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Contemporary Horror Holiday

Andy Hatcher noticed Rick and Tina hiding their beer. They were on the village green and they put their cans in the shrubs around the base of Ambrose’s statue. He’d caught them before, once, when a bunch of them had broken into the Sidlers’s cottage. The kids were scared witless when he drove up in his truck. Rick bawled and Tina panicked fearing her mother’d find out. Andy figured the hangover – and the cleanup – would be punishment enough.

Of course, that had been twenty – twenty-five? – years ago. Rick and Tina weren’t kids any more, and were more worried about their own teens. So why the hiding?

Andy stepped on the green, pulling deeply at the fresh air. The day was unseasonably – beautifully – warm for early October. Cloudless, almost windless. The faintest breeze tugged at the streamers covering the town’s founder, Ambrose L. Charlotte. A perfect day to celebrate him. A perfect day for history.

“Getting up to no good?” Andy asked.

“Hello, Mr. Hatcher,” said Rick, tapping his Blue Jays cap.

Tina jut her chin out towards Main Street. The village green bordered it on one side, and the other had a row of shops, restaurants, and ice cream parlours. All of them were draped in more streamers, and construction-paper fish of various colours covered their windows. All of them were also closed, as the tourist season ended yesterday. Only the locals remained.

And then Andy saw it.

A lone car crawling down Main. An RCMP cruiser. It indicated and pulled into the beach parking lot. Its tires crunched the gravel. It parked under the birches.

“You think it’s the new girl?” Andy asked.

Tina scowled at him, but a smile played at her lips. “Sexist.” She gave him a playful elbow. “That’s Constable Williams, not the new girl.”

“Oh, sorry!” Andy said, raising his hands. “I didn’t mean, um. It’s just, you get so used to things, and the world keeps changing faster and faster.”

“Just an old dog, eh?” Rick wrapped his arm around Andy’s shoulders, grinned. “Don’t worry about it. We know. And besides–” he glanced at the streamers fluttering above, making a Maypole out of the town founder “–today’s a day for celebrating history. You know, old people.”

Andy made an exaggerated groan. “Just you wait, age’ll come for you too.” They all chuckled. “Hey,” he added, “let’s go over there. I haven’t met her yet.” They set off together. Nobody had to mention that the presence of police on a lazy Sunday – especially Sackfish Day – was unsettling.

As they walked, Andy glanced at the beach. A far cry from your Mexicos or Floridas, it was more of a boat launch with a sandy mustache. And the sand had been imported by old Roger O’Neil, who used to own the marina, when he figured it would bring in more customers. It did.

Still, the locals were proud of their little beach, and even now the old dock stretching into the cool waters of Broken Foot Lake was covered with people fishing. Lots of parents with their kids, which made Andy smile. That’s the way things ought to be. You didn’t get community like this in the cities.

A car door closed, bringing Andy back. The new girl – Constable Williams – was young. Much too young. She could have been his granddaughter – only of course, his granddaughter was in her third year of university, so who knows.

“Constable,” Tina said, with an easy smile.

Constable Williams startled, but then her face lit up. “Hi, Tina! Hello Rick.”

Rick nodded, tapping his cap.

Andy held his hand out. “Andy Hatcher, at your service, ma’am.”

She shook his hand. “Constable Williams, sir. Um… Nancy Williams.” Her eyes kept sinking to her boots.

“What brings you out?” Rick asked. “Have you come to celebrate Sackfish Day with us? Relive the birth of our cozy little town?”

Andy shared a look with him. Of course, everyone was welcome to attend Sackfish Day. It was a well-advertised community event, a lovely time for the family, and there were no shortage of fun activities planned. But for some reason outsiders just didn’t stick around. Come the end of the season, they’d load up in their SUVs and gun it back to Winnipeg or where-ever. He could count on one hand the number of exceptions he’d seen over the decades.

“Actually,” Williams said, “I’m here on business. Unfortunately.”

