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Contemporary Drama Fiction

“I’m getting so excited about the marvelous Anniversary Party I’m organizing for my dear sister Kate and her Fred. You’ll come too, won’t you, Selina? You are my best friend. We’ve invited all her friends and our entire family, minus kids. It's an adult party with alcohol being served. Of course! Fred’s parents, Andy and Ally, will be there as well. It’ll be grand. It’s at the new Crown Plaza. We’ve booked a suite on the top floor. Fantastic view. The lounge is massive and has its own bar. We’ve reserved a gorgeous bedroom and ensuite for them right down the hallway. Fantastic view from there, too.”


“You’re managing well, Maree. Such a kind thing to do. Just look at you. You don’t appear too pregnant, but please don’t overdo it.”


“Oh, don’t worry. We’ve got family to call on. My brother and Trev will get the room set up properly. My older sister Lara can help out at the bar. She’s from down South and won’t know many of the guests, anyway. She’s staying with Mum. Trev and me, as well as my sisters, Lara and Leah, not Kate, of course, will go up the next day to clean and tidy - get rid of the empties.”

***

“I don’t know what’s with Mum these days, Fred. She said ‘no’ to me visiting, doesn’t want to come here. There is something really fishy going on. You’d think she’d want to catch up with your Mum and Dad. Andy and Ally have been here for a week and are over their jet lag, and I’ve had to tell them that Mum won’t see them until our Anniversary this Saturday. She’s been too busy for Maree as well. My oldest sister, Lara, arrives tomorrow. Mum will pick her up from the airport; apparently, she’s staying at Mum’s. She’ll find out what’s going on. I’m not sure about our brother-in-law. I’m hoping Tom can make it, too.”

***

“Hello, darling. So good to see you. I’m glad you could attend Kate and Fred’s Anniversary. There’s been a change of plans, though . . . You’re staying with Maree and Trev.”


“Oh, what’s happened, Mum? Am I staying with you afterwards?”


“No, because on Tuesday I’m leaving. I’m heading down South to do some sightseeing.”


“What? Why didn’t you tell me? I came up here to stay with you. Will I be at Maree and Trev’s for the whole week?”


“Well, that depends on you, dear. You can arrange your flight to leave earlier if you want. If it costs more, I’ll pay the difference. If you leave earlier, you’ll be home for me to stay with on my travels, and we can catch up then.”


“Mum, I never just stay for a family Wedding or Anniversary. I always stay for at least a week. You know that. I insist I at least come to yours on Monday before you leave.”


“No, don’t! I’m swamped.”


“I can’t understand why you didn’t tell me all this before I arrived!” 

***

“Well, here we are, at Maree and Trev’s. “. . .


“Hi, Sis’, great to see you. What a surprise, Mum. Kate said you’ve been too busy for anything. Yet here you are. I’m somewhat caught up at the moment, but you can visit briefly. Come on in."


“Oh, I’m not staying. Way too busy. I’m just dropping Lara off.”

“What? And picking her up when?” 


“She’s staying with you. You have a spare room . . . Well, bye now. See you on Saturday at the Anniversary.”


“Come back here, Mum! She’s not staying. Don’t you dare leave her behind!”

***

“I’m so sorry about this. I had no idea you didn’t know. What can I do?”


“I guess you’ll have to stay, Lara. Sorry to make you feel so awful. It’s just Mum. Don’t know what’s up with her these days. It’s so weird and mysterious. Weirder than usual. Too busy to see us. Too busy to talk on the phone. Brasses me off.”


“I wish I hadn’t come here. I’ve booked for a week and can’t stay with Mum after the Anniversary either.”


‘What? So, you’re here for a week? What on earth is she playing at?”


“Mum told me she’s going down South on a road trip next week. She suggested I rebook my flight and leave earlier.”


“That’s rich! Only thinks of herself. A road trip, though? All that driving? Doesn’t sound like Mum at all.”


“She offered to pay the extra cost of changing the flight. I guess there must be a significant reason she’s being like this and not telling us anything.”


