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Sad Mystery Suspense

Uncertain Anticipation

The world awaits destruction which your son is to create. In the days of happiness like a dark cloud, it will appear. The future in his hands won’t be the future he will get.

“What are you talking about? There are no such things we did a mistake coming to you. Honey, let’s go.”

“It was you who wanted to come here I told you not to trust those soothsays.”

After they left the assistant asks, “Why did you lie? Isn’t he supposed to be the savior of the world?”

With a peculiar smile, he says, “Now let’s see where it will end.”

“After all these years why can’t you let Ram Prasad go to study abroad and all just for that rubbish some madman said to us.”

“Don’t worry. I will be alright I want at least be able to do something.”

After being away alone he can’t help thinking about all those things and felt depressed so he decided to end this tragedy and tried to fall from a bridge.

“Hey, are you mad? This is a pure lake don’t make it dirty go die somewhere else”

“What a person is dying here and you care about the lake? Don’t you have some value for a person’s life?”

“Why would I if you don’t do it for yourself.”, he then look at her to step down “Anyways if you are going to die anyway go help the one struggling to live even though it’s as hell for them.”

He follows the girl silently. “By the way I am Andrea. What’s your name?”

“Ram Prasad”

“So you are not from here.”

“Yes, I came to study. I am from Nepal.”

“Yeah, I saw it all how you study.”

“You won’t know my pain. Only the one facing knows that.”

She looks at him with a sly smile.

You are right.”They arrive at a place dark and all as from the primitive ages. “Here we are The Dan. Make yourself useful in anyways.”

There were people around crippled some near to death, people helping each other all sick though people still smiling. She was as a mystery to him as some goddess from heaven to save him.

They spent their time helping people he never got any time for those past thoughts. He felt alive again and finally, he realized she is the one for him.

“Do you have any free time tonight?” finally he mustered up the courage he saved all his life.

They decided to meet that night. He was getting ready role-playing when his phone rang.

“Mom, it’s been a long time since you have called.”

His mom sounded unusually happy suspicious things happen at the good times always.

“Son, you don’t need to worry. It was all lie all they said about you it was about the one you love.”

“Whaatt..!”

He rushes out taking a jacket.

My whole life was in despair just because of a petty lie. I wanted to kill myself and all for the girl I will love. wait… Andrea.

The cold breeze rushing in the night she waits for him to come she knew he loved her so did she.

“Miss… Miss”

“Where is he?” she talks half-asleep.

Her feet were numb and her whole body was aching she couldn’t move properly.

“The same mistake you did again Andrea trusting people now bear this despair again.” she murmurs as she returned to the Dan.

Everybody sensed her anger like a burning larva reading to burst out anytime nobody dares to approach her at that time.

Next morning

Her eyes were swollen red from crying all night.

Finally, she spoke,” Let’s head on as we were going on before him.”

It was as expected they were back to being executioner killing all those wrongdoers in their judgment. Ram Prasad for them was the representation of all those people around and whether they could be trusted in ways forward.

As a homeless orphan, she used to wander around with the desire to survive. But her introduction is not limited to that she was a heavenly child made for hell created for destruction mandatory for the world. She was assigned to destroy the world which obviously was not known to her.

The normal people she would be seeing around were demons of hell to raise her as a good weapon of destruction. The demons eating human which she still sees in her dreams are from reality from her childhood which she barely remembers.

Growing up that way she had aggression towards people harming others so she decided to save them herself and started helping those close to death but also ending the responsible for that misery of them.

The executioners she collected were inhumanly strong because she used to contribute her power without knowing.

Slowly they were back the way before fiercer, more hatred than ever before and no mercy to anyone they were widespread globally, and as the number of people she helped increased also increased the number of destructors with her.

As the day of destruction was nearing a group of them found out about a young girl being given as a sacrifice to a soothsayer after they took care of the receiver aka soothsayer. The giver who was our dearly Mr. Prasad’s parent were executed.

Without knowing what happened to his parents he was just informed they were no more he was shocked nothing he could do just mourning.

In that loneliness, he thought of Andrea the way he left her without a word now he could relate to her how she might have felt at that time and all those time when she was an orphan and also destiny wasn’t her fault she didn’t choose to become destructor.

He left to get her to convince her to save the world but that was the day, the day of elimination of all the sinners of the world.

 As the clock ticks at the decided time, the global executioners were to kill everyone they had considered deleterious which total 90 percent of the whole world. And then they were to be heavenly soldiers and Andrea was to be sent to rule the hell cause heaven was for the savers, not the executioners.  

Then he arrived at the time she despised him more than anyone he was the starter of the whole thing. He tried to convince them but it was too late.

“I was the reason of this all I will be the end please take me as a reason you can forgive them give them another chance humanity is still alive for the sake of the people you have saved till now save the world.”

He killed himself which was a sacrifice to save humanity. The world had change self-sacrifice.

October 10, 2020 03:56

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Rachel Yoritomi
16:44 Oct 15, 2020

Congratulations on your first submission! I found your story through the Reedsy Critique Circle, and it suggested I critique your story. I like your opening sentence; it builds some mystery. One suggestion to help make things a bit more clear for your readers: tell us more obviously who is speaking for the first several lines of dialogue using dialogue tags / speech tags. This will help make your story more clear. It's nice to see your ideas develop on the page, keep exploring these dramatic, high-stakes situations, and enjoy the writing pro...

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Charles Stucker
15:02 Oct 10, 2020

You write a compelling tale despite working in your second language. It would be easier to read if you would skip an extra line when you change scenes. Your scenes are good. They have a direct set of actions and consequences which lead to the end. In between the scenes, you tell us what happens as time passes by. Another way to do this is to sum things up and present them in the scenes or as a quick flashback. For example, when his mother calls and tells him the prophecy was about his girlfriend and not him, he could flash back to th...

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Binik Chet
02:53 Oct 11, 2020

Thank you for the helpful comment. I will keep that in mind in my next work.

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