The sky was clear but Andy felt like the sun had hidden behind a cloud all the same. He looked towards the beach again, where a herd of rioting children were lost in a game of tag, where Rita and Sharon Penn were setting up the grills, where John Nardin was strumming his guitar and leading an impromptu crowd in the chorus of Sweet Caroline.

All three of them stepped closer to Williams, as though they might be able to shield the town from whatever dark tidings she had brought.

“Nothing serious, I hope,” Andy said, affecting a smile. “Anything we can do to help?”

“Well,” said Williams, struggling to find words. To Andy, she looked even younger now – a child in way over her head, having jumped off the dock with no notion of how to swim. “We’re searching for some missing campers.”

“Oh no,” Tina said softly.

“Four adults and two children,” Williams said. “Two families. They were expected home a couple days ago but haven’t checked in. They were up at Green Loon Campground.”

Andy shared another look with Rick, this one much more somber.

“Dang it,” said Rick. “That’s not great.”

“No,” Williams whispered. She cleared her throat. “I was wondering if maybe any of you had seen them?”

“Do you have a photo?” Andy asked.

“Right!” Williams turned back to her car. Rummaged. She produced a folder filled with loose papers, from which she dug out a photocopied photo.

Rick and Tina gathered around Andy as they all looked at it. Two photos, actually, side-by-side. The Ramirez family on the left, sunning on some kind of backyard patio, and the Thompsons on the right, holding a tiny trophy aloft in a bowling alley.

Andy tapped the left side. “Yes. Yes, I remember these folks!”

“You do?” Williams said. “When? Recently?”

“They came into my store – oh, I don’t remember what they bought. But we chatted for a bit and they said it was their first family vacation. I remember he was real interested in our boats, but he didn’t want to rent one as none of them could swim. And the little girl, she was very sweet and very polite. Nice people, very nice. Oh, but sorry officer, this was last weekend. I don’t think they were staying in town.”

Williams nodded, the momentary brightness in her eyes fading. “Thank you, sir.”

Rick shook his head and tsked. “You know, this happens every year. Every damn year.”

“Rick!” Tina said.

“What does?” Williams asked.

“Someone gets lost. Usually they get found, but other times, they drown or run into a bear or what. City folk come up here thinking they own the place but they have no idea. And nature doesn’t care how many credit cards you have. All your stupid little apps and cellphones are worthless when your battery runs out.”

“Rick!” Tina said. “People are missing! Have some respect.”

Rick took a sharp breath. “Sorry.” He took his cap off and ran his hand through hair that was thinner each year. “Sorry. I… it’s just frustrating. These problems are avoidable. I meant no disrespect.”

If things weren’t so dour Andy might have smiled. He still remembered Rick as a snot-nosed kid who very much thought he owned the place too. That he’d grown into such a respectable man was heartening. And sure, Andy would take some credit for that – why not? It takes a village, after all.

Of course, having grown up in the country probably did Rick a world of good. As much as Andy liked all the visitors they got each summer, most of them really didn’t have a clue, and the only ideas they got were bad ones.

“We can tell the others, Constable,” Andy said. “Spread the word. Perhaps someone has heard something.”

“Thanks,” she said. Her tone wasn’t hopeful. “I have some handouts, if you don’t mind.”

Tina took a stack of papers from her, with the photos of the missing families and some contact details. “We’ll let you know immediately if anyone’s heard anything.”

“Thanks,” Williams said again. “Okay, I need to run.”

“Are you sure?” said Andy. “Seems like you just got here, and really seems like you could use a break, or a coffee at least. And the Sackfish Day Soak is going to happen soon.”

“Thanks, but I still need to hit all the places along the highway, and then it’s probably a long night tonight.” She made her way back to her car, opened the door, and then stopped. Blinked a couple times.

“One question,” she said.

“Shoot,” said Rick.

“Just what is a Sackfish? I mean, I looked it up, but it sounds like it’s a saltwater fish? It’s not really found here, in a lake, is it?”

Andy chuckled. “Ah, well, you’re probably right about that. See, the Sackfish of Charlotte’s Landing isn’t actually a fish at all.”