“This not telling is beyond a joke. Dropping you off like a piece of baggage on the doorstep is outrageous. Please excuse me, you can stay, but Mum has a nerve.”

***

“Well, who is this? You look like one of the family. Can you open this bottle of Bubbly, please?”


“Sure thing. I’m Lara, Kate’s older sister. I’m the official barmaid. I don’t know all the guests, so this is a great way to meet the drinking ones, at least.”


“Thanks for that. My name is Gordon.”


“Oh yes. Gordon Bellamy. She's spoken of you. . . and they have finally arrived . . . Welcome, Kate and Fred! Great to see you, and congratulations.”


“Hi, Lara. Where’s Tom?”


“It’s just me. Someone had to mind the children---”


“Oh, what a huge surprise! I can’t believe my eyes. Aunt Marijke, Auntie Nell and Uncle Jan-Dirk. How fabulous to see you. When on earth did you arrive in New Zealand?”


“We arrived two weeks ago, ‘Katia’.”


“Two . . . weeks . . . ago?”


“Your Mother planned to surprise you. I can see it worked. Don’t cry. We’re really here.”


“I’m just astounded. Happy to see you, but shocked. Two . . .weeks . . .ago?”

***

“Maree, we’ve finally found out what Mum’s been up to. She’s kept her siblings all to herself for two whole weeks. So selfish of her.”


“It is a lovely surprise, though, Kate. Fancy pulling it off without us suspecting. Don’t be too mad at her.”


“I’m so happy they are here, but no time for a proper catch-up. I just heard that they’re all off sightseeing down south next Tuesday! So thoughtless of Mum.”


“I knew there must have been a huge reason to drop Lara off at our place to stay. Poor thing had no idea about any of it. Mum suggested that she change her tickets and go home after the Anniversary. I’ve told her to stay with us for the week until next Sunday afternoon when her flight’s booked.”


“Well, I’m going to fix this situation. If Mum can go away, so can we. Leave it to me. I will find out if I can book the holiday home up North from my friend.”

***

“Thank you so much for letting me come over to spend the day with you, Mum. So lovely to spend the morning with you all in town. Maree and Trev are happy for me to spend the week, so it will all work out anyway. But when I arrive home, Tom and I have plans to go to Lake Wanaka for a week with the kids. I’m unsure if we will be home when you plan to stay.”


“It’ll be fine. Tell us when you are away, and we’ll first go to the West Coast. There is so much to see, and we can stay at my friend Julia’s house while there. We’ll come back over after you return.”


“That’ll be just lovely.”


“There is another problem, though.”


“Yes, I know. Maree has had to take it easy because she’s been spotting blood. The midwife told her it was all the stress. So, she’s been staying home, and things have settled down. I’ve been helping around the place.”


“Mm, is that right? That’s not the problem, though. Kate rang me before, and she’s organized to go to the holiday home and is asking Maree and Trev to go up with her on Friday, Saturday and Sunday. She’s still very angry with me for keeping her from her aunts and Uncle. I thought it was such a fantastic surprise. . . You ought to rebook your flight back home to save the family any more hassle.”


“Actually, I’m not sure that Maree should go away to the countryside under the circumstances. What if her pregnancy crisis flares up again, and she needs to go to the hospital?”


“But you said things have settled down. So, you need to change your tickets. I’ll pay the balance. I already said I’d do that. You’ve got to understand that it’s only right for Kate to have her way. Don’t be selfish.”

 . . .*** . . .

“Mum . . .sniff, sob . . . I’m sorry I’ve tried every possible way to get home at any time, on any of the days right up to Friday. . . sob, sniff . . . and because of the America’s Cup Race, which is on at the moment. I’m afraid I’m stuck. . . sniff, sob . . . There is nothing available and nothing I can do either. I wish I hadn’t come at all.”

***

“Thank you so much for coming over, Trev, to pick up Lara and take her back. You can understand I simply don’t have the room. Please don’t take any notice of her. She’s rather upset for some reason.”

. . .

