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Coming of Age Horror Mystery

She waited for 15 minutes after the sliver of light beneath her bedroom door disappeared. Once she was sure her parents were asleep, Sadie slid the window up and stole down the trellis. The autumnal air swished down into her lungs — crisp, chilly, and delicious. She landed like a cat, crouched, hands on the floor. Sadie didn’t need to jump the last of the way to the ground, but where would the fun be in not doing that?


Her ten-speed leaned next to the bins — where she’d left it. With a glance up at the droopy eyes of the house, she hopped on her bike and cycled off into the night. After half a minute, she clicked her torch on and plopped it into the basket. The beam sliced through the evening’s ink.


The streets were empty at this time of night, save for the high school kids. They drove around, windows obscured with pot smoke, beers in one hand, steering wheels in the other. Sadie didn’t bother to hide from these, but she did take caution to avoid collisions. If only her father — who grumbled about their poor driving skills — could see them now.


It didn’t take her long to reach Lisa’s house. Google Maps told her it was an 11-minute journey, but she always raced to beat the time. She usually made it in seven minutes or less. Not that she had her phone with her now. Her parents had installed a tracking app a few months back. Sadie left the blasted thing plugged in on her nightstand. Should they check in the morning, it’d seem she’d slept the night through. It never occurred to them that their modern child would leave the house without it. As far as they were aware, they’d succeeded in their attempts to curb their daughter’s night time excursions.


She flashed her light at Lisa’s window. On, off. On, off. On, off.


First, nothing. Then, the curtains stirred and the window clunked open. Sadie caught wind of a sigh. The voice that whispered down to her was thick with drowsiness. “I thought you were joking about tonight, Sadie.”


“I never joke about a hunt! Besides, your mom’s working the night shift tonight, is she not?”


Lisa groaned. “Can’t we just sleep? I’m tired!”


Sadie shone the light across Lisa’s form. “Evil never sleeps, Lisa!” Sadie grinned. Lisa had not yet gotten into her pink pyjamas. “Mr Moore has been found dead in his home!”


“Really? Oh, God. Fine Just get that light outta my face, will ya? I’ll be down in a moment.”


Sadie clicked the torch off and waited. After a spell, the front door of the Brown’s house opened and closed. Lisa wrapped her cardigan around her and shivered. “Mr Moore is dead?”


“And a good evening to you too, my fellow protector!”


“Sade?”


“Well, not dead…”


Lisa threw her head back and growled. “You always do this.”


“But he did say that a bat tried to enter his home last night! A spectre of the macabre, I’ve no doubt. We should ensure the foul beast does not find any more prey.”


Lisa watched her breath float away. “Why’d we have to go out again this week, Sade? We went out on Sunday.”


Sadie sniffed the air. “Darkness lurks these streets, Lis. I can smell it.”


“All I can smell is your bul—”


Sadie silenced her with an upraised hand. “Quickly. My senses are tingling. We must head off the leech before he leaves his enclosure!”


Lisa’s shoulders slumped. “Fine, but no more than an hour, yeah? It’s a school night.”


Sadie nodded, hand over her heart. “Scout’s honour. You got the stake?”


Lisa rolled her eyes. “Yes, Mom.” She patted her rucksack. “Don’t know why I’ve gotta be the one to store all this crap. If I get caught with it, people will think I’m a loony.”


“‘Cos your mom doesn’t search your room, Lis. Now, hop on.”


Lisa did as Sadie told her, but grumbled as she did so. “Maybe there’s a reason your parents search your room, Sade. You’re mental.”


“If being labelled mental is the price I have to pay to ensure the safety of the citizens of Bridgemoss,” Sadie said as she began to pedal with a grunt, “then so be it!”


Lisa took a deep breath. “You gotta grow up at some point, Sade. We’ll be in high school next year. We don’t wanna be labelled as the weird girls. Those chicks never get dates.”


“And still you doubt my gifts! You should have learned by now that this world is darker and more mysterious than the grownups would have you believe.”


“So you keep saying.”


“Do you not remember The Wolf of St Wisnis?”


“…that was a stray dog.”


“Ah, but did we not help the pound in catching a most evasive beast?”


“Yeah, all right. I’ll agree we did some good there. We helped a homeless dog find shelter. I think Katy’s family adopted him.”


“And of the ghosts of West Wootbridge?”


