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Submitted to: Contest #190
Written in response to: "Start your story with someone vowing to take revenge."
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Adventure Coming of Age Creative Nonfiction
This story contains themes or mentions of substance abuse.
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Hi Deven, Thanks for the submission and story as a whole, I liked where you ended up. I struggled to understand the connection to the 'vow of revenge'. I think the flow of the story felt like I would eventually find out who the character was seeking revenge on. Connecting to that initial paragraph could have brought the whole story full circle.
Thanks, Corey
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Aloha Corey, thank you for your time in reading over my story, I like your comment and advice about how I should restructure it. Will amend it soon.
Mahalo ! DAO
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