“Hi. Trev. Thanks for picking me up.”

“No problemo. I quite understand your being upset about saying goodbye to Aunties and Uncle after such a short time with them.”


“Yes, that’s it. I’m ok. Thank you for letting me stay.”

***

“Hi, guys. Howz your day been? I’m so much better now. Kate has rung and invited us up to the Bach up North. So sorry about you, Lara. You can’t come because you leave on Sunday before we get back. But you’ll be ok here on your own for the weekend. You can catch a taxi to the airport. I’m so excited.”

“But Maree, you shouldn’t be getting excited. And all that travel in the car, up and back. I just don’t think it’s right to leave Lara here on her own either.”

“I’ll be fine, Trev. You don’t mind staying here alone, do you, Lara. You’ll be fine to catch a taxi to the airport on Sunday.”


“I’ll manage.”


“It’s not right, Maree. I think we should stay home. What about the baby?”

***

“Well, hello. What a lovely surprise, Kate and Fred! And you’ve brought your parents. Hi there, Andy and Ally. Come in for a cuppa'.”

“We were walking and thought we’d drop in.”


“You’re very welcome. Great to see you. Come on through.”

. . . *** . . .

“Now that we’re all together, you’ve got all our drinks, and you’re finally sitting with us, Lara; I thought you’d like to say to Maree that you don’t mind her and Trev coming with us for the weekend.”


“No, I can’t say that. I’m worried about Maree going away so far in case she needs the hospital.”


“I will take such good care of you, Maree. You can relax all weekend. You won’t have to do a thing. You want to come, don’t you?”


“Of course I do. You don’t mind me going away with Kate and Fred, do you, Lara?”


“It isn’t up to me.”


“Go on, Lara. Just say you’ll be alright.”


“What? Did she just walk out? She didn’t even answer.”

***

“Lara, I’m so sorry about what happened. It just isn’t right. I’ve told them we’re not going. Maree isn’t happy. She stormed off to the bedroom. But, in case you’re blaming yourself. Don’t. I looked at Fred’s face and decided we wouldn’t go. My decision.”


“None of this is my business, but thanks for reassuring me. I still feel embarrassed, though.”

***

“Mum, I’m so upset with Lara. Because of her, Maree and Trev aren’t coming. It’s going to be so hard coping with my Mum-in-law Ally. Maree and Trev being with us would have made it much easier and more fun. She really wanted to come.”


“Yes, it’s really not fair of Lara. I told her to think of you, not herself. Such a nuisance she couldn’t have just gone home.”

 . . .*** . . .

“Now that there is just the two of us here, Lara, I want to talk about something.”


“Yes, Mum.”


“Before we left for our holiday, Kate told me why Maree and Trev never went away with them to the holiday home. It was so selfish of you to not let them go.”


“I wasn’t selfish. I did everything I could to leave for home as early as possible. It was impossible.”


“Kate was so upset. She was worried about going away with just Fred, Andy and Ally. She thought Ally would also be easier to manage with Trev and Maree. I guess we were all selfish in our own way.”


“Mum, it had nothing to do with me. I definitely wasn’t selfish. Kate tried to manipulate me in front of everyone. It was embarrassing.”


“It had everything to do with you staying there.”


“Trev made the decision. He said he looked at Fred and made his decision not to go. It had nothing to do with me.”


“Are you telling me Fred didn’t want them to go?”


“I wasn’t there. I don’t know what happened. You’ll have to ask TREV why they didn’t go.”

***

“Hello, Lara, is that you?”


“Oh, Hi, Mum. You’ve arrived safely back home. Hope you four had a lovely time.” 


“Lara, I rang because you lied to me. I asked Fred if he hadn’t wanted Trev and Maree to go up North with them, and he didn’t know what I was talking about. Said he never said anything.”


“Mum, it had nothing to do with me. Trev made the decision when he looked at Fred’s face. I have no idea what his face looked like. I wasn’t there. You needed to ask Trev.”


“As far as I’m concerned, you’re just making up stories. What’s the point in asking any more questions. It’s clearly your fault.”


