The Enchanting Moment

Submitted into Contest #50 in response to: Write a story about a proposal. ... view prompt

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While driving to my parents house John pulls out a jewelry box. He opens the boxes and stares at the diamond engagement ring. John starts thinking about me and what he is about to do. He finally arrives at the house to talk with Mr. Warren. He knocks and my father opens the door. He smiles and looks John in his eyes.

    “Hello John.”

    “Hello Mr. Warren, do you have a moment there is something I would like to ask you?”

    “Certainly please come in and have a seat in the living room. I’ll make us some coffee?”

    Mr. Warren gets the cups of coffee and meets John in the living room. He hands John his cup of coffee and sits in the recliner across from him. They each took a sip at the same time and put the cup down in unison.

    “Sir, I would like to ask you for permission to marry your daughter?”

    “Really?”

 Mr. Warren is a little surprise, but happy. John puts down his cup of coffee and look Mr. Warren in the eyes.

    “Yes sir! I love her, she is beautiful, and I respect her.” 

    John is hunched in his seat fidgeting with his fingers nervously wondering what Mr. Warren will say. He sits back in the car and await his fait. Mr. Warren looks at John with a big grin.

    “Yes I give you permission and you have my blessing too?”

    “Thank you sir!” 

    John puts his coffee down and gets up to give Mr. Warren a hug.. He leaves the house, and starts heading down the road in his grey four door truck. He pulls out his phone and calls his sister.

    “Hey Susan it is a go get everything together I am on my way to pick Elizabeth up right now.”

    “Alright John.”

    He hangs up the phone and decides to text me. He tells me to be ready in a couple minutes for a sunset picnic. He pulls up in front of my  house and I am outside waiting. I am wearing a knee length flowing red flowery dress. My long brown hair was curled to form beach waves. I jump into the truck and they are off. When I got in, John was lost for words and stares at me.

“Is there something wrong? Am I not dressed appropriately for the occasion?”

“No nothing is wrong you are….”

“Are what?”

“So beautiful that I had to catch my breath and think what did I do to deserve you.”

I look him directly in the eyes and held his face in between my hands. I couldn’t hold it in I smile and slowly lean in to kiss him on his soft pink lips.

“I think it should be the other way around John.”

We laugh together and buckle up as John starts on the road again. The sun was just starting to set when they pull up to their special point and they get out of the truck.

“First things first Lizzy you need to put this blind fold on”

“Ok John you only use my nickname when you are up to something.”

    “You got me Elizabeth. Can you please put the blind fold on?”

    “Why?”

    “ I got a surprise for you and I don’t want you to see it just yet.”

    “Well ok.”

    I put the blind fold on and John guids me to the beginning of the rose petal path. I wait for him to tell me to remove the blind fold. Instead he gives me a walkie talkie and walks away. I hear static then a beep comes through the walkie talkie.

    “Alright Elizabeth go ahead and remove the blind fold.”

I remove the blind fold and the sun was blinding that I had to shield my eyes until they adjusted. I look down and notice that I am standing in a meadow filled with different flowers. The whites, purples, and pinks stands out in the yellow meadow. The smell of the flowers fills the air with a beautiful fragrance. I look around some more and  notice the deep red rose petals in front of me.

    “Follow the path of rose petals, your surprise is at the end.”

    “Is this some kind of game John.”

    “Lizzy, you are going to love the surprise at the end just follow the rose petals.”

    I start to walk the path, and partially on the way up I notice Susan. She was standing there holding a blue rose. When I reach Susan she hands me a rose and tells me to keep following the path. I listen to her and keep on walking the path and came across my brother. He was also holding a blue rose too. I am finding this too odd and try to connect the dots. I keep on following the rose petals, and every couple feet there is someone I  know or is related to me holding a blue rose. I was getting close to the end when I came across my father and mother along the path.They both were holding a blue rose. Instead of following the rest of the path I stood in front of my father. I start to cry a little, but try to hold it in realizing what might be happening. My father was trying to hold back tears and smile.

“Dad do you know what is going on here?”

“Yes I do my little jelly bean.”

“Can you tell me please?”

“No I can't, you just have to keep following the path you are almost there.”

They usher me along and urge me to keep going. I finally gets to the end of the path and see John. He is wearing a black suite, a flower clipped to his jacket, and his short brown hair slick back.. When I got closer I notice  he was holding a banquet of my favorite flowers, blue orchids. John hands me the orchids with a joyful but nervous smile. I take them and bring them up to my nose to smell them. While smelling the orchids I start hearing music and turn around to see John with an acapella group singing together a medley. They get to one part of the song that says “Hey I think I want to marry you.” John gets down on one knee at that time and I couldn’t hold it in anymore. I start to cry and fell to both of  my knees. I shook my head yes because I could not speak. John holds me for a moment and then puts the ring on my hand. I hug him while still crying, and just held me telling me how much he loves me. Everyone that was involve claps their hands and starts to congratulate us. I held out my hand for everyone to see the ring. This moment was an enchanting moment that will last forever, and I will not for get it.

July 17, 2020 20:17

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