Williams frowned.

“Yeah, it’s all a part of our proud little history here,” Andy continued. “This all happened back in the days of the fur trade. Our founder, Ambrose L. Charlotte–” he pointed at the statue on the green "–led a trading expedition, and according to the story, there was a terrible storm and they got hopelessly turned around. A bunch of canoes shattered, their supplies sunk, and their powder vanished. They couldn’t kill any game, any forage they found was poisonous, and God knows why but the fish just weren’t biting. They were lost and running on fumes.

"Morale was low, and the storm survivors grew restless when the food ran out. Didn’t relish what awaited them, and who can blame them. They would have mutinied, but nobody had any better ideas so they decided to give Ambrose one more shot. Well, Ambrose led them down the Sprinkling River, which brought them to Broken Foot Lake. And when he saw this place – what would one day become Charlotte’s Landing – he knew it was what they were looking for. He said the Lord had shown it to him in a dream.

“And he knew how to feed everyone. He ordered his men to grab any and every bag, sack, pouch, pocket, purse – everything – and to step into the lake. They grumbled, but they obeyed. By the way, that’s what we call the Soak today, and we re-enact it every year, on this day. Anyway, when they lifted their sacks out of the water they were filled with food. Now, here’s where the story gets fuzzier, because we’re led to believe the sacks were filled with fish – hence the name Sackfish – but some versions of it say there were other things in there too, like fruits, mushrooms, and even sausage and fresh-baked bread. Either way, nobody starved and Ambrose was hailed a hero, and they decided to settle here.”

“That’s quite a tale,” Williams said after a moment. “Do you believe it?”

“Sure do,” said Andy. “No reason not to. Those folks were our ancestors, and we wouldn’t be here if not for them. Maybe I’m old, but I believe in traditions.”

“I can respect that,” said Williams, but her tone was diplomatic. She departed then, and they waved her car off.

Her tone was the same as any outsider’s who heard the story. No doubt they just saw it as a quaint small-town thing, never caring to dig into the deeper truth. But what are a people without traditions? A people without history. If you don’t know where you came from how can you know where you’re going? Maybe it was okay that outsiders didn’t stick around for Sackfish Day. They were welcome, but they probably wouldn’t appreciate it right.

“Oh!” said Tina, pointing to a beat-up van that had just turned onto Main. “It’s Jim! It’s almost time for the Soak!”

Andy and his friends made their way to the water and the van followed them. Children chased after it, laughing and singing, and Jim waved to them. Their parents joined Andy by the shore, and Rita and Sharon Penn raised a big thumbs up into the air. The grills were ready and soon the town would feast together, as Ambrose’s men had done so many years ago.

History. Tradition. Community.

Jim backed his van down the boat launch, until the exhaust pipe was sputtering, until Andy signalled Stop. A crowd gathered around them.

“Are you all excited for Sackfish Day!?” Andy asked everyone. The adults smiled and the children shrieked with joy. For them, the Soak was a second Christmas, because you never knew what you’d get in your sack. Some of them were already waist deep in the lake, and others had even swum out further.

Andy opened the van’s rear doors.

Of course, Ambrose’s story was probably embellished a little. You couldn’t actually just shove a sack into a lake and pull it out loaded with food. Historically there had been more steps – Ambrose and those loyal to him had to put in more work – but you gloss over the little details in a story. It keeps the magic alive.

Inside the van were the sacks, specially prepared and guaranteed to have a prize. Nobody would go hungry today.

Andy and Rick grabbed the first one – a huge burlap thing that weighed a tonne - and dragged it out. Jim grabbed hold too and helped them get it in the water. Already screaming children swarmed it, pulling it out further and submerging it.

“Soak! Soak!” they chanted.

Andy laughed. “Just don’t let go, kids!”

The next sack in the van moaned, and stirred.

“Uh-oh,” Jim chuckled. There was one every year.

They grabbed it too, and it screamed before also being submerged by dozens of hands. The next four sacks came more rapidly. Six in all, four large and two small.