“Sniff, sob . . . I really wish I hadn’t gone up North at all.”

***

“Darling Lara, whatever is the matter?”


“Sob, sniff. Just more of the blame game after the secret surprise thing Mum did. Went off without a hitch, but Princess Kate wasn’t amused. Yet, I had been dumped on Maree’s doorstep to stay uninvited. So awkward. Found out Mum couldn’t have me at her place, with no explanation. Then I ended up stuck there when I couldn’t change my tickets to come home. With only Trev on my side, Kate and Maree went out of their way, resorting to emotional blackmail and embarrassment to get my blessing on Maree and Trev going away with them. Neither of them discussed the viability of their plan with either Fred or Trev. I’d have been left behind and then have to catch a taxi to the airport on Sunday. Obviously, I’m a grownup lady and can manage something like that. But that’s not the point. They really couldn’t have cared if I went to the party. Oh, wait! They needed me as a barmaid and to help clean up afterwards. After that, I quickly became an inconvenience. It’s like Kate and my Mum don’t actually get on, and when they disagree about something, they gang up and find a scapegoat to blame. If it isn’t my sister Leah, it’s me. I’m over it.”


“Tell you what, love, I’ll make sure we both go up to see them all the next time.”


“Hopefully, that’ll make it easier. The family behave when you’re around. Families can be a pain in the butt. Who would have them!”


December 11, 2024 04:17

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18 comments

Mary Bendickson
19:34 Dec 12, 2024

Even though you kept explaining relationships I confess I got lost with so many named.

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21:12 Dec 12, 2024

It is so hard to write with only speech and nothing else. I enjoyed the challenge and did my best. I added a few more names within the dialogue. It's hard to find the right places to do that and still have it reading naturally. Thanks for reading.

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Mary Bendickson
00:32 Dec 13, 2024

It's all on me. You did fine.

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22:40 Dec 15, 2024

Thanks, and I just read your story. So funny!

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Mary Bendickson
00:11 Dec 16, 2024

Thanks. First time I hit all the prompts and all in only dialogue!😀

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19:28 Dec 16, 2024

Wow! That's not as easy as you think. They are diverse, even if on the same theme.

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Philip Ebuluofor
16:16 Dec 18, 2024

They are headache but that's why they are call family. You manage them and carry them along.

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20:10 Dec 18, 2024

Thanks, Phillip. I appreciate the read and comment.

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Shirley Medhurst
09:23 Dec 18, 2024

Wow, sounds like a massive complicated extended family!!! So many names. You did REALLY well explaining all the links via only dialogue - must have been very difficult!!

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20:09 Dec 18, 2024

Yes, it's difficult to make things clear without descriptions (except within dialogue) or without dialogue tags. One doesn't want a story to read like 'talking heads'. For example, before the party and arrival of the secret guests I deliberately introduced a new non-family character to have an interjection about the bottle of bubbly. It suggested the presence of the bar and Lara, the newly recruited barmaid. Hopefully, this provided enough detail to indicate the party in a room with a view with other guests present. I also hoped the surprise...

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Marty B
06:05 Dec 16, 2024

'Families can be a pain in the butt. Who would have them' !! You speak the truth!

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06:43 Dec 16, 2024

Thanks for the read and comment, Marty.

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Kendall Defoe
04:26 Dec 12, 2024

So much painful truth here... And what am I gonna write after reading this? ;)

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21:15 Dec 12, 2024

We all feel so justified at times. If only we tried to understand the others' realities.

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Alexis Araneta
17:14 Dec 11, 2024

Ack ! The fragile webs of relations! Lovely work !

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19:56 Dec 11, 2024

Thanks, Alexis.

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Helen A Howard
17:09 Dec 11, 2024

Great use of dialogue here. Kaitlyn. Very natural feel to it.

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19:55 Dec 11, 2024

Thanks, Helen. It's hard to stick to the confines of dialogue. It's also difficult to make it sound natural with all the crucial information and still read like a story.

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