ACT I
-Scene 1-
SETTING: A small neighborhood cafe.
AT RISE: SAMMY, 30's, is seated at the central table.
BEN, 30's, agitated, enters.
BEN
You won't believe it. I am so fed up to here.
SAMMY
You're late.
BEN
I know. Where's David?
SAMMY
I don't know. He's late too. Have a seat.
BEN
(Moves about)
I'm going to file a lawsuit. They are a plague!
SAMMY
Who?
BEN
Leaf blowers! Don't you know what they are doing to this city?
SAMMY
Leaf blowers?
BEN
They kick up dust. They're noisy as hell. They're everywhere. I think they travel in packs.
SAMMY
(Signals to BEN to lower his volume)
You mean the gardeners? Sit.
(BEN sits.)
BEN
That's what they want you to think. But they just blow crap around and foul the air with their noise and dust.
SAMMY
They get rid of the dead leaves and...
BEN
They just blow it from one yard to another until it gets to someone who isn't paying them.
SAMMY
No, they don't.
BEN
What, you think they blow it all off the edge of the earth? Einstein proved that matter cannot be destroyed, you know.
SAMMY
They collect it into a pile and then pick it up.
BEN
You are so naive. It's all part of their plan. 'Wow, Mr. Jones... looks like you have a leaf problem. Look at all this crap in your yard. And no trees. Go figure. You should hire me to handle it for you.'
SAMMY
Whatever.
(SAMMY signals the waiter for coffee.)
BEN
I parked my car. Freshly washed... This leaf-blower guy blows - between the cars, for God's sake! Then, he starts blowing the cars! There are no leaves on the cars!
SAMMY
He's getting rid of the dust he kicked up.
BEN
Einstein, my friend. He's not getting rid of it. He's just rearranging it. If they had a vacuum on their back, that would make sense.
SAMMY
I wish one would go under our bed. I found a dust bunny the other day that must've weighed a pound.
BEN
I signal him, just wave him back, to stay away from my car. You'd think I threatened him with an uzi… He's a menace.
(WAITER approaches.)
WAITER
Do you want menus?
SAMMY
I know what I want. But we're waiting for someone.
WAITER
The other guy?
SAMMY
Yeah, him. Just coffee now.
BEN
Coffee.
WAITER
He's always late.
(WAITER exits.)
SAMMY
What's his problem?
BEN
He's right, you know. David is always late.
SAMMY
(Checks his watch)
Where's David?
BEN
He could be making tips and we’re camping out.
SAMMY
We’re regulars... We have rights.
BEN
He didn't call?
SAMMY
He didn't call.
BEN
(Whispers)
The leaf blowers got him.
(DAVID enters and approaches. He catches WAITER's eye and gestures for coffee.)
SAMMY
Here he is.
DAVID
Hi. Sorry I'm late.
BEN
About to send out a search party.
DAVID
That would have helped… I'm lost.
SAMMY
What's wrong?
DAVID
My career is over.
(WAITER approaches, pours them each water and coffee. WAITER exits.)
BEN
What?
DAVID
I can't write any more.
SAMMY
What about that new client you told me about? You said he wants you to compose for that HBO series.
DAVID
Oh, I have work. But my brain is frozen. I can't think! I haven't written a note in days.
BEN
That's not like you. What are you talking about?
DAVID
(Tries to gather his thoughts)
A couple days ago I had lunch with this guy I met… I hardly know him. I feel set up. He's a fiend!
SAMMY
What did he do?
DAVID
That's it! I was set up. By... who…? I know… It was that guy who harpooned my job with Nickelodeon... What was his name?
SAMMY
Slow down. You had lunch. Probably indigestion.
DAVID
No. It's much worse than that… It's...Jason! That's the guy!
SAMMY
You were having lunch…?
DAVID
Right. We were eating and having a light conversation. And then he asks, very casually, if he can share a theory he has. What a schemer!
