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Fantasy Fiction Mystery

This story contains themes or mentions of mental health issues.

We all can be indecisive about what to choose, who to choose,how to choose, when to choose, and if I have made the correct decision. Basically we overthink every situation we find ourselves in, and it is impossible to find someone who has never done that or does not unless they originate from a planet that is not planet Earth.

Marly Mackan the most indecisive person that has ever existed in her town, Greenwich Town. The town is named Greenwich town because of how stone aged it is, everyone is supposed to be "Catholic," baptized, does not disobey God, respects the rules, respects their elders even if they wrong in any situation, and obey and live with the 10 commandment, if not they would be "crucified." It is a little religious. However Marly has always been the representative of how a young women should act and dress between her peers in the town, that's why she was constantly questioned on why she decides to believe what she believes is "right." Nevertheless wherever there is a good a girl there is always someone who can instantly change that good girl act with an instant click. Frank Marlow, the guy bestfriend that has been perceived as unlawful for being befriends with a women, as part of the rules on Greenwich town, " no man shall befriend a women without marriage." However it is a little bit harsh towards boys and girls in their adolescents stage, who will soon become elders of the town and inherit "the seed of the town."

The seed of the town, is not a choice but a commandment that needs to be inherited amongst each individual once they have reached the age 21 and are able to make their own decisions without a guardian. But as you know Marly is indecisive, so how can she manage to instantly become deceive without the help of a guardian, as she is soon to be 21 with her other peers. Herself and Frank had decided to marry one another when they had turned 21 and inherited the seed that was not fully explained in depth to them until they turned 21. They're not really sure if it they would want to marry each other since this was decided when they were just 10 years old and had no knowledge what marriage was until they found out it you had to bear children for the town, inherit the seed, and become elders of the town. Although it is a coincidence that everyone in the town had the same birthday just different age groups, 10 October was the date of birth for everyone.

The days were beginning to be close for the birth date and Marly was once again indecisive whether to be excited or anxious because no one new what to expect and were curious what the seed was. Is it something tangible or intangible, is it something unlawful, horrific, elderly, or joyful.

Finally the birth of date had arrived and v=everyone who is expected to turn 21 had to cleanse themselves in the morning, wear black. Females were to wear black dresses, red lip stick, black gloves, no shoes, and have a single red rose, whilst the male were to wear a black tux, clean hair, and no shoes. At 12pm in the afternoon the ceremony was to begin as the night time was period as the devils time to work. No women was allowed to bleed on that day, as it was perceived as unlawful and a disgrace to the commandments of the town. They arrived at the reserved location for the ceremony that was filled with white roses everywhere on the grass with chairs scattered with everyone from town including every individuals parents and family dressed in white.

Marly and Frank were to be the starter of the ceremony on inheriting the seed of Greenwich Town. Mark Jacob and Joseph Kin were to explain to the individuals what the seed meant, " the seed is a respectful perception that should not be taken for granted nor be unlawful. In the journey of life of growing up with all your peers and your families, this is where it begins ignore the previous life you have had as it does not take part after this ceremony. Remember that God is always with you regarding everything that you do and ask for, never lose hope as it is that is all we lean on in life. This is what the seed is for to begin your journey in life, so let us begin the beginning of your life."

That is when Marly and Frank where given the opportunity to choice whether they would be committed to one another to bear children for the town so that they children would be executed as a sacrifice for uprising the seed of the town so they represent for the town, or they choose to assassinate their family to uprise the seed of town. Of course Marly was an indecisive women who had no idea this is what the seed meant, and she had decided to choose what she had not thoroughly thought about.

Being put in a situation where you have to decide what is best interest can be unethical, but life is all about taking unethical decisions that would probably be an experience to learn from and grow from. Disregarding what your values, beliefs, or what type of person you are. At the end of life you would have something to look back at and wonder what led to that decision and the reason behind it, because unfortunately there is no book that had decide your life for you. And that is something fucked up because how is there a bible and no book that can help you decide what to do in life.

Marly and Frank are a representative of what you plan does not turn out to your expectations. Your beliefs and values and what people perceive of you does not matter but what decision you take is what is important.

March 11, 2024 13:23

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Alexis Araneta
05:02 Mar 21, 2024

Hi ! So this story was assigned to me for Critique Circle. I have a few words to say about it. Positives: I quite like the world building here. When you described Greenwich as, pretty much, a breeding cult town, it reminded me a bit of "The Handmaid's Tale" by Margaret Atwood. Perhaps, a bit more detail into this society (What happens when someone escapes ? Why is the town like this ?) would be good. Notes for improvement: I wish there was more on the mindsets of both characters (but especially Marly) about how difficult a decision this i...

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Nozuko Festile
07:50 Mar 22, 2024

i appreciate your comment on the story

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