In the dim gray before dawn, I and mine are kept awake and restless by the bustle and hurry of workmen all around us. They shout to each other, grunting and groaning as they strain against ropes like horses. The skeleton of the great tent is rising at their hands.Β
Small stars of lantern lights bob. Dogs run about barking, some stopping to bark directly at me and mine. I snarl and charge the bars, but the creatures know I am confined, and stand yapping just beyond my reach. Light is spreading in the sky. The sun will soon rise. As darkness disperses, the men work faster. They must drape the skeleton with its cloth before the light of day reveals it.Β
I and mine have seen these routines countless times. We know well what will happen as the day passes, though we will have no part in the doings until later. While we wait, there is much activity to watch.Β
The sun rises, eclipsing the weak light of the lanterns, scattering enough light for feeble human eyes to see by. I and mine can see well enough in darkness of night, but not so with men. They wait for the light of day to do their main work.Β
Rays of the risen sun finger the red-and-white-striped tent, now erect and solid, as stages and smaller tents are set up all around it. The work moves away from us, and we finally sleep, my two mates resting against me.Β
βBrutus!β
I wake to the smell of meat and the name I am called. Surging forward, I snatch the food before my mates can touch it. Other pieces of meat are tossed to them after I am occupied, and the bringer of meat walks away.
Outside the bars, a group of children is gathered, watching me and mine as we eat. I lift my head to growl at them.Β
Something jabs me from behind, and I whirl to defend myself. Boys are poking sticks through the bars. I bite one stick, but another jabs me, and another. Furious, I attack the rods, but always another is threatening me. Again I am prodded from behind, and I spin to face the new tormentor. My meat is on the end of a stick beyond the bars, beyond my reach. The boy who holds it taunts me, waving it in front of my reaching claws. He laughs at my raging warnings, knowing I cannot reach him.
βLeave Brutus alone.βΒ
The voice is quiet, but carries authority. It belongs to a boy standing beside a wheelbarrow, older than any taunting me. He smells of sweat and hay and horse.Β
βGive that to me.βΒ
The horse-smelling boy takes the stick with my meat from the boy who has it and thrusts it through the bars, shaking it until the meat comes loose. My food falls to the straw bedding on the floor. I crouch over it, guarding it between my paws, daring anyone to defy me for it. My mates make few attempts to take what is mine, and in my present mood, they will not try me.Β
βDonβt bother the lions again, or Iβll tell their keeper.βΒ
The boy picks up his wheelbarrow full of horse droppings and goes on his way. The younger boys continue to watch me and mine, but do not poke sticks through the bars again.Β
After we have eaten, my mates and I sleep again until we are woken by a heavy stick dragged along the bars with a clatter.Β
βWake up!β
The Man has his whip in one hand and his chair in the other. A larger unroofed cage is set up beside the one we are in, and he opens the door between them, calling to us. We rise and trot into the larger cage.Β
βBrutus! Up!βΒ
The long, stiff part of his whip taps a pedestal, and I leap up onto it, all four feet close together, shifting to keep my balance.Β
βBrutus, sit!βΒ
His whip taps more insistently, and I sit down. He directs my mates to sit on their own pedestals, then returns his attention to me.Β
βBrutus, here!βΒ
He has moved across the cage. His whip taps a different pedestal, taller than the one I sit on, with a shorter one beside it. He holds a hoop now, though his chair is within his reach. Quickly, I must trot to the new pedestals, jump up, leap through the hoop across the gap, onto the second set of stepped pedestals, and go back around to my own place.Β
I can guess now the things he wants of me, but the first times, I had no understanding. Whip lashing and cracking, legs of his chair jabbing in my face, he chased me. Now I can remember past training and avoid the stinging reproofs.Β
After he is satisfied, the Man sends us back into our small cage. Outside, men and creatures are hurrying again, readying to go out and parade, and come back before the evening. All are decked in finery.Β
The midday summer sun is hot. I and mine pant, trying to cool ourselves. The reek of our own urine and feces rises from the filthy straw beneath us. We doze.