SAMMY
So?
DAVID
So? So, what…? So, now my life is ruined.
SAMMY
David… Calm down. It's just a writer's block. Happens to the best. Pull back. Play some music and come at things from a fresh perspective.
DAVID
You don't understand. This... ‘theory.’ This travesty changed everything. I can't un-know what I know.
BEN
So, what's the theory?
(WAITER approaches.)
WAITER
Are you ready? What will we have today?
DAVID
I can't eat.
SAMMY
I'll have the usual.
WAITER
Sunny side up?
SAMMY
Right.
BEN
You have to eat, David.
DAVID
I can't. Haven’t had anything since that horrible lunch.
SAMMY
That's part of the problem.
DAVID
I can't… I feel sick. I'm not hungry.
BEN
(to WAITER)
Well, I'm starved. Give me two orders of your number three combo. Separate plates. And make the hash browns medium well. I like them brown. And wheat toast. Lots of butter…
DAVID
Sour-dough.
BEN
Make one of them sour-dough.
DAVID
And juice.
BEN
One large orange juice.
WAITER
Anything else?
DAVID
(to BEN)
Fruit instead of hash browns?
WAITER
Of course.
BEN
But not too much pineapple. I hate pineapple.
WAITER
Hold the pineapple.
SAMMY
Who doesn't like pineapple?
BEN
David...
WAITER
So, we've got one regular special, sunny side up. And two, number three combos. One with medium-well hash browns and wheat toast. The other with fruitm but no pineapple, no hash browns, sour-dough toast. One large orange juice.
SAMMY
Sounds right.
WAITER
More coffee?
DAVID
Please.
BEN
And also… a short stack of pancakes on the side, please.
DAVID
Me too.
BEN
That was for you.
DAVID
Oh. Okay. No pancakes for me then.
WAITER
No pancakes?
BEN
Just the short stack I ordered.
WAITER
The ones he doesn't want.
(DAVID nods)
BEN
Right.
WAITER
Coming right up.
(WAITER exits.)
SAMMY
Where were we?
BEN
The theory.
DAVID
Are you ready?
(They nod)
This idiot says we are running out of notes.
BEN
What?
SAMMY
Ridiculous!
DAVID
That's what I thought… But he has a point.
SAMMY
Stop it, David. There’s an endless supply of notes.
DAVID
No, really. Listen. He said that in a given measure of time, eight bars say, and within a standard scale... whatever the scale, there is a finite number of combinations.
BEN
But wait.
DAVID
And a smaller number of pleasing combinations…
SAMMY
Still huge…
DAVID
…And we have reached the limit of those combinations! Everything after that's either discordant or derivative. The sad reality of it has been sinking in ever since.
BEN
Okay, but the key is 'pleasing combinations'. Styles go in and out...
DAVID
Of course. But that begs the question.
SAMMY
How?
DAVID
Everyone loves the standards, the great music of the thirties and forties.
SAMMY
Of course.
DAVID
You could say tastes change. You could say they ran out of that style of melody. Or...they ran out of notes!
SAMMY
You could.
DAVID
When Paul McCartney wrote songs mindful of English Music Hall, it’s because they fit in that style. Everyone knew he was writing in ‘that style.’
BEN
Okay…
DAVID
Affectionate, but derivative.
SAMMY
Sure.
DAVID
By the sixties, the style had changed. It was rock's golden age, but a short lived one. That ran out pretty quickly.
BEN
But what great music that was. You remember the Chiffons?
DAVID
The eighties ‘New Wave’ tried to mix it up, but they painted themselves into a stylistic corner. Same with jazz.
SAMMY
I see where you're going… Now we have rap.
DAVID
Yes…! See what I mean? Now the only thing melodic is digital sampling from those earlier styles… I was born too late. It's bankrupt.
BEN
But wait. You just have to string notes together in a 'pleasing combination'. Right?