“You mean the broken windchimes that Mrs Andrews had in her porch? That sounded like wailing?”


“And did we not put an end to such ghastly choruses?”


“We stole them, fixed them, then hung ‘em up again.”


Sadie sighed. “Ah, another citizen protected!”


Lisa chuckled. “Absolutely mental. So, where is it we’re heading tonight? I don’t wanna go trudging through dirty streams full of broken glass and needles again. My mum’ll kill me if I wreck another pair of trainers.”


“Tonight, my fellow protector, we must head the destroyer off before he even leaves his lair!”


“Oh, Jesus. I hate the cemetery.”





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A thick mist clung to the ground. It seemed to seep from the very pores of the earth itself and offered the place a pale illumination. The tombstones pointed this way and that, drunkards who leaned against doorframes.


The only sounds were their own ragged breaths and their footsteps as they squelched in the mud.


“I don’t like this, Sade. It’s creepy.”


“But have we not sworn an oath to brave the creeps of this world?”


“An oath that you made up.”


“An oath is an oath, my fellow guardian. Aren’t all oaths made up, at some point or another? At what point do they start to mean something?”


Lisa hesitated. “Fair enough. But I still don’t like this.”


Sadie turned to face her, a toothy grin on her face. “So you admit that there is something out here tonight? You feel it too!” She clenched a fist. “I knew under my tutelage you’d soon hone your senses.”


Lisa pulled her cardigan ever higher around her chest — any further, and she’d risk ripping the damn thing. “I-I don’t know. But I know that if we get stabbed and mugged, my mom’ll be more pissed than upset. At first, anyway.”


“We need not worry about being impaled by the drinker of life, it is he who should worry about us doing so to him!”


Lisa frowned. “Sometimes, Sade, you get so wrapped up in your theatrics that you make no goddamn sense.”


Sadie shrugged. “We gon’ stab the vampire.”


“Much better. But, still, can we go home? This is creepy. And I legit don’t wanna get hurt.”


Sadie pointed forward with the stake. “Hush, now!” The moss-covered stones — features softened by the weather — gave way to the maze of the vaults. “We draw near to the crypts, my sweet, poor, innocent, Lisa.”


Narrow structures with ancient doors, each one of a different design. Pointed rooves adorned with all manner of crucifixes. Steps led up or down to the entrances — all smothered in decayed leaves, wet with moisture. Thin, barely-passable alleys wove between the stone tombs. The way ahead was impossible to see.


“Oh, I hate this place,” said Lisa. Her voice rustled like the leaves beneath their feet. Low, quiet.


“Fear not, young padawan, for I am here to guide you through tonight’s gauntlet.”


Lisa stopped a few steps short of the labyrinth. “Ten minutes. That’s all you get, Sade. Ten minutes, and then we’re back out and heading home. Deal?”


“But we only just got here!”


“Sadie, this is insane. I wanna be back at home. In bed. With a hot chocolate. And a good book.”


Sadie lamented. “All right, Lis. But if the winged bringer of doom takes another life—”


“Mr Moore is still alive and kicking.”


“—takes a life, then that blood shall be on our hands!”

Lisa eyed the first row sepulchres and chewed her lip. “Ten minutes, Sade.”


Sadie thrust the stake forward. “To the lair of der Vampir!”





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“Okay, Sade. You’ve had 13 minutes—”


“An evil number, if I ever heard one. Let’s stay another minute.”


They were deep in the crypts, had walked nonstop — ears pricked, eyes peeled. They’d not found anything out of place, much to Lisa’s prediction and to Sadie’s chagrin.


“Sadie.” Lisa’s voice hardened. It startled Sadie. It was the type of tone her mother would use on her. They weren’t little kids any more, and her heart ached to see her childhood now in the rearview mirror.


“All right, all right, let’s go. Here.” She handed Lisa the stake. “For safekeeping. Next time, you get to pick what we do.”


Lisa smiled. “Thanks, Sade.”


“But no chick-flicks!”


“No, but no eighties horror movies that—” Lisa’s eyes darted to the point over Sadie’s shoulder. She frowned.


Sadie snatched the stake from Lisa’s hands and twisted around. “En garde!” But there was no denizen of the night there.


Only the faded stone of an ancient crypt.


With the door open ajar.


A foul breath gasped through the crack.


