Melody:
She was kind so I should be able to talk to her. I shouldnβt get nervous or stumble over my words with her.
βI like your name. It reminds me of peace for some reason which is odd I know but I just wanted to say your name is pretty.β
βCan you help me with this one thing from math? I understand it but not fully so if you donβt mind can you help me?β
βDo you remember when we used to talk almost every day?β
βHow does it feel to be popular?β
βDoes it ever get hard or bothersome to hear your name all the time?β
Kamara:
She was brave and wasnβt afraid of anything except getting into trouble.
βHi, Kamara I was wondering if you would get lunch with me.β
βDoes it feel good to not be so well known?β
βDo you wish you were more like Melody in the sense that sheβs popular?β
βWhy do you fear getting in trouble? Is it the punishment you're scared of? Is it your parents?β
Ashton:
He was always in somebodyβs business and was always around. Trouble seemed to follow him.
βHow are you always getting in trouble? Do your parents not care?β
βHow does it feel to know that everyone knows your name?β
βWere you ever a good kid?β
βDo you like getting into trouble? Do you like the punishment behind it? Do you want to be remembered?β
βAre you scared of being forgotten?β
Felix:
Felix was Felix or at least that is what everyone says. He was just himself which was always a nice break from everyone pretending to be something else.
βI wish I had a personality like yours. How come you arenβt afraid to be yourself?β
βWould you say that you still put on an act even while being yourself?β
βIs this even your true self?β
βAre you in some way appealing to some people which is why you act the way you act?β
Tobias:
He was the smartest kid in school so he should talk to me.
βCan you help me with some of the homework?β
βDo you feel pressured to be the smart kid?β
βWas it ever hard to get the grades you have now?β
βWhat was the lowest grade youβve ever gotten?β
βDo you get tired of people asking you for answers?β
βAre you tired of having such high expectations put on you?β
Serenity:
She was artsy and always seemed to be fun to talk to.
βWhat inspires most of your art?β
βDo you actually like art or was it something you do because youβre good at it?β
βFavorite thing to do besides art?β
βDo you think youβll ever get anywhere with your creations?β
βIf you didnβt do art what would you do?β
βDo you feel lost without your art?β
βAll of the hobbies in the world and you chose art. Why?β
Elle:
She was kind of like me but more talkative.Β
βEven though youβre somewhat like me, do you fear being an exact copy of me?β
βAre you quiet by choice or circumstance?β
βWould you ever talk more? If so, how would you do it?β
βWould you consider yourself as forgotten?β
βHow would you describe yourself?β
Xavier:
He was known by his name nothing more nothing less.
βWould you ever consider changing your name? If so, what would your name be?β
βWhat would you rather be known for?β
βAre you trying to be known for something other than your name?β
βDo you like your name?β
βHow often does something like this happen?β
βHave you ever been known by something else? If so, what was it? Did you prefer being known for that or just your name?β
I wrote everything I wanted to say to people on paper so I wouldnβt forget. Still, with all of this written down, I never seemed to talk much. Iβve always had a lot of questions for people. Iβve always wanted to know more. I was constantly told that βCuriosity killed the cat,β but that didnβt stop me from asking a million questions. Something was always interesting to me.
I never actually talked to anyone but I liked having questions to ask. In a way, they were questions to myself rather than to other people. I usually ran the other way when it looked like someone would approach me. If I ever did have a conversation with someone it endly quickly. People would get annoyed with my short answers and walk away. Teachers told me I had to be more vocal and look at people while they spoke.
Eye contact was never really my strong suit. Neither was holding a conversation.
I was the quiet kid everyone would stare at in the halls. I was the smart kid that everyone knew always had the answers somehow. I was a nobody in everybodyβs eyes. I was the kid you shouldnβt bother with because it was no use. I was the kid that had a fragile sticker across my forehead. I was to be treated as glass that could break at any moment in time. I was the kid that was easily forgotten in a crowd of people. I was the kid people occasionally messed with. I was the kid that was always there. I didnβt serve a purpose, I just existed.Β
I wasnβt always like this though. One day everybody changed and I drifted into the shadows.
It was more like I became the shadows but only at school. It was like I had two different parts in a play. At home I was talkative and loud at school I morphed into something else. I didnβt mind playing either of these parts. I rather enjoyed being quiet. I wouldnβt have said that about a year ago but people change. I always feared changing but I was probably the person that had changed the most. It wasnβt my fault though or maybe it was. I ask people questions so I donβt have to answer my own. Well, I donβt ask but still.
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This is a very.....weird story any feedback is appreciatedπ€ if you're confused (like i said this story is weird) the main character writes questions they have for people down but doesnt ask them because of something that happened (what happened exactly? i dont know) please let me know how you liked it and if there are any critiques that need to be made :)
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Fascinating story! The topic and events are really unique!! Let me know if you're being downvoted!!! Have a unique day :) Love, Upvoter
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thank you :)
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Of course <3
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awesomeeeeeeeeeee
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thank youuuuuuuuu
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very relatable tbh, (I have a feeling most stories from this prompt will be lol). THIs was a vefry interesting and unique read! π great job! (also I read you bio and like same on the whole jade west thing π lmao)
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thank you :) yeah it took me awhile to realize why i liked that scene so much but now i know
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np! lol same, the moment it hit me I was like... oooooooooh tHAtS WHy I LikE JAde...
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thats basically how it went
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lol its just the facts. π
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it really is
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HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!!!!!! (ik its on tues but in case i forget ;P) Also, you live in NYC? thats so rad! I live on the west coast and i have never been to new york
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IM SO EXCITED!!!! ive never been to the west coast before (i havent been anywhere actually) the only places ive been to is pennsylvania and new jersey cus its close to new york
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:D
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When you're writing a story, it's sometimes ok to leave your reader out of the loop for a bit, but this pushed that envelope for me. As a reader, I was beyond confused. I didn't know if I was reading dialogue, an inner monologue of each named character, etc. I ended up skimming after the third person because I just wanted to make it make sense. To fix this, give the reader a quick heads up and let us know what we are reading. I would have been more interested had I not been so confused. It's the kind of thing that can cause a reader to put d...
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Thank you for the feedback I'll work on that the next time I ever write a story like this!!! The story was basically where the main character writes down the things they want to say to people but they never get the chance because they're a nobody I just didn't know how to write it but really thank you for the feedback
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You did a good job with the theme and the story is very good once you get past the confusion. So donβt feel discouraged and please continue writing!
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You did a good job with the theme and the story is very good once you get past the confusion. So donβt feel discouraged and please continue writing!
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