DAVID
Right, Ben. That's all I have to do.
BEN
Well, let me try...
(BEN hums a few bars apparently randomly, but actually, is the first line of Dan
Fogelberg's "Same Old Lang Syne".)
SAMMY
Dan Fogelberg.
DAVID
By way of Tchaikovsky's "1812".
BEN
How about...
(Ben hums another 'random' melody that's actually the Chiffon's "He's so Fine".)
DAVID
Uhm...George Harrison...? Give it up. This is too painful. It's all a fading dream.
SAMMY
It can't be as bad as you think.
DAVID
Every time I play a new melody, I realize it's an echo of another song.
SAMMY
They say imitation is the sincerest form...
DAVID
You don't get it… This isn't just about me. If it’s true, and I think it is, the whole culture could be on the verge of collapse.
BEN
Like with the leaf blowers! It's all coming together...
SAMMY
Not now, Ben...
DAVID
Maybe this is what happened to the Mayans… Or the French!
BEN
(Pulls his water glass toward himself)
This is my-an.
SAMMY
(Pushes his water glass toward BEN.)
And this is urine.
DAVID
(Despairing)
What can I do?
SAMMY
Take a week. Leave town. Clear your head.
BEN
Get ahead of the wave, David. Invent the new style.
DAVID
How do I do that?
BEN
Oh, my God! It just came to me.
DAVID
What?
BEN
Bagpipes!
(DAVID looks at BEN and SAMMY in silence, for a long time.)
(BEN looks at SAMMY, who shrugs)
BEN
David?
SAMMY
David?
(Nodding, DAVID settles back in his chair and smiles.)
(BLACK OUT)
(The End)
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13 comments
I really enjoyed your image of the leaves going from place to place, without anything really changing as a metaphor for the dead-end of musical innovation was original. You mention Paul McCartney. Well, he did bagpipes too- on 'Mull of Kintyre.' I liked that this possible tragedy was ofset by the natural friendship between the guys. Very human and warm. Well done.
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Thank you very much, Michael, for reading and commenting. Your observations are appreciated.
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Just loved this. Apparently not easy to write in this way. Your script was crystal clear and funny. Bagpipes? That's a bit different. Reedsy seem to left align by default. Even tabbing in didn't stay when I finished editing. You managed it with your stage directions! That was a tame problem compared with a credit card malfunction and not being able to enter mine. It's been left in submitted. Oh, dear. Mind you, I cheated. The script is a story within a narrated story.
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Hi Kaitlyn, I'm glad you enjoyed this. Very fun to write. Adapting it to the Reedsy format was one big challenge. I'm glad it proved accessible to readers after all. I will read your story. Plays and short stories don't easily translate one to another. Thanks!
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Haha. I think I nailed it.
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A fun story that was such an amazing use of the prompt. Lovely work here !
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Alexis, I always appreciate your comments. This was a fun exercise - seeing how one obsession can dovetail into another.
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Maybe I'm the wrong generation. But I didn't get the metaphor with the leaf blowing, so when it was brought up later, it seemed forced to me. I am also accustomed to the new culture that knows it is just recycling the same songs and storylines and doesn't fear this as the new normal. Clearly your scene works for other old school audiences. If you asked me to adapt it for how I see today's audience: (1) first I would open up with the writer trying to write at the same place they always meet, but getting a bit irritated at having to move and h...
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Emily, Your analysis is the most in depth I've ever received. You make some good points. But at the end of the day, call it music if you want, but I just can't hum to a chain saw. I was a huge fan of Frank Zappa's music, who may have influenced some of your faves. I won't be rewriting this one, but your suggestions might show up in response to a future prompt. thank you for your lengthy and thoughtful response.
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Maybe has a thing there.
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Mary - bagpipes? Or running out of notes? Always enjoy your comments. Thanks for reading.
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Bag pipes would be different. 😄
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Top 40 hits! Oh yeah!
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