The sun sinks down the sky. Noise is swelling from beyond the great striped tent. A crowd is gathering.Β
Workmen come to move our cage. I snarl and growl, daring them to lay a hand where I can reach it. They warn each other away from my teeth and beat a mallet handle against the bars to warn me away.Β
Closer to the tent, frantic music makes me pace. A voice is bellowing inside. Cackles like those of hyenas leak out.Β
Our cage is pushed through a flap of the tent. The door opens, and I rush out. The Man snaps the whip in my face, and I recoil.Β
Lights shine onto the sawdust-covered floor. The air is warm and stuffy. Many watchers sit along the walls.Β
βBrutus! Up!βΒ
The whip taps the pedestal, and I leap, snarling.Β
βBEHOLD, THE KING OF BEASTS!β
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A very poignant tale you've weaved here! Well described, and I like the POV use here.
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Thanks, MB! Your use of the word poignant here is a huge compliment. Animal POV is one of my favorite things to write. Iβd had this idea in my head for some time, and this prompt seemed perfect for it. This story is very important to me, so it means a lot that you commented on this one in particular.
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You're very welcome! I'll stop by and give some of your others a read soon. Also I just posted a new one for this weeks theme.
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Again, Guadalupe, your elegance of prose conveys so much feelingβ¦ I can sense the atmosphere, smell the meat and the soiled hay. The repetition of βI and mineβ is nice, and the final line is sad irony. Itβs a melancholy piece, but beautifully told.
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Thank you, Cindy! I wanted to really put the readers into the lionβs world, and Iβm happy to hear that it worked! I attribute my writing style to having read a lot of classic literature, and taking inspiration from some of my favorite styles. I especially think that Jack London uses words and comparisons in a fascinating way, and I love the richly described worlds of The Lord of the Rings and Watership Down. Also, the idea to write about a circus was greatly inspired by Hugh Lofting's Doctor Dolittle series, two books of which involve a ci...
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A good take on the prompt. And quite sad. It's never explicitly mentioned, but there's a sense of resignation to the narrator, like he's been broken and quite literally, all he has left is fighting for scraps. I once read about how circus elephants are trained, and this reminds me of it. Particularly, when they practice, the lion worries about getting the next command right, and he's driven by memories of past failures - and past strikes of the whip.
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Hi, MichaΕ. Thank you for liking this, and for taking the time to comment. I always appreciate hearing what you took away from the story. Thank you for letting me know you liked my take on the prompt; I always wonder if Iβve matched it well. I like your take on the lionβs sad resignation and brokenness. You verbalized what I was trying to show. I hope to write a story like this about elephants someday, if the prompts permit. Wild animals performing shows in captivity is something I dislike, and if I can show more people the truth about w...
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Hello, MichaΕ. I hope I am not bothering you. If you have time, I would like to request your help/feedback on my story βA Pilgrimβ. If you do not have time, thatβs okay, I would understand. When I read my story, I feel that something is lacking. It was initially much shorter, but I added a part, and I think itβs better with the added part, but I still think that something is missing. What is missing, I do not know. The story is inspired by the Stone Soup fable. Any suggestions or help of any kind would be greatly appreciated. As of the...
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This is beautifully-done tragedy, Guadalupe. That so noble a beast be reduced in this manner is heart-breaking. It isn't right, and you've conveyed that so well without ever a word in support of that point -- the perfect "show, don't tell." I always love your stories, and this was another gorgeous offering with genuine soul. Thank you. :)
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Thank you so much, Wendy! Iβve had the title and idea for βI Am No Kingβ in my head for a while. At first I didnβt think I was going to write for the βCat Peopleβ contest, since Iβd just written about big cats in Beyond Boundaries, but on the Sunday after the prompts came out, I remembered I Am No King. After several false starts, the story came together very quickly on the night of the deadline. [This is beautifully-done tragedy, Guadalupe. That so noble a beast be reduced in this manner is heart-breaking. It isn't right] Once again, you g...
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Critiques and comments are greatly appreciated.
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