Submitted to: Contest #294

Unfinished Reflections

Written in response to: "Write a story in which the first and last sentence are the same."

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I told myself I wouldn't say goodbye this time.

The letter arrived on a cold, unremarkable Tuesday morning, its edges yellowed with age, the handwriting unfamiliar yet somehow known. "Your presence is requested at 214 Ashgrove Lane. Unfinished business awaits," it read. Evelyn stared at the words, her pulse quickening as forgotten memories stirred beneath years of careful burial.

She set the letter down on her kitchen counter, hands trembling slightly. Seven years had passed since she last thought of that house. Seven years spent methodically burying memories beneath routine and distance, convincing herself that whatever had happened there was best left behind, sealed away like artifacts too dangerous to examine. She had built a life defined by its predictability, same coffee shop every morning, same route to work, same evening ritual of wine and mindless television. She had no intention of returning to Ashgrove Lane.

But in the days that followed, unease grew like ivy climbing the walls of her carefully constructed sanctuary. Shadows stretched longer in the corners of her apartment. Whispers curled around the edges of her thoughts, indistinct yet persistent. She caught herself staring at her reflection for too long, as if waiting for it to move independently, to reveal some truth she'd been avoiding. Sleep became restless, haunted by dreams of unopened doors and unwalked paths.

And so, against every rational thought, against what she considered her better judgment, Evelyn found herself gripping the steering wheel of her sensible sedan on Friday afternoon, the road to Ashgrove Lane stretching before her like an accusation. The three-hour drive felt simultaneously eternal and instantaneous, as though time itself understood the significance of her journey and couldn't decide whether to prolong or accelerate it.

The house stood exactly as she remembered, Victorian, weathered, its paint peeling like old parchment, its windows dark and watchful like the eyes of a patient predator. The wind carried the scent of impending rain and something else, something like dust and forgotten promises and the peculiar emptiness of abandoned spaces.

She hesitated at the threshold, key in hand. She hadn't expected to still have it, yet there it was in her jewelry box, waiting all these years. The door, swollen with humidity and time, groaned open with barely a touch, as though it had been expecting her arrival.

The interior was bathed in a strange half-light that seemed to emanate from nowhere and everywhere. Dust particles danced in invisible currents. A leather-bound journal lay open on an otherwise empty table, its presence too deliberate to be coincidental. Its ink bled and shifted before her eyes, as though the words themselves were liquid, reconsidering their existence. She recognized the handwriting, her own, but from years ago, when her penmanship still had hope rather than efficiency.

"You left too soon," the page declared.

The words chilled her despite the summer heat. She ran a trembling hand over the yellowed pages, watching in horrified fascination as the ink rearranged itself into something new,

"You still don't understand what you abandoned."

A creak behind her. She turned sharply, heart hammering against her ribs. A figure, barely solid, hovered near the curved staircase, a shape formed of moonlight and sorrow and possibilities unrealized.

The ghost did not speak immediately, but its presence pressed against Evelyn's mind like a physical weight, unraveling memories she had long locked away behind walls of determined forgetfulness. Flashes illuminated her consciousness, choices she had made in haste. Doors she had closed before fully knowing what lay beyond them. Relationships severed without proper farewells. Regrets she had convinced herself she never harbored.

The house itself seemed alive around her, its creaks and settling sounds guiding her attention, forcing her to see what she had ignored for too long.

"What do you want from me?" Evelyn whispered, her voice unnaturally loud in the stillness.

The ghost merely gestured toward the staircase. Compelled by something beyond fear or curiosity, she followed the phantom up the wooden steps, each one groaning an echo of past mistakes. The air thickened with something unsaid, something waiting for acknowledgment.

The ghost turned at the top of the stairs, its translucent form catching the strange light. Its face was familiar, too familiar. It was her. Or rather, the self she could have been had she made different choices, had she stayed instead of fled. A reflection of possibilities lost, paths untaken.

"You always thought you had no choice," the apparition whispered, its voice like leaves rustling in autumn. "But you did. You always did. You just didn't see it."

Memories unraveled, flooding her consciousness with merciless clarity,

The moment she turned away from love instead of fighting for what mattered most. The silence she accepted instead of demanding answers that might have hurt but would have healed. The safe path she chose, not because she wanted it, but because it was easier than facing the unknown.