Nobody would go hungry on Sackfish Day.

June 21, 2023 00:48

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48 comments

21:19 Jun 22, 2023

Lottery vibes

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Michał Przywara
20:45 Jun 23, 2023

Thanks Anne! I think that story is always floating somewhere in my background thoughts.

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22:21 Jun 23, 2023

I actually haven’t even read it, but I saw a stage version as a child and I still remember it powerfully. I recently read We Have Always Lived at the Castle, though and cannot recommend it highly enough.

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Michał Przywara
01:19 Jun 24, 2023

Yes! That also is a good book :) Shirley Jackson wrote some fantastic things.

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Michelle Oliver
14:31 Jun 21, 2023

All the hints were there and I could feel the “wrongness“ rumbling under the surface of this story. Sackfish indeed! Well written as usual and quite disturbing!

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Michał Przywara
20:40 Jun 21, 2023

Thanks Michelle! Very glad to hear there was that feeling of something beneath the surface :) I appreciate the feedback!

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Mary Bendickson
02:49 Jun 21, 2023

Horrific. If I am reading this right. I was afraid of that.

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Michał Przywara
03:09 Jun 21, 2023

This one's a horror, the "an ostensibly happy scene that hints at darkness lurking beneath" part of the prompt. So, I suspect you are indeed reading it right.

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Alexis Araneta
08:13 Jan 19, 2024

Another brilliant and creative one. I was not expecting the twist.

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Michał Przywara
21:38 Jan 19, 2024

I think there's a lot of room in small, close-knit communities for horror. Always been a fan of Shirley Jackson's Lottery. I'm glad you enjoyed it, Stella!

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Graham Kinross
13:03 Dec 17, 2023

Very Stephen King/X-files. Sacrifice for the sack fish bounty. I didn’t see it coming for a while. Now I’m thinking of Hot Fuzz as well. Great story, Michał.

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Michał Przywara
03:27 Dec 19, 2023

Hmm, I like all three of those things, so entirely possible they influenced this :) There's something to small town communities that seems to lend itself so well to horror. Maybe it's the shared history, how everyone knows everyone else's secrets, and there's that sense of "us against the world". Anyway, glad you enjoyed it, Graham - thanks for reading!

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Graham Kinross
04:01 Dec 19, 2023

I'm trying to watch Schitt's Creek again for the small community Vs outsider humour and I'm enjoying it, my wife gave up on it so I'm watching it myself. Have you seen it?

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Michał Przywara
21:38 Dec 20, 2023

I once binged the first season, and have seen the odd episode here or there otherwise. An enjoyable show. It's also nice seeing Canadian content out there.

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Graham Kinross
23:56 Dec 20, 2023

Isn’t half of Science Fiction television made in Canada? Stargate SG1 was mostly filmed in Canada. The same goes for the remake of Battlestar Galactica, The Expanse and Fringe.

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Michał Przywara
21:54 Dec 21, 2023

Ha, I didn't even realize most of those were! I don't think I'm all that current on TV.

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Amanda Lieser
16:25 Jul 15, 2023

Hi Michal, What a fantastically wonderful story of a beautiful town. I love how it’s a story within a story-you know I’m a sucker for those. And I think you managed to pack in quite a few different plots with interesting characters-the mystery, the ones sent to solve it, and the town’s festival. There’s something so wonderfully eerie about a mystery around a specific town festival. The moral being that the best stories aren’t 100% rooted in truth, but in tradition of human spirit. I loved this piece and would love to see these characters rev...

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Michał Przywara
20:46 Jul 17, 2023

Thanks, Amanda! Yeah, story-within-story is a neat thing. I've always found it more interesting to have a character give some background, than leaving it to the disembodied voice of the narrator. I appreciate the feedback!

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Sarah Saleem
11:53 Jul 01, 2023

The suspense throughout the story is amazing, great horror story!