“Aha! The beast has not hidden his abode well,” Sadie said, voice a whisper. She gripped the stake tighter, knuckles white, teeth visible in her moonlit grin.


“Shh! Sadie, this is serious!” Lisa put a hand on her shoulder before she could take a step. “There could be graverobbers or anyone down there!”


“I take my hunting very seriously, thank you, dear guardian.” Sadie pulled away and strode towards the black door. “And if they disturb the slumber of the beast, it could spell doom for us all!”


An archway curled around the edges of the door, with slots for lanterns above and either side. The lanterns were present, but their innards were devoid of flame. Sadie paused at the foot of the steps, which ascended to the door. She read the name carved into the stone above the archway. “Loretta Zaleska,” she said in awe, “and here we were thinking that the vamp was a man.” Sadie tutted and shook her head. She looked at Lisa. “Not very progressive of us, was it?”


“We’re not actually going down there. Are we? ‘Cos that’s trespassing. We could get arrested.”


“We’d be doing the local law enforcement fools a favour — ridding them of one more vermin!”


“I don’t think that’s how they’d see it, Sade. And I don’t want to get a criminal record before I’m halfway through my teens. My mum’ll make me wish I got stabbed by junkies if that happens.”


“Just a quick peek, Lis.” Sadie offered her the puppy-dog eyes. “Please.”


“No. I’m not going down there.”


Sadie smiled at her. A smile that Lisa knew all too well. “I’ll be down just for a sec, Lis. You stay here.”


“No, Sadie, wait—”


But Sadie had already leapt up the steps and was at the door.


Lisa loosed a noise of exasperation and then followed her friend. “I swear, you’re going to get me killed.” The wet leaves squelched and squidged beneath her converse.


“You don’t have to join me, y’know.” Sadie had one hand on the door, the other held the stake in a Ramboesque pose. “I can defend Bridgemoss by my lonesome.”


“Because somebody’s gotta make sure you don’t get yourself killed.”


Sadie nodded. “Very wise. Who defends the defender?” She pushed the door open. It squalled on its hinges, loud and rusty.


Lisa grunted. She was about to say that the only thing Sadie’d defended anyone from was a night of peaceful sleep. But then a noise from the depths froze the words in her throat.


The scrape of stone.


Followed by a thud.


A sandpaper groan.


There was actually somebody down there.





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“Sadie,” Lisa licked her lips, “Sadie, we should leave.” Lisa’s eyes were wide and wild. “I don’t like this, not one bit.”


Sadie remained a statue, one hand on the door — which was now two-thirds of the way open. Her heart bounced from side to side in her ribcage. She reaffirmed her grip on the stake. “I, uh,” she cleared her throat, “I think there’s something in there. Like, something actually in there.”


“Yeah? No shi—”


Sadie raised a finger to her friend’s lips. “Shh!” Her eyes darted back and forth and she squinted. “I’m listening.”


“Sadie, let’s call the cops and get outta here!” Lisa shuffled and pulled her phone out of her pocket. She swore. “Dead. This thing never holds its charge, any more! Lend me yours, Sade.”


A hiccough in the rhythmic thump-thump-thump of her heart. “I left it at home.”


“You what?”


“Mum ‘n’ Dad keep trying to track my movements. So, I left it.”


“Oh Jesus, Sade. Let’s go. Let’s go now.”


“Shush, I said! I can hear something…”


Lisa bit her tongue and held her breath. “I don’t—”


There.”


A thud. A thump. The unmistakable sound of footsteps on stone.


Sadie turned to face Lisa. Her gut plummeted into the ground. “It’s coming this way.”


The colour drained from Lisa’s face. A small squeak escaped her pressed-together lips.


Sadie grabbed her friend by the shoulders. “We’ve got to hide, Lis.”


Lisa nodded and glanced around — a frightened rabbit in headlights. “Where, Sadie? Where?”


“Behind the crypt, c’mon!”


Sadie had to all but drag Lisa with her — further into the stone maze of the cemetery’s lifeless heart. They went past one, two, three rows of vaults and then hooked to the side. Sadie hunkered down and pulled Lisa down into a crouch, the eddies of fog now as high as their chests. To dip into that greyness was to plunge into ice. She pressed her finger to her lips and nodded. “Shh.”


She braced against the rear of a tomb for balance and listened.


Nothing.


No thumps, thuds, slaps, taps, groans or growls.


All was silent.


