hunger that had sustained her for centuries. In its place, she had gained something infinitely more powerful and terrible: the ability to create suffering that was worthy of the name art.

The sound of approaching footsteps announced his wife's arrival, and Nylliveth felt her newly evolved lashers’ tremble with anticipatory ecstasy. Here was the moment when the first domino would fall, when the perfect domestic harmony she had observed would receive its initial, seemingly insignificant disruption. The wife would see them together, would catalogue the stranger's beauty and her husband's obvious discomfort, would plant in the fertile soil of her own imagination the seeds that Nylliveth would so carefully tend in the months to come.

"Is everything all right, love?" the woman asked, but her eyes were already performing the calculations that marked the beginning of her doom.

"Everything," Nylliveth replied with the serene confidence of an artist preparing to reveal her masterpiece, "is about to become exactly as it should be."

For she had transcended her former nature entirely. No longer merely a demon who fed upon human suffering, she had become something far more sophisticated and terrible: a conductor of symphonies written in anguish, an architect of despair so elegant that her victims would thank her for the privilege of their destruction. The transformation was complete, and this family—so beautiful in their innocence, so perfect in their love—would be her proof that no happiness was too pure to corrupt, no love too strong to turn poisonous.

The real work was about to begin, and it would be glorious.

Posted Jun 17, 2025
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15 likes 9 comments

Shalom Willy
01:00 Jun 28, 2025

Hello Black, I naturally love reading, especially good stories, and I'm really glad that your plot captured my attention. I love the part each character played. Good job!
Apart from posting stories on Reedsy, have you been able to publish a book?

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L.R. Black
21:45 Jun 28, 2025

Thanks! I’m glad you enjoyed it. I haven’t published anything yet! But I am planning on it.

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Shalom Willy
22:37 Jun 28, 2025

Oh, that's fantastic. You sound like you're currently writing a book, right?

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L.R. Black
04:12 Jun 30, 2025

I have a few projects on the go at the moment! But yes, I have a main work in progress!

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Shalom Willy
06:40 Jun 30, 2025

Wow, that's good to hear. I'm also an aspiring author as well. I'd love it if we connected better on some other social platform and shared ideas. Okay?

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Julie Grenness
21:56 Jun 25, 2025

This tale is intriguingly evocative and creepy. The talented writer has successfully created a haunting story of sinister intent. Well written.

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L.R. Black
21:49 Jun 26, 2025

Thank you!

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Tom Clause
06:49 Jun 25, 2025

This is so cool, very dickens meets fantasy!

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L.R. Black
07:42 Jun 25, 2025

Thank you so much! Exactly what I was going for!

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