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Michał Przywara
22:16 Jul 02, 2023

Thanks, Sarah! Very happy to hear about the suspense. I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

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Cindy Strube
17:49 Jun 29, 2023

Easing in with a casual, folksy tone is a great counterpoint to the (still folksy) heavily-implied-but-not-expressed horror ending. Your choice of doing the explaining to a newbie RCMP constable is good, so we can get clued in along with her. But we also are allowed a few insights that she isn’t given. I got a kick out of some quite subtle things: the cruiser properly indicating, and the sly mentions of the grill being heated and ready. Also, “sandy mustache” is a fantastic visual! I get the Jackson vibe too. Never have read Stephen King, ...

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Michał Przywara
02:14 Jun 30, 2023

Thanks, Sue! Glad the subtle things worked out - not everyone indicates, and I thought it might be a nice bit of characterization for the young officer. I appreciate the feedback :)

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David Ader
23:28 Jun 28, 2023

I love this line, "more of a boat launch with a sandy mustache." It's a great description, very visual, and rather helps set you up for something sinister. At least I thought so. Yes, I too see the Shirley Jackson element, but there's Stephen King in this too. Really well done.

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Michał Przywara
20:41 Jun 29, 2023

Thanks, David! I like that line too - happy I revised the original during a rewrite. I'm glad you enjoyed the story :)

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Zack Powell
22:55 Jun 27, 2023

I thought, about halfway through the story, that I might have misread or misremembered the Horror genre tag. Suspense, sure, I could probably see it, but I wasn't getting big horror vibes. But those last four paragraphs...yikes. I see the error of my ways now. Chilling stuff, seriously. There's some great technical stuff in here. I'm always up for the story-within-a-story structure, and it was a good call having Constable Williams be new and uninitiated so the whole explanation doesn't feel like as "Well, Nancy, as you very well know, Sackf...

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Michał Przywara
21:02 Jun 28, 2023

Ah yes, those "plural" apostrophes are a menace :) It's hard to wade into a forum these days without stumbling all over them. The kicker is, I've seen them paired with non-apostrophed (non-apostrophe'd?) possessives in the same sentence. Maybe English is moving on again. Regarding your critique: yes. I agree. Something about this prompt, the "back to basics" bit, made me examine my stories on a different level and try to work on some fundamentals I might otherwise gloss over. So, this was a conscious experiment to establish mood, and to be...

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Russell Mickler
04:49 Jun 27, 2023

Hey Michal - horror, eh? Okay, lay it on me! Liked the premise, the dialogue, the country mannerisms; the "it takes a village" reference. I was going to ask about a Sackfish but, hey, you provided, clever, fun, and somewhat Biblical. I liked the staccato, "History. Tradition. Community." I feel like that's a turning point - awaiting the horrific! Hmm goes down subtle, like soylent green. Grin - a good take on the prompt! Well-written. The dialogue sounded perfect to my ear. R

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Michał Przywara
23:01 Jun 27, 2023

Thanks, Russell! Glad to hear the dialogue worked. The story is low action, so I think dialogue is a key component of tales like this. Also, I do enjoy writing it :) I appreciate the feedback!

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21:35 Jun 26, 2023

Well, some of my stories are pretty twisted - but this was quite something. The title drew me in, wondering what on earth a sackfish was, and you kept me guessing for quite a while. I did wonder what must have happened to those missing families but I didn't guess this. I love the story of the town tradition - it almost feels like it wasn't made up just for this story - it's told very convincingly as a piece of genuine folklore. But then it turns so nasty it becomes apparent that it has been expertly crafted to get to the disturbing end. Fi...

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Michał Przywara
22:25 Jun 27, 2023

Heh, thanks Katharine :) That's made my day. Glad the founding story fit too. I've heard lots of folklore like that before - the world's full of it - but I do often wonder what part of the story we're not hearing. History really is written by the victors. Thanks for reading!

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18:05 Jun 26, 2023

Perfecto! Kind of had a feeling what was up but that didn't detract from the story and in fact proves you wrote it successfully. Very eerie. Well done!

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Michał Przywara
22:26 Jun 27, 2023

Thanks, Derrick! Sounds like the sweet spot - enough info to suspect something, but not so much it loses all impact. Glad you enjoyed it!