Somewhere, an insect chirped. A bird cried out, and Lisa let out a little squeal. Sadie reached out and squeezed her hand.


They waited. Sadie counted to a minute twice, and still, there was nothing. “Hey, Lis, you still with me?”


The other girl nodded.


“I think tha—”


A hoarse moan rent the air, sliced her sentence in half.


Lisa’s eyes bulged out of their sockets and she clamped her hands over her mouth. Gooseflesh prickled up all over Sadie’s body.


“You need to get outta here.”


Lisa nodded.


“I’m gonna go see what it is.”


Lisa gripped Sadie’s forearm in a claw, her nails dug into the skin. “Are you crazy? This isn’t a game Sadie — not anymore. Let’s just get the hell out of this place and pretend nothing ever happened, ‘kay?”


“But there is something there.” Sadie’s eyes darkened as she broke free of Lisa’s grip and stood up. She clutched the stake to her chest. “And I’m gonna find out what it is.”


“Are you insane? We need to go!”


Sadie cast her eyes down to the ground. “I can’t,” she whispered. “We’ll be in high school next year, and these hunts…” Something swelled within her chest. “This year will be the last year we can do this. Properly. I don’t want to give it up, Lis. Not just yet.”


“I’m not going to convince you to leave, am I?” The defeat in Lisa’s voice was tangible, but intermingled with it was something else. Pity? Love?


She shook her head and said nothing. “But you can go. Really.” She nodded further into the crypts. “If you keep going, you’ll eventually come to the other side. The fence there isn’t too high, you should be able to climb it fairly easily. You can head home if you want. I’ll be fine. I’ll catch up with you tomorrow.”


Lisa glanced in the direction Sade had directed. She hesitated for a moment, seemed to mull it over. She shook her head. “No way in hell I’m leaving you here alone.” She got to her feet — with some difficulty, due to how much she shook. “We’re the Bridgemoss Guardians,” she pulled a crucifix from her bag, “and we do things together.”





***





They waited for 15 minutes until the figures had shuffled on by, hearts lodged in throats. The girls never got a good look at them, but it didn’t matter — their imaginations filled in the blanks.


Once they were sure the horde had passed them, the pair made a break for the cemetery fence. Together, they scrambled up the wrought iron as laughter bubbled within them. Lisa had not felt this giddy in years. Adrenaline coursed through her veins. God, she felt so alive.


As they stole down the other side of the fence, the midnight air rushed down her throat, sweet and cool. She and Sadie landed in synchronism, on all fours, as was the most fun way to do it.


She cast one last glance at the cemetery before they sped off on Sadie’s ten-speed. Shadows and mysteries lurked in every crevice, nook and cranny. Excitement. Wonder.


Magic.


Who’d want to give that up? In exchange for drab adulthood?


“We coming back tomorrow?” Lisa had to shout over the sound of the screaming wind.


“Oh, hell yeah!” She could hear the smile in Sadie’s voice.


“But we’re gonna need something more than stakes. I think those back there were zombies!”


Sadie laughed as she pedalled with fury and the wind whipped their hair. “You’re learning fast, my protégé. Bridgemoss Guardians away!”

October 27, 2020 14:44

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21:37 May 02, 2021

i love! this so much thank u so much for making this is amazing

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Kedian Ibarra
18:48 Apr 30, 2021

I loved the discription that you used and how the characters interacted with each other. I just really wanted to know what was down there and have a bit of a scare.

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Sophia Hernandez
16:25 Apr 30, 2021

This is a great horror/mystery story, definitely deserved that win, I love that in this story it kept you wanting to know what was going to happen, it was a little longer than most short stories but I believe you still manage to fill those paragraphs with entertaining information on Sadie and Lisa, while also having that anxiety on what’s going to happen to them.

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Evelin Smith
16:36 Apr 29, 2021

Congrats on the win! This story is amazing.

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Alexis Sandoval
16:05 Apr 29, 2021

this was an amazing story you don't need to change a thing cause it was perfect. It had good character development, great dialogue, great ending. You really killed it

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Ro Gardje
03:50 Apr 16, 2021

What a great adventure! Made me nostalgic for my childhood 😊

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Sanjay Gupta
02:56 Apr 13, 2021

This story was good but i didn't got the last part of the story. Care to explain?

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08:44 Apr 13, 2021

What didn't you understand?

