A Fatherly Betrayal

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A fatherly betrayal

The angry skies cleared and the lightning stopped its angry whipping giving way to sunshine again. All but a few of the witnesses of the event stayed behind to handle the body. The rest cleared the scene and mundane life seemed to continue as if nothing of significance had just occurred. 

In the shadows he smiled and turned to his companion and boasted, “As I predicted for this long-term experiment, the test subject would not denounce what he believed was his purpose for being born. This credence would remain strong in his coding until the end.”

His enigmatic companion replied, “Yes, you are right in that your predicted outcome played out just as your proposed it would. The higher powers will most likely be so pleased, so as to let you duplicate this experiment in the other earths. And so, your favorite creatures now believed they are done with their troubles. They do not realize they have been saved from a third annihilation by the sacrifice of a single being representative of their kind. It’s surreal how they may never know how close they came to being erased from the face of this earth…. again, had this sacrificial lamb not gone through with his commitment to you. Them (humans) being completely at ease with one of them taking the fault for them collectively and going about their arrogant ways generation after generation after generation till the day of reaping.  I can see why you smile upon their arrogance and to an extent their defiance. Their arrogance is a mirror image of you, their creator. “

The last of the sunlight before dusk shined on her metallic grey eyes as she said, “Tell me one thing, do truly believe it was merely your DNA coding that prevailed in forming the test subject’s sense of duty or was it more likely that it was your silver tongue who paved the way to him assuming his messiah role? After all, you spread the word of him as the promised one way before his mother was artificially inseminated in her sleep. Way before his mother and grandmother were conceived. If only they knew of your plans of betrayal for him.” Her eyes radiated light as her energy grew stronger with each word directed at the victorious one who could not stop gloating.

He turned to her and mocked her, “Why are you so bitter at my son having completed his purpose in this experiment? Why do you always hope for a different outcome in my experiments? My prediction was that he would obey the programming in his DNA and would be shaped into the role by the experiences I chose to expose him to; both nature and nurture made him who he was. He was my son and I was most pleased with him.” Not all creatures choose to rebel against their creator.

“Your son? You call him your son now? You called him your test subject when proposing the experiment to the powers that be.  How would your “son” have acted if he knew you betrayed him all the way to this skull shaped hill? He was able to handle the betrayal of the one who kissed him and turned him in to his captors peacefully. And he handled the betrayal of the one who was close to him like a brother and who denied any association with him with forgiveness and a kind heart. My question to you is how do you believe he would react to you telling him all his life that his sacrifice and death would free the rest of his community from wrongdoing and tallied sins when instead he was dying to prove your methods of manipulation would work? What you proved is that religion is the strongest tool and weapon we have on the population of this earth.

He yawned and prepared his holographic image to stop transmitting and return to the command post in the sky. As he was inputting codes, he turned one more time to look at her and said, “I have given these beings motivation to enrich their earthly lives. I gave them me as a the Holy Three: I am the father because they all have my DNA, I am the son because their savior is my clone, and I am the Holy Spirit because my consciousness can visit them while incorporeal and be with them anywhere and everywhere.”  You are now ordered to leave this earth and return in time to attest of my son’s death in order to fulfill his destiny or to my predicted theory coming true before the powers that be.  It doesn’t really matter how you attest to his death and my triumph.  Do not defy me anymore and hurry back. Then he stopped transmitting and his image disappeared.

She stayed behind a while longer to observe how the man was being brought down and was taken away. His body was evidence of intense physical suffering, but more than anything it was a map of sorrow and betrayal at the whim of their mutual creator. She could not leave him to merely dying on earth and his essence rejoining the pool of life waiting to be called upon to occupy another body at a later time. He was betrayed by his father and deserved another outcome. Three days later she entered the cave where his body was laid to rest.  She followed the outline of his body and his face wrapped in linens and spices with her eyes.  She remembered when she was betrayed too. She was told she was created as the equal to the first man on earth. Yet when she was ordered to submit to him in body and will, she questioned their equality in the eyes of their creator. For her insolence and rebellion he turned her to half woman and half beast condemned to walk earth in loneliness and sorrow.  The woman thought to herself, “one betrayal deserves another.” She leaned over his bandaged face and kissed him softly on the lips. A bright light radiated from inside the cave. The next day visitors found the tomb empty and the linens that were used to wrap man’s body had the image of his body and face imprinted on them.




March 12, 2024 07:47

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E.L. Lallak
22:04 Mar 17, 2024

Oh man, that gave me goosebumps. I had to re-read it because I was going in a whole different direction of interpreting the story. ha! Good job! I almost believe this evolution over any.

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Sasha Emmaleth
01:40 Mar 18, 2024

Thank you so much for taking the time to read my story and comment on it!. I am glad the story took a different turn than you expected.

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