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Chris Miller
20:38 Jun 25, 2023

The nice little town with the strange traditions gives it a nice Whicker Man vibe. You nailed the prompt. I like the story within a story structure too. Good work, Michal.

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Michał Przywara
01:57 Jun 27, 2023

Thanks, Chris! I'm glad you enjoyed it. There's a lot of potential in little, out-of-the-way towns :)

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L J
18:39 Jun 25, 2023

Not so much Jackson , more Stephen King. Loved it! Couldn't end any other way. As Usual, excellent! Enjoyable and..ewww...You nailed the prompt! Can't wait to read another of your masterpieces! Thank you

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Michał Przywara
02:20 Jun 26, 2023

Thanks, L J! Yes, I suppose the horror gets more overt here :) Certainly I've read a lot of King's work, including the excellent On Writing, so I wouldn't be surprised if it's influenced me. I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I appreciate the feedback!

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Laurel Hanson
19:31 Jun 24, 2023

Dang! You nailed this prompt. Charming small town setting and characters, the slow build of the ominous in the small details, and the dark reveal at the end. Very "Lottery," as Anne points out below, but also fresh. You set up the situation really elegantly with the little historical back story and the "new to the area" cop so that you have the nod to the plausible, allowing the reader to join in for the ride without dissonance. Just love descriptions like this: "a boat launch with a sandy mustache." Well done for this unique prompt.

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Michał Przywara
23:47 Jun 25, 2023

Thanks, Laurel! I like that line myself. The first draft had something dreadfully interesting, like "and a three-metre by fifty-metre beach", which, although riveting, was replaced :) Glad you enjoyed the story! This one was asking to be written for a good long time, and the prompt seemed like the perfect opportunity. I appreciate the feedback!

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Delbert Griffith
15:51 Jun 23, 2023

Ooooh! At first, I was thinking that this would be shades of "The Lottery." Then the Biblical allusions to the magical feeding those that needed food (Moses and Jesus) came through. And then...the missing campers. Perhaps the founder of the town did resort to cannibalism, and that tradition was carried on. Just your average traditional Founder's Day celebration, right? LOL The tale turned dark, and then very dark, and then the last sentence made it blacker than black. I'm not usually a fan of last sentences being a paragraph, but this one ...

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Michał Przywara
20:33 Jun 23, 2023

Thanks, Del! Yes, I suspect there is a religious component to this tradition. After all, how could you justify something like that, and still call yourself a "good guy", unless it was a divinely permitted. Though I suspect from the POV of the poor campers - and maybe everyone else - this is just a crazy cannibal cult :) In my original ideas for this tale, there would have been a Lovecraftian angle to it, but honestly I think the down-to-earth normal folks next door make it much more horrifying. I appreciate the feedback!

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3i Writer
15:49 Jun 23, 2023

One question. What do they get after soaking (drowning) the bodies? Food?

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Michał Przywara
20:34 Jun 23, 2023

Thanks for reading! The implication is, yes, "food." They eat the bodies of the drowned - that's what the grills are for. And then, this is the "food" Ambrose was able to provide for his (loyal) men, in the town's history.

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J. D. Lair
22:48 Jun 22, 2023

Oh man! I did not catch on until the very end. Well done, as always!

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Michał Przywara
20:43 Jun 23, 2023

Thanks, J. D.! I'm glad you enjoyed it :)

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J. D. Lair
23:23 Jun 23, 2023

Good luck this week Michał! Thanks for hopping over to read and comment on mine. :)

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04:24 Jun 21, 2023

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Michał Przywara
20:43 Jun 21, 2023

Thanks, A. G.! Some version of this story has been bouncing around my head for a while, and the prompt finally lined up. Yeah, traditions can be useful, certainly. But blindly following them is as wise as blindly following anything else, isn't it? It's worthwhile to dig into the why of them - and figuring out if they're still worth keeping at all - or if they ever were. I appreciate the feedback!

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