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Zoe Foshee
21:25 Apr 12, 2021

I like the story

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M2 Maroc
09:19 Apr 10, 2021

I really liked it.

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M2 Maroc
18:08 Apr 08, 2021

What a perfect strory...can i use it on my youtube channel?

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09:33 Apr 09, 2021

Yes, of course! But please link it back to me, and my book (which this story is a part of): https://www.amazon.com/Under-Blankets-Stars-Fantasy-Stories-ebook/dp/B08VNFHG5J/ref=sr_1_1?dchild=1&keywords=under+blankets+under+stars+joshua+insole&qid=1617960796&sr=8-1

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09:33 Apr 09, 2021

Yes, of course! But please link it back to me, and my book (which this story is a part of): https://www.amazon.com/Under-Blankets-Stars-Fantasy-Stories-ebook/dp/B08VNFHG5J/ref=sr_1_1?dchild=1&keywords=under+blankets+under+stars+joshua+insole&qid=1617960796&sr=8-1

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Emily Oliver
20:27 Apr 07, 2021

🤩🤩🤩 super good

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Emily Oliver
20:25 Apr 07, 2021

good job the story was great

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Emily Oliver
20:18 Apr 07, 2021

good job

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Kayci Harper
14:31 Mar 24, 2021

this story gave me chills and BTW's: # YOU KILLED .

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Jahzaria Newman
19:51 Mar 17, 2021

Hello Joshua Insole, I want to start off by by saying you are a great story teller and I really enjoyed reading this story. I am currently doing an author study for my Advanced Comp class. I was wondering if it would be okay to ask you some questions about you and your inspiration for writing. Thank you in advance for you time.

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15:58 Mar 18, 2021

Hi Jahzaria! Thank you. Yes, of course, I'd be happy to help. Perhaps it'd be easier to email me? My address is JoshuaInsole@yahoo.com

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15:58 Mar 18, 2021

Hi Jahzaria! Thank you. Yes, of course, I'd be happy to help. Perhaps it'd be easier to email me? My address is JoshuaInsole@yahoo.com

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Jahzaria Newman
18:56 Mar 21, 2021

Hello Joshua Thanks for responding to me. I tried to email you but, it’s saying that your email is not found. Is there another way I can send you the question.

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Jahzaria Newman
18:56 Mar 21, 2021

Hello Joshua Thanks for responding to me. I tried to email you but, it’s saying that your email is not found. Is there another way I can send you the question.

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Jahzaria Newman
18:57 Mar 21, 2021

Hello Joshua Thanks for responding to me. I tried to email you but, it’s saying that your email is not found. Is there another way I can send you the question.

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Adam Little
19:16 Mar 10, 2021

Joshua, Joshua, Joshua...amazing. This took me back to my childhood, honestly. I was big into mystery novels (and still am, mind you). This gave me lots of Nancy Drew or Goosebumps vibes. Well done!

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13:34 Mar 12, 2021

Thanks so much, Adam! That's wonderful to hear. I'm so glad I could evoke such strong childhood nostalgia!

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Victoria Pate
14:30 Mar 10, 2021

This is the best story that I have ever read.You did a great job on this

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13:32 Mar 12, 2021

Thank you, Victoria!

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Mc Pinat
02:34 Mar 07, 2021

How to be like you? 😂😂😂😊

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Mustang Patty
17:38 Mar 04, 2021

Hi, Thank you for sharing your story. I am putting together an Anthology of Short Stories to be published in late Spring 2021. Would you be interested? The details can be found on my website: www.mustangpatty1029.com on page '2021 Indie Authors' Short Story Anthology,' and you can see our latest completed project on Amazon. '2020 Indie Authors' Short Story Anthology.' (It is available as a Kindle Unlimited selection.) Feel free to reach out to me: patty@mustangpatty1029.com Thank you for sharing, ~MP~ Could you please drop by and read one o...

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13:20 Mar 05, 2021

Hi Mustang! Thanks for the offer, but this story is already part of a collection. 'Under Blankets, Under Stars'!

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20:52 Feb 14, 2021

This was a great story, Sadie was a bit annoying tho, what if it was a killer and she wanted to stay to get murder. Great story tho :)

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14:10 Feb 16, 2021

Thanks, Emily! Haha, I think it's all based on perspective, isn't it? Sometimes I'd love to know my characters, and other times I'd hate to meet them!

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