Second Chances: The Series

Submitted into Contest #54 in response to: Write a story about a TV show called "Second Chances."... view prompt

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The days are numbered. The world feels like it's always against you. This was what life was like for the young adult male, David Vaileton, who was stuck in a world where no matter how hard he tried, nothing ever seemed to go his way. It was like his family name was cursed.

For the days to go by numerously and his luck just keeps him from getting on with life, he learns that not everything should be as it seems and decided to become dulled by the atrocious abuse and bullying he is put through.

It only takes him a few weeks to start slowly turning into a nice person with lots of emotional experience after a decade of returning verbal outcries to the bullies and verbal abusers and finally snaps out of his inner turmoil to find that his life is actually cursed. He soon discovers a girl who tells him of an artefact, thus after spending some time with her they discover that part of her family heritage is linked to his family curse.

Filled anew with the want to fix his family misfortune, the two of then take themselves through the history of their families until he’s met by not one, but a group of slum lords who told whoever to bully him relentlessly.

Unfortunately, they begin to target her after she experienced one such bullying event and he goes crazy. When he reaches where they’ve been hiding her, he’s about to smash the people around him to save her when he fails to notice that the artefact she’s wearing has emitted a blast of painful light that sends him back in time, to just a day before they met.

When he meets her again, she’s not as interested until he starts listing different things. Time and time again, he doesn’t build up the strength to save her. He is now stuck in a thirteen day loop, where his luck just keeps getting worse every time he’s sent back.

It begins to seem fruitless, until he realises during the seventh loop that things he hadn’t noticed previously were beginning to reveal these “Time-Threads” around him. He learns to see things happening before they happen just by interacting with these threads and discovers a message in a yellow coloured, slightly damaged thread aiming into his back.

Running out of time again, he grabs hold of the broken thread when he saves the girl again, learning her name just before the artefact blinks rapidly for the first time in ages and throws him further back in time than before.

As he begins to come to in an unfamiliar place, he stumbles around only to realise he’s a few hundred feet from his younger self, from thirteen years ago. Around the time he begins to get bullied.

All of a sudden, he realises he’s the one who has been creating this infinite bullying, but it doesn’t explain why this time, there’s two of him in the world. As luck would have it, he find out that his father was actually behind a high-level government job before he disappeared.

Remembering that a strange man had taken his dad away, the memories flood into his head from different timelines as he struggles to comprehend what he’s experiencing before him.

Unfortunately, during his meltdown, his younger father discovers him during his overwhelming breakdown while displaying a weird, horizontal glitching effect affecting his entire body. Recognising the effects from his government experiment, he disappears with him to the facility.

As he’s kept in captivity, David learns to use his “Time-Threads” to his advantage after he slips back in time a little after he passes into one unintentionally during the experiments.

He starts looping another thirteen days back in the past, constantly trying to avoid his father’s questions and finally escapes to the future once he discovers and reveals to his father of the past that he’s an experiment his father did.

Reaching behind at the rapidly fluctuating thread attached to him, he starts to see the thread beginning to tighten and strengthen back into its healthy blue state, until it turns into a blue-tinged green state.

Before he can apologise, he’s sent back to the present day and discovers that time has frozen around him. Analysing the environment around him, he realises that something in the past has affected the present. It’s not the girl they’ve been hiding, but his father too.

Without him knowing, he begins to realise his abilities are growing an infinite number of threads from his body towards the future. While he’s in chronic limbo, his father starts moving.

Something about the past leave the two talking with each other to discover that the time loop was the governments doing after he asked that he was responsible for also making the slum lords go after his family. His father also reveals he was somehow dragged to the present with him.

After he reveals his true feeling to his father his father says he would do everything he can to maintain the timeline before is shatters, before he touches David’s present day frozen form and vanishes with him from the present and returns to the past with the slightest touch to the artefact on the girl.

As soon as David’s aware that he’s now positioned behind the girl as she rubs her eyes, he grabs her and freezes time. His time-thread begins to focus from infinite threads and slowly but surely, begins to stutter and flicker down to an appearance of forked lightning.

The lords of the slums begin bickering in the warehouse as he bolts out of the door while the FBI start to make their entrance with the SWAT teams for those who aren’t supposed to be there.

The original timeline is finally fixed in his memories, while he still remembers fragments of other timelines that never happened and have yet to come. Reaching his mind out, he mentally thanks his father through time and strangely gets a return message that he shrugs off.

All is well for another 13 months, until he’s visited by his younger self and his future daughter simultaneously. He soon realises there was a time when he couldn’t remember something that had happened when he was young.

Then his future daughter, with more honed abilities than his own, reveals he tried to convince his mother he’d travelled in time but didn’t recognise the people standing before him, then he was abducted by his own father to somehow remove those memories.

Weird events start to coincide with his ability to get second chances, and he starts looping again, but this time, his wife is connected with him through whatever loops that come their way from then on. 

August 10, 2020 17:07

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Rambling Beth
11:33 Aug 17, 2020

I love time travel, and this was such a fun execution of it. The thirteen day loop was really different, and I love how it turned out he was the reason he was being bullied. Also, I'm not sure if it was intentional, but naming him David Vaileton (Fail A Ton) was inspired. I really love the ending, with the idea that David and his wife will be together no matter how wibbly-wobbly the time travel gets. Wonderful. :)

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Theno Velisté
18:12 Aug 17, 2020

His name was originally unintentional, until I got 3 paragraphs in, haha, but I love your review of it regardless! I was initially going to do a constantly growing timeline where he always makes the wrong mistakes, but that only got to half of the target, so I added a nice plot twist to it.

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Rambling Beth
18:30 Aug 17, 2020

That makes this story even better in my eyes. :)

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