The weight of these revelations nearly shattered her. But in that breaking, there was clarity.

She had spent so long believing she was a prisoner of circumstance, a victim of timing and bad luck. But she saw now that she was the architect of her own walls, the designer of her own limitations.

The house shuddered around them, as if responding to her epiphany. The walls trembled, dust cascading like falling stars. The ghostly figure began to fade, its purpose apparently fulfilled.

"If I leave now...,will I forget again?" Evelyn's voice was hoarse with emotion.

"No," the apparition said, its form growing dimmer. "But remembering is not enough. You must act on what you know."

A choice, then. To return to her world, not as the same person who had entered this house, but as someone who refused to be content with silence and safety when courage was needed.

The front door loomed before her, now seemingly heavy as stone. The house did not want her to leave. Or perhaps it was testing her resolve one final time.

For the first time in her life, Evelyn did not hesitate when faced with difficulty. She pushed forward with newfound determination.

The door opened.

The morning light felt different. Sharper. Cleaner. More real than anything had felt in years.

She stood outside on the worn porch steps, breathing unsteadily, the weight of the house still pressing against her back like a memory. But the ghost was gone. The house was silent, its lesson delivered.

Her phone buzzed in her pocket, something she hadn't noticed being silent during her time inside. A familiar name flashed across the screen, someone she had once loved deeply but had let slip away when vulnerability seemed too risky.

For the first time in years, she did not ignore the call or send it to voicemail.

She answered, her voice steady despite the tears forming.

"I'm ready to talk now," she said. "I told myself I wouldn't say goodbye this time."

Posted Mar 15, 2025
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Paul Hellyer
11:06 Mar 26, 2025

Did you have a plan for how you would write this, or did it just unfurl?

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Teacher Mom
04:46 Mar 27, 2025

I have an outline in my head and then I write it and then I edit it again and again until it "feels" right. I'm not sure if that answers your question. I kind of do both I guess.

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Mary Butler
23:31 Mar 22, 2025

Wow—this story wrapped around me like a fog I didn’t know I needed to walk through. There’s such a graceful layering of emotional truth beneath the eerie atmosphere, and it never once feels forced or overwrought.

"You always thought you had no choice," the apparition whispered, its voice like leaves rustling in autumn. "But you did. You always did. You just didn't see it." —This line hit like a quiet thunderclap. It’s gentle and haunting, but it carries such weight, like a mirror being held up to every reader who’s ever questioned their own path.

The pacing was beautifully deliberate, the mood so rich I could practically smell the dust and old regrets in the house. This is one of those stories that lingers after the last line—reflective, tender, and quietly powerful.

Truly a gorgeously written piece—thank you for sharing this immersive and emotional journey.

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Teacher Mom
03:52 Mar 23, 2025

Wow, thank you for such a beautifully thoughtful response. I'm so grateful the story resonated with you, and your words about the atmosphere, pacing, and emotional depth mean the world to me!

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LeeAnn Hively
19:32 Mar 22, 2025

The circular structure of this prompt works really well with this story. I am highly impressed with the metaphorical resonance you've used. I also felt like you sucked me into a haunting world right from the beginning.

I would be interested in seeing how the story plays out with a little slower pacing for the revelations during the ghost encounter. There's more meat here to tear into, and I hope you expand on this story someday. Thank you for sharing it with us!

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Teacher Mom
03:52 Mar 23, 2025

Thank you so much for your kind words. I’m thrilled that the circular structure and metaphorical elements resonated with you, and I appreciate your insight on pacing. I’ll definitely consider expanding the ghost encounter to deepen the experience!

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15:07 Mar 22, 2025

There is some very strong writing in this story, I especially like how it starts out with a letter from the past. The narrator is frightened into an epiphany about her own choices, and choses to resume a relationship she has feared to approach during the last 7 years. The use of fantasy is effective, and many readers can empathize with a need for re-awakening from chronic numbness.

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Teacher Mom
03:51 Mar 23, 2025

Thank you so much for your thoughtful feedback. I’m glad you found the letter and fantasy elements effective, and I appreciate your insight into the narrator’s journey toward reawakening!

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